llScionsll [TBP'FF] Ch6-Pg29 16th Sept'12 UPD! - Page 9

Finally its here!

EEEPPPSSS!

This is a continued reaction at the oh-so-cute RaHi scene that was included! But more on that later!

Hmmm...yeah, no wonder you kinda lost your touch here. Seriously first chapters are such pain to write that one simply wants to pull the hair off the skull! And you lost the data as well? If I had lost the date, I would've most probably chucked the whole FF outta the window cuz I am THAT lazy!

Still, it was a good read. All the characters were introduced with their backgrounds ensuring a problem free path in the future regarding them. They are the same as the show so yeah, it was nice reading them in place of watching them. Super liked KD's intro and that fight of him with Kiya. Totally a scene taken just from the drama. You girl are true to the characters and I respect that SO MUCH! Because these are such imperfectly perfect characters that change in them wouldn't be much accepted, at least by me :P

Don't mind my bluntness but the flow seemed a bit forced and unnatural to me, kinda like so much was packaged in one chapter. But it is just the beginning so I can let it slide. Now that the characters have been properly introduced and their relationships have been established, this won't be the case in the future chapters. Oh god, you must be wanting to kill me for such a lousy comment but don't blame me. It's 7 am and I haven't slept a wink. I've gone crazy with no hyperness (hence no jumping on the bed because the brother is still sleeping :P)

But there was some squealing on my chair! EEEPPPSSS!!!!!!!! The RaHi scene was OMG so short but so impact-full and totally unforgettable for me! OMG! You just made me fall for them even more! <3 His anger at being pointed out by JJ, his frustration of letting Panchi be a part of that mocking and her small gesture of calming him down and his smiling and nodding in return - HAILA! That was so RaHified! If it wasn't a FF, I sooo would've demanded avis and siggies on this scene!

JJ tou gayyo! He is in RA for a mission and he clearly doesn't like the students. The last line had me smiling like a sadist. They are so in for a ride now. I am just too excited to just what is that ancient past and why is JJ so interested in the Scions? Also, how will he find them? Too much mystery revolving around this FF. Can't wait to read more!

P.S - This time tou you gave a kiss for my last comment, next time don't throw jootas for this comment 🤣 Bacha samajh ke maaf kardena :P

P.P.S - 🤗 this special hug for making Piddi defend his KD Bhai. Hayyee...! These two are just meant to be together! 😍 🤣🤣

Oye! I don't always write long comments! Ehsaan faramosh!!! But rest assured, this just has quantity no quality! It's a no sleep kinda comment :P Hopefully, by the time I will wake up you would've replied. Because I need my HOURS of sleep! :D Hopefully no jootas would be waiting for me when I wake up :P

Good night...err...morning? The sun has risen here. I should go sleep -__-

Originally posted by: -Mais-

Finally its here! Oh YES! 🤣 You girl I so pressuring! 😆

EEEPPPSSS! I like Eeeksss better! 🤣

This is a continued reaction at the oh-so-cute RaHi scene that was included! But more on that later!

Well, I realized I didn't include any RaHi scene, and felt BAD like REALLY! 😕 Then when I was writing that part I was like, YES, it will go here!

Hmmm...yeah, no wonder you kinda lost your touch here. Seriously first chapters are such pain to write that one simply wants to pull the hair off the skull! And you lost the data as well? If I had lost the date, I would've most probably chucked the whole FF outta the window cuz I am THAT lazy! You have no idea! I was up till late writing the chapter, and the chapter was SO LONG and decripted! I am so freaking mad! Meri saari thesaurus waali mehnat paani mein gayi!! 😭 😭 I am never writing without charger plugged in again! 😳

Still, it was a good read. All the characters were introduced with their backgrounds ensuring a problem free path in the future regarding them. They are the same as the show so yeah, it was nice reading them in place of watching them. Super liked KD's intro and that fight of him with Kiya. Totally a scene taken just from the drama. You girl are true to the characters and I respect that SO MUCH! Because these are such imperfectly perfect characters that change in them wouldn't be much accepted, at least by me :P

Yes, all the characters are same as in the show, so that it is easier to imagine them. When characters are totally changed and all, it is very hard to understand them. The names make you imagine the face from the show, you really don't wanna imagine KD as a playboy and Ranveer as what KD is. So I prefer them to be the way they are.

Don't mind my bluntness but the flow seemed a bit forced and unnatural to me, kinda like so much was packaged in one chapter. But it is just the beginning so I can let it slide. Now that the characters have been properly introduced and their relationships have been established, this won't be the case in the future chapters. Oh god, you must be wanting to kill me for such a lousy comment but don't blame me. It's 7 am and I haven't slept a wink. I've gone crazy with no hyperness (hence no jumping on the bed because the brother is still sleeping :P)

THANK YOU! This is exactly what I look for from my readers! Did not mind at all, instead appreciated! I love your straightforward critic. I knew it. The chapter looks so forced. Specially because the descriptions are all shortened and I was freaking tired. I was too lazy to do all the work again! I am so sorry! I promise next chapter will be BETTER than this😊 Though I doubt they will meet your expectations! 😆

But there was some squealing on my chair! EEEPPPSSS!!!!!!!! The RaHi scene was OMG so short but so impact-full and totally unforgettable for me! OMG! You just made me fall for them even more! <3 His anger at being pointed out by JJ, his frustration of letting Panchi be a part of that mocking and her small gesture of calming him down and his smiling and nodding in return - HAILA! That was so RaHified! If it wasn't a FF, I sooo would've demanded avis and siggies on this scene!

The RaHi scene was REALLY small, because I found no place to put them in. But well, glad you like it. You are a crazy RaHian LMAO! I am going make Ranveer realize the importance of Panchi's presence in his life. Well, not me, Junglee! 😆 😈 Another spoiler there. Oops!

JJ tou gayyo! He is in RA for a mission and he clearly doesn't like the students. The last line had me smiling like a sadist. They are so in for a ride now. I am just too excited to just what is that ancient past and why is JJ so interested in the Scions? Also, how will he find them? Too much mystery revolving around this FF. Can't wait to read more!

🤣 I was thinking of something catchy for last line. And I was going to add "But the world doesn't go his way, does it?" Blah, did not. Now the mystery is to be sorted in chapters. I have to put my mind into words which going to kill me! Let's see if I can survive through atleast few chapters! 😆

P.S - This time tou you gave a kiss for my last comment, next time don't throw jootas for this comment 🤣 Bacha samajh ke maaf kardena :P

No Jhootas for you Only Hugs and Kisses 🤗!! Go get your sleep! 🤣

P.P.S - 🤗 this special hug for making Piddi defend his KD Bhai. Hayyee...! These two are just meant to be together! 😍 🤣🤣

I am in love with these two! Specially after today's episode!! Yikesss!! Their Bromance has made me go Fanatic! 🤣 LOVE LOVE LOVE them!!

Thank you so much Mais <3

Originally posted by: -Mais-

Oye! I don't always write long comments! Ehsaan faramosh!!! But rest assured, this just has quantity no quality! It's a no sleep kinda comment :P Hopefully, by the time I will wake up you would've replied. Because I need my HOURS of sleep! :D Hopefully no jootas would be waiting for me when I wake up :P

Good night...err...morning? The sun has risen here. I should go sleep -__-

Res!
Jao di mai baat nae karti...
Mera first comment cheen liya...
Gandi bachi!

Originally posted by: *Prachi*

Farah 🤗 First of all, thank you tons for such an amazing comment!! Mwah <3

I am so glad you liked my FF Intro!! :P I tried my best!! Hehe!! Your comment made me all excited to write! But honestly, my first chapter sucks, so watch out! 🤣

This concept came to my mind out of nowhere! Like seriously! I couldnt sleep and I was doodling and the thought suddenly came to my mind and I was like "Woah! AM so doing this!!" 🤣

Ee! I am a very lazy updater! But hope you will like my FF <3 I don't really PM, but if I do, I will sure PM you! Love you! and Thank you SO MUCH! =D

awesome..it was just amazing..pm me for next update which i hope is pretty soon..

Awww HUGS and Kisses to u tooo hehehe

OMG u wrote it again shitt😲 i knw dats the worst thing can happen wen u write and write and suddenly ur lappy gives up on u but wooaahh even thou this chp is sooo AMAZINGly written wow u r really Awsumm👏😳

haha omg ur Intro is reallly Awsum 😳everything was so apt and har character se pehle kitkat brk haila 🤣🤣

Ok now cuming to the chap

AWSUMMM start with KD's scene 😳and so perfectly written hehehe KD ke dialgoues and style😳

Aaahhh locker room KiSha hayye even thier angry ras scenes are like firee ☺️and seriusly the way u have written it i cud jus perfectly imagine it every dialogue u gave them is totally apt😍

"It's my mouth! Mein jo bhi bolu! Tumhe kya you money freak? Bolne ke bhi paise lete ho kya?" She shut her locker with a loud bang. But her eyes stayed on him. He didn't let his eyes unlock. He walked closer to her, his eyes on her's. Before he could reply her, she walked away.

OMG i luv dis part☺️ its jus soo explosive ☺️🤣hahaha i cud soo imagine it perfectly her anger.. their angry eyelocks and den him moving close hayyeee☺️😍

Kiya hated him. With all her heart. Ever since their first meeting. Everyday there were moments with him that pissed her off. Maybe it was because he always seemed to bless her with his presence right after she talks to her mother. And sometimes, the occasions where people ask her about her pop-star sister.

Aaahh this para is amazing😳 👏it jus shows how much her stoneface affects her that she jus cant stop thinking of all the odds that keeps happening btw them☺️😆

Panchi had always noticed Kiya's change in behavior. She understood her, but did not dare talk to her. Kiya always pushed people away from herself, and once when Panchi tried to talk to her, she had shooed her away ' calling her lowclass. Panchi didn't mind. She knew the reason behind Kiya's frustration. It was her sister, and her mother. Nobody in the school knew. But Panchi had heard and seen how desperately Kiya tried to impress her mother.

OMG i dont knw wat to say😆 hahaha but i have been thinking from the strt abt them showing sum interaction btw Kiya and Panchi as they r the only two who havent had any scene together yet and wow u worte it soo awsumm😳...so perfectly u gave an intro to Panchi's character and also abt how she feels abt Kiya aww that was damn sweet😳

Panchi becuming pareshan of hearing anoder plan for Banga😆 heheeh i cud totally imagine the whole thing😛

Again awsum intro of Piddi and Ranveer👍🏼 ...their dialogues omg its jus soo perfectly them hahaha😳😆

and then Ranveer-KD ka clash dat was awsummm one😛😆

The class of 11^th C was one in a zillion, and that is not even exaggerating. There was no control over them. They were birds of their will. They flew away suing their own wings. Their aim was right, but thy didn't realize that the path they chose was just as dangerous as fun it sounded. Had it not been the destiny, there would have been no cure. But these students were special. Their future was decided yours ago.

I luv this para wat u wrote😳👏 it perfectly describes them all and their nature and how much messed up dey r and how a change is coming up for them😉😆

WOAAHH Jaitley ki entry is jus sooo perfect his charging nature and how he shuts them all up i soo luvd reading the end😃😳...how he introduced himself to each character and understood dem also so well😆

Amazingly written how they all faced like a challenge to him and he wanted to teach them warn them but his motive for cuming to RA was not this😛

aaahhh i soo cnt wait too read more of this😍 Junglee training and mentoring his jr. junglees and also wen he finds out who the 8 scions are😛😆

Ok cuming to ur writing WOW its really AH-MAZING ...each dialogue given to their repsective characters is jus so perfect and the way u wrote everything i cud jus perfectly imagine every scene in my mind😍👏...the intros and all was soo Awsum👏...luvd dis first update enjoyed so much reading it😳😃

Now update the 2nd chap jaldiii plzzz🤣🤣🤣