Reserved. Unreserving.
I'm here, FINALLY. So I read it again, and I still can't get over the fact that I wrote the last paragraph. Seriously, I cannot. Are you sure you didn't change it or something because I CAN'T write something like that. NO WAY. I refuse to believe that I wrote it. I don't even remember I wrote it. No, I'm not in denial. I just can't write something like that. 😳 NO NO NO I didn't write it. Okay, end of rant.
Now to the one shot.
I already told you about the changes I wanted and now I have no complaints. Well, except that you don't put the dialogues in between double quotes or single quotes which is annoying. Do that and it's perfect. 😃
But the way you've written it now, is perfect. That's the thing with the one shots you actually post. It's easy to connect. Maybe we both are too sadistic, or it's the way it's written, or maybe it's both, but if I cannot connect, then there's definitely something wrong. 😆 But I did connect = good.
Since I first read it, I knew it wouldn't be simple, of course it won't. The guy is bipolar, delusional, and to an extent, psycho. The girl pleading and the guy thinking ki it's all the girl's fault is just so real. It's like you were that guy *shudders* And the way he thinks ki he's doing sab kuch acche ke liye when he's not. But that's not just psychos, it's human psychology. If we think something's wrong, we wouldn't do it, unless you're a rebel. Otherwise, it's all supposed to be for the greater good of the world. I love how you've incorporated human psychology and dealt with a sensitive issue of domestic violence as well as writing it from the abuser's point of view. His remorse and the paragraph before mine is written to perfection. Overall, I completely loved it. This review would've been longer but I've already commented on it, considering I proofread it. So yes, great job. And nope, still not believing that I wrote the last paragraph.
Kay, bye. 😆
Edited by ARandKJFan - 10 years ago
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