mY dEfleCtiVE ShaDe GamE oVEr (level TWO)!!! - Page 3

hmmmmm... DARKNIGHT......
its the main problem!!!!!!!!!!!

aap sub suggest karo kay kya karun!!!!!!!!!!

c gadhadada.....

i m in THINKING process CHICK.....
TWO more  levels...... more mind n work load....😉
i'll think.....

please yaar don't think about finish........

ur story reached only at INTERVAL.......

please try to make CLIMAX with more suspense.....

sumthing like abhi to puri picture baaki hai mere dost😆😆😆😆😆

i really enjoy........

ok for uu m not mind at blood nd DAYA's situation.......

jo v hai bs serve krdo👏👏👏

really good story
waiting 4 the next level😊
Edited by nimi697 - 13 years ago

Really nice, gadhadada. I felt really sad for Daya.
I really liked this sentence:

"and especially after that incident' DAYA was very quiet' his laughter and spontaneous nature was bit slow down'. He came xtra closed to ABHIJEET'. and only ABHIJEET handled him very well after that experience' ABHIJEET as well DAYA did not discuss anything about their experience'"

And this part too...😃

at last' ABHIJEET gave his hand to DAYA on that small exit'. DAYA did not grab his hand'. ABHIJEET shocked'

DAYA: nahi boss' tum log jao'.(in rash) Main aaj isay chorun ga nahi'.

ABHIJEET(in xtreme tension): DAYA nahi' plz' hath pakro mera'.

DAYA tried to untied ABHIJEET hand tight grip'.

ABHIJEET(in wet voice): DAYA'. aa jaa' plz' main mar jaonga'.. yaar' plz' hum baad mein dekhein gay'. Plz yaar'.

I really liked the story. 😃😃 Eagerly waiting 4 the next level....plz post it soon...and yaar, please don't end the story so fast...u can end it after 2 or 3 more levels 😃😃 It will be suspenseful

And plz make the next level lil' different from this one 😊

Other than that, REALLY great story
and keep up the outstanding work =)


Edited by notepad697 - 13 years ago

 hmmmmmm..... my nerves felt pressure and my hair standing up.... not for standing aviation😉...... but in tension....

tons of THANKS to NOTEPAD.... NIMI n SHIVANI...... but really my shoulder now felt that load which raised every minute from all URs high bar of expectations........

hmmmmmm..... sum ppl think.... that i must continue.... 2 or 3 more levels...... sum thought about in nxt level the situation will be different.... sum did not like that bloodshed.... and specially TWO of my READERs really turned my head into a very different side......

i m really in trouble.... BOSS..... ab kya hoga......!!!!
mera khayal hay mujhy TRIO say madad leni paraygi😉......
chalo.... dekhtay hain..... kya hota hay!!!

again a HEARTIEST THANX to all my ACTIVE and SILENT READERS.... specially SHIVANI....  NEEME DII.... NIMI... NOTEPAD.... DARKNIGHT... RASHIDA.... SHREELA.... POOJA.... NISHA.... SAADRITA DII....  STAR571.... CHICK.... and last but not least.... AANDROMEDA DII etc.....

still waitin for UR SUGGESTIONs.....

really THANX and OBLIGED all U ppl.....

hey PPL.....


could ALL of U be prepared for the nxt level which would be more freaky... bloodsheded.... and weird.... xtreme tension n pain would be there....

if U all are ready... so then i'll POST it.... otherwise NO...

give UR PREP skedule

me waitin

I m reeally waiting for u next level gadhadada......i want to read story which is ur own mind creation...u alredy prepared with ur next level..then post here...without any furture changes....

m truly prepare myself 4 reading such story.........please post soon......