*~Short-Story: Deewane (Part 2, PG. 6) - Page 4

Very well written! Do continue when u get the time! 👏 👏 👏

brilliant part....eagerly waiting for the next part 😃 😃

Originally posted by: sweetu144

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ur beginning is just amazing... its beautiful..
you really have a talent...as i was reading it i realised how naturally the words flowed and how powerful and rhythmic they sounded it was...gr8!!
this ff is absaloutly amazing...its WOW!!!
plss contniue soon!!
luv sweetu
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i m also thinking the same way...pls do continue

plz continue....
love it 😛

Muskan

Omg reading this fiction was like reading a lovely and beautiful fairytale… which one would want never to end!!!! Hunny u rocked with this fiction…I want to read more…of it because it seems too astonishing!
People do continue coz I want to come back for more!!

Cheers take care…and I look forward to more!!

the start is very good plzzzzzzzz continue

Wow, thank you so much everyone for the wonderful response, and I'm sorry that I didn't continue for sometime now - I've been all over the place. Once again, I don't think this will be a very long part..!

A short recap from where I stopped:

Not able to stop himself, Jai raised his hand, and touched Bani's soft lips. Chill ran through Bani's spine; looking right into Jai's nashile eyes! "Bani..." Jai whispered, though it seemed like he was talking so normally. "Mr. Walia, Yeh aap-" Jai blinked his eyes, feeling a little sleepy now, "Sssshhh..."

Part 2 -

A flush of emotions rushed into Bani's head, her lips trembled and hands shook. Though Jai was in a drunk state, his eyes clearly met Bani. It seemed like a perfect night, for anything, or something to happen. The light in their room blinked several of times, and then turned off again. "Mr. Walia.." "Jai.." he replied back. "Bani mein tumse kuch -" he paused "kuch baat karna cha ta hu."

"Abhi? Mr. Waila aapko aaram ki zaroorat hai, aapko koi hosh nahie hai." Bani was still trembling, as Jai's finger ran through her hair. 'Mr. Walia ko aaj ho kya gaya hai' Bani thought to herself. "Bani, mujhe maaf kardo."

"Maafi? Kis liye Mr. Walia?" "Bani, mujhe bol ne do. Zindagi mein phele baar mujhe lag raha hai ki meri vaje se tumari, yah kisi zindagi..." He had no more words to finish the sentence off. The rain continued to beat its rythm as he let out his heart to Bani. Not knowing how to react, Bani gently took him over to the bed and he sat down. "Mr. Walia, mein aabhi aayie." Before Jai could stop her, and it wasn't possible because of the state he was in, she took off and went out. The room was still dark, and the candle carefully sat beside Jai.

Outside, Bani walked down the stairs, remembering what happened. "Mr. Walia ko kya ho gaya hai? Mujhe kya ho gaya hai? Meine soocha tha..." Bani entered Rano's room and sat beside her. Her mind flood with reasons and explainations of what happened, and the same happened with Jai. For the first time, the thought of Bani had put Jai to sleep. Even Bani, restless.

The next morning, Bani walked into her room with a cup of tea. Jai slept like a small child, cuddled up. Quietly she walked beside him and gave him a blanket. While he slept, she unpacked his bags and went downstairs. Little did she know that Jai was awake, looking at the the whole time. Still trying, or thinking of a way to tell her what he wanted to say.

No one was at home except Dadi. Ranveer at work, Rano, Saahil, and Anu at collage. Jigyasa as always, at her kitty parties. Bani sat alone at the breakfast table, fixing things up. "Bani, meri baat katham nahie hui thi..." Startled, Bani dropped the plate. "Aap" she quickly neeled down to pick up up the mess. Fortunate or unfortunatly for Jai, a peice of glass pricked into Bani's finger. Though, Jai didn't figure that out for a while.

Its little again, and I'm sorry about that, but I will continue soon. And the nxt part will be long, and will wrap up the little fan fiction, hopefully! 😊

Take care,

and please give in your comments,

Mallika-

Originally posted by: nellie_2

please continue!!!!! its so sweet!!!! you are such a good writer!!!!! Just love the fact jai is drunk!!!!!!! 😆 hes always better drunk!!!! 😆

hehe, yes..he should always stay drunk! 😆 Should I get him drunk again, maybe if i write again!? 😆

Originally posted by: Lima

i m also thinking the same way...pls do continue

Sweetu, thanks so much..the words meant a lot to me! 👏😃 And thank you Lima! Please keep reading 😊

Originally posted by: xsimzxchickx

Omg reading this fiction was like reading a lovely and beautiful fairytale… which one would want never to end!!!! Hunny u rocked with this fiction…I want to read more…of it because it seems too astonishing!
People do continue coz I want to come back for more!!

Cheers take care…and I look forward to more!!

Awww simz, thanks sooo much! 😆 Didn't realize it was that good...😳 I did update, hopefully it was just as good 😆

Thank you hun,

Mallika-