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Okay! So finally I am here with my comment!😛
so that I don't forget all the things, I have decided to write them down in points :P
so point no. 1
Finally you posted something! If not the emotional one, at least this one! and I love it even more coz this came as a surprise to me! I had absolutely no idea as to this piece and even when you asked for the title suggestion, i thought it was going to be some random drabble or anecdote you wrote... BUT THIS DUDE!!!! proud of you babe :P
2. The title- IT IS FABULOUSLY AMAZINGLY STUPENDOFANTASTICALLY SUPERBBB!!!!! trust me! you couldn't have got a better title for this one! and jealousy se related title toh kabhi acha na lgta! I have reasons to like this title- see, you haven't mentioned any names in it, you haven't told which character has this going on his mind. and in the story, both rudra and krish wish shilpa could be theirs.. I mean samaira.. and its innocence and honesty is what will force people to open the topic and give it a read!
3. The characters- okay, I love samaria's introduction and all... this sunny dress on an archiect already made me feel like she was a heroine... and then though rudra was her friend and all, she did look bubbly to me. since I had already decided to imagine shilpa, she was perfect.
and krish, well... I don't really like him as much I like rudra. I mean, I couldn't find a hero figure in him. and somewhere I felt that you feel the same BECAUSE of his name! i don't know why, but if any two guys krish and rudra are standing, rudra has to be the nore mature one and krish has to be the one who thinks from the heart. and in this case too, all along krish thought from the heart, had innocent love and rudra seemed to be like the one who would come and finally take samaria.
pata nhi ab likhne me aisa lg rha h jaise krish's love is more pure... but still...
and do you know I even have a real life friend named Rudra kapoor!
oh and the name samaria is so beautiful❤️
4. The emotions- no word for this point. I don't have to say anything. I am dead as dead could be. Man I could so connect with each of them! and although I have never experienced anythhing like this, I could still feel how they must be feeling.. you were fab at capturing each emotion just perfectly! each of the three were right in their places and there was no villian, and yet I could find it all perfect. there was chaos of thoughts and emotions and yet I could feel it all so clear.
5. the story- well it was simple, and I still think that if it wasn't for your style of writing and the way you mingled their emotions, I would have found the story a little too close to the reality, something I won't prefer. But lets not go there since we have already discussed it. So anyhow, I think it was intelligently simple, you knew you wanted to focus on the emotions and the plot and you did it perfectly!
6. dedication- well... I LOVE YOU TOOO!!!!! SO SO SO SO SO MUCH!!!!!!!!❤️❤️
P.S- ab jab khaata khul hi gaya h IF pe... toh keep more one shots coming 😉
and last me ek typical IF comment.. please.. read this :
lovely os dear
thanks for the pm
continue soon
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Oh that reminds me, PMs will be sent out shortly.. pakka promise!
and love you!
Cricket
