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Posted: 15 years ago
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It is his final year in school. Being known about its significance, he is quite tense. He is on his couch, listening to a sentimental song on Radio Mirchi 98.3 FM. While listening to song, he gets so engross in his thought that he is right now recalling about his past memories about his dear ones. As he recalls about his first crush, in fact his love; tears roll down his cheeks.😭 Suddenly to his amaze, he hears a voice of a woman. "Hey Rahul, why are you crying? It was your past and there is no point wasting your time thinking about it. Remember......

"Always ask God to give you
What you deserve,
Not what you Desire...!
Desire may be few,
But, you
Deserve a lot."..!!


and you have responsibilities towards your parents and you know about their dreams, right young boy?

Having heard this, he replies back "Yes I do, but who are you? He asks couple of times but all of a sudden bell rings "Tring...Tring...Tring". He realize that it was just a dream. But he still can't believe it was a dream because he could still feel her presence. "O yes! I remember, I was listening to Radio Mirchi 98.3 FM."

He stretches his arms and steps down from the couch looking very fresh and enjoys the glimpse of brand morning sun creeping into his room. From the open windows, gentle breeze touches his face and gives him a soothing effect. As he walks by the garden side, all of the nature is in place. He finds beautiful butterflies around the flowers, birds singing happily and trees dancing to greet him a very good morning. He feels a sudden optimism, like never before. He makes his way down meandering road to his school.

As he enters his class, he feels as if he is entering a new world. He meets his friends sharing welcome wishes to each other. But as he sees his love ' Tia' , he gets much more delighted than he was. He recalls the first day of their meeting. Her face had cast a magic spell on his poor heart and still he cannot keep his eyes off her.

When he return in the evening, he finds his beloved sister waiting for him. After having dinner he goes to sleep and again in his dreams he sees the eyes of the woman with whom he had talked. It seem to him that her eyes was wet this time and trying to tell him something. As he gets up, he tells about his dream to his sister. She says not to worry as it is just a dream.

Next day in School, throughout the day he seem very thoughtful and every time he closes his eyes, he could see those eyes, which keeps him disturbing all the day.On that very night, in his dream he sees the woman dressed in pure white dress and face being covered. The woman says " Hey Rahul, don't be afraid, I'm your friend and believe me I want to see you do good in life. So focus on your studies and leave rest to GOD. In the morning on breakfast table, he shares his dream with his sister. Hearing this, his sister says, " Well, I think she is some goddess blessing you. Hearing this he looks convinced with what she said and smiles with delighted heart and name the woman of his dream " An Angel."

From that day, it becomes his usual routine to have a conversation with Angel in his dream every night. With a beautiful conversation, every morning seems boosting him to achieve his and his family's dream of becoming a Successful person. With the advice of Angel he starts focusing more on his studies. Though he still love Tia but now his priority is his studies and within no time he excels in whatever he laid his hand on.

The red letter day arrives. He is in the exam hall and beside him, is his love ' Tia'. He is very nervous, his hands are literally shivering. He is completely blank and doesn't know what to write. He closes his eyes and remembers the Angel's word and starts writing on his answer sheet.

Finally, the most awaited results are out and to his surprise, he is the topper in his state. He gets the scholarship to London. After completing his 4(four) years degree, he returns back as a "Successful IT Engineer." He is very pleased to see his family, relatives and friends at the Airport to receive him. That very night, in his dream for the first time, he sees the Angel's face, very happy with him and blessing him.

The next day he is all set to receive an award. He receives "Young Achiever Award" and to his surprise he sees Tia (a Successful Doctor) being awarded too.Both congratulates each other on their achievement and in the evening, they are being interviewed by the media. On being asked the same question about their success; Tia answers that "whatever I have achieved today is because of the support of my family". And as the interviewer handovers the microphone to Rahul, he says "As you all know that behind every successful man, there is a woman and it is the same in my case. First of all my Sister, who always supported me,' My Love' though I have not purpose her yet, but she has always been my inspiration and last but not the least whom I dedicate this to ..(he closes his eyes) My Angel.... My Mother, saying this he pauses, his eyes filled with tears. And after sometime he continues. "God knew that he cannot be everywhere so he created Mother."

After the interview, Rahul and Tia walk alongside.


THE END



"HEY GUYS, PLEASE CHECK OUT THIS STORY AND GIVE A SUITABLE TITLE TO IT. DO GIVE SOME FEEDBACK FOR MY STORY. ALL POSITIVE AND NEGATIVE(CONSTRUCTIVE) COMMENTS R MOST WELCOME."
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Hi,

I read ur story it'z really touching and I appreciate ur writing skill...kep writing....luking 4ward 4 ur new stories.
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Beautiful!
Was a bit brief, but definitely very beautiful :) One can see it was written dil se.
I liked the fact that you only revealed that the Angel was Rahul's mother at the end. And Tia and Rahul's love story was so sweet!
Hmm, title? A few suggestions:
1. The Angel
2. Whispers from Within
3. Inspiration
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Wow! awesome writing....I really loved d story it literally brought tears in my eyes....it'z really nice.

Wel, I think the most suited title has been already suggested by Nisha and I'll go with:

Whispers from Within

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Posted: 15 years ago
#5
hey sobit,

Lovely story....even I suggest the same title given by Nisha


Whispers from Within

I think this is the most suited one......(Nisha...it'z really gud one)

Do kep writing coz. u can do wonders....wil b waiting 4 another story so do post soon.
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Posted: 15 years ago
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I liked the story pretty much. And the title Nisha suggested is very good too. But if you want to keep this up, you will need to rectify the grammar a bit. (I hope you don't take any offence.)

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Posted: 15 years ago
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Hi dear frn(nisha.munim) 1st of all thank u very much 4 reading my story n 4 ur appreciation. It really means a lot to me.😊

U r right, i wrote dis story with 'dil se'.

Thank u 4 da 3 title suggestions. Its really gud. Most of my frns like da title "Whispers from within" n even i think dis title is suitable 4 my story.👏

Hey, do check out my other story "Footprint" which is inspired 4rm one of the Bollywood's blockbuster movie.

I also have tried to write poem called "Life is Beautiful". So do give some feedback to it.

Thank u once again.

I'll b writing my next story soon.

Keep in touch n God Bless u alys,


Edited by mailme2sobit - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
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hi every1 thank u 4 liking my story.
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Posted: 15 years ago
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I liked the story pretty much. And the title Nisha suggested is very good too. But if you want to keep this up, you will need to rectify the grammar a bit. (I hope you don't take any offence.)

Hi Pooja, 1st of all thank u 4 reading my story. M glad u liked it. It really means a lot to me.

M really thankful 4 ur honest feedback. It will surely help me in improving my writing skills.

There is always a room 4 improvement n i'll certainly try to improve my grammar.

Hey do check out my other story "Footprint" which is inspired 4rm one of the Bollywood's Blockbuster movie.

I also have tried to write a poem called "Life is Beautiful".

Do give some feedback to it(all positive n negative(constructive) comments are most welcome).

Thank u again

I'll b writing da next story soon.

Keep in touch n God Bless u alys.

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Posted: 15 years ago
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Beautiful!
Was a bit brief, but definitely very beautiful :) One can see it was written dil se.
I liked the fact that you only revealed that the Angel was Rahul's mother at the end. And Tia and Rahul's love story was so sweet!
Hmm, title? A few suggestions:
1. The Angel
2. Whispers from Within
3. Inspiration

Hi dear frn(nisha.munim) 1st of all thank u very much 4 reading my story n 4 ur appreciation. It really means a lot to me.😊

U r right, i wrote dis story with 'dil se'.

Thank u 4 da 3 title suggestions. Its really gud. Most of my frns like da title "Whispers from within" n even i think dis title is suitable 4 my story.👏

Hey, do check out my other story "Footprint" which is inspired 4rm one of the Bollywood's blockbuster movie.

I also have tried to write poem called "Life is Beautiful". So do give some feedback to it.(all positive n negative(constructive) comments are most welcome.

Thank u once again.

I'll b writing my next story soon.

Keep in touch n God Bless u alys,

Edited by mailme2sobit - 15 years ago

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