Manan FF - Kaisi yeh Yaariyan season 3 Thread 1 - till chapter 63 - Page 7

Originally posted by: Aashna_chawla

Yeah that dark, and gray characters ka i know even according to me there should be a reason behind every person's action so that's a good sign of mature writer or about p.o.v. yeah that script wala sahi b bilkul but what i m saying its narating a story as character actually i asked a lot of questions regarding story and writing mene itne novels pdhe h now a days I'm reading 50 sheds of gray or jitna bhi story or novels mene pdhe h 90% was narrated by a person or a characters iska ye matlab hota h ke us person ke najriye se ap us story ko dekhtey ho so novels me bhi p.o.v. writing hi mostly hoti h though i agree with you in this screenplay wali thing yeah in screenplay or dialogue and when youre writing a script or something toh p.o.v. me writing important and but a script is story without much dialogues so it should be in p.o.v. but novels me p.o.v. writing alg hota h they narrate the story as a narrator or author or also as a character and i just felt liked asking but there is nothing wrong in narrating a story as a third person perspective i just said why don't you try it well you seems so mature when it comes to writing would love to have such a conversation with you you could teach me a lot of things and we both can discuss a lot of things with each other would love to have you as a friend as well 😊 😊

Edited by rk21 - 8 years ago

Originally posted by: rk21

u r right Aashna, most of the books are written from the point of view of the protagonist. Its called first person narration. in fact in my all other short or long stories i use 1st person narrative because its easier to write and much less formal.

Third person narrative is when you r writing as a story teller and not as a character. Though it is difficult to write in third person, i chose it for this story because of the number of characters.

I will give you an example. When I am writing as Manik, I can only write about what he is feeling and ablout his interactions with someone. If there are parallel tracks, and something is happening which Manik doesnt know, he cant obviously write about it.

What people do in scripts is they write in third person narrative but use P.O.V to conveniently write about each persons inner thoughts. That cannot be done in literature.

Having said, there must be writers who can write in layers and from different perspectives (like in 50 shades of grey, once as Anna and once as christian). One day when I achieve such a level of expertise i would surely attempt it. But thanks a lot for you inputs. With each comment I will learn something new and something more. Thats how we all grow :) I will be glad to be your friend

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Yeah writing in first person pov is difficult damn difficult actually i want to learn that like how they this writing is such a vast ocean jitna sikho km h yha even i write in p.o.v. but i my both characters narrate there side of stories though its a wrong process but here on india forums everyone wants to read manik's p.o.v. as well so i m bound to do that and i was thinking to promote your story on my thread one night stand with a stranger its my ss there hope you won't mind actually forums is silent now a days mostly purane writers chod ke chle gye so you will get more readers through this but still your permission is much needed 😊

Originally posted by: Aashna_chawla

Yeah writing in first person pov is difficult damn difficult actually i want to learn that like how they this writing is such a vast ocean jitna sikho km h yha even i write in p.o.v. but i my both characters narrate there side of stories though its a wrong process but here on india forums everyone wants to read manik's p.o.v. as well so i m bound to do that and i was thinking to promote your story on my thread one night stand with a stranger its my ss there hope you won't mind actually forums is silent now a days mostly purane writers chod ke chle gye so you will get more readers through this but still your permission is much needed 😊

Originally posted by: rk21

Absolutely go ahead and share it on your wall. 😊😊😊i will try to put in povs as you said but will hv to see how to cleverly include it without violating writing rules

Nh aisa mt karna i just wanted to know your thoughts regarding this thing abhi tum sb choose krogi like narrating it as a third person than adding pov it will ruin the whole flaw and essence of the story aisa mat karna 😆 or sure umm update ke time par link de dungi tumhari fiction ki 😊

whats up lovely folks...? It has been two silent days and I have been pretty much drowned in work. Haven't had a chance to write or update. But I have been missing my stars and fireflies a lot. So thought of atleast putting up a very beautiful picture of theirs. 

Chapter 18

Tuesday, May 8, 2016

 

 

Nandini was feeling much better by the next morning. Neel and Navya took her home.

Her eyes were sore from the crying and her heart heavy with Manik's thoughts. She had to finally confess her sudden break down and hospitalization. Everyone at home was worried, they surrounded her. Rishab hugged her tightly.

 

"I want to rest." Nandini wanted to be alone.

 

Chachi: "Haan haaan nandu, tu upar jake rest kar. Main tere liye khana aur haldi wala dudh lati hun."

 

Navya: "Chachi, main Nandini ko lekar jati hun upar."

 

Navya held Nandini as she climbed the stairs to her room. She helped Nandini take a shower and change  into her night dress. It was bright outside so she drew the curtains.

 

Navya: "Pata hai Nandu, meri maa bolti hai haldi wala dudh peene se na banda ek minute mein think ho jata hai and larkiyon ke liye to yeh especially acha hai, pata hai rang kitna nikhar jata hai."

 

Despite her weakness Nandini smiled. She leaned forward to hug Navya. "Itna maska marne ki zarurat nahi hai Navya, main pee lungi. Waise you know I am lucky, very very lucky that I have a friend like you. You have always been with me, bhale hi kitna hi bura waqt ho."

 

Navya: "Nandu, pata nahi kyun par mujhe aisa kyun lag raha hai ki tum mujhse kuch share karna chahti ho"

 

Nandini was taken aback.  So Navya had gotten a sniff of her inner storm. You can't hide much from your best friend, they can read you like a book.

However, she assured Navya that she wasn't hiding anything from her.

 

After Navya had fed her some hot food and tricked her into drinking the haldi wala milk, Nandini literally forced her to go home and take rest. The bestfriends together had had a sleepless night.

 

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Their friendship goes back a long way to the time when they both stepped into the SPACE academy. In an urban crowd of rich and spoilt teenagers, they both came from small towns and carried a naivety that was rare in their peers. Together they had witnessed and withstood so much. From the intense ragging of FAB5, to falling in love and suffering heartbreak, from jamming together in their initial days at SPACE to their current jobs and everything in between, they had always watched each other's back.

There were no secrets between them, that is until now. Nandini did feel guilty for lying to Navya, for keeping such a big secret from her but sometimes life puts us at a crossroad and we have choose one way. It may be unfair to others, but we still have to live by our choice.

 

There will be a time, Nandini was sure, when she would be in a position to confide in her best friend but till that time, it would be solely her mission...mission Manik Malhotra. She had to uncover his truth..

 

A buzz oh her cell phone shook her out of the reverie.

 

"How are u Miss Tipsy?" Her face lit up, even though for a split second.

 

"just reached home. Thanks for yesterday MnM." She replied

 

Manik: "Of great. But Whats MnM???"

 

Nandini : "U don't know MnM??? Bachpan mein james nahi khai kya, colourful..chocolaty"

 

Manik: "Oh you mean MnM candies? But iska mujhse kya connection?"

 

Nandini: "The cake u got me yesterday was topped with the candies. Bet u didn't notice, did u?" That was utter bullshit. But she couldn't tell him that MnM meant Monster Manik, could she?

 

Manik: "It's a stupid name Nandini Murthy but I don't argue with sick kids. Get well soon and we can discuss this later. And don't forget, U owe me a treat.

 

"I won't, Nandini promise."

 

She  kept staring at the screen but there was no further response. Manik still cut conversations abruptly. Some habits die old.

 

If the same thing had happened three years ago, Manik wouldn't have been texting her. He would have been right by her side, in her room, holding her tightly in his arms and repeatedly cursing himself for her breakdown. He would have fed her, and kissed her on the forehead and run his fingers through her long strands to put her to sleep. He would have sung to her in his magical voice and then after she fell asleep,  he would have spend the entire night sitting outside her door, in case she woke up and needed him.

 

Nandini forced her eyes shut. She didn't have the strength to cry anymore.

 

 

 

Edited by rk21 - 8 years ago

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Nice update thoda chotu tha anyways i like the convo between navya and nandini you handled navya's character wisely and than that friendship part was nicely written and lets come to the MnM convo monster manik lol some habits die old true even i have such a habbits i like this quote ka idea which you left through the update all over nice one. Length thoda bada hona chiye bhot chota h
Any ways waiting for next update

Originally posted by: Aashna_chawla

Nice update thoda chotu tha anyways i like the convo between navya and nandini you handled navya's character wisely and than that friendship part was nicely written and lets come to the MnM convo monster manik lol some habits die old true even i have such a habbits i like this quote ka idea which you left through the update all over nice one. Length thoda bada hona chiye bhot chota h
Any ways waiting for next update

Edited by rk21 - 8 years ago