MAKING THE FIRST MOVE - a naked soul : JABIR FF - COMPLETED - Page 9

No new chapter Tanu? :( missing Ek Bhram and more so our JaBir 😭

Waiting for an update girl ❤️

Originally posted by: Honey_berries

No new chapter Tanu? :( missing Ek Bhram and more so our JaBir 😭

Waiting for an update girl ❤️

See the first post .... Link is there..... I have updated only because there is no show😥😥😥 I thought people might be sad just like....so even though I am busy I still tried to update.....see the naked man's confession.... 

Also in case when this forum will be shut off .... You have to keep reading me on Wattpad....🤔😏🙄ok..... I am going to end this ff soon....but all have to read it till end ..

Originally posted by: Tanu221

                OBSCENE THOUGHTS AND A FLASHBACK

 

Kabir walked into the kitchen to have some water.

 

He took a sip and turned to find her entering the kitchen.

 

 

She didn't saw him.

She was busy recovering the sprawled pallu of her saree,

She then bring it all in the front to tug it in her waist.

 

Kabir eyes automatically followed her hands and glued to the white skin - exposed on side of waist.

 

When her fingers touched her own skin –  kabir’s thoughts clouded.

 

He cerebrates the possibility of having his fingers  - there  -  instead of hers.

 

 

What if……………

his thoughts trailed off and he started floating towards her.

 

Because the floor was moving, running beneath his feet.

He is yet to understand the reason for diminishing distance.

He just knew that he didn’t move.

Why would he ?  right ?

 

 

So it wasn't his responsibility when he found Pooja staring at him in surprise the next second.

 

 

He was moving in a trance when his shoes slipped over the smooth tile.

 

He could have helped himself - holding the kitchen slab –

 

But

 

He let the gravity do the honor.

 

 

Knowing that his dive will be a golden opportunity to be closer to her.

 

So next moment he found himself hanging by his shirt and a hovering Pooja surprisingly eyeing him.

 

Regaining balance again he noticed his water spilled  over her.

 

Pooja was stroking the water off her.

 

 

Before his horse sense can stop him  -  kabir stepped forward.

 

 

“let me help you………….”

 

 

He heard someone saying.

 

He swear he didn't say that.

 

And

 

Yet Pooja was staring at him…………… like that.

 

 

And then just like his mouth was working on its own -    his hand followed the same course.

 

He tried to rub off the water but felt more like massaging it.

 

 

He grant his hand to linger for more than necessary.

 

Occupying more space than vital.

Her –soft –silky – smooth –glowing – blooming – ALMOST EDIBLE skin.

 

 

He felt her going stiff.

 

His eyes travel from her waist to her face in slow motion.

 

Taking in every scenery on its way.

 

 

She let out a whimper which sounded more like a moan.

She had her eyes closed.

 

 

Her moan rouse kabir’s concealed expertise into action.

 

 

His fingers started playing piano over her bare skin.

 

His Every moment planted a motley expression on her face.

 

He reveled in the canvas of emoticon  – mesmerized  –  spell bounded.

 

 

Her face was already crimson red and turning a new and darker shade with every passing second.

 

 

He wished the time would stop.

He wished to stand there forever.

He wished she will never open her eyes.

He wished to see every expression she possess.

Every expression prompted by him.

 

 

Then she turned her face to side.

Her chest was moving up and down heavily.

 

 

And then

 

 

Then – she did something –

 

 

Something that would change his life forever.

 

 

He will never be same again.

 

 

He will never be that decent innocent and controlled kabir again.

 

 

She ………..

 

 

She was……

 

 

She bit her lower lip.

 

 

Kabir feel hot and and cold at the same time.

 

 

Every cell in strain.

 

He was searing with desire.

 

An impulse.

 

To touch her

 

And touch her some more.

 

To grasp her.

 

 

 

His hands swing upwards.

 

He was going to touch her face.

 

All reasoning screeching otherwise.

 

But his hands refused to register.

 

 

Just before he could touch her chin.

She opened her eyes.

 

 

And her face started to change.

 

 

A gala of expressions.

 

 

He studied each one.

 

Quizzical

Slack jaw

Sullen

Taut

Pleading

Thoughtful …..

.

.

.

.

.

.

.

.

And then it went…….

Vacant

 

She straighten up and gave a brooding smile.

 

 

“ hey kabir! do you need anything  -  I am making coffee wou - ”

 

 

She couldn't finish.

 

He retreated his hand which was hanging in the air just near her jawline.

 

Then he walked past her at a brisk speed.

 

 

It was bravest and wisest decision of his life.

To run away.

 

 

He didn’t let himself think any further and declared to himself

 

 

“keep your distance from her.”

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i am not getting much response. but i still tried this.

let me know.

happy reading people.

I wish he reacted to his impulses and desire. Miss this in the show. Please more mature 😳 scenes. 🥺 

Originally posted by: Milalal27

I wish he reacted to his impulses and desire. Miss this in the show. Please more mature 😳 scenes. 🥺 

hehehe.........okay may be one  day i do  a little os on more mature stuff....will pm you....

and thanxxxx for commenting..........i am ending this ff due to lack of responce.........🤔

I understand your decision to end this FF. 😭

I loved it rereading it since the show ended. ☺️

On Wattpad i like reading your stories. Didn't know it existed the app.

Originally posted by: Milalal27

I understand your decision to end this FF. 😭

I loved it rereading it since the show ended. ☺️

On Wattpad i like reading your stories. Didn't know it existed the app.

Thank you.....🙃🙃😊honestly I more sad than anyone about show as well my ff🙄☹️I had a great response in beginning...🌝😇...but it died and I didn't even get criticism as to why....🤔😕😟..anyways. i am glad atleast people like some of what I wrote.🙃😬

I am thank ful for that😘☺️🙃. By the way.....did you read naked man's confession.... 😁😃I tried a little kissing scene there....that's the most mature content I wrote😀 so far😅😂

I hope you liked it😀

Loved your stories, didn't miss 1. Naked was

Originally posted by: Milalal27

Loved your stories, didn't miss 1. Naked was

I ALSO GET SAME RESPONSE FOR ADIYA SS😎.  it was more inclined to romance though☺️

i hope you like that too 🤗 - https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/topic/4992813  

https://www.wattpad.com/779311284-cl-amour-for-kiss-the-boring-party try this and this also -

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/topic/4842926😈😃

https://www.wattpad.com/779508709-my-savage-wife-and-me-game-over-or-game-start

thank you very much.

🤗🤗

I have been reading all the chapters and loving it..but i was so busy professionally and uper se i was down with dengue..everything was a mess.. i am still recovering from the physical and mental stress i had gone through the last couple of days...my sincere apologies i couldnt give you a feed back..All i can say is in between all these mess, reading your chapters is what gave me a little pleasure.. thank you for that.

And i understand what you might be be feeling as a writer because of lack of responses...you should have written on couples who have a lot of hype..Jabir stories have very limited readers..Hence you wont be getting enough response.. but your writing deserves much much much appreciation and you will get the deserved appreciation only if you write fanfics in a more popular forum..when i see the quality of yoyr writing and the lack of response it even makes my heart upset.

And discontinuing the story..i wont even request you to continue because it will be an injustice when you do so much hard work without getting the deserved appreciation.

Lastly i would like to say you are a very talented writer...never give up writing.