FF: A Modern Fairytale THE END PART B@ Pg: 24 - Page 4

Originally posted by: mehak9

Wowww... Superb oneee...
Waiting for d next part 👍🏼

Thank you so much Mehak 😊

Next one will be on Monday 😊

Lovely starting!! Its nice Tiana..

Originally posted by: smileee

Lovely starting!! Its nice Tiana..

Loved these lines!! suffer & rejoice together-- success formula for any healthy relationship.. Togetherness.. I think u will make me tired by appreciating you, May be next time i may in short of words to give feedback.. :)

<font color="#0000ff">they suffer together and rejoice together, their pain and joy shall be one and none shall be ever able to separate them and thus shall Ajay and Sanjana be one till the end of their lives.</font>

<font color="#0000ff">Thanks a lot for attempting this different story!!</font>

Oh Shanthi.. You never make me tired by your kind words... In fact your kind words make me want to write... Now I'll update soon just to see the comments you guys give me 😳 ... Thank you so much 😳

Hey, great effort.

Originally posted by: Propinquity.

Hey, great effort.

However, the dialogue would be so much easier to understand with the use of inverted commas.

It's hard to distinguish between thoughts and dialogue, without the speech marks.

Hope you're okay with constructive criticism.

Thank you Paridhi 😊 ... Actually in the prologue there are only dialogues and no thoughts... That is the reason I didn't think it was necessary to use any inverted commas... 😊

Thank you so much for reading and commenting 😊 ... Criticisms are most welcome 🤗

Hello everyone. Thank you for your lovely comments. Before reading this please read the character sketch. And as Paridhi suggested I have used inverted commas for all dialogues. I hope you guys will understand this better now. Please read and leave a comment on how you felt about this chapter. Thank you.

Prologue

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Chapter 1: A New Day

Ayyush couldn't take his eyes off her and he stood looking at her all his worries forgotten. She hadn't yet seen him as she was busy gathering wild roses. In the faint light of the dawn he saw her lips playing up and down as if she had a charming secret and her eyes looking softly at the flowers. Her thin fingers were gently stroking the petals of the roses she had gathered. She looked like a garden fairy. How he wished to be the rose in her hands! Oh to be touched lovingly by those soft fingers! He shook his head lightly trying to steady his thoughts. There was a sudden gust of wind and a few tendrils of her hair fell on her face caressing it. She pushed her hair back and looked up. She blushed deeply as she saw him intently gazing at her,

"Raj??"

"Huh?"

"The sunrise... We have to go..."

"Uh... Yes, yes Pari. I am sorry that I am late."

"It's okay. Let's go quickly. We don't want to miss the sunrise."

She took his hand and they ran towards the morning stone' as they called it. The stone was perched at the edge of a cliff overlooking a valley filled with sunflowers. The sun had not risen yet but the sky was filled with a pinkish orange light. They stood still holding hands and inhaling the sweet morning air deeply. And suddenly the entire sky lightened up and the land in front of them seemed to be on fire. They felt the gentle warmth of the morning sun on their skin. As if to welcome the sun into the world the birds started to sing. Ayyush turned and looked at her sighing in happiness. The golden light from the sun fell on her face and she looked ethereal.

"The sun's up! The sun's up!!"

"Huh?... Uh, yes it is."

"You missed it again... Didn't you?"

"Woh... I... uh..."

He looked down. How could he tell her that he missed the sunrise every day just because he was so lost in looking at her? He knew he had upset her again.

"Sorry, Pari... I'll see it tomorrow."

"It's always tomorrow for you. Raj, why don't you ever try to concentrate?"

"So sorry... well, at least the sun saw us both together? Isn't it a good thing?"

"Yes it is; another day has started. I wonder..."

A trilling sound interrupted her. Ayyush looked at his watch. It was 6:30 am.

"Pari, I need to go."

"Go? So soon? But you came just now..."

"I know... I am sorry. Actually, it's my brother's first day at college and I need to help him out."

"Will I see you again?"

"Of course, you will. I will wait for you here tomorrow."

Ayyush turned to leave when he felt her holding his hands.

"Raj... I am scared..."

"Scared? But why Pari?"

"I heard that there is going to be a war soon... If that happens I may not be able to see you."

"Pari, let's not cross the bridge before we come to it. Right now, we have peace and we'll think of that alone."

"Okay... I'll try to remain positive."

"I don't want you to try..."

"Okay, okay... Everything's going to be just fine..."

"That's like my sunshine..."

"Now... go... don't make your brother wait... And... Raj... Hope you have a wonderful day."

"You too, Pari... See you tomorrow."

As Ayyush turned back one last time to look at her, he only wished that he could remove the fear of losing her from his heart. And as she waved at him with a smile on her face she only hoped that the sun would see them together again tomorrow.

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"Master, your books."

Bhushan looked around him and saw no one around. So he gently pulled her towards him.

"Shreya, there is no one around, you can call me Bhushan. And thank you for the books."

"Just because no one is around, the truth doesn't change, does it? I'll always be a servant and you'll always be my Master's son."

"Come on, Shreya. Don't start giving me lectures about Master-Slave relation and nonsense. Come straight to the point. What happened?"

"How do you know something happened?"

"You are my best friend... And I can easily tell when my best friend is angry or upset. Now tell me what happened, fast."

"Bhushan... I want to study. But because I am a servant, they won't let me join your college. Can you do something about it?"

A sudden knock on the door made Shreya move away from him. She hurriedly began to arrange the books on his bedside table. Bhushan sighed. Why did things always have to be this difficult?

"Come in... Papa?"

"Your Majesty."

"Can you leave us alone?"

"Yes, your majesty."

"Bhushan, today is Ajay's first day at college and I want you and Ayyush to take care of him."

"Of course, Papa. Haven't we always taken care of him?"

"Yes... You have."

"Have you talked to Bhaiyya?"

"No, I have searched for him everywhere. I don't know where he is."

"He will come, Papa."

"Hmmm... Now, come we need to wake your brother up."

"He is still asleep?"

"Don't you know him?"

...

Ajay was dreaming of her again. He heard her singing beautifully and went closer to her. She shied away as usual and he caught her arms and pulled her close to him. She looked up at him and he felt like drowning in her eyes. He slowly moved closer to her to kiss her and...

"AJAY... RISE AND SHINE IT'S A BEAUTIFUL DAY."

"Oh... Papa... why did you wake me up? Just a little longer, please."

Bhushan smiled at his little brother's antics and pulled the bedcover off.

"Not today, Chote. It's your first day in college."

"Yes, Chote... Wake up."

"Ayyush... When did you come? Where were you? I was searching all over the palace for you."

"I... uh... was out for a ride Papa. I came in just now."

"Ayyush Bhaiyya... Please tell papa to let me sleep for five more minutes."

"No, Chote... not today... now up from your bed."

"You all are against me... hmph..."

"Good to see you up... Now get ready, fast... your mother would want to see you before you leave. You will meet her before you leave, won't you?"

Ajay's eyes softened at the mention of his mother. He loved his mother very much.

"Yes... I will."

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Loved it sooo muchhh... Nd thank u for adding khushi kumari Gupta ... 👏



Ooo I'm n a fairy world now

I loved the interaction between Bhushan and Shreya in this chapter. Can't wait to see this storyline develop :)

That was a beautiful and wonderful begining Tiana Sweety...awww Ajay was gonna kiss Sanjana Awww naughty boy...we never get to see naughty Ajay in the show...but tumhari story mein sab possible hai...am waiting how u will introduce Sanjana...
Love u sweetie plsss continue soon...