Originally posted by: vann
Very interesting! The contrasts work so well. The yesterday's we are seeing and the tomorrow's we are waiting for so eagerly, but I guess we would have to wait for them on the show.
Just a question though. Why did you put yesterday after tomorrow. Yesterday before tomorrow is a linear sequence..we anticipate that way. Is it to highlight the contrast? As a reader, though reading yesterday is painful, it kind of loses its sting because you know the happiness to come tomorrow. (This is not a criticism. Just want to know your reasons as a writer. Don't mind)
Will you try your hand at turmoil of today...kind of linking yesterday and and tomorrow.
Hi! Thanks for the comment! Of course you are very right, linear progression wise, we expect first the yesterday, then today. and finally tomorrow. But as I was writing, I thought that we are getting plenty of "today" detailing from the show, and they broke their own track by jumping ahead to Haveli scenes, without finishing up on the interrogation and Rudra's suspicion and how Paro proves herself all that.
I mean, how likely is it that Rudra, a Major known for his ruthlessness would let Paro stay in the nice haveli and be comparatively okay if he thought she was responsible for the deaths of 5 of his BSD officers? Their story lacks a lot of detail now, and symbolically, it should have more "stuff" to make it richer and have more contrast when the serial goes forward to the future.
So I broke progression, offering a shot of "alls well that ends well" in the future, but leaving the readers with a darker picture of yesterday, so the intensity isn't lost. The yesterday passage is basically to fill in the gaps of the story, in my head, so its the final scene, and it comes last. Does that make sense?
Edited by napstermonster - 10 years ago
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