Dear Sur
First and foremost I need to congratulate you for this new thread! Congratulations my darling! Way to go and many more to come am sure, since you are doing a fan Job with one. This update for you comes at a time when you seem to be juggling too many all at once, while you had to take care of your house, setting it afresh, then you had your job which often keeps you on your toes along with your personal life which too demands your attention. So salute to your indomitable spirit and herculean efforts. Am amazed at your power and sincerity am pretty sure I would have dumped my story by now had I been in your shoes. But you are one of a kind and quite special.
You have sharpened your skills as an author today since now I see someone who can generate equal interest and curiosity in both the past and present. While you are keeping naina s past hidden yet the interesting turn of events in the present is what is keeping your readers hooked. And that's the beauty of this ff. Though the curiosity about the past is generated yet there are no complaints since the story is moving in a steady and interesting way in the present. In fact am more interested in the present. Especially now that the game has begun.
Yes I say game. It's a like game for both sameer and naina. For answer it's more like cat and mouse. And for naina as if it's peekaboo.
Sameer is often seen grumbling in himself, since he still seems to be quite taken by naina who to him is a married woman. Though the thought itself should dissuade him from taking steps towards her yet he is lured by her very presence in his life. As if he wants to test the waters to check whether he still has the same effect upon her as he did before. His dreams are quite symbolic, you actually put his subconscious in drivers seat sur! That was a master stroke like literally. Though he was reading fiction yet reality was getting played in his head while he slept. As if he saw it all at once yet it all remains hidden. The fact that diya is his, the very thought, that is now planted in a corner in his mind is by far the best twist that you could have ever incorporated in this story. Now all he needs to do is see for himself what is out there in broad daylight.
I loved that scene at the bus stop. Though it was not a typical romantic scene with all the undercurrents yet it depicted love, care and helplessness of the two people who are still very much in love with each other yet are seperated by circumstances. The distance is somewhat illusional. It's omnipresent yet the hearts stay very much in sync with one another. As if naina wanted to protect him, not only for herself but also for her daughter. As if she wants to keep him away any evil so that even for once, he gets to be diyas father. It was more like she was dissuading diyas father from smoking for that little girls sake.
For naina it's more like the game of peekaboo, hide and seek more like it. While she tries to keep her past hidden and even an important part of her present away from sameer yet she desires for that one sneak peek into his present life. Though she berates herself for being interested in his life yet she can't stop herself from enquiring about the nature of relationship that he and rita share. She is guilty of coddling herself with the truth, more like, being relieved that her place in his life is still intact.
The games have given a tantalising twist to the present.
Sur yet again you bowled me with that reference to paradise. It was just so apt that way you incorporated the entire sequence. It was beautifully done. The twist of fate in case of Matt and Meredith and the twist here came together in semblance and made this part of of the best penned till date.
Loved it!!!!!
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