Dream come true? -RN OS contest winning entry;2/13

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Posted: 15 years ago
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Hi everybody,
Wishing everybody a very happy Valentine's Day 😃😃😃
To make your special day more enjoyable (!!😆) I am posting my entry to the RN one-shot contest held recently at the RPFC. To those who are not a part of the FC, let me proudly gloat that my entry is the winning entry of the contest (and certainly not the only entry😆)....



I would like to thank everyone who wished me for the win and I am humbled by your show of appreciation to something that was penned down during times of random musings.... No seriously, I am still at a loss to understand how I won.... 😕😕😕

Feel free to post your comments (both good and bad) on what you thought about the entry and I will look forward to any healthy debates on how you think I could improve it.... And of course it is not limited to only RN fans; anybody with a passion for reading (and writing) can comment on it! I know it's not much but will be waiting for your comments...

Oh and silent readers, dont forget the 'like' button..... 😃

Warning: Strictly 18+ rating..... Kids out RIGHT NOW.... 😆😆😆


KMA

One fine Saturday evening, 6.30pm

Captain Shekhawat's bathroom

Steam rose and clouded the small shower cubicle as jets of hot water pounded on the hard body standing underneath the shower head. Water streamed through jet black hair as muscled arms vigorously rinsed the shampoo off, the biceps bulging with the movement. The water cascaded down the rippling muscles attached to the spine of the masculine body as a carefree voice floated over and above the mist created by the steam.

"Bheegey hont teri... Pyaasa dil mera...

Lage abr sa... Mujhe tan tera..."

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Same evening, same time

Captain Shekhawat's living-room

Quiet but hurried knocks reverberated through the empty living-room for a couple of minutes before the door was pushed open tentatively. Naina peeped in uncertainly, wondering why Captain Rajveer's quarters was open and yet he hadn't answered the door. She looked around the living-room, looking for the familiar presence of Captain Rajveer's tall form but was even more surprised to find him nowhere in sight. Did he by any chance step out leaving his quarters open? thought Naina and immediately rubbished it as ridiculous. Rajveer Sir knew how sensitive the times were and he was not someone to be so careless. Kahin unhe kuch ho tho nahi gaya.. her thoughts wandered, thinking of the worst.

Puzzled yet concerned, she stepped in cautiously, realizing that if Rajveer Sir was in harm, it made no sense for her to blindly walk into any traps. Her year-old training at KMA came handy as she systematically checked out the living-room, making sure there was nobody lurking behind the lengthening shadows. When she was fully sure that there was not a soul in the room other than her, she made her way towards the closed bedroom door.

She was about to knock on the bedroom door, suddenly nervous about stepping into Rajveer Sir's personal sanctuary when she was stilled by muffled sounds audible through the closed door. She pressed her ears against the door and waited patiently but for the world of her, could not decipher the sounds she heard. Her concern mounting, she silently pushed the door an inch and ran a thorough eye through everything in sight, looking for anything out of the ordinary.

When she found nothing to increase her alarm level, she pushed open the door and stepped inside, aware of the darkness in the room due to the drawn drapes. Faint light bathed the room in a warm and mellow shade from the table-lamp on the night-stand beside Rajveer's bed. Naina quickly averted her eyes from the bed, her heartbeats racing as she caught sight of a set of discarded tracks and tshirt strewn on the bed. The next thing to catch her eye was a pair of neatly folded tracks and vest lying on the back of the armchair and at the same time her ears registered the sound of running water from the bathroom. She willed her heart to calm down from the obvious effect of being in Rajveer's bedroom, catching sight of his discarded clothes, as she frowned in concentration at the sounds coming from the bathroom.

She heaved a sigh of relief as she realized that along with the sound of running water she could hear Rajveer Sir's voice singing out of tune and a moment later laughter bubbled through her as she realized the absurdity of the situation. Here she was, stealthily staking out Rajveer's quarters fearing some intruder's presence while the man in question was happily singing in his shower, unaware of the world outside!

Her brain commanded her to make a move and wait in his living-room but a child-like curiosity stopped her, wishing to know what he was singing so outrageously. A minute later when she heard the lyrics of the song, her cheeks flamed and her body warmed with the reaction induced by his words.

"Kabhi mere saath... koi raat guzaar...

Tujhe subah tak mein... karoon pyaar... oh oh ohho..."

Even as her conscious mind screamed at her to leave the place to avoid any embarrassing situations, her legs failed to move, as her heart pounded with passionate feelings getting aroused in her. She closed her eyes and fought a losing battle with her suddenly hot libido as decidedly wicked images flew past her closed eyes, spawned off by the sensual song falling on her ear-drums, even though sung off-key.

"Tu na soye aaj... main na soun aaj...
Tujhe dekhoon aaj... tujh mein khoun aaj...

Kabhi mere saath... koi raat guzaar...

Tujhe subha tak mein... karoon pyaar... oh oh ohho..."

Unaware of the sound of water stopping, her eyes flew open only when she heard the bathroom door being slammed open. Involuntarily she turned to face the bathroom and gasped aloud as the half-naked torso of Rajveer Sir emerged from the steam like a Greek God appearing out of a shroud of mist.

"Naina, tum yahaan? Kya baath hai?" came the casual voice of Raj even as he looked on with a puzzled expression on his face.

Naina's eyes almost popped out as she took in the sight of a towel-clad Rajveer greedily, even as some rapidly fading voice spoke inside her head, asking her to turn around and close her eyes.

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The hands that were wiping the wet hair with a towel stilled, as Raj heard the sound of a gasp and looked up. He was frozen in his steps as he saw Naina standing in front of him, her face starting to turn a bright crimson as she kept looking at him unblinkingly. "Naina, tum yahaan? Kya baath hai?" he asked casually before taking in her stunned look.

Confused for a moment as to why she was looking so dazed, he looked at himself and his eyes widened in shock the next moment. He was standing in front of his cadet, clad in just a towel!

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Silence echoed in Captain Rajveer's bedroom for a few minutes as the occupants were frozen on their feet, neither able to react to the situation that Destiny decided to put them in. Naina could not avert her eyes from Rajveer's torso, even though she knew the impropriety of her actions. The bronzed skin stretched tight over toned and chiseled muscles screamed out to her to come closer and touch them, and she had to clench her fists together to stop herself. Droplets of water fell from his hair onto his neck and trailed a sensuous path down his gleaming torso, making Naina's mouth parched. Oh, how she wished to lick off the droplets from the glorious body in front of her! Even as a part of her brain blanched at the lusty thought, her body seemed to have a mind of its own. Tension seeped into her muscles even as she thrust her pink tongue out to moisten her suddenly dry lips.

Rajveer's eyes narrowed at the seeming tightening of Naina's body. Initial embarrassment had given way to a feeling to smugness as he looked at her. Aaj nahi tho kal yeh sab dekh na hii padega. Kyun na aaj? he thought wickedly as he caught sight of Naina checking him out. His body heated up when Naina's tongue darted out to lick her dry lips and that was all he could do to not groan out aloud. When he was surer of his control, Raj took a few steps in Naina's direction.

Naina was jostled out of her fantasy-land when she saw Rajveer moving towards her. Panic took hold of her suddenly as she willed her legs to run from there. But in her state of heightened senses, all she could manage were a clumsy couple of steps back, almost as if involuntarily backing off from a predator. Raj understood her intentions of running away and before Naina could think, he reached her in a blink of an eye, pushing her against the wall. He saw her wide eyes staring back at him, but the enlarged pupil of her eyes and her breath coming out as short gasps from her parted lips told him what he needed to know. My my.. Cadet Naina Ah.. Singh is getting aroused! he thought with a satisfied grin.

Naina couldn't move her arms or legs; Rajveer was so close to her that she feared any movement from her would result in a skin contact. And she was not willing to trust herself from pouncing on Raj once she feels his skin against hers. She looked at him bewildered, unsure of what he was going to do, and was met back by a piercing and heated glance which seemed to tell her what exactly he was going to do.

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Rajveer's hand came up to caress Naina's cheeks even as she shuddered at the contact with her skin. She felt she might burst from the sexual tension coiling in her belly as she leaned inadvertently into his touch.

"Why are you here Cadet? Do you know the consequence of entering an officer's room without his permission?" Raj whispered huskily, unable to keep his own arousal from his voice.

Naina gasped hearing Rajveer's tenor; she had never seen this side to Raj! The fingertips that were caressing her cheek bone drifted downwards towards her lush lips, as her heartbeat quickened.

"Bolo, tumhe iska anjaam patha hai?", he prodded once more, even as his fingers traced the outline of her lips, rubbing against them erotically. "N-nahi" gasped Naina as she was assaulted by emotions she had never experienced before. "Let me show you", he husked before capturing her lips with his.

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Raj tasted pure heaven as he caught Naina's lips in his, as his hands buried themselves in her hair and brought her flush against his body. He felt a shudder pass through both of them at the electrifying contact even as he nibbled and sipped on her lower lip before sucking it into his mouth. Naina moaned at the sensations coursing through her body, as she involuntarily started kissing him back and her hands automatically came up to rest around his neck. Rajveer's passion went out of control as he heard Naina's pleading moan; he had to taste her! Now!

He fisted her hair and tilted her head up, causing her to gasp in shock at the sudden pull, while he took advantage of her opened mouth and thrust his tongue inside. Naina gasped loudly at the feel of Rajveer's tongue sliding against her own. Raj brought her even closer to himself, if it was humanly possible, as he tasted every inch of her sweet mouth. He swept his tongue inside her mouth before stroking her tongue languidly and sensually. Naina emitted a low and needy moan deep in her throat and its vibrations on his tongue elicited a groan from Rajveer as he devoured her mouth like there was no tomorrow. He sucked her tongue into his mouth and urged her to taste him even as his hands roamed down towards her waist. His hands slipped under her shirt and stroked the warm, satiny skin underneath as she lost herself to the kiss and let her tongue play with his.

When he felt the room spin from lack of oxygen, he bit her lips and pulled away, to catch sight of a flushed Naina, with her eyes closed and drawing stuttering breaths through her swollen and reddened lips. He was about to speak when Naina heard a door slam close-by and jerked her eyes open.

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Her eyes flew open when she heard the bathroom door being slammed open. Oh God, that was all a dream.. But what a dream! she thought as she involuntarily turned to face the bathroom and gasped aloud, as the half-naked torso of Rajveer Sir emerged from the steam like a Greek God appearing out of a shroud of mist.

"Naina, tum yahaan? Kya baath hai?" came the casual voice of Raj, even as her mind raced. Is my day-dream going to come true???

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~Yeti
PS: Don't forget to unreserve your reservations 😆
PPS: There will of course be no sequels to this... it was strictly meant as an OS... 😉
Edited by himalayanyeti - 15 years ago

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Posted: 15 years ago
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simply beautiful.....😳😳😳

totally awesome.....luved it and truly in spirits of V-Day😳😳😳

d presentation was amazing......
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Congratulations on winning the award!!!!!!👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏

Wish you a Very Happy Valentine's Day!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 ❤️ ❤️ ❤️ ❤️ ❤️

The one shot is truly in spirits of Valentine's Day!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏

I had guessed that it was written by you and had no doubts that you would win!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 👍🏼 👍🏼 👍🏼 👍🏼

Not finding Raj, Naina systematically checked out his living room and went into his bedroom!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 😊

Naina was so shocked to hear Raj singing a hot song in the bathroom!!!!!😲 😲 😲 😲 😲

Lagta hai Captain Shekhawat was in a real romantic mood and thats why he was singing such a passionate song!!!!!😉 😉 😉 😉 😉 😊 😊 😊 😊

The song is very nice and perfect for the situation!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

Poor Naina went all numb and passionate feelings aroused in her!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️

Then when Naina saw Raj in a towel she lost her sanity!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😍 😍 😍 😍

Naina had wild thoughts and she wanted to touch him and lick off the droplets from his glorious body!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 Blushing Blushing Blushing Blushing Blushing Blushing

Raj was in a naughty mood and didn't feel shy in front of Naina when caught only in his towel!!!!!😉 😉 😉 😉 😉 😊 😊 😊 😊

I loved Raj regained control and thought ke aaj nahi toh kal yeh sab dekhna hi padega kyun na aaj!!!!!!😉 😉 😉 😉 😛 😛 😛 😛

Raj took the first step towards Naina and trapped her against the wall!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳He sure is attractive and Naina cannot escape!!!!!😉 😉 😉 😉 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳

Seeing Naina's reaction Raj knew that she was getting aroused!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 Blushing Blushing Blushing Blushing Blushing

Raj made Naina go weak in her knees and his fingers caressed Naina's cheeks and then her lips!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳

Raj teased Naina in his husky voice as Naina gasped as she had never seen this side to Raj!!!!!😉 😉 😉 😉 😉 😛 😛 😛 😛

He knew his cadet was head over heels in love with him and thus he didn't hesitate in kissing her!!!!!! 😊 😊 😊 😊 😊

Raj kissed Naina and she responded and the kiss became heated and very passionate!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 Blushing Blushing Blushing Blushing Blushing Blushing

Raj and Naina are soooo romantic and passionate!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 Blushing Blushing Blushing Blushing Blushing Blushing

It was sizzling hot!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 Blushing Blushing Blushing Blushing Blushing Blushing

But the twist was that it all turned out to be a dream!!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 😊

Naina has such erotic ideas in her head regarding her mentor!!!!!Blushing Blushing Blushing Blushing Blushing

Naina had such a hot and wild daydream and she is thinking what a dream!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😍 😍 😍 😍

Will this dream come true was all that Naina was thinking when Raj finally emerged from the bathroom looking like a Greek God??Blushing Blushing Blushing Blushing 😍 😍 😍 😍

Well hopefully this dream does come true!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 👍🏼 👍🏼 👍🏼 👍🏼

This was a superb presentation, great choice of words and very smooth flow of the language!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏

It was outstanding and beautifully written and you deserved the award!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏


Edited by Shaina_b - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Hi Shilpa...

First of all... congratulations on winning the award. You see... your winning entry is the subject matter of the current FC.

Secondly... wish you a very HAPPY VALENTINE'S DAY!!!

However, it was amazing to read it here all over again. and no children in this ff.😆😆😆 All have gone out.

I must say this was a very passionate piece. Something which would suit our RN very much. But it was all Naina's day dream. But what a dream it was. The song was passionate and perfect for the situation. haiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii😍 I'm lost in picturing the scene in my mind.

It was completely different from your usual style of writing... not the way u write Dhoka. And by posting it here, u have given us a perfect Valentine gift.

Raj is sure attractive and Naina cannot escape. And I liked the way Raj regained his control and thought that "AAJ KYUN NAHI" and he took the first step towards her. I have always wanted Raj to take the first step... be it saying I love u or proposing for marriage or even getting a grip over himself and walking towards Naina.😉

What more shall I say... this was a superb presentation, great choice of words and very smooth flow of the language. Keep it up.

Love
Guglu
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Many Congratulations on winning the award. 👏👏👏
The scene that you have dipicted is something that we have all wished would come true. But how could you have made this a dream.
If only Raj would have been so bold then RN would have been together long ago.
Well hopefully you will bring this dream come true in your Fic.
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Hi Shilpa
How r u???
Congratulations once again for winning..U truely deserved it..👏👏👏
Naina really want to b with Raj 24*7..
She was so shocked to know that Raj is in washroom singing a hot song...May b Captain Shekhawat was in real romantic mood n dats why he was singing such a passionate song..😉😉
Poor Naina she was went all numb..Then when she saw Raj in towel she lost all her sanity..Raj was in a naughty mood. He didn't even feel shy when caught only in towel..Instead he made Naina go weak on her kneels..He knew dat his cadet his head over heels in love with him n thus he didn't hesitate in kissing her..
But alas!!! all dis was a dream 😉😆😆..
Naina had such erotic ideas in her head regarding her mentor😆😆..
Wiil this dream come true was all Naina thinking when Raj finally emerged from wash room looking like a Greek God .☺️😍
Bye
Happy Valentine Day to u too.
Edited by suhana_dixit - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Hi yeti di !! 😛
I'm over 18...so can i??? Thank you ! 😛
first of all heartiest congratulations on winning 👏 👏 👏
and a very happy valentines day to you ! 😃
To tell you the truth, i couldnt guess even after stretching my brain cells to their fullest that it was written by you ! 😆 It's completely different from the way you write Dhoka...so may be....
Anyways, coming to the shot, do i need to say it was passionate and romantic....
What shocked me first was Raj's changed nature..."Aaj kyun nahi?".... 😆😆 😆 well,it's not that I didnt like the change in him 😉
And in the end when I realised it was all dream, the thought that crossed my mind was ....
Naina is having all these erotic ideas in her mind regarding Raj??? 😆
Beautifully written....
And you deserved the award !
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Hey Shilpa....this is simply a superb OS...!!! I had no doubts that you would win...!!!

It was an outstanding piece...so every well written...!!!

The first few lines itself were a surprise to me....who wudnt be surprised if the usual Rajveer sang Bhige hoth tere...????😳 And like Mana said... "Aaj kyun nahi "...????

This side of Rajveer is much more appealing...!!!!

And naina's wild day dream.....what do I sy about it...???

But hat's off to you for such a hot idea.... and the over all presentation was just superb....you have written it very neatly....!!!!

This was very much worthy of the award...!!!! Great job....!!!
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Hehe.....I do remember reading this entry after the tym limit of voting was ever....hehe. But I'm glad u won!!

Rajveer singing in the bathroom!!! Whoa....wat a thought!! And then Naina's wild thought....of Raj making her aroused n all....everything was so awesum!! Basically it was a small sequence....but the way u described it all....it was beautiful!! And I loved the idea of it being a day dream....which is may be on its way towards reality!! Who knws?

Overall.....it was gr8 dear!!
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Posted: 15 years ago
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wow...so this ws ur story...!!1?????
i really liked it yaar.... i m happy u won for this story....
its very sizzling HOT..hehehhe... hmmmmmm....
awesome storyline...cudnt made till the end ki its a dream....Naina's wild/HOT day dream...!!!!hehehehe...
now we want some more "romantic scenes" like this in "dhoka" also... 😉 ...hehehehe...
fantastic...do write some more one shots....
Edited by sweet_shona - 15 years ago

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