Wow! I am literally in love with your story. I regret not finding this before. Anyways first of all kudos to me for reading a 150 page thread in 20 days. That's like 7 pages each day...wow! Second of all I am commenting from beginning to end so this will surely be long.
I loved your portrayal of Kranti's character. If one tries, they can see her pov as well. Throughout the story you have slowly build up the insecurities...they didn't just pop up in one night which is quite realistic. I was mad at her but the next second I felt sorry for her. Over all, you did an awesome job as a writer.
Man, the initial chapters with their blooming love were so cute. Siya and Ram fell in love hard and fast but for the rest it was a gradual thing. Shatru and Shruti started as friends while Lakshmila had their usual fighting and teasing. And Bharat and Mandavi..um..let's not. My favourite thing during this time- Urrrrr-mila!
The wedding (s) was full blast.
And the first honeymoon was really cute. It's kinda weird but although it was SiRa's honeymoon I enjoyed ManRat moments more. The bali honeymoon was a trip to remember. With Ravan and Manda coming in the chapters here and there, the suspense was really "edge of the seat excitement"
My favourite track has to be when everyone thought Siya was pregnant. Do I even need to say anything else. It was the most wholesome hilarious thing.
We saw a lot of birthdays and anniversaries so yeah.
Ram's birthday: It was the best. I was smiling like an idiot. Everyone's gift was so thoughtful. Especially Siya's. Glimpses of Ram's childhood had me almost crying. And the friends were a nice touch. Enacting teachers and talking about crushes..just great.
Urmila's birthday: AHHHH! My heart. That moment when she just ran into his arms. And the much improved shayari. Lakshmila are so precious..they merely being together gave me so much happiness.
Sita's birthday: Their romance had my cheeks heating up. Loved the efforts made by their siblings. Overall really cute.
Shruti's birthday: Just so sweet and innocent. Like our Shruti.
But my favourite has to be...
...SiRa's Anniversary: Omg! Their intense love had me blushing so hard. We all love a bold and naughty Ram. And Lakshman gifting them a house made me go AWWWWWW. The surprise with all the siblings was really heart warming.
And the part were Manvi and Shruti pacify their husbands by their romance was just great. Throughout the story Sumitra has been such a rockstar. Be it showing the mirror to Kranti, Shutting Mandira, being the sweetest most understanding person or stopping Bharat from leaving the house. Sumitra is just a great character.
Everyone seems to have already guessed who the 'mystery girl' is Idk man, gives me bad vibes.
The way you use songs in between is really amazing. Gives me movie type feels. As this is a mordern ff, I had expected a lot of mature stuff. But gladly you maintain a decency while writing such scene. Like it feels so cute and hot.
One thing that I enjoyed in here and I was not expecting I would enjoy so much was... reading other people's comments. Man your readers are as talented as you. I remember there is this girl with really great shayari. And oh..that one with the wildest imagination. Lakshman said dream 11 pe team something. Awesome!
And incase you didn't recognize me.. it's @lakshmila4ardi from wattpad.
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