'Beacuse He Affected Me' SuKor Complete

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"I was already torn apart. Living like a walking corpse with no emotions except for the pain Chakor left me with. Chakor Suraj Ra...Chakor Bhuvan Laal and a soon to be bride of "Samay khurana" a police officer who transfered here 3 months ago and helped Chakor fight against Ragini-Vivaan-Ranjhana and sent Kn to a Mental Hospital. All the legal business was handed over to me and I brought my Mummy back to haveli but she had a condition, Chakor's marriage functions will happen in haveli, this was her condition. I never, even in my worst nightmare, thought that I will be taking incharge of my Chakor's marriage. Not even when Samay proposed her on the day they won her fight against evil and sent Kn to Mental hospital from haveli. All the basti people gathered around haveli and I was watching everything from terrace. My heart almost stopped when he proposed her for marriage but I knew she loved me.We may be Divorced, She may think I cheated her, I may be living with her sister who's, according to everyone, pregnant with my child. But somewhere deep in my heart I know she loves me. My chakor will not agree to his proposal. But my world got completely shattered when she accepted it. Why did she do it ? How can she marry someone else? How can she give all the rights on her soul and body to someone else other than me ? Is my chakor falling in love with him ? She is liking him, she's allowing him in her life, she's allowing him to love her, she allowing him to touch her...Love her, Touch her, these should me my rights only. But why ? After all we are, Divorced, I cheated her, I'm living with her sister under one roof, then why ?
Today is her haldi function. Everything is prepared at haveli. Both, bride and groom, side came on time. She's looking divine in White lehnga, white backless top and yellow dupatta draped around her in half saree style. With floral Maang tika, earings and saree holder on her waiste, she's looking like a Goddess. But the mere thought that she's doing all this for someone elsen rips my heart apart. No this can't be. I cannot sacrifice my chakor for someone else, anyone else. I will tell her everything"

"Chakoriya, bachua tu bohat sundar dikhat hai. Hum bohot khush hui hai tere liye" Kasturi placed a small kiss on Chakor's forehead.

"Mummy, hume apse kuch baat karni hai" Suraj said to tejaswani and took her to a side.

"Nahi suraj, aap pehle uss larki k jazbaato'n k sath bohat khel chuke hain. Hum aapko aur barbaad nahi karne denge use" Tejaswani told suraj after he asked her to bring chakor to him secretly.

"Please mummy, hum haath jorte hain aap ke saamne, bass ek baar ek aakhri baar humare uper yeh ehsaan kar dijiye" He begged his own mother and she melted.

"Chakor, beta aapki haldi uper kamre main rakhi hai hum lene jaa rahey hain. aap bhi aiye apka make up thik kar dein" Tejaswani asked chakor to come with her to a room.

Though chakor agreed to go but in her heart, she did not want to go to a paticular room, and lucky for her it was a guest room upstairs. Tejaswani asked her to wait for her in the room, she has forgotten to bring something. Chakor entered the room and saw the Haldi bowl on a table near wall.

"Why I'm doing this ? I promised myself not to ever fall in love again or weave happily married life's dreams. I don't have feelings for Samay. I'm doing wrong to him and I know it but then why ? Why suraj ? Why you had to be present there, looking at me from terrace when he proposed me ? Suraj..Suraj Rajvanshi, this name still makes my heart skipa a beat. When tejaswani ji asked me if I have any problems with my marriage happening in haveli, Suraj was ..." Someone closed the room's door and chakor looks back and gets shocked seeing Suraj locking the door.

Suraj looked at her with tears in eyes and a slight smile on his face hoping that chakor will respond the same but instead he saw anger on her face and disgust in her eyes, for him. She walked toward him and then took steps passing him to open the door and get out of this room. Suraj held her by arm, and turned her around, to face him.

"Chakor humari baat suno" he pleaded.

"Haath chorho mera suraj" she ordered.

"Thik hai chorh denge magar tumhe humari baat sun'ni hogi" he said and left her arm.

She looked at him for a second and tried to leave again but this time he held her shoulders and pinned her to a wall.

"Ek baar humari baat sunlo chakor" His voice became loud.

"Nahi sun'ni humey tumhari koi baat, chorho mujhe" chakor tried to free herself but in vain.

"Sun'ni paregi." He said determind.

"Kyu'n kiss haq se tum mujhe order de rahey ho ?' chakor asked him and his grip loosened a little .

"Suraj na toh hum pati patni hai or na hi premi, tumhara koi haq nahi banta mujhe iss tarha hukum dene ka yaa mujhe chooney ka" chorho mujhe janey do warna" she said angrily and he once again tightened his grip around her shoulders and came an inch closer to her.

"Warna kia chakor ?" He asked jer, looking broken.

"Warna hum..hum chillayenge" she said, looking away. "Aur agar kisi ne tumhe humare sath ek kamre main dekh liya toh.." she tried to explain but stopped when suraj took a step away from her.

"Tumhe chillane ki yaa kisi ko bulane ki koi zaroorat nahi chakor, Hume yaad hai ek baar tumhi ne humse kaha tha k mere sath, meri baaho'n mein tumhe dunya ki sabse mehfooz or surakshit hone ka ehsaas hota hai. Aur aaj jab hum tumse baat karne k liye ek hi kamre main aye hain toh tum..tum chilla kar sabko bulana chahti ho. Bula lena magar us se pehle meri baat sunlo.' Suraj explained everything to chakor how he lied to her and everyone in order to save imli's dignity. Chakor refused to believe him and wanted to leave but he pinned her to the wall again.

"Thik hai maan liya humne k tumne jo kuch abb kaha woh sach hai, na k woh sab jo tumne pehle kaha tha, magar shikwa mujhe tumse humesha rahega suraj iss baat ka k...K tumne mere pyaar se pehle Imli ko chuna, mere sapno'n se pehle imli ko chuna, mujhe iss layak bhi nahi samjha k mujhe sach btate. Tumhari imli ko bachane ki qurbani mein main jo til,til mari hun uska kia suraj ? harr pal har lamha jo main sabse apne aansoo chupane ki nakaam koshish karti rahi suka kia ? Meri takleef, mera dard tumhe imli or uske bache k aage kuch nazar nahi aaya ? Kyu'n suraj ?" Chakor spoke her heart out without realizing the warm tears rolling down her cheeks. After realizing that she's becoming weak, she decided to lift her guard up and wiped her tears.

"Jo bhi ho suraj, na toh mujhe tumhari kisi baat par yaqeen hai or na hi mujhe karna hai. 2 din baad meri shaadi hai Samay se, mere dill, rooh or shareer par tumhara abb koi haqq nahi." she said with a stern face.

Suraj once again looked completely shattered but he knew that she's lying. "Achaw toh tum mujhse pyaar nahi karti ? aur mera tum par koi haq nahi ? Thik hai manzoor hai. Par aaj tumhari haldi hai or hum chahte hain k tumhe sabse pehle haldi hum lagayein." He said and reached for the haldi bowl, which was on the table near wall,with one hand while other still holding chakor's shoulder. He then took hand full of haldi and placed it on chakor's right shoulder, slipping down to her elbow and from her elbow to her waiste. While chakor closed her eyes.

"Tumhe farq parta hai, mere chooney se hi farq parta hai kyu'nke yeh sirf mera haqq hai" He whispered in her ear and she opened her eyes to look at him with no disgust or anger but a confused look. He then again took a handful of haldi and instead of applying it to chakor he applied it on his right side of cheek and chakor looked at him still lost in the sensation of his touch. He came closer to her and then applied haldi on the right side of her from his face. She felt it again, her heart skipping a beat and then beating as fast as a bullet train, His skin, his stubble tickling her skin. She wanted to turn her face away from his because his stubble was tickling her. But his hands were holding her face, forbidding her to move away from him. His face was still connected to hers and he took some more haldi in his hand and slid it from her waist to her back and from her back to her neck. There was no space left between them. Chako's hands were still holding the table and wall, her eyes closed, with suraj toucing every inch of her, she was lost. Yes He was right. He did Affected her. Its his Affect that she started to love again, she started to hate again, she agreed to samay's propasl because he was watching her, She agreed to let her marriage happen in haveli because he wanted otherwise. She did everything because HE AFFECTED HER.

I hope you guys like it. Do comment and tell me should I should continue it or not ? Ignore grammatical mistakes and typos. I was upset about the current track and took out my frustraion through a post and felt relieved and SuKorlicious again so I wrote this.😆 By the way I'm like a frog, if my ship is't sailing as I want it to I'll jump somewehere else. And when I'm all relieved and happy I'll jump back so no matter how many times I say I hate SuKor or Suraj, the truth is Other wise. Because they effect me 😆

Love-Jasmene..

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Posted: 8 years ago
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It was superb..Bt y don't u write this fully in english dr..some hindi words are known to me..bt some r not..Its just my opinion..otherwise it was aww..He just affected her..😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Interesting concept👏
Looking forward to this
Are you going to update corrupted, it has been a while now
Edited by katheriene - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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very nice... hope Cvs take a cue from you... go ahead...waiting for this... this seems to be a solace with the current track..
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Will she end up marrying suraj again? an intriguing story. Please update soon
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Thank u so much for writing this Jasmine 😊!!
Still in Sukor dreamland
Please update it soon
If possible,try to update 'Corrupted' and 'Aafato'n ke paindey' too
Edited by amrutha131 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Sania_suraj

It was superb..Bt y don't u write this fully in english dr..some hindi words are known to me..bt some r not..Its just my opinion..otherwise it was aww..He just affected her..😊

I will pm you the translation for hindi lines. Is it ok ?
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Nice story!
Interesting!
My day started beautifully with ur words! Thank u!
Waiting to know what is going to happen next!
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Loved it. And I would say u affected me.plz update soon.and do pm if possible
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Intensely emotional one !!
Just hoping that your suraj does not give a lame excuse like reel suraj did for his Mission-Save-Imli's-Child! Want to have something logical from him here. & please dont shun this ff midway like so many of your other ones

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