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Bhuvana

@Ohgod!

Sparkler

+ 6

Posted: 10 years ago

#11

Beautiful as always Aani 👏👏

I apologise for the delay...

While i started reading this i could only hear this song in my head i dunno why.. But now.. somehow find the words fitting the situation perfectly! 😳 Yaay to the classics!!

Bhool Sakati Nahin Aankhen Vo Suhaanaa Manzar

Jab Teraa Husn Mere Ishq Se Takaraayaa Thaa

Aur Phir Raah Men Bikhare The Hazaaron Naghamen

Main Vo Naghamen Teri Aavaaz Ko De Aayaa Thaa

Saaz-E-Dil Ko Unhin Geeton Kaa Sahaaraa De De

Meraa Khoyaa Huaa Rangin Nazaaraa De De...

Yaad Hai Mujhako Meri Umr Ki Pahali Vo Ghadi

Teri Aankhon Se Koi Jaam Piyaa Thaa Maine

Meri Rag Rag Men Koi Barq Si Laharaai Thi

Jab Tere Maramari Haathon Ko Chhuaa Thaa Maine

Aa Mujhe Phir Unhin Haathon Ka Sahaaraa De De

Meraa Khoyaa Huaa Rangin Nazaaraa De De,

Mere Mahaboob Tujhe Meri Muhabbat Ki Qasam...

And when i re-read the whole piece with this song running in the BG, it just became all that more beautiful!!!! 😳🤗

Thank you and keep writing more and more!!!

Edited by Ohgod! - 10 years ago

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Aarohi Talegoankar

@Albeli26

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 10 years ago

#12

wowww. wat a cute os. loved ur writing way in which u progressed ishra relationship. i hope u wll write anothr one with longr update. thanx for pm.

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Remya

@remya1990

Explorer

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#13

Ohh Aani...sweet and lovely...

I sincerely have no words to express.

Don't know why, but am blushing after reading this...

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WhyAmIHereAgain

@WhyAmIHereAgain

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#14

Yay...u wrote...beautiful...i m going back. To read it again...wil edit then

yes i read it again... loved it truly... tht line where her shivering affects him so... n his touching makes her shiver...lovely...

u know when i saw ur os... first i thought i will read it later.. coz the moment i read it... i will have nothing to look forward to.. so decided will savour it..n read it later at leisure...n then all my self control snapped...n read it while at work only... ur stories r hard to resist...😳

Edited by shalz_123 - 10 years ago

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vidya.anand

@vidya.anand

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 10 years ago

#15

☺️☺️

it was beautiful...romantic and sensual!

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Israa.

@Recovery.

Inactive

+ 3

Posted: 10 years ago

#16

I'm commenting on your writing after so long!

I love how you wrote the story!

Beautifully written! I loved how you played with your words.

The cute, subtle romance 😳

only to find his lips upon her skin the moment he had finished the task.

This had to be my favourite line in the complete OS. The line even though is

very simple shows the desire Raman had for her and how even unknowingly he

took the first step to the start of their relation. I could imagine that happening while

reading the OS 😳

"Good morning wife." He whispers to her in the softest of tones, his voice husky and gravelly from the sleep and something else.

"Good morning love." She answers him and with the epithet his eyes soften, something shifting and melting inside his chest as he hears her address him so.

This was like "the aww moment" of this OS for me. Love how Raman refers to her as wife and there is nothing more romantic then your loved one whispering to you in the softest of tones! I love how Raman reacts when Ishita addresses Raman as love! I don't mind actually watching this conversation taking place between them. ☺️

"I wish I could prolong these moments a little more, we could have had some more time."

which girl would not want her special guy to say these words to her.. Raman wanting

to stay with Ishita for a little more time, this was undoubtedly the cutest part!

An amazing OS Aani! 👏 I loved it to the core! Thank you for the PM!

Edited by Recovery. - 10 years ago