SwaRon Story "After Break UP"

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Well Guys as promised to Deeps and Baz i am posting the OS here titled "After Break Up" its totally on SwaRon as both of them are huge SwaRon fans (So i know thing that apart from SwaRon nobody will be tolerated in the OS). Now the reason behind this OS is recently birthday of Deeps had gone and i had promised her to write a SwaRon OS so i started working on it. But then my lovely sister Baz who herself is fantbulous writer so as deeps gosh how i will live to up to the expectations of both of them anyways coming back to the topic Baz was missing some TanHa wala SwaRon fun so finally it gave me this idea to fulfill both of their's wishes in one go so this OS is almost long as a short story and i am sorry guys for not checking the length. Deeps and Baz you both are the most sweetest persons i have met on IF till date. Deeps this is your belated birthday gift i hope you enjoy it and Baz my sweet little Devil Cat i hope you get some fun imaging TanHa here because even i have imagined TanHa here sorry to Vrushika Fans she is outstanding and i have no offence to make to any fan base here.

Now this Idea was really getting tall of me so i decided to contact one person who can handle such stories better then anyone else. Yes i am talking about Nehal you all have guessed it by now she is a perfect one to have when you are writing TanHa wala SwaRon. Nehal is the reason why i was able to complete this story in first place. Thanks a lot Nehal for bearing with me all the while and reading the draft and approving it. I hope you will turn up here to read it posted.

Deeps and Baz have good time reading this, I am keeping my fingers crossed for your positive reactions.

Now I think thats enough of Intro enjoy the story

Pratik  

P.S. Guys if you all like what you read below then please get your friends to read this. I really want this to reach to all SwaRon fans specially those who are missing TanHa. And those who can imgine Vrushika here they can enjoy like that but I have written this basically keeping Sneha as Sharon in my mind. Thanks again and no offence intended on any fan base please note that. And do tell me how you all like the new narrative i and Nehal have taken for this one.
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SwaRon OS- After Break up


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Hello Friends I am Pratik and I have here with me my friend Nehal. We are students of St. Louis collage and we are here to share a very interesting story. We have just worked on a very different research project and that was "Life after Break up in Love". And during this research we have come across a story which we feel should to reach to everyone who are in love for all those who will fall in love someday in short it's for everyone and of any age.

We all come across many people in a day/week/month/year, but there are very few who stay in your memory forever. Today I and my friend Nehal are going to tell you about one such couple that we have met in our research work for our college assignment. We were given a topic called "Life After Break up in Love" now we both were too much stressed out on to what we can do in that topic as none of us had been in love before so we didn't even knew what it feels when broke up with a person you have loved so much. And out of nowhere our professor Mr. Karan Mallik knew one couple who were in love and broke up and can help us. I know you all would be wondering as what this means that he knew a couple who broke up and can share their story and experience with us. I and Nehal were equally puzzled on this statement and we were looking at each other and asking for answers. Just then he replied us understanding our puzzle state: "Well actually it's a couple who fell in love in collage and got married. But due to some reasons they broke off and then again due to some reason they re-united and are happily married now". Nehal's eyes just light up when we heard that short introduction because it was something unusual break up is normal but this was not sounding normal story and she could judge that from his expressions when he was telling us, and what was more interesting was they were the students of our collage only so it will be fun to know their story, this is what Nehal felt because I was still thinking that how can somebody get back to a person with whom he/she have broke up.

But here my partner was more than curious to meet the couple and I could feel that she could sense we will get something interesting from this meeting.

"I bet an interesting story is waiting for us" Nehal said to me

Now Nehal has always been a brighter student than me and if she says we can get something then I have no other choice but to agree to her.

"Ok if you feel we should meet then freeze that I am in with you" I said to her.

She met Prof. Karan Sir and fixed a meeting on the same day evening at 4.30 at the garden coffee shop. We went there and met the couple. They were just too much adorable I can say from the first sight of them. When sir said about them I had thought that they would be some age old couple but to my surprise they were very young. And after formal introduction we found out that they both were of 26 years only and both were professional dancer and very much famous for their work in western and Indian semi classical forms.

"See I told you we will get something interesting" Nehal told me while sitting on chair. Well I can bet Nehal liked the guy in the first sight and I also cannot deny that I liked the girl in the first sight. Well after all the bla-bla-bla we forgot to tell you the names of the couple. The guy's name was Swayam Shekhawat and girl's name was Sharon Rai Prakash Shekhawat. We can say that they were the cutest couple we have ever met in our life because the small antics they were doing was reflecting their love for each other. Swayam was aware of small to smallest demands of Sharon.

Swayam was tall and well shaped handsome guy and I bet the girl who sees him is done for good with his charm. He has this charismatic looks and smile which take any girl's breath away, I am sure he did take away some of Nehal's Breaths. Now Sharon was no less. She was the perfect mix of angelic looks and heart snatching green eyes which can talk to you even if she is silent. But Sharon is very naughty also compare to Swayam and she keeps Swayam on his toes all the time.

Well now I guess we have given enough information and introduction about couple we met and their story we are going to tell to you. Now we ordered coffee and started listening to their story. Herein after the story goes the way they narrated it us. So here it goes the story of Swayam and Sharon called together SwaRon and the title of the story as suggested by Sharon is "SwaRon Story After the breakup"

Swayam started the narration:

 Well the story starts from final year of graduation in commerce at St. Louis collage where I fell in love with this beautiful girl and wanted to give her lifelong commitment. The commitment was about Dance and Life. We had promised each other that we would make a career in dance and we will get married as soon as college ends. Now the day I am talking about is the last day of collage and we were sitting in canteen and we were having this argument:

"Why the hell you don't understand Sharon that our parents are family friends and they are not going to mind if we get married" I said holding the cup of coffee

"I know our parents are family friends and no one will oppose if we get married" Sharon said

"Then I why do you want us to run away from house hiding from everybody" I asked

And you know what she only smiled at this question and started sipping her coffee again. Here I was asking her so much important question and her reaction was like what is it to ask for? We are running away that's it.

"But if everything can fall in place and we can have the formal wedding then why do you want to run away?" I asked her again

"You are such a Pig Swayam, I always wanted to run away and get married. It is the ultimate love and romance" Sharon said

"You are calling me Pig? You have gone insane. We are love and what is the difference in running away and getting married formally" I said

"Uff Swayam when you will get some what romantic my Mr. Lallu, running away is extreme fun and I want to have that" she said

Oh god she had made up her mind to run away and get married then how can I change that. Not only me but there is no one who can change her mind still. So I agreed with whatever she wanted as if I had any choice.

We came out side and I escorted Sharon to her car.

"Tonight at 2 o'clock at my room's balcony and we will run away from there. And ya the ladder will be at back side and make sure you make no sound while picking up ladder otherwise mom-dad will wake up and our planning will go in vain" Sharon said

Back to Present

"You know first of all I was not ready for that but doing it for her and above that if anything wrong happens then I am dead. This is my Sharon for you." swayam said to us

"I mean we were running away so some precautions were needed to be taken care of no. I was just informing him that's it. I didn't want plan to backfire" Sharon said hitting swayam playfully

And both of them started to argue over that matter and nobody was ready to give up anything less. And here I and Nehal were looking at each other or say asking each other how to stop them.

Just than Nehal caught hold of the situation and spoke "Hey guys hello we are also here and we have to move on with story because we have a project if you guys remember"

Sharon just shied at away at this, we stopped their cute argument but yar they looked super cute when they were in that argument.

Swayam carried on the story further

Well then after that instruction Sharon sat in the car and close the door in blink of second. I don't know how but my shirt's one side got into the door when she closed. I used to wear a cotton tee inside so I used to keep my shirt open and that's why it stuck in the door.

She just took off the car like a jet plane and I was running behind the car shouting to stop. And suddenly she stopped the car got out.

"What is this? Why you want to die so early? We haven't even run away and got married? Generally boys attempt suicide after they get married" she said

"No you silly I was not attempting a suicide it was just that my shirt got tied in when you shut the door there" I said

"Oh ok then be on time in night" she said kissing me on cheek and went away.

I reached her home on time and took the ladder from side making sure no sound is heard by anybody and placed it at Sharon's balcony and started to bark like a dog because she was not in the balcony and barking was our little secret code.

She came out holding a huge bag in her hand and I knew her last minute packing never ends (at this point Sharon glared at Swayam to which he understood what she meant and started to further explain again)

She was coming down from ladder and I was helping her in coming down.

"Sharon you are sure that we should run away? I mean we can still talk to our parents and fix things" I said like a grown up responsible boy

"Are you mad routine marriage is no fun" she said and jumped in my arms.

I hold her and put her down to her feet and took her bag along with mine. But you know when I took the bag I felt like I would fall soon because of weight of the bag. I put down the bag and asked Sharon "What else you have taken besides clothes with you Sharon?"

"Nothing much 5-6 perfumes and 8 body orders, 2 of my favorite make up kits, 8 lips sticks and nail paints, 10 pairs of western clothes and 5 pairs of Indian clothes and some jewelry and other important stuff" she said smiling at me

"What what is the need to take so many things with you? And we are not going on a trip babes we are running away and that to for 1-2 days because we know our parents are gone accept us" I said

"So you mean I should stink all the away and not take perfumes or body orders, and clothes are makeup are necessary for a girl even if it's for a half day you understand that" she said

I understood there was no point in arguing with her. So I took up the bag and went away.

"So this was how we got married first" Sharon spoke as soon as Swayam finished narrating that part.

Back to Present

"So if it was not Sharon then you two couldn't have had fun in marriage" Nehal asked them smiling and Sharon's cheek surely became read hearing this.

"You guys seemed to be very happy then what happened ahead" I asked Swayam

"Well after marriage what do you expect dude…. We had our first night obviously" she said blinking at me

I and Nehal had no answer to this actually we both became red for the first time.

"He wants to know why we separated honey" Swayam said without controlling his laughter…

Sharon started from where Swayam left

Well we got married and went back to our parents and as we had expected they had no issues with this marriage. Even Swayam's Dad was happy that I was their daughter in law because he needed someone who can make his boring son enjoy life.

We started our new life and Dance was the thing we had dreamt together with marriage. We joined one of the famous Dance groups of Mumbai and that group is Ganesh Hegde group.

And as they say after marriage things change, I agree with that things did change after we got married. Before marriage we were students without any worries but now we were adults and with responsibility to make career and prove that early marriages also can work.

We both started giving too much time to our works and hardly had time for each other. During that time I don't know how but I found a best friend and a person whom I started to share my love "Juliet". Juliet was the only one besides Swayam whom I really loved.

Back to Present

"Well honey can I take over the narration now because I guess I can explain this part better" Swayam spoke and Sharon gave him death glare.

Well poor Swayam what could he do. I just had thought this when I found out that Swayam knew how to handle his wife. Swayam told her something silently and she was happy that Swayam should narrate this part.

And here I and Nehal were getting curious as to what is it in this part that both of them are so itching to explain that. But we could make out that whatever it is, its surely turning point of their story.

Swayam Started to narrate the story again

Well as she said she had found Juliet to share her feelings and she began to love her. It would be always like this whenever she wants to go out or have fun or else spend time with me I would be doing something or other and which made me go away from her.

She always had many friends and I never used to note them much. But to my surprise Sharon had gone too much close to Juliet.

One I heard her talking to someone on the phone

"Are really what should I say about Swayam he doesn't even spare time for me. Thank god Juliet is there so that I share everything thing with her. I just love her she never demands anything from me" Sharon was saying this to somebody on phone…

I was like who this Juliet is and why is she sharing so much things with her? And you know all the time when I return home there would be some girl with her hugging her or talking to her in ears about something.

And now that Juliet had become more important part in her life. Every now and then she would rush to meet Juliet from work or anywhere. And I was really getting confused at what was it and why was she getting too much close to that Juliet.

And then one of my juniors said that his girlfriend became a lesbian and narrated the whole story to us. In jest I can say that he was saying that his girlfriend was moving around with so many girls and he thought it is normal because girls like company of their friends but what he told after that really puzzled me. He further told that he noticed one big change in his girlfriend and it was she was hugging girls more frequently and without any reason. The hugs first seemed normal to me but then I started to notice that they were not any normal hugs but they were intimate hugs and he could notice pleasure in his girl friend's eyes while hugging the other girl.  He started to feel something very odd about his girl friend's friends and the type of relationship they shared. So finally he confronted his girl friend and she admitted that the girl was his girl friend and she was breaking up with him now.

That story light up my eyes because Sharon all of a sudden had started to make many female friends and every now and then she was also seen hugging a girl. And most important thing she had a special friend "Juliet" who was a girl. The thought without any intention started to hit my mind that "IS Sharon a lesbian?"

And whatever I had seen it could be made out that she looked like one. And I was very worried now as if what will happen if she is one.

And finally it was our first marriage anniversary and I was planning a day out with Sharon. All the arrangements were made and I went to give Sharon a surprise and entered our bedroom.

She was coming out of wash room when I went in the bed room. Then suddenly her cell started ringing and she picked up her cell.

"What? Juliet is ill OMG…. I am coming straight away and you please call the doctor immediately" she answered on the call.

And I was like here I am preparing a day out with her and it's our marriage anniversary and she is worried about Juliet.

She quickly got ready and starting to leave.

"Sharon it's our anniversary and you are going like this" I said to Sharon

"Honey please understand I have to go Juliet needs me" she said

I got irritated with Juliet more than ever.

"Juliet-Juliet-Juliet does anyone else expect that bitch exists for you in world or not?" I said loudly

"Swayam please mind what you say? How can you call Juliet a bitch? And she is ill" she replied

"She is bitch Sharon because she is coming between us. It's our first marriage anniversary and you are behaving like it's not a big deal" I said loudly again

"So you mean I should enjoy the day with you leaving a sick Juliet behind. Are you nuts Swayam?" she said loudly this time

"Tell me one thing clearly Sharon, are you going out Juliet?" I asked

"What do you mean by that?" she asked

"I mean is Juliet your girlfriend? Are you a lesbian?" I asked finally

"What the hell Swayam do you even know what you have said" she spoke loudly and clearly irritated by that question

But I was in no mood to listen to any off beat crap now.

"Yes or No, I want an answer right now" I said

"You know what Swayam you are sick and after 4 years of relationship and 1 year of marriage you still don't trust me then what's the point having this marriage. Let's just break this off" she said and went away

Back to present

So this is how we ended our marriage and I believed that she was a lesbian.

As soon as Swayam said that coffee came out of Nehal's mouth that he was really saying that a small doubt about that broke their marriage and Swayam really doubted her for real.

When Swayam narrated the story I thought that she will clarify when they face off on the issue. But she didn't instead of that she just broke off.

"You could have clarified Swayam about Juliet matter don't you?" I said to Sharon

"Explanations are given to those who believe you and Swayam thought I was lesbian which a big shock was for me. And you know what I thought why does he think like that when he knows how wild our nights were" she said smirking

But I could make out that she had lost faith in Swayam at that time.

And suddenly Nehal pushed me on my elbow and said "will you please stop asking her questions can't you see she feeling odd?"

"Are you mad can't you see what she is saying and blinking and smirking. She is enjoying this one and being called lesbian. Hey are you one? Then you can try her I guess she won't mind and neither will swayam now." I said to Nehal

Nehal got shocked on hearing this and hit me on my feet with her high heel shoe which really hurt me and I just stood up shouting ouch.

Sharon and Swayam got surprised as to suddenly what happened and I said I cut my tongue in mouth while eating the pizza and they relaxed.

"So shall I continue the story?" swayam asked

"Ya sure" we replied

Swayam started narrating the story again

After that we got divorced and I joined Shaimak Davar Institute of Performing Arts and went to Dubai for managing his branch there. And I stayed there for one year and after three years I was recalled to Mumbai for a big event and I was promoted to main choreographer assistant to Shaimak so I returned to Mumbai.

I was on the way to Institute in my car when I saw there was a traffic jam there. And I inquired what it was and found out that somebody had knocked a girl's car's bumper and she was fighting with him and I guess beating him up. So I just checked who it was and without any surprises I found Sharon there beating up the man and scolding him.

I guess she was still the same full of life and fun. And she really enjoyed such fights because when we were in college she used to fight to everybody on such small matters. I was just enjoying the sight before my eyes because I was seeing her after three years and she still had that impact on me because my breaths became heavy seeing her.

And suddenly a man tapped my shoulder and said would you please take off your car so that we all can move and I went and took the car out and reached the institute.

Sharon interrupted in mean while

Well now let me explain my side of story on that day after the accident. I also reached the Institute. Yes you heard me I right I was also working with Shaimak Davar Institute of Performing Arts and I was one of the Lead Female Dancer's of that group. I and Kriya were the Lead Female Dancers and Rey was the Male Lead there at that time and my boyfriend at that time.

And I reached there and met Kriya who told me that Shaimak had called his special dancer back from Dubai. That Dancer will be the first male lead of the group and head choreographer of Shaimak's team.

We were waiting for that person to come and we all got together to welcome him in rehearsal hall. To one of the biggest shocks of mine that Dancer came and he was Swayam. I just froze at the first place and didn't know what to react. Rey was also on a mini tour with Shaimak's troupe and was to come after three days.

He also looked a bit uncomfortable seeing me there but we were professionals so we met and we started rehearsals and decided the songs. It was first day so we didn't do much.

After the rehearsals got over I and Kriya sat down in the side of the hall and I was just explaining to Kriya as to what happened in the morning when I was coming and just than Swayam came there.

"Here you go this no. can help you in fixing your car?" Swayam said giving me a visiting card

"How do you know my car is damaged?" I asked

"I was there when you were fighting with that man" Swayam Replied

"Oh that was his fault totally you were there only so you saw right what happened there?"

Swayam just smiled in his usual style and just than Shaimak called him and he left.

"You are looking a bit disturbed today, anything wrong?" Kriya asked

"Well actually the guy just left you saw him?" I said

"Swayam ya I saw him he is the second male lead and Shaimak's team's new head" Kriya said

"Exactly he is my husband" I said

"What you are married?" she asked

"Ex-husband, we were married but divorced three years back" I said still wondering what made Swayam come back from Dubai.

I went home and that day I was not at my usual self. Actually I avoided Juliet for the first time that day. I didn't know why I was feeling strange to see Swayam again.

Swayam took over the narration now

 "Ya now let me take you to the other part of the story from here" Swayam said to us and gave a glass of plain water to Sharon. How well he knew his wife needed water without any explanations from his wife.

Well I was also feeling very strange to see Sharon again in front of me. I don't know why her presence distracted me. I was not myself when I saw Sharon may be there were feelings left in me for Sharon. Just then a part in me emerged in front me:

"You still love her, may be life is giving you one more chance to bring back Sharon in your life" Swayam 1 said

Just then another part in me emerged I guess it was more of devil part of me compare to the first one who was anglesite part of me and tried to make me understand the value of Sharon in my life.

"She doesn't like men around her do you remember that? And she dumped you for a girl, she is a lesbian and she cannot come back to your life."  Swayam 2 said

"Ya may be 2nd one is right she wouldn't want a man in her life now knowing she likes female only" I said to both of the parts of mine standing right against me.

"But maybe she have changed now" Swayam 1 spoke

"No she cannot change. She is a lesbian and it's a fact no one can change that you understand" Swayam 2 spoke

"She can" Swayam 1 spoke again

"She can't "Swayam 2 spoke again

"She can" Swayam 1 spoke again

"She can't "Swayam 2 spoke again

"She can" Swayam 1 spoke again

"She can't "Swayam 2 spoke again

Now they both started fighting literally and both of them were pulling each other's hairs. I was still wondering as to why they were fighting in first place. Gosh these split personalities can really make you confuse.

In between my thoughts I realized that they both were still fighting nearby me. If I had not stopped them at that time then surely one of them would have gone hairless in minutes of time. And I cannot watch myself hairless anywhere. So I stopped them.

"Stop both of you. I don't know whether she is a lesbian or not but one thing is for sure that we have broken up now and there is no way she will unite with me now" I said angrily yet confused about whether I said that correctly.

Finally after putting so much of thought I decided that I will talk to Shaimak and ask him to transfer me to some other event.

Next I went to institute early to talk to Shaimak.

"Can you transfer me to another venue or event? I assure you that I will give in my best efforts there also" I said

"No Swayam you are needed here that's the only reason why I called you up from Dubai otherwise you know why I would call you back from a place which is as important for me as this one. Sorry but I need you here to manage work affairs here because this has too much work and I need a eligible person to manage affairs here" Shaimak said

I saw Sharon listening to this conversation from outside. I felt bad but I had to do that because I could sense that even she was uncomfortable.

Well as per Shaimak's wish I had to stay back and nothing else I could do about that. Anyways the male lead besides me was there on that day and I met him. Rey looked very talented guy and very calm collective personal.

We all started our rehearsals with the steps that I and Shaimak had set up. Everything was going nicely. Shaimak really had a talented team working with him as the team took very less time in perfecting whatever was given to them.

As the team was very active we had done through the first part very nicely in three days. Now after the first part was approved by Shaimak I was sitting in a side of the hall and working on my laptop for designs of the set and background for the event.

Just then Sharon came up to me and gave me Prasad. I was wondering as to what was that for.

"Don't wonder much I went to Temple because I had prayed that if first part of the rehearsals goes well then I will donate Prasad" she said giving me the Prasad

"Wow not bad so you have started visiting temples now?" I asked

"Ya I have, sometimes we change" She said sounding a bit confused at my question

She was starting to go back and moved her back behind me. Just then I thought for how many days we will avoid each other. We have to forget the past and move on because we both were on the same event and we had to work together so being friends was the first thing we needed to be.

"Sharon wait" I called her

"Ya what is it?" she asked turning towards me

"Well why we are behaving like strangers for god sake. We know each other and past was past we cannot anything about that now. So why don't we forget past and try to be friends at least" I said

She thought for a while and shake hands with me. She finally looked relived now as if I had put down some burden from her shoulders.

"Thank God you took the initiative and spoke this. I was just thinking the same to talk to you about that" She spoke sitting beside me.

"Ya so friends again, nice to see you like this" I said

"Like this?" she asked

"I mean in joyful and free spirited mood. It's nice that you have moved on in life" I replied

"Oh ya time moves on I guess" Sharon said looking down

"Hey Shar you are finished distributing your laddos?" Rey came saying this

"It's Prasad you silly Rey and ya I am done distributing that" Sharon replied him

"Ok. So you are the new lead and choreographer of the event?" Rey asked me

"Well yes I am" I said

"You know Rey he is Swayam Shekhawat" Sharon said

"Swayam Shekhawat?" Rey asked

"Don't you remember I told you?" she said

"Am I supposed to remember anything about Swayam because we have met for the first time" Rey said

Sharon was glaring him now and I could see that she would kill him if he doesn't remember what she had said to him about me, so typical Sharon I tell you. (When Swayam said this Sharon hit him on the shoulder and glared him in the same way Swayam just said and I can say that looked very dangerous to us)

"Oh wait-wait Swayam, he is your Swayam?" Rey asked

Finally I could see Sharon getting relaxed and a smile curved on her face.

"Yes he is the Swayam" She said as if I was a commodity to be proud of (Again Sharon glared Swayam and I guess Swayam will have to pay for it when they reach house and Nehal also told me the same when she observed them)

"Hey bud finally nice to see you man, I have heard so many things about you so it's very nice to see you in person finally" Rey spoke shaking hands with me

"I am very glad that Sharon has told you so many things about me but I hope they are good things only" I said to Rey blinking at both them which made all of us smile

"Well then I guess we should have dinner together today may be you both have lots of catching up to do and even I will get some good time with you guys" Rey said

Now this statement made me very confuse as to why he was joining me and Sharon when he knows that we have lots of catching up to do. And I guess Sharon knew what I will think on this so she clarified "Swayam he is Reyansh Singhania aka Rey my boyfriend and soon we are marrying"

What the hell was that? I mean she should have said this lightly also. You know such shocks can give anybody heart attacks. Now what do I say on this? I needed some time to get back to my own.

"Oh that's great congratulations to both of you and you both look nice together" I said.

And instantly on my statement Sharon and Rey smiled at each other proudly. And I don't know why but I didn't felt good about it.

"So let's head to Shar's favorite restaurant and continue our talks there it's nearby only" Rey said

"Ya sure" I said

And both of them left on their own and I followed them in my car. We reached the same restaurant where I and Sharon used to date. And that brought back so many sweet memories in my head. I just smiled remembering those times as they were the nicest times I had ever spent in my life of course with Sharon only.

We got settled on one table and continued our chats and ordered the food also. The food was of course of Sharon's choice a mix of Italian and continental. And I was still wondering if he was Sharon's boyfriend that means she is normal then what about Juliet where is she?

"So Where is your girl friend? Is she here in Mumbai or in Dubai?" Rey asked me

And I didn't have any girlfriend in last three years or say I hadn't really moved on in my life. So I was confused as to what to answer him. And Sharon read my face on the instant second

"Don't tell me you don't have any girlfriends?" she spoke

"Ya something like that" I replied

"Oh please don't try to give politically correct answer and say in one word "Yes" or "No" come on say it" she said as if she was investigating a murder case and she was just at the point of conclusion

"No" I said

"Oh God Swayam you still such a bore. That's why you seem to be out of fun now days" she said

"No no I am perfectly fine and in fun with my work" I said

"No you need a girl friend and I will get one for you" she said

"Ya you have such good girls in your group may be one of them can fit with him and he will also find some good company" Rey said

"Hey guys stop it I am happy to be single" I said finally stopping both of them from turning match makers

"You don't know anything and I am sure a girl friend will change you" she said

And we finished the food in that argument only. I paid the bill as it was treat from my side for returning from Dubai and getting the promotion.

And in next few days everything went on nicely as I and Sharon and Rey went outside had fun and did some really mad stuff but had the gaga time until Sharon set me up on a date with Nicole. 


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Sharon spoke up interfering than

Do you want to know why I set him up on a date with Nicole because I wanted to make Swayam old one and Nicole was the fatso of my gang but I hadn't seen her for almost 12 months then and I was happy to stay away from her because she was such a bore and Swayam was not in his skin and he hated such girls who were fatso and bore. So I thought this will cheer him up.

I and Rey also were there in the adjunct seat of Swayam so that he stays confidant when he gets irritated and fights with her.

And the shocker came after that when Nicole made entry. Damm what I had done? I had put the hammer on my own legs because I had set up the sexiest possible date for Swayam.

You know Nicole had turned to sexy siren from boring fatso. And the way she was chatting with Swayam did look like she was making him relax and enjoy his time and I don't know why I didn't like that.

"I should thank Sharon because she has set me up on the best date of my life" Swayam said to Nicole and to which Nicole was blushing red. And I was turning red in anger and embarrassment for doing that.

Just then an idea came to me. I called Swayam

"What are you doing?" I said

"What do you mean by that I am on date" Swayam said loudly

"Calm down we are in the restaurant and I mean you are flirting with her" I said

"Yes of course you only have set me up on the date" Swayam said

"Oh ya and if you want to impress her then give her the Pineapple cake that I have ordered and will be reaching to you soon" I said

Just then the cake reached to them. And I knew swayam was in mood to flirt so he will say some cheesy lines to impress her.

"Here you go I have ordered your favorite cake as I wanted to make our first date beautiful" Swayam said to Nicole

Nicole saw that cake remembered how we used to make her fun when she used to eat that cake and got angry.

"So this is yours and Shar's plan to embers me here in public because she knows I cannot handle myself when I see this cake" Nicole spoke throwing cake at Swayam's face in anger

Swayam looked at us wondering what went wrong. And he didn't know that she gets angry when she sees that cake. Rey realized we were in for a big trouble so he ran away leaving me behind to be eaten by this angry giant.

"Why did you ruin my date?" Swayam said to me after he came from wash room

"Because she was not a good girl for you" I said

"Oh really and how do you know that" Swayam asked me

"I know because I know her" I said

"No you did this because you were unsecured seeing me with someone else" Swayam said

"No I am not unsecured Swayam but you were that's why our relation broke off" I replied him and went away.

Back to Present

I and Nehal were getting curious to know more now because the story was getting confusing by each explanation. We know Sharon felt jealous that's why she backfired the date she herself had arranged. And what she said to Swayam was also correct. So let's see what is next in this really interesting story. We were not asking anymore questions to them because we know this story was not predictable at all so we had decided to listen to full story before we ask them anything may after the end we get clarified with everything and we don't have to ask anything to them. Anyways let's go ahead.

Swayam took over the narration again

Sharon's last words made me think too much that was I really that much unsecured?

I was thinking if she was right and maybe I should have cleared that thing in some other way or some other day then we might not have ended breaking up then.

But one thing was still worrying me that where was Juliet then after all she was the reason I doubted that Sharon was a lesbian and now Juliet is nowhere. I have to find out who Juliet was and what did she had with Sharon?

With that I went to sleep. And next day we were doing song selection for the Shaimak's entry. I was suggesting them "Jane Kisne" song from Shaimak's own album and Sharon was saying "Dhoom 2" song which Shaimak had choreographed. Kriya was there and she supported my selection to which Sharon got upset and spoke in irritation that "You both are just similar to each other and I should have know she will choose the one you choose"

And I that jerked something in my mind and I thought well that's the chance to see Sharon's reaction.

"Perfect I should date her. Hey Kriya I know I am getting a bit to straight and forward but will you like to have dinner with me tonight?" I asked kriya

Now that shocked Sharon and she was totally Jealous at it now and I could make out that she still didn't like me being with anyone else.

I went out on a date with Kriya finally and we had too much fun time together she made my date most rocking that day (Sharon didn't like this statement of course she still didn't like her hubby cheering for some other girl than her)

I went to institute next day but there was nobody there so I inquired and found out that Juliet has died so everyone went to Sharon's place. OMG I have to go then because Sharon will be uncontrollable then so I went there.

I was feeling strange because I was about to see her last time and she was the reason why we broke up.

I entered Sharon house and there was the whole gang standing there and I couldn't see the picture properly so I went ahead and looked for her.

And what reveled really shocked me. Juliet was not girl I mean she was female but not human. Oh god how to explain this even I don't know. She was a dog. Yes she was a dog, Juliet was a dog.

Oh god Jesus She left me for a dog I mean how can she do that to me? This was the only thing running in my mind. And I went out of there in a hurry.

May be she had seen me and came running behind me.

"Swayam you were allergenic to dogs that why I didn't tell you about her" she said

"You mean all this while you cared for a dog?" I asked

She nodded in yes

"Oh God you left me for Dog I cannot believe this. You are psycho really. You left your home, husband and love everything for dog" I asked

"No Swayam I left you because you didn't trust me and after all the happy nights we had you thought I was a lesbian that's why I left you" She said

"This is not a justification for what you did Sharon, I really hate you now and I don't even want to see you now" I said and left to Kriya's home.

I told everything to Kriya and I was just about to say that I was gone marry her when she gave another shock.

"Swayam I can sense that you are going to propose me and before you do that I have to tell you something" she said

"Ok what is it?" I asked

"Actually I love someone else and we are gone run away tonight" she said

"What? Then why you dated me?" I asked

"Because it was needed to make somebody realize that even I can date someone and moreover there was a big reason behind me dating you" she said

Now anger knew no bound in me because first Sharon and now Kriya were blowing my mind out.

"Will you please care to explain how and what is the reason?" I asked

"Do you want to know whom I am running away with?" She said

"Ya of course" I said

"Well I am running away with Reyansh" she said

"What the hell, he is Sharon's boyfriend how can you run away with him?" I asked

"Because we love each other and Rey knows that Sharon cannot love anybody else then you" she said

"Sharon doesn't love me" I said

"She does and that's the reason we have forced Shaimak to bring you back to Mumbai because Rey was only Sharon's boyfriend she didn't love him they way she did love you and Rey always asked me why he is not getting the same love from Sharon? And I made him realize that she loves you and we started to plan how to bring back both of you together and in that planning we both fell in love. But we were doing this just for the happiness of Sharon in first place but ya I did fall in love with Rey during that and he too started liking me and we confessed our feelings and decided that we will marry after you guys.

But after the date yesterday Rey felt jealous and he said he will marry me today itself and we would run away. I asked him about Sharon that's when he said if she has to come close to Swayam then I will have to give her this shock so she can get close to Swayam and I am sure he will take care of her" she said

Back to Present

We had decided not to speak a word before they finish the story but this was really getting very exciting and beyond our control. So finally Nehal couldn't hold and spoke "Are you guys for real? I mean there is always an unexpected twist in your story so finally we can say that you console Sharon after that and she fell in love with you again"

Swayam and Sharon looked at each other and then us and then smiled.

Now I and Nehal were looking were looking at each other as to what was they up to now.

"Are you guys gone say that this is not the way actual thing happened?" I asked

"Of course yes this is not the way things happened then also" Sharon said hitting my head playfully and left me wondering

"What the hell are you waiting for then? Please go ahead and finish the story" Nehal said

"Ok calm down. Swayam please tell them what happened after that" Sharon said smiling to Swayam looking at Nehal's confused expressions'

Swayam continued the story

"What the hell, you guys are trying to justify your dishonesty to Sharon by proving to me that she still loves me and Rey is sacrificing everything when he loves you" I asked angrily

"No that's not right Swayam, you are wrong if you see I always tried to bring you both close by making you realize your old time and my friend I know Sharon that much that she cannot realize that she still loves you" Rey said coming from behind

"What?" I asked in confused tone

"Well you know today you left from her house and that time she was upset that you don't want to see her face. Whereas I was there but all she needed was you. She still is crying because you were hurt because of her. And you know she is reacting this today but I know this from the day she told everything to me about you when we had started dating" he said

I was just confused about everything that was going on.

"I started realizing that she still misses you and there was a mere misunderstanding between you guys and that could be sorted out so I and Kriya made this plan to make you both realize that you guys still love each other. And during that I realized that Kriya was the type of the person I was looking for whole my life" Rey said

"So now don't stand like a statue wondering all this and just go and get Sharon. She belongs to you only Swayam. All the best" Kriya said

Oh god damm I couldn't realize what to react at that time. But I still thanked them both for doing so much for us and hugged them and gave them all my good wishes. And I left from there to go to Sharon's house.

I took the ladder from outside and went in to the balcony of Sharon's room by climbing the ladder. And I peeped in to the room to find out that Sharon was sitting on the bed and crying. So I went into her room.

"I am sorry Sharon for making you cry. I am really a big jerk and I don't even know how to react in such situations" I said giving her favorite chocolates to her

She just got up from the bed and hugged me hard

"Please stop it and say that you won't say such thing again to me" Sharon said

"Ok I will never tell you such thing. And now have this chocolate and allow me to say something to you" I said making her sit on the bed

"Even I want to say something to you" she said

"NO me first today" I said

"No me" She said

And we started fighting over that.

"Please Sharon it's really important what I want to say it's about my life and death" I said

I knew she will listen to me only when I say those words to her.

"Ok shoot" she said

"Well Sharon I know that I am a big Jerk for doubting you. You know I am very guilty about being that much cheap that night with you. But the same time I am happy that I am getting this chance to say sorry to you. And what more I want to say is that Sharon I think I cannot give anybody the place you hold in my heart" I said

Now this had really brought tears in her eyes' (Sharon was really crying at the time Swayam spoke this lines while explaining the story to us)

"I tried but couldn't move on in all these years. I still cannot see you with anyone else then me. I still feel unsecured when I see you with Rey. Can you give me another chance in life to correct my mistake? I promise you that I will give my life in making your life beautiful and I will never ever doubt on any such thing in future. But I cannot think of my life without you are in it. You are equal to life for me. If you are not there that means the body is breathing but Swayam is not alive anymore. I have been dead for last three years but now I want to live my life and life will become life only when you are in it, Please give me one more chance and accept me in your life" I said crying and holding her hand

Now Sharon took over the narration

He just froze me at once because he spoke each and everything that I wanted to say to him.

I was shocked as well as happy at the same time because he felt the same for me. But now I didn't had any words to say to him that can justify the simplicity and feeling with which he said those things to me.

I was thinking what I can do now that can make him happy now. So finally an idea came to me.

"You know duffer I was to going to say the same thing to you today because I realized this when left in the evening today" I said

I just hugged him hard and put my lips on his and we kissed like it was the last moment we were breathing together and it took almost 20 minutes to us to realize that what we were doing and we were kissing each other madly.

You know that was the only thing that could have justified my feelings after what he told me. And I did what came in my heart first.

"Let's just run away and get married" Swayam told me

"What are you mad? We can sit and talk about that right. And this is the way you wanted our marriage right?" I told

"No I am perfectly fine. Did you forget that arranged marriage is no fun and running away from home is full of fun, then how can we miss fun this time" he said smirking at me

I got it after 5 years of relationship and 3 years of break off finally Mr. Swayam Shekhawat had developed some wildness in him.

"Let's go then what are we waiting for" I said to Swayam

"Don't you want to pack things for you? Do you want to look ugly?" Swayam said laughing at me

"Don't make fun of me that time I didn't knew luggage would be that burdensome, and I will buy everything wherever we end up staying and now you earn handsomely so I can shop and waste few bucks of yours" I said blinking to him

"Oh look at you we are still not married and you have planned for shop. When will you grow up Sharon?" Swayam said

"Never, and now run otherwise Rey will catch us he will be here soon" I spoke unaware of the fact that Swayam already knew Rey and Kriya were also running away.

We climbed the ladder down and crossed the gate. Then I realized that I was cheating Rey and I stopped.

"Wait we should tell Rey that he and me can't marry and I am marrying you" I told Swayam

"Are you made or what as if he will say yes Sharon I am happy that you are with your ex-husband again" Swayam said with irritated voice

"Ok don't taunt I was just saying" I replied

And we finally reached a hotel in Jaipur and booked a room. Swayam inquired about marriage register office timings and all. We decided that we will register our marriage first and then rest of the things.

In the morning we reached the court and our case no. was called for marriage and we entered the room. All the formalities were done then register wanted two witnesses and we didn't have that.

"What will we do now and where will witness come from. I told you bribe two waiters in the hotel but you never understand my point of view of seeing things and see now from where we will arrange the witness" I told panicking to Swayam

"Relax don't panic Sharon I have already arranged the witness and they will be here any moment" Swayam said

"Then where are they? We have to get married we are here then why are they late?" I asked

He just smiled seeing me like this because there were hardly any time when I panic.

Just then I heard a voice'

"Relax Sharon I and Kriya will sign the witness column for you both but only on one condition" Rey spoke

And I was totally shocked and literally my through had dried down. I wasn't able to speak anything.

"Rey-Rey I was to tell you this but this swayam didn't gave me a chance to tell you anything and took me here, look Rey I know you will be hurt but try an understand I love him only" I said to Rey

And to my surprise Rey was smiling and so was Kriya. I thought the shock of seeing me like this would have made him like that but then I turned to see Swayam and to my shock he was also smiling and high fived Rey. It was then I realized that Rey and Swayam both had made this plan and that's why Swayam didn't allow me call Rey but Why was the question in my mind and most importantly my mind was not working that time due to shocks I was getting one after another.

"Relax Sharon I know you love him only and I realized that long back when you yourself hadn't realized it. Now I will sign on one condition that you and Swayam will sign in the witness column for my and Kriya's marriage" Rey spoke

And that came one more shock to me. What was all this going on? And how did they plan everything without my knowledge. I was totally shock and didn't know what to react now.

Just then Swayam spoke hitting me in my hand "You only used to say that I wasn't adventurous and marriages should be fun then here is the full of fun marriage for you"

"You Jerk this was not adventurous but it could have killed me gosh Swayam this was the most shocking surprise I have ever got in my life but how did all this happen" I asked to them

And then they told me everything and we finally got married.

Back to present

"So this was our story "After break up in love" first we got into relationship then got married and then got broke off and fights and finally we realized that we were the only ones who could handle each other and in process we ended up making one more happy couple Rey and Kriya. If you want to hear their story then we can give you all their no. also" Swayam said laughing

Wow that was something really shocking and full of surprises all the way and we have this rocking couple who celebrate love every minute they breathe.

"Well I have never heard such a love story that you both have and now I know why Karan Sir's eyes sparkled when he told us that he knew one couple who can describe break up better them anyone else in the world" Nehal told them and we all got up

"Karan sir is really sweet to us" Sharon spoke

"Well guys it was very nice meeting you both, I hope you both also find a love in your respective life like us. And keep this card with you and come home one day for dinner and we can have more blast there" Swayam said

"Ya sure you both are coming next week only because next week we are celebrating our re-marriage anniversary and you both are invited there" Sharon said

"Oh ya I forgot that" Swayam spoke suddenly.

And Sharon was glaring at him. He was done for good now because Sharon was to get revenge as soon as they reach home. Well that will also be a nice story to hear from them as to what happened after they left from here.

"It was totally our pleasure sir to meet you and we will sure be there" I said shaking hands with them

"Yes same feeling for me also" Nehal said while shaking hands with them

"Well young men shaking hands is very old fashion and you both are very young and our generation believes in hug because in that way we can feel each other's heart. And what kind of a boy you are yar you have two pretty girls standing here and you don't want to hug any of them. Well I don't know about you but I am not going let off this chance go" Swayam spoke and hugged Nehal and kissed her on cheeks and hands and hugged me also and patted my back in appreciation for being a patient listener I guess.

"Well sir I also don't want to miss the chance to hug you both" Nehal said and again hugged Swayam and then Sharon.

Well why I would let off the opportunity to hug Sharon. She was one fairy we would like to be every day in our life. I also hugged her and kissed her cheeks and right hand as gesture.

We bid final adieu to each other and left from there.

"Well this called love I guess" Nehal said

"I don't know what is it but I surely want somebody like Sharon in my life" I said

"Ya same here if I find somebody like Swayam then my life is set" Nehal said

We both laughed at our thoughts and took the cab to go off home as it was pretty late now almost 10. Being a gentleman I asked to the cab driver to take us first to Nehal's home so that she can reach home first safely and then I was off for my home.

So this was our meeting with a couple that really forced us to share our experience with them and their story. May be we say we need true love and then comes break up. But if your love is true that break up would just be a break as it was in case of Swayam and Sharon.

With this said and done, I Pratik and My partner Nehal bid adieu to you all on a note that "We will pray that you all get a perfect partner for yourselves just like Swayam and Sharon got to gather after all the situations they saw to gather and alone"

Sometimes we don't know what love is but we fall in love without knowing that it's love and when you realize that it's love sometimes the person you love may have left you but trust us when we say that if you ever loved that person truly he/she will come back to you and if it doesn't happen then be assured that your true love is yet to come in our life and it will surely come one day Swayam and Sharon are the prime examples of that before you all.

Finally good bye and we will see you all with another story till then bye'

 

Special Note:

I just read few comments where i saw that many people have found similarities between this story and some episode came in Teri Meri Love Story. So I am here to clarify that unfortunately I have not seen any episodes of Teri Meri Love Story so i don't know what is similar or whole story is similar to that one. I had read this story in one of the books in my college library and its author was Neil O'Brain unfortunately I don't remember the name of book but It was on love stories which had total 4 Love stories by 4 authors and this was 3rd in that. But in the book it was presented as emotional journey so this lesbo stuff or marriage stuff whether its in start or in end was totally entered in story when I and Nehal thought of developing the plot because marriage was giving story a new touch. So no offence to what was telecasted in Teri Meri Love Story, I never intended to copy somebody's work. If by any chance there are similarities between the two then i beg my sincere appologies to all who think it's not worth it.  I am sorry again if any body felt bad or thought it was copied work trust me I have not watched a single episode of Teri Meri Love story.


Pratik

 

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Hey Mr CA & My dear Partner πŸ˜³πŸ€—

I am here express my feelings after reading this Oneshot written by two of my close friends...and not to forget two amazingly awesome writers ...who fortunately write exclusive;y on Swaron...One is the master of amusing and amazing concepts..he can just do wonders to even an ordinary scene with the amazing detailing in his writing...Other one is Uncrowned queen of twists and turns...ultimate fanfiction writer...so this OS was destined to be OUT OF THE WORLD...πŸ˜ƒ 

I know i was supposed to edit my comment on this oneshot long back...i don't want to ruin this beautiful thread by mentioning about my past week...both of u know the problem...and i seriously wanted to do justice this wonderful work of yours...but i think it was my mistake to think so...its not possible to find words for this OS...the amusing concept...extra-ordinary execution...none my words can do justice to this work...still i m trying to express my feeling about this GIFT of urs...

Well..Umm...haa...hmmm...see how difficult task it is to find words for ur work..the concept was amazing..NO DOUBT about it...but guys...the EXTRA AMAZING ..FANTASTICALLY SUPERB AWESOME EXECUTION... U just nailed mahn...SALUTE πŸ˜³


The style of story telling..sigh ...its so different..unique..fresh...and effective...Prateek..u wanted me to  co-write this OS with u...that time i couldn't do that becoz of hectic schedule...i didnt want to write something with u half-heartedly...but now...i am so glad that i didn't write it with u ..i couldn't have done justice to the concept like u guys did...its way beyond my thoughts...

THE CONCEPT..Love..Union..separation..reunion...so many times we have heard this story..but the way of telling the story ..and the twists were just amazing...I really loved the way u guys went to MEET SWARON...for ur project...and I AM GUSSA ON U ..FOR NOT TAKING ME WITH U  πŸ˜‘

U flirted with Sharon..my beautiful partner was blushing in front of Swayam..and i was not a part of this...arghhh...😑

Anyways...i will deal with u guys later...

Coming to the Sharon's Fun Wedding funda..it was so cute and hillarious..poor Swayam was coolie...πŸ˜†

"Nothing much 5-6 perfumes and 8 body orders, 2 of my favorite make up kits, 8 lips sticks and nail paints, 10 pairs of western clothes and 5 pairs of Indian clothes and some jewelry and other important stuff" she said smiling at me

"What what is the need to take so many things with you? And we are not going on a trip babes we are running away and that to for 1-2 days because we know our parents are gone accept us" I said

"So you mean I should stink all the away and not take perfumes or body orders, and clothes are makeup are necessary for a girl even if it's for a half day you understand that" she said


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The reason behind their separation was just so hilarious πŸ˜†πŸ˜†πŸ˜†..JULIET..A dog...r u guys real...poor SWARON...πŸ˜†πŸ˜†πŸ˜†πŸ˜†


i loved the way u made urselves the characters of this OS...AMUSING ...I loved YOUR conversations with SWARON...


"Explanations are given to those who believe you and Swayam thought I was lesbian which a big shock was for me. And you know what I thought why does he think like that when he knows how wild our nights were" she said smirking

But I could make out that she had lost faith in Swayam at that time.

And suddenly Nehal pushed me on my elbow and said "will you please stop asking her questions can't you see she feeling odd?"

"Are you mad can't you see what she is saying and blinking and smirking. She is enjoying this one and being called lesbian. Hey are you one? Then you can try her I guess she won't mind and neither will swayam now." I said to Nehal

Nehal got shocked on hearing this and hit me on my feet with her high heel shoe which really hurt me and I just stood up shouting ouch.


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Go Nehal..Girl power RocksπŸ˜†πŸ˜†πŸ˜†πŸ˜‰πŸ˜‰πŸ‘πŸ‘

The Reunion was equally amusing ..i loved the way kriyansplayed their roles in the game ofjealousy ..aha...i LOVED sharon's characterization here ..she was so full of life and hilarious...2nd time shaadi bhi bhag ke..U ROCK GIRL...πŸ˜†πŸ˜†πŸ˜†Finally Swayam was wild enough..and Sharon wise enoughπŸ˜‰..loved her reply abt swayam's question on her luggage..smark girlπŸ˜†πŸ˜†πŸ˜†


I got it after 5 years of relationship and 3 years of break off finally Mr. Swayam Shekhawat had developed some wildness in him.

"Let's go then what are we waiting for" I said to Swayam

"Don't you want to pack things for you? Do you want to look ugly?" Swayam said laughing at me

"Don't make fun of me that time I didn't knew luggage would be that burdensome, and I will buy everything wherever we end up staying and now you earn handsomely so I can shop and waste few bucks of yours" I said blinking to him

"Oh look at you we are still not married and you have planned for shop. When will you grow up Sharon?" Swayam said

"Never, and now run otherwise Rey will catch us he will be here soon" I spoke unaware of the fact that Swayam already knew Rey and Kriya were also running away.


I loved the way u hugged swaron.awww...

"Well sir I also don't want to miss the chance to hug you both" Nehal said and again hugged Swayam and then Sharon.

Well why I would let off the opportunity to hug Sharon. She was one fairy we would like to be every day in our life. I also hugged her and kissed her cheeks and right hand as gesture.😳


Prateek's dream came true of hugging Sharon..and partner..ahem ahemπŸ˜†πŸ˜†πŸ˜†


LOVED LOVED LOVED LOVED THIS ONESHOT...JUST AMAZING..OUT STANDING..BRILLIANT ...WAY ABOVE MY WORDS OF APPRECIATION ...U BOTH ROCK...Hope to see u guys team up again😳


Thanx for this AMAZING GIFT...The surprise made my day πŸ˜ƒπŸ€—


Love 

Deep

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Gosh bhai that was so epic...A total paisa wasool update and I LOVED reading it.
I must say a very fresh, great and innovative way of narration which added extra spark to the story.
really like the way story started with u and Nehal been given an assignment and then then entry of Prof Karan Malik who introduced you to the heavenly couple SwaRon. I really liked how u sketched the characters in detail like mentioning small thing such as Sharon glaring at swayam in between and swayam knowing what she wants before her saying..it was so sweet to read and reminded me why I loved swaron in the first place.πŸ‘πŸΌ It was so amazing imagining swaron telling their own love story and the expressions you described were very sweet as well as amusing at times.
Finally they started telling the story and I laughed and went awww...at the same time when Sharon said she wanted to run away and then get married...lol she is so cute. You made her very lively which I liked. Finally swayam had to agree to her demands hah no one can blame him for that well. The luggage part was also funny poor swayam had to carry so much weight and she packed so many things haahahhπŸ˜† swayam much have had a back ache for sure.🀣 then his line

"You guys seemed to be very happy then what happened ahead" I asked Swayam
"Well after marriage what do you expect dude…. We had our first night obviously" she said blinking at me
I and Nehal had no answer to this actually we both became red for the first time.
"He wants to know why we separated honey" Swayam said without controlling his laughter…

can't believe she that out loud πŸ€£and then swayam's reply *swoons*☺️
It is understandable that since they got married early so being young blood they started focusing on their career and in doing so stopped spending time with each other and then came the entry of juliet. I have to be honest since her entry I was suspicious but my suspicious ended when swayam though her being a lesbo. hahahah Sharon a lesbo!🀣🀣 only u can come up with something like that but it was so damn funny when swayam confronted her and she ended her relationship this totally cracked me upπŸ˜†. who breaks up for such a small reason? but then again we are talking about Sharon Riaprakash. So in short their break up was a humorous situation for me.
finally they met again after three long years and I was like why is rey her BF but u had other plans up ur sleeve. When sharon was ruining the date I was like go girl go and then poor swayam! Nicole threw cake at his face he must be cursing agreeing to go on a date arranged by sharon.πŸ˜† But swayam didn't waste a second han and went on a date with kriya and jealous Sharon was a treat to read. when u mentioned Juliet died I was like may be she is a dog and she indeed was a dog and then I cracked up so bad when swayam said she left me for a dog.🀣🀣
when kriya told him everything I was like poor guy. his wife left him for a dog, got hit by cake from Nicole and when he was about to propose kriya she told him she loved someone else. he should have just stick with sharon.🀣 But rey and kriya were such good friends at least they knocked some sense into him and he went into her room through balcony just like earlier and then they once again ran away and got married...a complete circle it was such a pleasure to read.πŸ‘
then in the end swayam saying he forgot their re-marriage anniversary and sharon glaring at him was so adorable...hahah πŸ˜†she would tell him once they get home but he could always turn the table around.πŸ˜‰πŸ˜›
I can't thank you enough for writing this. You really put my TanHa cravings to rest. I have such great time reading it and then couldn't stop myself from commenting. Thank you, Thank you, Thank you so much.I didn't mind the length at all the more I get to read the better. You have really penned down the whole story in so simple yet so captivating manner also giving it our own special touchesπŸ‘β­οΈ. It was an extremely enjoyable OS and the fresh style of narration like telling the story as if it was one of your experience was really good to read. All in all I loved every single bit of the OS.  Once again thank you for writing it.
keep writing and rocking!

P.S: you urself are one of the most amazing persons I have met on IF.

Cheers
-Your pocket size bomb sister Baz

P.P.S: I had to write ur comment three times...two times I accidentally pressed backspace and it all disappeared..but I wanted to reply today itself.😊

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Comment of Nehal for our work πŸ˜›πŸ˜›

I am really sorry to comment on this OS so late. I know i had to do it long time back... but I am late.

But as we say... Late is better than never. πŸ˜† So here i am... πŸ˜‰

Hmm where exactly to begin with...😳  I must we had a good time with SWARON. Right Pratik πŸ€£

Coming to the OS now. this is surely one of the best OS i have read and the longest one too.πŸ˜‰

The best part of the OS was the narration style of it. I really liked the outcome of this OS. Very well penned down...

Nothing new about it.. You every work is a master piece.πŸ˜ƒ

Hmm... Now coming to Sharon in this FF i love her... Gosh! she is right i believe one should experience fun in their marraige. Every one should try running away and getting married...

How much fun it would be... 

"Nothing much 5-6 perfumes and 8 body orders, 2 of my favorite make up kits, 8 lips sticks and nail paints, 10 pairs of western clothes and 5 pairs of Indian clothes and some jewelry and other important stuff" she said smiling at me

"What what is the need to take so many things with you? And we are not going on a trip babes we are running away and that to for 1-2 days because we know our parents are gone accept us" I said

"So you mean I should stink all the away and not take perfumes or body orders, and clothes are makeup are necessary for a girl even if it's for a half day you understand that" she said


Poor Sharon i dont know why is Swayam so angry on her though she is carrying only minimal luggage with her. Don't he know a girl always needs to look good. πŸ˜• 
If i would have been in Sharon's place i would have carried matching Scandals and hand bags and not forget matching nail paints along. πŸ˜³

Swayam lack brains... How could he think she is a lesbian. Poor sharon she was just taking care of Juliet. πŸ˜†

And then comes Rey and Kria. They should leave dancing and start a Jodi maker company. It will me a major flop... πŸ˜†

chale the Swayam Sharon ko milane... yahaan toh khud hi bhaag ne ki tayaari main hain...🀣🀣🀣

Are you mad can't you see what she is saying and blinking and smirking. She is enjoying this one and being called lesbian. Hey are you one? Then you can try her I guess she won't mind and neither will swayam now." I said to Nehal

Nehal got shocked on hearing this and hit me on my feet with her high heel shoe which really hurt me and I just stood up shouting ouch.


I hope you got the answer for your question Pratik... πŸ˜†


And then the reunion...i loved that part...πŸ˜†πŸ˜† We may get to hear one more hilarious story from them if they fight all over again on the fact that Swayam forgot their second marraige anniversary.πŸ˜†

It was fun working with you. Though i did nothing at all. πŸ˜³

PS: Those who all feel it similar with TMLS... I haven't seen this so no clue about it. It was not an act to copy or so. But sometimes it gets similar to others as a coincidence. This work is sure an original one. πŸ˜ƒ 

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Comments of Himani on the OS

Hey dude...😊

sorry for being late...
as i promised to give my comment on the same day...
but kya karu...my system!!!

now coming to the os...it was awesome...amazing!!!
A new nd fresh concept...i luvd the flow of the story.
As you dont like sad stories...it was obvious that the story gonna be hilarious wid your awesome comic stuff.
you and your partner did a fantastic job.
I must say this was the most unpredictable os i had read on swaron.

It is totally different story in terms of concept...
narrative style is awesome..
i would luv to read more in this style .
The execution is amazing...you are brilliant as a writer dude!!

You must be wondering why m not talking about the story line.. 
Dude..The story is fab..and i dont want to ruin it with my lame comment.
nd you very well know how i felt after reading this great piece of wrk!!!
Do write more!!

Urs Buddy
Himani
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ill read surely at night and comment too! :)
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res plzzz
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
Plz join
 
 
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It's long.. So reserved.. as of now. Will unres it tom πŸ˜Š
Unres..
Well, it was long but definitely worth it. While reading the story, I was totally unaware of the twist. Juliet was a dog came as the biggest shock to me. Concept wise, it was fab, very different and really nicely penned..
Coming to the story, SwaRon had the most unusual story to tell.. The plot, the twists, the narrating style, everything was natural...The way they got married, then divorced because of a small misconception, and then they met after three long years and reunited when Swayam realized he was still in love with her and when Sharon realized the same. And Swayam is so sweet, he decided to act wildly towards the end for his lady love..  Rey and Kriya acted as the catalysts here. And when I first read about ShaRey the couple, and further when you mentioned that they were going to get married I was 😲.. But thank god.. everything was back to normal... 
It was beautiful..
It was rustic and simple and that added to the beauty of it. I'm actually running out of  words. So I guess I'll stop here...
All in all, an awesome OS πŸ˜›
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