SuKor Drabble: Chakor's Birthday

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Tara_Vjian

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Posted: 9 years ago

#11

Amazing Amazing amazing totally amazing❤️ Thankx for writingg such a wonderefuull OS

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shravs1101

@shravs1101

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Posted: 9 years ago

#12

Wowww!ahmazing os dear.
Totally loved it,the way u described everything was flawless and the story moved smoothly from one level to the another.
Right from the beginning till end,it was awesome...Suraj shopping for her,his frustration at the shopkeeper for not showing him d right sarees but imagining her scolding him for threatening the shopkeeper with the gun,then he immediately put down the gun and tried to be calm,he asked nicely to show him something classy and especially yellow,then buying that bracelet scene and then comes the most beautiful scene of this story,SuKor scene in the room...no words can describe the beauty of that scene,it was that fab...all in all,it was a beautifully fantastic story.
Plz plz continue it,will be eagerly waiting to read more.

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Namita

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Posted: 9 years ago

#13

Reina, it's beautifully written. Would love to read a continuation.
Like Sanya said, maybe Chakor wearing the sari.

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Esha Singh

@eshasrk

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Posted: 9 years ago

#14

This is Superb...amazing ...mindblowing 👏

My gosh plsss continue, this is so beautifully written. Wish we could some day see this Suraj in the show ...will be a treat to watch

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nycgal

@nycgal

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Posted: 9 years ago

#15

Beautiful!!!!

LOved reading it ..you have captured the emotions so well...Please continue

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SukiDakanya

@SukiDakanya

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Posted: 9 years ago

#16

Hi Reina1

Very nice characterization of Suraj, like how he whips out his gun on his frustration.

They way he thinks he could be enjoying with his friends instead of shopping.

The way Suraj teases her. Excellent details to Chakor accepting him into her life and inviting her to her house for the celebration.

Nice addition of the Sun and moon charm as a metaphor for them

Please continue it and Sanya said with Chakor wearing the Sari...

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BreakingBlue

@BreakingBlue

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Posted: 9 years ago

#17

Eagerly waiting for part 2! This is amazing!

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Reina

@Reina1

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Posted: 9 years ago

#18

Originally posted by: Lolchiku
IT was just amazin ...plzzz to do continue...
U write very well and yes the storyline was amazing ..
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Waiting for the continuation

Thanks love 😳 I will definitely write a part two :)

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Reina

@Reina1

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Posted: 9 years ago

#19

Originally posted by: SanyaEterna
Woww!
The hesitation and confusion of Suraj while he was trying to buy the gift for Chakor was adorable! And that bracelet? Sun and moon woven together as one!
Chakor was so worried for him! She doesn't realize, but lately her whole life is revolving around Suraj. Poori duniya suraj ke chaaron ore ghoomti hai, Chakor ki bhi😆
And the physical attraction! You've described it aptly!
How unlike Chakor, she actually invited Suraj to her place to celebrate with her family, as family, as husband.
Her excitement for the gifts show how much of a child she is inside! Damn cute.
And Suraj peeps to check if his dharam-patni liked his tohfaas! He put on the bracelet, as he had put on the mangalsutra. Beautiful!

Plz continue! Would love to read another part. Maybe Chakor wears Suraj's sari to her place?😉

-Sanu

Thank you so much Sanu😳 ❤️ I tried very hard to maintain elements of SuKor in the fic, and I realized for real Chakor's world is Suraj 😆

@Bold I wasn't sure if I should put this in, but I was thinking to include a small part from Chakor's perspective where I would justify this gesture. Still working on it.

As for the gifts...I realize that no one has actually gotten her gifts. She grew up so soon, and I wanted Suraj to give back a little bit of that to her

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Reina

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Posted: 9 years ago

#20

Originally posted by: paridhi9797
This was AMAZING... 👏
The way u subtly described all the emotions of SUKOR...hats off👏 ⭐️
N pls pls pls do continue this... Would love 2 see SUKOR at her mai bapu's place...
So pls write a 2nd part...pretty please

thank you so much!!! I will start working on a second part asap 😳😃

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