This was magnificent. You are an accomplished writer and anyone who has not had the good fortune to read your writing and this OS is missing out an opportunity and something so worthy .
The historical significance , ( I am amazed they you researched this...it gives the story a different flavour ...) the era and the period you set this story in, was beautifully described, the description of her feelings from the moment she sets foot in the mahal to the way you described her reactions seeing Arnav. It was simple, sensuous and the words flowed with such ease it had the same feeling one has when a gentle yet cool breeze touches you on a hot day. It has to be one of the finest descriptions I have read. I could feel her attraction and the excitement she must have felt in those circumstances.
The way you used your characters, a strong and stubborn Khushi, not afraid to think and act for what she wants for being true to herself and her feelings,to he willing to take a chance rather than to succumb to pressure and an arrangement ( marriage) that she knows she cannot honour. She is wise too, to understand the reason behind this arrangement and that her running away will bring no shame or humiliation to the family, hence she has no guilt or inner conflict.
I love that despite saying much you brought out Arnav's love and respect of her and the way he felt ...the ' I had to come' said it all. The way you brought in the payal scene...from the show ...it was superb, her caressing him with her feet. Genius. This scene has been written so many times, but here and your interpretation is one of my favourites so far...
I loved how Payal and Shyam help them and how they break out, I loved her plan to go to the dungeon repeating those same words to him ...she knew he was in trouble ...just like she did in the show...and she rescues her ' Rajkumar' . I love how addresses everything between them and the differences between them so she is aware before making a decision about her future with him...he loves her but he wants what is best for her...
I loved how he calls her Khushi, her name must not have sounded better to her as it did when he says it. Just like she wanted to say his name out aloud, it is a different thrill to hear your name from the person who love..the way it is said says so much more than just a name...
I could go on and on, so fabulous is this OS, but I am not sure if I will still be able to convey just how amazing and well written this is.
It so deserved the award. I am so honoured that we here on IF are able to read this ...thank you for writing this.
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