INTENSE. This is what I would say about this story.
An impulsive decision which was taken in guilt by him without considering her opinion, which gave immense pain to both of them equally. Tired of fighting fate, and then the love, and now the pain. I loved the confession and the ending.
Originally posted by: .amigos.
OMG ANOTHER OS BY YOU! RESERVED😲
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WIST. Everytime I read something you write, I'm filled with such longing. idk what is it about your words? There's a certain, subtle agony there, a deeply rooted melancholy that elevates your words. All I want is more and more. Also, let me confess, I'm a glutton for confrontational scenes like this. I just love two people standing together and venting their hearts out. That cleansing, that catharsis, that peak of human emotions and ferocity. Oh my god, I absolutely loved it.
Your beginning para was so wonderfully described, omg.
"The garden bloomed in full glory with its buds blossoming, flowers erupting in beautiful hues adding splashes of varied colour, bees buzzing, pollen floating like magical dust, and grasses whispering into the air while softly dancing in perfect unison."
Beautiful and so picturesque. And the ensuing paragraph hints at mystery and misery and intrigues you so much. Their shared anguish, that little moment where he's so cold to her really gets to you. You understand the pain, and each word drives home their connection, and everything they've gone through. I love how they both come clean and hold onto whatever is between them. AAH THE LAST LINES ARE LOVE OH MY GOD! That bit where they come together, I could literally imagine him tracing those drops on her lips yikes☺️ THE PASSION WAS SO WELL DELIVERED. PLEASE WRITE MORE!
“And so being young
and dipped in folly,
I fell in love
with melancholy.”
^ I think EA Poe's lines sum it up. I've been in love with melancholy since long. The misanthropy somehow strengthens the bond. 😆
And I believe this melancholic madness is something that regularly creeps into my writings. In a way it's also a source of motivation.
Thank you for being so generous with your words. ❤️
I was apprehensive regarding the reception of the opening para and the last one describing their kiss. Your appreciation makes me believe I've fared well.
Also, I had recently posted another one-shot.
Thank you so much! 😊Originally posted by: Chahat_A_Doshi
It was simply beautiful.
They have the same pain inside them but never shared it maybe thought they weren't supposed to. Both were suffering. If only they had communicated things would have been easy.
One thing I really don't get is why does the man think he can take decisions for his partner. She is not just his wife she is the mother of his child too. They are a family one day he says marry me and on another i want to free you. She should be the one to make that decision.
Loved it to the core. Loved the confrontation, confession and there after. 😊
Thanks a lot, Saps! 🤗Originally posted by: saps.156
It has a different ring to it.
Oh u need not have mentioned my name at all.🤗
This forced confession due to circumstances is quite the contrary one to an expected one.
But that brings out the best in PreRish. Always expect the unexpected.
It was important to mention you as I was going nowhere with it.
I like it when certain lines are quoted like this.Originally posted by: saps.156
My fav lines....
But she was certain of one thing, that she wasn’t a slave to his impetuous whims.
. He wore a mask with such a proficiency that it almost blended with his face, leaving zilch traces of the merger
His words made her feel weighted down by an invisible burden, and she failed to voice the pain it caused..
Miserable and repentant, they stared deep into each other’s eyes, thinking this confession would have brought immense joy in a parallel universe
Thanks a lot, Shin! 🤗Originally posted by: shin-chan
“I’m tired of broken hearts and relationships. I’m sick of being dejected and sorrowful with no positive outlook towards life. I’m just…tired now!” she said in a deadpan manner and sat on the nearby bench.
💔
You have put it in simple words but can feel for her.
Keep'em coming Shruti 🤗
PS: So Saps gave her inputs. But she wont write. Hmm.
I'll pester Saps once she gets free next month. 😆
Sure. 😆Originally posted by: MisHumptyDumpty
Shrutiiiii pakka promise main Tuesday ko edit karke dungi. 🙈🙈🙈
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