Oh my god !!
What a wonderful piece of writing with great imagination .. First of all take a bow girl your story took me to a different world where I was very clearly and strongly was feeling Samaina's condition
When you mentioned sameer was came with his nanu to see a girl and how he was spellbound seeing a girl draped in simple yellow colour saari I assumed this os to be a very sweet and simple arranged marriage os but then sunaina's entry proved mW wrong and how !! ๐ this was one of those rare stories keeps you on edge throughout till the ending
Poor naina was literally living in a hell where their was nobody whom she could call as her family they all were so brutal and inhuman towards her .. My heart broke seeing her miserable state where she was getting punished for no reason Ohbai reminded me of brutal saas of old Hindi films and I was imagining her as one
I possible I fell in love with sameer Even more reading this os .. This boy fell in love with her at the mere first sight and was ready to move mountains to have her in his life .. His love is what we say as " true love " the little moment of happiness he felt when she showed care for his life by asking him to leave .. It was so beautiful his determination didn't lessened a bit seeing the inhuman sight in front of his eyes rather he felt the urgent need of taking hwe with him and protecting her
Even his failed attempts didn't made him give up on her .. I became so emotional reading everyday he used to come and wait for her in the garden if this is not selfless love than I don't know what is my happiness knew no bounds when she finally said yes to showed the courage of leaving and breaking all the ties and go with him to start a new life with him
A story like this is quite difficult to handle as it can easily go overboard but you handelled it very well and the beautiful ending made the story " complete " this story is indeed out of the box very well deserve to win
I had read the story in the contest thread but didn't knew that it's by you .. Congratulations for winning and you are very good at bribing ๐ now eagerly waiting for Monday ๐
Love
Laalchi reader
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