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Hello everyone. Like most people here, the level of writing on the show has been bothering me a lot. My rant however is not about the story but about the screenplay and dialogue. I understand that there are pressures on writers and on the makers to achieve a certain sort of success, and they are all probably working very hard for the TRPs. They can have all sorts of illogical twists, but even within that larger framework they can stick to logic and their characterisation, and things would be better than they are right now. Here are two examples.
Raman's dialogue to himself after his car ride with Ishita:
When Ishita begins talking to Ruhi on the phone, Raman could have said this to himself "Ishita, I was not hurt by what Shagun said. I realised a long time ago that money matters more to her than emotion. What I am unhappy about is that you had to lie to me to make me feel better. How could our marriage have been a fairytale? I hated you, my family didn't like you, we all did whatever we could to escape the situation, we were disrespectful of all your rituals... and you had done nothing to deserve any of that. You deserve better Ishita... you deserve not just a better wedding but a better husband."
It need not have been as long as this, but needed to make the following points: Shagun did not affect Raman and that Raman thinks Ishita is lying when she praises their wedding. This way, even if he is in sacrificial mode, at least he is closer to the earlier Raman in some ways.
NB: I don't mind Raman getting affected by Shagun in some things, but this one was totally a one step forward, two steps backward kind of thing. Here is my second example:
Ashok - Shagun wedding:
It has been so difficult to justify Ishita, Raman and family attending Shagun's wedding that the writers themselves have referred to it more than once. One way out of it could have been that its a double wedding, both Shagun - Ashok's and Mihir - Mihika's. Mihir Mihika wanted a simple wedding but Shagun has insisted on a joint wedding, and so the functions are jointly organised. That way, Ishita Raman and Ishita's family would all have attended all the events without any clarification. The same events could have happened - Ruhi spoiling Shagun's mehendi, Adi burning his hand in the sangeet,
the bachelor party incident. Raman, Mani, Bala would all have been busy with Mihir's bachelor party, which could have been separate from Ashok's. Ashok could still have been marrying for the contract while eyeing Mihika. Even Mihika's planning could have been the same. If she is behaving like this in these circumstances, she could behave like this even with an upcoming wedding.
These are just two examples to show that even when things get improbable, good writing can keep them plausible. Hope the team takes that into account and makes a decent show if not a great one. They still write interesting scenes from time to time, but the larger whole is increasingly falling apart.
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