Originally posted by: Divashni
SPOILER SPOILER SPOILER!
Mayank's comng bck in 2 da stry. I dnt know hw bt he's comng bk.
Originally posted by: Divashni
Wel u lt ur guard dwn 2 soon cause I just gve em a spoiler! Teehee 😛
lovely update continue soon . Thanks for pm .
It mean Nivi start write next part already? 😕 No happy about Mayank but update come soon that mean
awsome nivi. actually i wanted to post comment from a long ago. but i was always late😒 . now i decided that i will comment in each chapter u write in future. i have same opinion that u write great.😛. thanks 4 giving time to it despite of a busy schedule. keep writting.😊. . and congratulation 4 thread 2.🥳
nivi, can we hope 4 rabir romance in the future updates ? i feel sad seeing rachna and kabeer both in this situation😭. hope that they'll clear misunderstanding soon. 😛 you know, when u started giving it on weekends, i started calling it 'weekend serial' . but now it's my almost regular serial. bcoz everyday i wait for it as i used to wait 4 sslk. when i read ur written updates, i feel i'm watching the serial. want to give u a tight hug 4 nice updates🤗. best of luck 4 future updates👍🏼
your fan
ekra.
yeah, i was a silent writer[ in ur language😊] but now i'm not. actually i first read it during my exam. after completing my exam, i logged in this forum only to comment. and as 4 ur writing they r not kind words, they're really true. and i think u r older than me. so, can i call u nivi apu[sister] or friend? plz don't say no
Res for chapter 57 analysis.
This subtle focus of yours on Gunjan's laptop screen indicates the opening or perhaps better termed re-opening of a Gunjan-related track. I only hope that it is a good one this time, since the previous chapters related to Gunjan have not necessarily been positive. Pihu demonstrated obliviousness at its best in not noticing her younger sister's clearly sad face, but I guess her words were one more small trigger to commence the avalanche that was set and ready to break loose within Rachna's heart and mind. Rachna redeemed herself in this chapter for me with the maturity she displayed in reaching out to her husband. I must ask if you deliberately made any changes to the plot after reading my disappointing analysis of Rachna's character after the last update. I don't exactly know how to term the way you wrote the last part of this update using only "he" and "she" as the subjects, but I have to commend you for the simple complexity (oxymoron yes I know) of the tone that you established by composing this part of chapter that way. I have noticed you wrote a few other parts with this same "he"/"she" type of narration and I think it allows the story to flow seamlessly as it gives us as the audience insight into both of the character's minds and also an omnipresent view of the overall scene. It was wonderfully described because I could see the scene playing almost as though it was being enacted in front of me. Thank you for including the picture of the setting you were describing though because I had absolutely no idea what a tetrapod was (I tried running a quick Google search but it essentially just gave me pointless historical facts) so it was nice to have a reference to the actual location that you were writing about. The small details that you put in like him sensing the faint smell of her shampoo as it mixed with the salty air produced such vivid imagery that I was almost able to smell the exact things that you described. I am shamelessly reiterating myself with this but the manner in which you explained their physical positioning next to each other was truly enough to allow me to picture as a passing pedestrian what the scene may have looked like. Their silent exchanges are I feel greatly indicative of the depth of their relationship. She can understand that he has a headache solely by the tone of his pleading voice, while he understands exactly what she means when she holds out her palm. More than any of the dialogues in this chapter, "I pay attention more than you think I do" took the cake, pie, and any other dessert you want to add to the mix. It spoke volumes more than the few words that were laced together to compose the sentence. Overall, a nice, crisply composed part (especially the last bit) that set the stage for hopefully a reconciliation between the couple in the next chapter. Wonderful job here Nivi!Best,Aarti
Originally posted by: nividances
Oh. My. God. Divashni!!! 😡 😡 😡Everyone please ignore anything she says. Like I said before...she's crazzzy! 😛Do not at all believe any spoilers, as they are all a product of my crazy roommate's overactive imagination. She is just messing with you guys! 😆 😆 😆
Originally posted by: nividances
Divs stop messing with everyone! I have complaint filled PMs in my inbox now because of this! 😡False spoiler guys...don't pay attention to it.
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