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Posted: 2 years ago
#41

Avi, please update 😳

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Posted: 2 years ago
#42

Originally posted by: Anindita91

Avi, please update 😳

M extremely sorry Anindita for not updating the story. I was  very busy with some personal matter that needed my complete attention. I hope you understand. Really very sorry. But I will update very soon. 

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Posted: 2 years ago
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Originally posted by: kayinat

Wow, glad that came across such an amazing story...loved every bit of a chapter👏

Thanq so much for reading and m glad that u loved it. Please keep reading and encouraging. 

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Posted: 2 years ago
#44

Part 8

Pritam was cleaning up in his kitchen when he heard some noises. 
Soni - Beeji, mummy dekho buaji phoophaji aaye hai.
Pritam (while cleaning) - Ye myself Pammiji or machis lekar ghoomney waale phoophaji phir aa gye . Lagta hai Sakhuja house k chakkar kaatna inka part time job hai. Khair mujhe kya.
Beeji-Arey tum dono yhan itni raat gye, sab thik toh hai na? She asked worried.
Pammi-Haan haan sab thik hai ji, vo toh hum inke MLA dost k bete ki sagai mein gye the, toh socha vapsi mein Ansh se milte hue chalein. Kahan hai humara Rajkumar?
Beeji-Ander hai apne kamre me so raha hai. Abhi abhi soya hai, Jaag jyega toh phir Amrita ko pareshaani hogi usey sulaney mein. Phir kabhi mil lena.
Pammiji - koi nai, baaki sbse toh mil skte hai na.
Amrita kithe hai tu, Ansh kya aa gya humey toh bhool hi gyi tu.
Amrita - arey nahi buaji aisi koi gal na hai ji. Oye Soni, mere  kamre me jaa Ansh akela hai  vhan.
Soni - ji bhabhi.
Amrita-Oye Angad, kal jaa k naa electrician ko le aana. Mere room ka ceiling fan bahut awaaz kar rha hai. Ansh ki neend disturb hoti hai.
Angad - Ji Bhabhi.
Soni went to look after him but soon came out of the room searching for the network as she was in some interesting conversation with her friend. This was noticed by Pritam, who came out  to switch off the lights outside of his room.
Pritam-ye aajkal k youngsters, commitment naam ki cheez hi nahi hai, mobile k aagey inhe kuch dikhta hi nahi, Ansh ko akela chod diya hai room mein.
Main jaakar dekhta hu, vaise bhi subah se Ansh   ko dekha bhi nahi hai. He quickly came down and saw him lying peacefully in his cradle,through the window. He thought to stay there till someone comes in the room but was shocked to see Amrita, who out of nowhere suddenly appears right in front of him.
Amrita - Aap yhan kya kar rahe hain?
Pritam - kuch nahi bas main uper jaa raha tha toh dekha ki Ansh akela so raha hai. Kisi ko har waqt uske saath hona chahiye,chota hai abhi.
Amrita - ye Soni kahan gyi, maine kaha tha usey Ansh k paas rehne ko. Soni...... Soni....
Soni-ji bhabhi...
Amrita - Ansh ko akela chod kar kaha  chali gyi thi?
Soni(bit scared) - vo bhabhi phone...... Network, showing her phone.
Amrita-kya Soni, thodi der baad bhi toh jaa skti thi na. Aur haan aap, ainda se aisa nahi hoga, aapko pareshaan honey ki zaroorat nahi,she said looking at Pritam.
Pritam - Ji main toh bas aapki madad kar raha tha or ye kamre me awaaz kaisi hai.... he tried to continue , but Ansh got up and started crying. Amrita ran towards him but before she could reach him, the ceiling fan, leaving sparks and fumes behind, crashed into the cradle.

Anshhhh....... He screamed getting up on his bed drenched in sweat. He looked around to find Amit sleeping peacefully beside him. He was relieved that it was just a nightmare, he immediately got up from his bed careful not to disturb Amit, began to walk slowly towards the door. Few moments later, he was standing outside her room's window. It was slightly open, from where he can see Amrita, holding Ansh in her hand, was  talking to Karan's portrait.
He smiled thinking that Ansh is safe. He stood there and was adoring him when Amrita began to speak to Karan's portrait.
Amrita-Ye dekho Karan, tumse kaun milne aaya hai? (showing him their baby.)
Humara beta Ansh..... pausing a bit,tumhara Ansh. Dekho kitna pyaara hai na?
Bilkul tumhare jaisa hai.
Jaante ho, Iski aankhon mein dekhti hu,toh vhi sukoon dikhta hai jo kabhi tumhari aankhon me basta tha.
Iski mehak mujhe, tumhare yahin aas paas honey ka ehaas dilati rhti hai.
Iske  dil mein mujhe tumhari dhadkaney sunayi deti hain mere Raanjhe.
Iski pyaari si muskaan mein tumhe khilkhilate hue dekhti hun.. She hugged him tightly and kissed his forehead.
Ek aurat ka jeevan sahi mayno mein tabhi poora hota hai jab vo Maa banti hai.
Maa ban na  ek aisa ehsaas hota hai jiski khoobsoorti ko bayan karne k liye shayad shabd hi nahi bane hai is duniya mein.
Kaash, aaj  ye pal hum saath mein jee rahe hotey to main tumhe ye bata paati ki.....
A tear escaped from her eye and she  catch it on her finger.
Amrita(looking at her finger) - Kyu aaye meri aankh se bahar. Dekho tumne mere Karan ji ko bhi upset  kar diya. Jaante the na vo meri aakhon mein aasu nahi dekh sakte. Kyu aaye phir?
Pritam smiled at this.Ye Madam jasoos hi ho sakti hain, jo apne aasuon ko bhi daant sakti  hain.
Suddenly she turned around and found him staring her.
Amrita - Aap, is waqt, yhan?
Pritam - Vo main aa.. aaa. Ansh ko dekhne  aaya tha, uske roney ki awaaz sunayi  di toh khud ko rok nahi paya.
Amrita - par Ansh toh roya hi nahi, aapne kaise sun li uske rone ki awaaz?
Pritam - Aa... Shyd veham hoga mera.
Amrita-Ye kya baat hui, Or aap
Amit ko akele kaise chodkar aa gye? Ansh rota bhi toh hum sab hai yhan, Amit uper akela hai. Ab jldi se  jaiye Amit k paas,she scolded him.
Pritam - Arey arey main jaa rha hun.Or ek baat btaiye zara, Aap sabke saath toh aise pesh nahi aati, sirf mere saath hi koi special connection hai aapka?
Amrita-kya matlab hai aapka?
Pritam - Aaa voo... mera matlab tha ki humara connection toh sirf kiraedaar or makan malkin ka hai. . Or... Aaa aisa kaun sa makan malik hai jo apne kiraedaar ko daanta rehta hai jis tarah aap daanti hain,he uttered, unable to find words. But his mind was speaking something else.
(in his mind) Sach toh ye hai ki humare beech kuch toh rishta hai, shyd dard ka,jo dheere dheere naye ehsaason ki shakl le raha hai. Main in Badaltey ehsaason ko apnane laga hun par aap toh abhi bhi Karan ki yaadon se pare kuch sochna hi nahi chahti. Mujhe intzaar rahega us pal ka jab aap bhi purane rishton ki chadar odhe nayi muskurati zindagi ka swagat karengi. Duniya ki saari khushiyaan aapke kadmon me bicha doonga, vaada hai mera.

She was silent when again he spoke up, Jawab ache se sochkar bata dijiyega, intzaar rahega mujhe. Good night.
Amrita-Koi connection nahi hai humare beech. Hum dono dard k raastey par saath chalne waale vo musafir hain jinki manzilein alag alag hain. Khair chodiye ye sab, dard ki dastaan chedenge toh poori raat bhi kam padh jyegi. Amit k paas jaiye, agar vo jaag gya to aapko vhan na dekhkar ghabra jyega. Aur vo toh bol bhi....... Sorry.
Pritam - It's OK. Main chalta hoon.
Amrita - agar aapko koi aitraaz na ho toh ek baat poochu?
Pritam - ji puchiye.
Amrita - Aisa kya hua tha Amit k saath jo usne apni awaaz kho di?
Pritam(in his mind) - vo ek hadsa nahi sochi samjhi saazish thi, aur ek na ek din iski teh tak pahuchkar hi rahunga main.
Water park ghumaaney le gya tha main usey. Bahut khush tha us din mera bacha. Par kisey pta tha kismat chand minton mein meri saari khushiyan mujhse cheen legi. He was getting emotional but continued, Pyaas lagi thi usey, paani lene gya tha main. Do minute, sirf do minute mein vapas aaya tha par tab tak sab kuch khatam ho chuka tha. Khoon se lathpath padha tha swimming pool mein. Kab, kaise gira kisi ne nahi dekha tha.Doctors ne kisi tarah bacha liya par gehri chot ki vajah se  vocal cords damage ho gye or Amit apni awaaz kho baitha. Sab meri galti thi, mujhe usey akela nahi chodna chahiye tha. Kitni takleef hui hogi usey, ye sochkar hi ruh kaap jaati hai meri. His eyes were filled with tears of guilt and pain.
Amrita - I am sorry, main aapko hurt nahi krna chahti thi.....
He didn't hear a word and like a lifeless soul he was ascending the steps.
Ansh, dekho na mumma ne kya kar diya, Pritam uncle ko upset kar diya. Kitni khushi se milne aaye they aapse or maine unke zakhmon ko taaza kar diya. Don't worry, kal mumma sab thik kar degi. Aur aapke Pritam uncle ki saari khushiyan phir se vapas aa jyengi. Hai na Ansh. And the little one smiled as if wishing good luck to his mother.
Dadaji, who witnessed them sharing their  pains, thought to himself,
  Rab ji, tere khel bade hi nirale hain, lagta hai kismat  in do adhure panno ko milakar ek naya adhyaye likhna chahti hai.

Precap - Hi m Devika
Amrita bhabhi ye aapka kirayedaar toh kaafi dashing hai. Kuch toh baat hai isme.
Amrita - jis kaam k liye yhan aayi ho, us par focus karogi toh better hoga.

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Posted: 2 years ago
#45

Great update but dream and reality was bit confusing, took time to understood it

already waiting for next update that too long one please..

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Posted: 2 years ago
#46

Originally posted by: Anindita91


My replies are in maroon


P.S. I might be late in commenting but be sure that I will comment. I love to comment in details, that why it takes me 35-40 minutes and sometimes 45 minutes at a stretch to write. That's why I wait for the time when I can freely be able to write. 

I read the chapter as soon as I notice it's up. But I comment later for a reason. Don't mind please 😳

Do give us an update soon 😳

 


First of all m really sorry for replying so late for the above post.

Thank you so much Avi 

It's so kind of you to say this. 

And trust me it means a lot to me. 

Thank you so much once again dear


U don't need to thank me every time, actually I should be the one thanking you, coz its because of your encouragement, I reached this far, otherwise I toh had planned only 3 to 4 parts for the story but somehow managed this much and I feel its some achievement for me. So a biggggg...... Thanq to you.

Yes, so very true. And I am eagerly waiting for that to happen. 
This will happen soon.
Pritam-Nikita's love story is really, really beautiful 
Thanks once again for appreciating this part of the story.

Yeah, that's a great approach and so well he have raised his son 

And you are shaping Amit's character so beautifully dear. He is a gem of a person just like his father 


Like father, like son.
Every good tree maketh good fruits.” – William Langland

Yes, yes, so true. After that one episode we are not getting anymore of Pritam in uniform waala episodes. 

Now I think again we might get to see when his secret will come out in front of the Sakhuja's. I am sooo waiting to see him in his uniform again 


Yes, his scenes in uniform are gonna be fire. Can't wait more now.However, even in his current look, he rocks.

Again your words Avi 🙏🙏🙏

I can't even express how much respect I have for you. You have such a huge amount of wisdom within you, it shows in the way you talk. Seriously, immense respect and gratitude I feel that I could come around a person like you. You are really a sweetheart 🙏🙏🙏


I don't think so m worth these words. It's all your goodness and pure heart that u see me as such a person. Every person has shades. I too have and even I am flawed. Honestly, l behave accordingly how people behave with me. Vese toh I am peace loving person but if I am targeted without any reason, I know how to rightly give back. I am telling you all this coz I want you to know the real me. And yes,
You too are a sweetest person,  I came across through the forum.

Awww, thank you so much. 

Your story it worth it dear 


❤️❤️

P.S. I might be late in commenting but be sure that I will comment. I love to comment in details, that why it takes me 35-40 minutes and sometimes 45 minutes at a stretch to write. That's why I wait for the time when I can freely be able to write. 

I read the chapter as soon as I notice it's up. But I comment later for a reason. Don't mind please

Don't worry about this as your comments are always worth a wait. ❤️

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Posted: 2 years ago
#47

Originally posted by: kayinat

Great update but dream and reality was bit confusing, took time to understood it

already waiting for next update that too long one please..

Thanks for commenting once again and as for confusion thing, I'll put more efforts to improve my writing skills. 

Will try to update soon with some more content than this one. 😊

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Posted: 2 years ago
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Waiting for it 😊

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Posted: 2 years ago
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Originally posted by: Avijay

M extremely sorry Anindita for not updating the story. I was  very busy with some personal matter that needed my complete attention. I hope you understand. Really very sorry. But I will update very soon. 


No need to apologize dear. I understand. In fact I should say sorry to you as I am late in commenting. I wasn't well that's why I got late. Extremely sorry for that.  

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Oh, what a start 🤣

Bua ji and Phupha ji are fun in themselves. The mere mention of them cracks me up, especially Phupha ji's dancing of his belt is something that floats before my eyes. 🤣

He is really funny 😆


Pritam (while cleaning) - Ye myself Pammiji or machis lekar ghoomney waale phoophaji phir aa gye . Lagta hai Sakhuja house k chakkar kaatna inka part time job hai. Khair mujhe kya.


Pritam's description about them is so apt 🤣

Kudos to you for writing this line 👏👍🏼⭐️❤️

It's really so apt.


Pammi-Haan haan sab thik hai ji, vo toh hum inke MLA dost k bete ki sagai mein gye the, toh socha vapsi mein Ansh se milte hue chalein. Kahan hai humara Rajkumar?


Hey Bhagwan, Bua ji and her showing off 😆

She will never change, especially Phupha ji, he is toh is the king of showing off. 😛😆


Pritam-ye aajkal k youngsters, commitment naam ki cheez hi nahi hai, mobile k aagey inhe kuch dikhta hi nahi, Ansh ko akela chod diya hai room mein.


Oh, this is so true. There are some youngsters like that. No commitment, nothing. Only they understand is their phone.  


Awww, Pritam is such a sweetheart. He came down to look after Ansh. He already loves him so much ❤️❤️


It's good that Amrita chided Soni, she needed that scolding. 🤪


Anshhhh....... He screamed getting up on his bed drenched in sweat.


Oh my God, it was all a dream, thank God. But I am so glad that Pritam saw this dream. It shows how much he loves this family, especially Amrita and Ansh. How much he cares for them. His safety is there in the back of his mind that's why he is seeing such dreams. ❤️❤️❤️

(It's said that what we think (consciously/subconsciously) we normally see something like that in our dreams.)


How much this man must love and care for Ansh that he had to go down to check whether Ansh is fine or not ❤️

He seriously is a gem of a person, no doubt there. ❤️❤️❤️

He already is a great father and he will definitely be a great husband too. I am so waiting for them to become a family (AmriTam, Amit and Ansh) ❤️


The part where Amrita is talking with Karan is extremely beautiful. Kudos to you as a writer for writing such beautiful lines. 👏👍🏼⭐️❤️

Those lines just touched my heart. ❤️❤️❤️

Seriously, just amazing 👏👍🏼❤️


Amrita(looking at her finger) - Kyu aaye meri aankh se bahar. Dekho tumne mere Karan ji ko bhi upset  kar diya. Jaante the na vo meri aakhon mein aasu nahi dekh sakte. Kyu aaye phir?

Pritam smiled at this.Ye Madam jasoos hi ho sakti hain, jo apne aasuon ko bhi daant sakti  hain.


Awww, this is so true. 😆

Only Amrita can scold her teardrop 😛😆

But most of her scolding is always reserved for our Pritam 😆😛❤️


Pritam - Vo main aa.. aaa. Ansh ko dekhne  aaya tha, uske roney ki awaaz sunayi  di toh khud ko rok nahi paya.


Oh, oh, Pritam Pyaare ji, aapne Madam Jasoos se jhoot mat bolo, pakde jaoge. Pehle bhi ekbar pakde gaye the ji. She knows very well you can't lie. 😎😈


Amrita-Ye kya baat hui, Or aap

Amit ko akele kaise chodkar aa gye? Ansh rota bhi toh hum sab hai yhan, Amit uper akela hai. Ab jldi se  jaiye Amit k paas,she scolded him.


And here it comes. The scolding 🤣


Pritam - Arey arey main jaa rha hun.Or ek baat btaiye zara, Aap sabke saath toh aise pesh nahi aati, sirf mere saath hi koi special connection hai aapka?


Bravo, Pritam Pyaare, bravo. Ask her these type of questions so that she can realize that she has started feeling something for you. 

Though she will take time to realize that unfortunately, but I will keep waiting for that to happen so that they all can become a family. 😳❤️


Pritam - Aaa voo... mera matlab tha ki humara connection toh sirf kiraedaar or makan malkin ka hai. . Or... Aaa aisa kaun sa makan malik hai jo apne kiraedaar ko daanta rehta hai jis tarah aap daanti hain,he uttered, unable to find words. But his mind was speaking something else.

(in his mind) Sach toh ye hai ki humare beech kuch toh rishta hai, shyd dard ka,jo dheere dheere naye ehsaason ki shakl le raha hai. Main in Badaltey ehsaason ko apnane laga hun par aap toh abhi bhi Karan ki yaadon se pare kuch sochna hi nahi chahti. Mujhe intzaar rahega us pal ka jab aap bhi purane rishton ki chadar odhe nayi muskurati zindagi ka swagat karengi. Duniya ki saari khushiyaan aapke kadmon me bicha doonga, vaada hai mera.


Oh my God, FINALLY, finally he accepted his feelings. 🥳

This is the first time he accepted his feelings. He is no more in denial. I am soooooo happy, I can't even express how much happy I am 🥳❤️

And the lines Avi, hat's off. Such beautifully written lines. 👏👍🏼⭐️❤️

I just loved how you even included the title of this story into these lines ❤️❤️❤️

Really, really, really loved these lines. It have so much serenity and beauty in it. Really kudos to you for these lines 👏👍🏼❤️ 

I love the fact that Pritam respects Amrita's feelings so much. How much he understands her. His love is so much selfless and pure. Just how he can wait for her to realise and feel for him. He is not at all in hurry or pushing her in any way. That's the best thing about this man. I will repeat myself again but he seriously is a gem of a person ❤️❤️❤️


Amrita-Koi connection nahi hai humare beech. Hum dono dard k raastey par saath chalne waale vo musafir hain jinki manzilein alag alag hain. Khair chodiye ye sab, dard ki dastaan chedenge toh poori raat bhi kam padh jyegi. Amit k paas jaiye, agar vo jaag gya to aapko vhan na dekhkar ghabra jyega. Aur vo toh bol bhi....... Sorry.


Madam Jasoos ji, itni jaldi decide mat kijiye ki koi connection hi nahi hai. Connection toh hai, baas aap samajh nahi paa rahi hai, but ekdin zaroor samjhengi aur woh din bohot zald aayega ❤️


Pritam(in his mind) - vo ek hadsa nahi sochi samjhi saazish thi, aur ek na ek din iski teh tak pahuchkar hi rahunga main.


Is Vishakha behind all these? If she is the one then it's too bad. I mean come on he is her nephew. But even if it's her that will not be something unusual considering it's Vishakha 🤔🤪

Hatred can make people blind after all 


My God, what not the poor baby had to go through and being his father how much pain must Pritam had gone through in his past. 😭🥺💔

Why would Vishakha do something like this to her nephew? 

(I am assuming it's her, no one can be this heartless as her after all 🤔)


Poor baby, how much painful his life is, he lost is mother at such a tender age, his voice at a horrific accident, had to stay at a care home away from his family. 😭💔🥺

I feel so, so, so bad for this baby. My heart goes out to him. I want to hug the baby so tightly 🤗❤️

He seriously deserves all the love in the world. I am soooo glad that he is now at the Sakhuja house. ❤️❤️❤️


Ansh, dekho na mumma ne kya kar diya, Pritam uncle ko upset kar diya. Kitni khushi se milne aaye they aapse or maine unke zakhmon ko taaza kar diya. Don't worry, kal mumma sab thik kar degi. Aur aapke Pritam uncle ki saari khushiyan phir se vapas aa jyengi. Hai na Ansh. And the little one smiled as if wishing good luck to his mother.


Awww, this is so cute. I am now eagerly waiting to know how Amrita will lift Pritam's mood ❤️❤️


But the last line of this chapter 


Dadaji, who witnessed them sharing their  pains, thought to himself,

  Rab ji, tere khel bade hi nirale hain, lagta hai kismat  in do adhure panno ko milakar ek naya adhyaye likhna chahti hai.


Dadaji understood their bonding, oh my God, he could see something which Amrita still haven't realised. I am so happy. When the time comes he will be with our AmriTam supporting them. I am soooo happy 


And the precap, I am now so eagerly going to wait for the next part, jealous Amrita, are we going to get a jealous Amrita? ❤️


Seriously, eagerly waiting for the next part. Please update soon 😳


P.S. I couldn't read what I wrote, please ignore the mistakes.