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..vidhi..

@..vidhi..

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Posted: 11 years ago

#11

gosh it was damn beautifull!!
great job!

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ShonaSparkzz

@ShonaSparkzz

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Posted: 11 years ago

#12

This beautiful dear

Your work with your own characters has elevated the level of your writing skills

congratulations👏

You described their bond of friendship beautifully

I liked Nikhil's pov concerning his parents

how he cared for them from the bottom of his heart but would refuse to accept because of his male ego and the pain it brought to him

But it was the consequence of their doing

Neglecting the care he tried to show

not being for him when he needed them

it was obvious

there is so much that a person can take and he had enough of it

And how shreya's had been his strength and broken the cocoon he created around himself

was heart touching

Hoping to read more original stories ...😊

proud of u my mishti mirchi ( bengali style meh 😉😆)

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Vrutanshi

@kreya204

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Posted: 11 years ago

#13

Beautiful!! U r great at writing!! If dis was ur early creation den i wud love to read ur works wholeheartedly!!

D way u've portrayed d emotions is just so good!
D guy is suffering from complex! His parents dnt understand him! He finds light in d tunnel in his friend! His life changes! Rather his way to look at things changes! N wid his friend's presence,for good!
Nw he is an extrovert!, d friend of ol! Helping hand for 1 n ol, bt deep down he misses d one who made him who he actually is!!

I think u n ur frnd share a grt deep bond which is reflected in d os!

May ur frndshp last forever!!

As i said i wud love to read ur further works so plz pm me wen u update!!
N ya! It was a treat reading dis1! Do continue writing such stuff!

Edited by kreya204 - 11 years ago

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@santiagosentyou

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Posted: 11 years ago

#14

Aditi! :O

OHMYGOD!

You write?

RES!

UNRES!

Again, thanks for blackmailing me 😛

I love the concept of this OS.

No love, just plain friendship <3

First of all, I like this guy. He's kinda similar. I'm an extrovert, yet I love spending time in the library.

The way you've written their story is really nice and also easy to relate too.

And yes, I can lie like her too 😆

How you've incorporated his relationship with his parents is really good too.

Great stuff <33

Edited by ARandKJFan - 11 years ago

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Manu

@.scarlet.

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Posted: 11 years ago

#15

Wonderful OS!! 👏 👏

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Hera Flames

@Flame.Of.Rose

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Posted: 11 years ago

#16

Originally posted by: MrMrsChiping.
buddy you r way more talented to me..you know studies pressure always bring our inner writer our personal experience:P
beautifully written no doubt..and unique one too:D
I loved it the way you expressed the desaprate need of frnd:(
-your di

Thank you di. Means a lot coming from you🤗. And I is no good writer😳

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Hera Flames

@Flame.Of.Rose

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Posted: 11 years ago

#17

Originally posted by: zona_malik
Awesome

Amazing

Superb :)

Thank you.😊

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Hera Flames

@Flame.Of.Rose

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Posted: 11 years ago

#18

Originally posted by: ..nams..
i wont review until u review mine! 😈
a revenge is a revenge 😡

Fine.😳 Give me all the links.

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Hera Flames

@Flame.Of.Rose

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Posted: 11 years ago

#19

Originally posted by: lovely7010
res
unres..

wonderful one!

loved it...

you've portrayed all the emotions so well.

Mera lamba vala comment kahan hai?😡

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Hera Flames

@Flame.Of.Rose

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Posted: 11 years ago

#20

Originally posted by: -FrozenRain-
I know why this is dedicated to HAvri and all I can says is she deserves every bit of your dedication...

About the rest all I'll say is its beautiful,Simple

Thank you di😊

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