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#31

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Posted: 5 years ago
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Waiting for ur ud and new os
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#33
Part 4

Aladdin - Vaise Nachidii... Hum jaa kaha rahe hai... Aur tume vo Talwaar kyu chahiye... 

Yasmine was quite thinking for answer... She cannot tell the truth to Aladdin... 

Aladdin - Nachidii!!!! 

Aladdin literally shook her... Yasmine came out of her conflict going on in mind... 

Yasmine - haan.. V.. Vo kalechor... Hume uss Talwaar ki zaroorat hai... Kyoki hum uski ekdam hu ba hu nakal banakar kalebazaar me  bech sake... 
Yasmine made the worst and stupid reason she could think off... For Aladdin it was still difficult to digest this lamest reason... 

Yasmine - Vo sab chodo...abhi Akbar mia ke paas jaa rahe hai... 

Aladdin - Vo mushoor Tala aur Tijori banane waale Akbar mia... 

Yasmine - haan!!! Mujhe pata chala hai ki jis tijori mein shahi talwaar ko rakha gaya tha usse Akbar mia ne hi banaya tha... Aur beshak uss chor ke paas uss taale ki chaabi thi... Kyoki tijori par koi zabardasti karne ke nishaan nahi the... 

Aladdin - yeh tumhe kaise pata... 

Yasmine - humne khud tafteesh ki hai... 

Aladdin - tumne!!!! 

Yasmine - mera matlab humne aisa suna hai ki kotwaal ji tafteesh ki hai...

Yasmine - yeh lo bas pahuch gaye kalechor... 

Suddenly Aladdin hold her hand and pulled her in a narrow space between the walls... 

Yasmine was about to scream when suddenly Aladdin hugged her and dragged her behind the curtains... 
Yasmine could hear his heartbeat... As if each beat says her name... Aladdin soon release his hold.. Yasmine strongly pushed her away.. And they both tremble down... Aladdin fall on Yasmine and she was Trapped between him and ground... 
Yasmine's eyes were glittering in moonlight...and  Aladdin was lost in them... But soon Yasmine realized that they were too close and tried to distract herself from Aladdin's charming face... 

Yasmine - kalechor!!!

Yasmine pushed him away, he rolled downo on ground and she got up... 

Yasmine - tumhe zara si bhi sharam nahi aati... Koi iss tarah... Achaanak se... 

Yasmine soon lack words and was blushing with little redness on her cheeks... Aladdin noticed this and decided to tease her... Aladdin came closure to her...

Yasmine - Kalechor.. Yeh kya kar rahe ho... 

Aladdin started coming more closer to her... Till she banged herself to the wall behind... 

Aladdin - haan main hoon besharam... Aur besharam log kya karte hai... Yeh toh tumhe pata hi hoga...

Aladdin looked at her petals like lips.. 

Yasmine nervously - Aladdin!!! 

For the first time Aladdin heard his name pronounced so beautifully... It was something magical for him...
Aladdin came closure to her lips... Yasmine soon closed her eyes... Aladdin noticed her reaction and decided to play his joker's card... 
Aladdin took a handkerchief which was stuck on her waist... And SNEEZED!!! 
Yasmine quickly opened her eyes when she heard that weird sound and was flushed at what he was doing... 

Yasmine - yeh kya kar raho ho tum... 

Aladdin - vohi jo besharam log karte hai... Doosro ka rumaal apni pyari aur khubsoorat naak ke liye istemaal karna... 

Aladdin laughed at her flushed face and yasmine was full of anger as she was definitely expecting something else... 

Yasmine snapped his leg hard... 

Aladdin - Nachidii!!! Ouch...kitni jor se maara!!! 

Yasmine - yeh tumhaare iss sade se mazaak ke liye... Hum jaa rahe hai Akbar mia ke paas tumhe aana ho toh aana... Varna hum akele mil lenge unse... 

Aladdin - sana ruko!!! Mazaak alag baat hai par hum abhi akbar mia ke paas nahi jaa sakte... 

Yasmine turned around - kyu??

Aladdin secretly showed her palace guards standing outside Akbar's shop... 

Aladdin - hum iss kale libaas me itni raat ko Akbar mia ke paas milne gaye toh yeh sainik hume  pahechaan lenge... Aur salaakho ke peeche dalwa denge... Par yeh log yaha pehraa kyu de rahe hai??? 

Yasmine - shaayad Akbar mia khub bhi shak ke daayre me hai isliye.. Un par nazar rakhi jaa rahi hogi... Par ab hum andar jayenge kaise?? 

Aladdin - aaj tak aisi koi musibat bani nahi jo kalechor ko uske mansoobo me kamiyaab hone se rok sake... Tum bas dekhte jao.. 

Aladdin took out some clothes from his bag...

Yasmine - yeh kya hai???

Aladdin - yeh kuch kapde   hai jo maine subah raphoo varwaane ke liye diye the par mere thaile (bag) me hi reh gaye hume bhes badalkar jaana hoga... 

Yasmine nodded in a positive manner

They soon changed there attire... 
Aladdin was wearing long achkan and used a thick mustache to look older... Yasmine was wearing a black burkha... With her beautiful eyes peeping from the narrow space...

Aladdin and Yasmine successfully entered Akbar mia's house... 

Akbar- Aap kon hai Janaab aur aapke saath yeh haseen, kamseen, naasuk... 

Aladdin could not tolerate a single word more for yasmine...

Alladin (in little bold and deeper voice) - Akbar Mia hum Mirza Janawaas baghdad me vyapaar ke silsile me aaye hai... aur yeh humaari mashooka Mahak hai... 

Aladdin slightly get hold over her waist... Yasmine quickly looked at him... But he ignored her looks... 

Akbar-Tashreef layiye mia... Itni raat ko kaise aana hua... 

Aladdin - ji mia... Hume ek tijori chahoye apna dhan rakhne ke liye... 

Akbar - ji mia... Mere paas bohot si tijoriya hai... Aapko kaisi chahiye... 

Aladdin - yeh sab toh mamuli tijoriya hai... Hume toh kuch mazboot... shaahi tijori chahiye... 

Akbar-ji hai na... Abhi abhi Rajmahal ke liye ek shaahi mazboot tijori banaayi thi... 

Akbar showed him the Tijori... 

Aladdin - aapne isse sirf Rajmahal ko becha hai ya phir kisi aur ko bhi... 

Akbar- aapko usse kya matlab... 

Akbar sensed something fishy and denied in one go... Aladdin tried to convince him

Soon yasmine took a pouch a 10, 000 asharfiya in front of him... 
Akbar being a greedy trader quickly got convinced and told them the truth... 

Akbar- ji bechi thi na... Mahal ke paharedaar Soheb Ali ko... Par pata nahi us jaise mamuli insaan ko iss badi tijori ka kya kaam... 

Aladdin - ji shukriya mia... Hum phir kabhi aakar tijori le lenge... 

Akbar was happy with his asharfiya and least concerned about them buying a tijori or not... 
They both quickly escaped his house... 

After few minutes of a silent walk... When they reach out of sight of guards... 

Aladdin - Nachidii!!! Tumhaare paas itni asharfiya kaha se aayi... 

Yasmine give him a devious grin... 

Aladdin - itni si khabar nikalvaane ke liye bohot badi rakam ada kar di tumne... Bechaari Tumhaari asharfiya... 

Aladdin made sad puppy face... But Yasmine smiled on him. Aladdin was confused at her behavior but he could understand or process anything in his mind.. Yasmine had pushed him and banged him on the wall... She leaned closure to him... Aladdin was shocked to see such kind of behavior from his Nachidii.. 

Aladdin - Nachidii!!! Yeh kya kar rahi ho...

Yasmine soon came more closure to his face... He was lost in her eyes and was about to kiss her... When she turned around... He was crashed to reality and was blank at her reaction.. 

Yasmine - paise ki bhook aksar logo ko andha kar deti hai... 

Yasmine showed Aladdin his bag which she secretly took during her act... Aladdin now understood the sudden behavior change.. 

Aladdin - kaalichorni!!! Mujhe Wapas karo mera thaila.. 

Yasmine turned it over... And there was a rainfall of coins... Aladdin realised that Nachidii knew that he had stolen the coins secretly from Akbar's pocket... 

Yasmine - tumhe kya laga mujhe pata nahi chalega... Tum kaalechor ho toh main bhi kaali chorni hoon... 

Aladdin laughed- tabhi toh pagalo jaise usse itni asharfiya de aayi... 

Aladdin soon started collecting the coins from ground and suddenly yasmine crushed one coin beneath her foot... 

Aladdin was stunned.. 

Aladdin - yeh asharfiya toh...

Yasmine - nakli hai!!! Vo ser hai toh hum savaser... 

Aladdin - maan gaye tumhe nachidi... 

Aladdin hugged tightly... 

Yasmine - Aladdin!!! 

Aladdin realised that he got too excited for the situation... 
They got apart and an awkward silence surrounded them...



That's it... I know, I told that its going to be the last part... But many of you told me to include more AlaSmine scenes to it so when I started writing... It again became too long so I have break it in parts... So I decided to extend it to few more parts😊... Hope you will enjoy reading this part and would be agreeing with my decision... πŸ˜³
Do like review and comment to tell me your take on this part...😊
Please pardon me for spelling and grammatical mistakes πŸ˜³
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Posted: 5 years ago
#34

Originally posted by: 1973deepak

Part 4

Aladdin - Vaise Nachidii... Hum jaa kaha rahe hai... Aur tume vo Talwaar kyu chahiye... 

Yasmine was quite thinking for answer... She cannot tell the truth to Aladdin... 

Aladdin - Nachidii!!!! 

Aladdin literally shook her... Yasmine came out of her conflict going on in mind... 

Yasmine - haan.. V.. Vo kalechor... Hume uss Talwaar ki zaroorat hai... Kyoki hum uski ekdam hu ba hu nakal banakar kalebazaar me  bech sake... 
Yasmine made the worst and stupid reason she could think off... For Aladdin it was still difficult to digest this lamest reason... 

Yasmine - Vo sab chodo...abhi Akbar mia ke paas jaa rahe hai... 

Aladdin - Vo mushoor Tala aur Tijori banane waale Akbar mia... 

Yasmine - haan!!! Mujhe pata chala hai ki jis tijori mein shahi talwaar ko rakha gaya tha usse Akbar mia ne hi banaya tha... Aur beshak uss chor ke paas uss taale ki chaabi thi... Kyoki tijori par koi zabardasti karne ke nishaan nahi the... 

Aladdin - yeh tumhe kaise pata... 

Yasmine - humne khud tafteesh ki hai... 

Aladdin - tumne!!!! 

Yasmine - mera matlab humne aisa suna hai ki kotwaal ji tafteesh ki hai...

Yasmine - yeh lo bas pahuch gaye kalechor... 

Suddenly Aladdin hold her hand and pulled her in a narrow space between the walls... 

Yasmine was about to scream when suddenly Aladdin hugged her and dragged her behind the curtains... 
Yasmine could hear his heartbeat... As if each beat says her name... Aladdin soon release his hold.. Yasmine strongly pushed her away.. And they both tremble down... Aladdin fall on Yasmine and she was Trapped between him and ground... 
Yasmine's eyes were glittering in moonlight...and  Aladdin was lost in them... But soon Yasmine realized that they were too close and tried to distract herself from Aladdin's charming face... 

Yasmine - kalechor!!!

Yasmine pushed him away, he rolled downo on ground and she got up... 

Yasmine - tumhe zara si bhi sharam nahi aati... Koi iss tarah... Achaanak se... 

Yasmine soon lack words and was blushing with little redness on her cheeks... Aladdin noticed this and decided to tease her... Aladdin came closure to her...

Yasmine - Kalechor.. Yeh kya kar rahe ho... 

Aladdin started coming more closer to her... Till she banged herself to the wall behind... 

Aladdin - haan main hoon besharam... Aur besharam log kya karte hai... Yeh toh tumhe pata hi hoga...

Aladdin looked at her petals like lips.. 

Yasmine nervously - Aladdin!!! 

For the first time Aladdin heard his name pronounced so beautifully... It was something magical for him...
Aladdin came closure to her lips... Yasmine soon closed her eyes... Aladdin noticed her reaction and decided to play his joker's card... 
Aladdin took a handkerchief which was stuck on her waist... And SNEEZED!!! 
Yasmine quickly opened her eyes when she heard that weird sound and was flushed at what he was doing... 

Yasmine - yeh kya kar raho ho tum... 

Aladdin - vohi jo besharam log karte hai... Doosro ka rumaal apni pyari aur khubsoorat naak ke liye istemaal karna... 

Aladdin laughed at her flushed face and yasmine was full of anger as she was definitely expecting something else... 

Yasmine snapped his leg hard... 

Aladdin - Nachidii!!! Ouch...kitni jor se maara!!! 

Yasmine - yeh tumhaare iss sade se mazaak ke liye... Hum jaa rahe hai Akbar mia ke paas tumhe aana ho toh aana... Varna hum akele mil lenge unse... 

Aladdin - sana ruko!!! Mazaak alag baat hai par hum abhi akbar mia ke paas nahi jaa sakte... 

Yasmine turned around - kyu??

Aladdin secretly showed her palace guards standing outside Akbar's shop... 

Aladdin - hum iss kale libaas me itni raat ko Akbar mia ke paas milne gaye toh yeh sainik hume  pahechaan lenge... Aur salaakho ke peeche dalwa denge... Par yeh log yaha pehraa kyu de rahe hai??? 

Yasmine - shaayad Akbar mia khub bhi shak ke daayre me hai isliye.. Un par nazar rakhi jaa rahi hogi... Par ab hum andar jayenge kaise?? 

Aladdin - aaj tak aisi koi musibat bani nahi jo kalechor ko uske mansoobo me kamiyaab hone se rok sake... Tum bas dekhte jao.. 

Aladdin took out some clothes from his bag...

Yasmine - yeh kya hai???

Aladdin - yeh kuch kapde   hai jo maine subah raphoo varwaane ke liye diye the par mere thaile (bag) me hi reh gaye hume bhes badalkar jaana hoga... 

Yasmine nodded in a positive manner

They soon changed there attire... 
Aladdin was wearing long achkan and used a thick mustache to look older... Yasmine was wearing a black burkha... With her beautiful eyes peeping from the narrow space...

Aladdin and Yasmine successfully entered Akbar mia's house... 

Akbar- Aap kon hai Janaab aur aapke saath yeh haseen, kamseen, naasuk... 

Aladdin could not tolerate a single word more for yasmine...

Alladin (in little bold and deeper voice) - Akbar Mia hum Mirza Janawaas baghdad me vyapaar ke silsile me aaye hai... aur yeh humaari mashooka Mahak hai... 

Aladdin slightly get hold over her waist... Yasmine quickly looked at him... But he ignored her looks... 

Akbar-Tashreef layiye mia... Itni raat ko kaise aana hua... 

Aladdin - ji mia... Hume ek tijori chahoye apna dhan rakhne ke liye... 

Akbar - ji mia... Mere paas bohot si tijoriya hai... Aapko kaisi chahiye... 

Aladdin - yeh sab toh mamuli tijoriya hai... Hume toh kuch mazboot... shaahi tijori chahiye... 

Akbar-ji hai na... Abhi abhi Rajmahal ke liye ek shaahi mazboot tijori banaayi thi... 

Akbar showed him the Tijori... 

Aladdin - aapne isse sirf Rajmahal ko becha hai ya phir kisi aur ko bhi... 

Akbar- aapko usse kya matlab... 

Akbar sensed something fishy and denied in one go... Aladdin tried to convince him

Soon yasmine took a pouch a 10, 000 asharfiya in front of him... 
Akbar being a greedy trader quickly got convinced and told them the truth... 

Akbar- ji bechi thi na... Mahal ke paharedaar Soheb Ali ko... Par pata nahi us jaise mamuli insaan ko iss badi tijori ka kya kaam... 

Aladdin - ji shukriya mia... Hum phir kabhi aakar tijori le lenge... 

Akbar was happy with his asharfiya and least concerned about them buying a tijori or not... 
They both quickly escaped his house... 

After few minutes of a silent walk... When they reach out of sight of guards... 

Aladdin - Nachidii!!! Tumhaare paas itni asharfiya kaha se aayi... 

Yasmine give him a devious grin... 

Aladdin - itni si khabar nikalvaane ke liye bohot badi rakam ada kar di tumne... Bechaari Tumhaari asharfiya... 

Aladdin made sad puppy face... But Yasmine smiled on him. Aladdin was confused at her behavior but he could understand or process anything in his mind.. Yasmine had pushed him and banged him on the wall... She leaned closure to him... Aladdin was shocked to see such kind of behavior from his Nachidii.. 

Aladdin - Nachidii!!! Yeh kya kar rahi ho...

Yasmine soon came more closure to his face... He was lost in her eyes and was about to kiss her... When she turned around... He was crashed to reality and was blank at her reaction.. 

Yasmine - paise ki bhook aksar logo ko andha kar deti hai... 

Yasmine showed Aladdin his bag which she secretly took during her act... Aladdin now understood the sudden behavior change.. 

Aladdin - kaalichorni!!! Mujhe Wapas karo mera thaila.. 

Yasmine turned it over... And there was a rainfall of coins... Aladdin realised that Nachidii knew that he had stolen the coins secretly from Akbar's pocket... 

Yasmine - tumhe kya laga mujhe pata nahi chalega... Tum kaalechor ho toh main bhi kaali chorni hoon... 

Aladdin laughed- tabhi toh pagalo jaise usse itni asharfiya de aayi... 

Aladdin soon started collecting the coins from ground and suddenly yasmine crushed one coin beneath her foot... 

Aladdin was stunned.. 

Aladdin - yeh asharfiya toh...

Yasmine - nakli hai!!! Vo ser hai toh hum savaser... 

Aladdin - maan gaye tumhe nachidi... 

Aladdin hugged tightly... 

Yasmine - Aladdin!!! 

Aladdin realised that he got too excited for the situation... 
They got apart and an awkward silence surrounded them...



That's it... I know, I told that its going to be the last part... But many of you told me to include more AlaSmine scenes to it so when I started writing... It again became too long so I have break it in parts... So I decided to extend it to few more parts 😊... Hope you will enjoy reading this part and would be agreeing with my decision... πŸ˜³
Do like review and comment to tell me your take on this part...😊
Please pardon me for spelling and grammatical mistakes πŸ˜³

Awesome πŸ˜³ eagerly waiting for next part...plzz update soon
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Posted: 5 years ago
#35
I want to ask if you can write an os on meher track in alladin if possible...plzz
The track is getting disgusting and they are showing Aladdin and meher romance instead of alasmine romance ...so plz if it's possible for you plzz write an os on this track...
And update this story soon..eagerly waiting for next part😳
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Posted: 5 years ago
#36

Originally posted by: Avneet_is_love

Awesome  😳 eagerly waiting for next part...plzz update soon

Thanks shirin,  I am glad that you like the part.. I specially extended AlaSmine scene as you requested for it... 
Will update soon...😊😊

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Posted: 5 years ago
#37

Originally posted by: Avneet_is_love

I want to ask if you can write an os on meher track in alladin if possible...plzz

The track is getting disgusting and they are showing Aladdin and meher romance instead of alasmine romance ...so plz if it's possible for you plzz write an os on this track...
And update this story soon..eagerly waiting for next part 😳

Shirin you actually give an amazing idea for my new TS : Revenge... I can include meher track in it...Even I don't like the romance between Aladdin and meher
BTW I have posted the teaser for new AlaSmine TS... Do read it and tell your opinion on it... AlaSmine TS πŸ˜³πŸ˜³
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Posted: 5 years ago
#38
So romantic update. Currently in the show alasmin scenes are reduced due to Meher. I want to see such scenes in the show
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Posted: 5 years ago
#39
πŸ‘

Originally posted by: 1973deepak

Thanks shirin,  I am glad that you like the part.. I specially extended AlaSmine scene as you requested for it... 
Will update soon... 😊😊

πŸ‘πŸ˜³πŸ˜³
Plzz update next part soon...btw when will you update next part 
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Posted: 5 years ago
#40

Originally posted by: 1973deepak

Shirin you actually give an amazing idea for my new TS : Revenge... I can include meher track in it...Even I don't like the romance between Aladdin and meher
BTW I have posted the teaser for new AlaSmine TS... Do read it and tell your opinion on it... AlaSmine TS  😳😳

I read the teaser...it's fantastic πŸ‘...i loved itπŸ‘πŸ‘
πŸ˜‰plzz update it soon