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Posted: 7 months ago

Hi all, 

I posted this FF long back. But since many ppl were not so aware of using FF section posting it here. 

I have completed only one chapter πŸ˜Š I have just kept names of character similar. You can swap pranali and erica as per your likings πŸ˜Š

https://www.indiaforums.com/fanfiction/3818

Edited by firewings_diya - 7 months ago
Posted: 7 months ago

A person is shown waking up in the morning after sun rays falls on his face. And he hears some people screaming. 

Voice over

"Main Abhimanyu Birla , meri zindagi aam nahi hai. Bachpan ko papa ne bigad diya, jab bada hua toh biwi ne , ab jab main chain ki saans lena chahtha hun toh iss neighbor ne"


AB: arre uncle ji problem kya hai aapko. Kyun chilla rahe hai ithni subah subah. Pehle hi aapka ghala kharab hai kahiye toh gale ki goli doon.


Neighbour understood that he is taunting him.

Neighbour : sorry beta.


Abhi goes back.

AB: ye ek bulvalo sabse agar sorry kehne se sab theek ho jatha toh shayad main apne bacche ke saath hotha.


Fb is shown.

AS: Abhi mujhe toh darr hai tum apne bacche ko bhi chot pahunchadoge.

AB: I am sorry akshara.. meri galti ka mujhe ithna badha saza toh math do. Kaise jiyunga main apne bacche ke bina.

AS: main nahi chahthi tumhara saya bhi mere bacche ke upar padhe.

AS leaves with her husband. 


Abhi falls on the floor remembering all the sweet memories he had with Abhir.


AB screams abhir.

FB ends.


AB goes to his kitchen start making himself a coffee

AB: Babli kya haal hai mausam ka

(Babli is an AI device like alexa)

Babli: aaj ka thap maan 28 degrees hai. Aur baarish hone ki sambhavana hai.

AB: nice. He takes a sip of his coffee. Aur kuch.

Babli: aapke ke liye ek Voice note aya hai.

AB: Voice Note kisse

He takes a sip.

Babli: Mathashree.

AB: Please play.

Manjari: Abhi kidhar hai tu. Kithne din se phone kar rahi hun main tujhe. Phone kyun nahi utha raha.


Ab thinks for a while.

AB: Babli call mathashree.

Babli: Aye Aye Captain.

We hear phone ringing.


Manjari: Hello 

AB: isse pehle aap mujhse pooche main kaha hoon kaisa hoon main theek hun kush hun.

Manjari: Abhi ghar aaja na beta.

AB: rooh kaisi hai.

Manjari: tu taal math. Aaraha hai ya nahi.

AB: Maine pucha rooh kaisi hai maa.

Manjari: theek hai. Miss karthi hai apne poppy ko. 

AB: aur arohi. Naraz hai.

Arohi: Naraz toh hai. Lekin ithna bhi nahi ki tumhe ghar na bulao. Aajao na abhi please.


AB : maa arohi mujhe kaafi zyada kaam hai rakhtha hun. Apna khayal rakhna.


He cuts the call.


AB: patha nahi kithne dino thak main apne aapse bhagtha rahunga. 


He dresses himself he goes to Mumbai hospital where he is currently working as surgeon.


Doctor Mayank: Doctor Abhimanyu accha hua aaap agaye ek patient ko immediate attention ki zaroorath hai.

AB : kya hua usse.

MK: Accident hua hai. Dono bhai the ek bhai bach gaya.


AB remembers neil seeing the patient bleeding.

AB's hands shiver and he trembles.


MK: doctor aap theek hai.

AB speaks to himself.


AB: Abhi.. tu aise haar nahi maan saktha. Neil ko toh bacha nahi paaya isse kuch nahi hone doonga.


He gets up and started treating as if it's his brother.

He sees neil in him.


Once he is done with treating the patient he comes out goes to cabin and drops on the floor with tears in his eyes.


AB: neil mera bhai. I miss you.. I miss you so much.


Suddenly he here knock on his door. He wipes his tears and waits and makes it look like he never cried as that's the only skill he learnt all these years.


AB goes and sits on his chair.

AB: come in.


His junior rohan comes with the report.

Rohan: doctor abhimanyu. Ye raha patient ka report.

AB: ab kaisa hai woh.

Rohan : stable hai.

AB : Thank god.

Abhi is relieved that he saved his neil. He packs his belongings. And goes to a restaurant.


And sits on a table which is near window and he sees that the restaurant is too crowded.


Waiter: Sir wohi?

AB: haan salad with pasta. And smiles.


Waiter smiles and go back.


Waiter gets his order and abhi starts eating his food while browsing through his phone.


A lady with the long hair comes near to his table.

"Hi Koi aane wala hai yahan?"

Abhi looks at her. The girl is beautiful as well as charming.

Abhi: Nahi

"Kya main baith jaoon"

Abhi: hmm. Kyun nahi.


She comes and sits infront of her.

Either you can consider AS as some one else and this character as pranali.

Or consider AS as pranali and this character as Erica Fernandez.


" Ye aadmi ithna khadoos kyun hai. Attitude aise de raha hai jaise kahi ka raaja ho.. shakal dekh ke baath bhi nahi kartha." She murmers to herself.


" Hi main Ananya Kashyap. aur aap" she extends her hand for a handshake


He does not respond.

She waves her hands infront of his eyes to catch his attention


AK:Hello.. maain aap se baath kar rahi hun.. naam kya hai aapka.


AB without looking at her.

AB: Abhimanyu Birla.


AK: Hi Abhimanyu birla... main mumbai main nayee ayi hun. Ek hospital main psychiatrist ka job mila hai

Ab: hmm.


AK murmers khadoos kahi ka.


Waiter: sir ye aapke saath hai.

AK: han

AB : nahi.


"Han bol detha kya jaatha.. khamaka embarrass karwaya. "


AB: i mean woh mere sath nahi hai. Lekin maine usse yaha baithne ki permission di hai.


Waiter: theek hai sir. Madam kya lengi aap.


AK: chats milenge?

Waiter: ma'am raath ki 8 baje chat counter bandh ho chuka hai.

AK: chinese?

Waiter: nahi ma'am.


AB: agar meri maaniye toh raath main ye sab khana theek nahi hai. Rath main khana light honi chahiye.


AK: aap kya doctor hai.

Abhi does not speak.

AK: bhaiyya aloo ke parathe layiye extra makkhan maarke.


"Iss ladki ko kaun samjhaye. Rehne dethe hai waise bhi aana toh hospital hi hai"


AB about to get up.


AK: hello excuse me. Thodi toh courtesy rakhiye ek ladki akeli kaise khayegi.


AB: usme kya hai. Khana hai koi nasha thodi na kar rahi hai aapn.


AK: woh baath nahi hai. Mujhe yaha log ajeeb tareeke se dekh rahe hai.

Abhi looks at others sees that some men are staring at her.


AK: please baith jayiye na. Thodi der i promise jaldi khatham kardungi.


AB sits infront of her. Again browses through her phone.


AK : waise aapka number kya hai

AB looks at her.

AK: aap galath math samajhi hai.. aap mere iss sheher main aap mere pehle dost hai. Mujhe nahi patha yaha par kya kaha miltha hai socha aapse puch lun.


AB : theek hai. He gives her his number.


AK : thank you.

Without listening he leaves.


https://youtu.be/77kLWFG4wYA



AK: aadmi toh accha hai patha nahi iske andar aisa kaunsa dard chupa ke rakha hai ki ye hasna bhi bhool gaya hai.


AK leaves to her home.


AB goes to his home takes a shower with cold water and swallow a tablet and sleeps without thinking much. 


Next Day


AB goes to hospital

Nurse greets AB

AB : Good morning mrs d'silva

AB directly goes to his cabin. He suddenly hears a knock on his cabin.


AB: come in.

AK enters

AK: Hi sorry. I wanted to know where is my cabin.

She looks up and sees AB. AB stands up looking at her.

AK & AB : aap?


Doctor Mayank with Dr rohan enters into abhi's cabin.

M: doctor abhimanyu meet ms Ananya Kashyap Psychiatrist.

AB: hi.

M: aur ye hai Doctor Abhimanyu Birla hamare hospital star surgeon hai.


AK with much hesitation


AK: Hi


Nurse enters.

Nurse: doctor abhimanyu there is an emergency. That patient he is sinking.


Abhi rushes to emergency room.Mayank follows him.


AK: ye aise bhaag kyun gaye.


Rohan: ye aise hi hai. Har ek patient ko apna maanthe hai. Patha nahi inki zindagi main ithna dookh kyun hai.


AK: dukh yaani.


Rohan: Ye udaipur ke birla hospital ke maalik Harsh Birla ke bete hai. Suna hai bachpan se inki zindagi khas nahi rahi. Phir shadi hui tabhi inhe main kush dekha tha. Phir inki bhai ki mauth hogayi. Uske baad inki biwi bhi inhe chodkar chali gayi. Aur ab inse inka baccha bhi nafrath kartha hai. Aur ye sab chod chaad kar yaha agaye.


AK: ye sab tumhe kaise patha.


Rohan: main birla hospital main hi intern tha. Abhi sir ke jaane ke baad mujhe aisa laga jaise maine ek aise doctor se training lene ka mauka kho diya hai toh socha jaha woh hai wohi join karlun.


Ak smiles.


Nurse comes running.

Nurse : Doctor rohan apko doctor abhimanyu bula rahe hai.


Rohan: ek minute. Aur ha unse math kahiyega ki maine aapko ye bathaya hai warna bahuth naraz honge.


Ak smiles 

Ak: samajh sakthi hun. Nahi bathaoongi. I promise.


Rohan smiles and runs to the emergency room.


Ak follows she sees abhi his determination to save the patient.


AK: hmm interesting. Toh inka bhi ek past hai. Mr abhimanyu birla aapko main aapke past se bahar nikal kar rahungi ye mera apne aap se vaada hai. Aap mere kuch nahi lagthe lekin hamara ek rishta hai. Dard ka rishta. Aur iss rishte ke naathe main aapke liye woh sab karungi jo mere haath main hai.


She looks at abhi who is trying to save the patient who is like neil to him.

Posted: 7 months ago

Tagging folks who may have not read.

Posted: 7 months ago
Originally posted by firewings_diya


Tagging folks who may have not read.


I have Diya. Just yesterday only I realised that I have reading your FFs from quite sometime now. 

I have read your Adiya ff which is incomplete on Wattpad btw years ago. Have been a silent reader for so long that yesterday while rechecking on the ffs i have read i realised ohh yeh toh apni Diya hi hai β€οΈ

Edited by chaipaani - 7 months ago
Posted: 7 months ago
Originally posted by chaipaani



I have Diya. Just yesterday only I realised that I have reading your FFs from quite sometime now. 

I have read your Adiya ff which is incomplete on Wattpad btw years ago. Have been a silent reader for so long that yesterday while rechecking on the ffs i have read i realised ohh yeh toh apni Diya hi hai β€οΈ

Main udhar jaathi nahi. Mera naagin FF's bhi baaki hai ppl are waiting for them from so long. It's been almost a year i have updated them πŸ˜† i don't know what to update also πŸ˜†

Posted: 7 months ago
Originally posted by firewings_diya


Main udhar jaathi nahi. Mera naagin FF's bhi baaki hai ppl are waiting for them from so long. It's been almost a year i have updated them πŸ˜† i don't know what to update also πŸ˜†


Naagin maine dekha nahi toh read nahi kra. 

But Baaki sab i have read 

Posted: 7 months ago

Originally posted by chaipaani



Naagin maine dekha nahi toh read nahi kra. 

But Baaki sab i have read 

 πŸ€—

Posted: 7 months ago

Diya...Brilliant 🀩🀩🀩🀩  Lovely .... I loved it.... πŸ₯³


Bas AK ke jagah maine Erica ko imagine kiya..... I so want HC with her....


Whom did u think of while writing ? Hope its not Pranali. πŸ˜²

Posted: 7 months ago
Originally posted by Amru4krish


Diya...Brilliant 🀩🀩🀩🀩  Lovely .... I loved it.... πŸ₯³


Bas AK ke jagah maine Erica ko imagine kiya..... I so want HC with her....


Whom did u think of while writing ? Hope its not Pranali. πŸ˜²

Yes I am imagining Erica πŸ˜† Currently can't imagine this as Akshara sharma  as usne irritate karke rakha haiπŸ˜†

For me AK here is Erica⭐️😳

Edited by firewings_diya - 7 months ago
Posted: 7 months ago
Originally posted by firewings_diya


Yes I am imagining Erica πŸ˜† Currently can't imagine this as Akshara sharma  as usne irritate karke rakha haiπŸ˜†

For me AK here is Erica⭐️😳


Yeh huyi na baath πŸ₯³

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