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I'm sorry guys for not updating in a whole month!! 😲 I'm surprised myself, but personal problems came up. My mum's ill, she needs an operation, that's why I have been a bit tied up at the moment. Anyway, those who want to be on the PM list, do let me know, and I will start sending PMs from the next chapter, i.e. Chapter Two. So, here is the next chapter of 'The Hitchhiker':

Chapter One

Silently, he absorbed her image, taking time to acquaint himself with her eyes, her nose, her lips. She looked...what was the word??...Different. Not like anyone else he had seen. There was something about her that was special, yet at the same time it was something familiar, something warm, something inviting. Her long, silky black hair flowed in beautiful waves over her shoulders, whilst her lashes casted light shadows on her cheeks. Her skin glowed like a pearl whilst her cheeks possessed a tint of pink. Her lips were a dusky strawberry, pouting, as if reflecting her melancholy.

He shook his head in dismay. 'What am I doing?' he asked himself, focusing his eyes back on the road. What if she woke up and noticed him staring at her like an obsessed psycho? Again, shaking his head, he stretched his fingers, whilst his palms remained on the steering wheel. He let out a big sigh, knowing this was the result of tiredness and that he needed sleep desperately.

It was going to be a long journey to Mumbai. It would take almost a five hour drive to get there, he thought, and then mused whether he had done the right thing by giving a lift to a strange girl that he did not even know. She seemed pretty decent though, he thought to himself, surprised over the coincidence that this girl was heading to the same place that he was heading to.

Fate...that is what it was. Fate had led him to where she was, fate had given him the chance to help her, when, clearly she was in trouble. The running mascara, messy wet hair and dirty clothes had compelled him to stop for this lonely, helpless girl. Her eyes had pleaded for his help, and he could not stop himself for offering the help she needed.

Was that the only reason though? Maybe it was the fact that he was not happy in his own life; therefore he was always taking the responsibility of solving other people's problems on his own shoulders. He was unable to do anything right for himself, so why not lend a hand to others? Isn't that why he had gone so far away from home- to do what he always did? Running away from his own life to immerse himself in other's lives was something he was best at.

Suddenly the sound of soft coughing grabbed his attention and brought him out of his musings. He cast a glance through his rear-view mirror, watching, with his heartbeat racing, as the girl slowly opened her eyes and awoke from her deep sleep.

~

She did not even realize when she had fallen asleep, she thought, rubbing her eyes and focusing on her surroundings. Daylight seeped through the windows of the car, as the sun began to rise in the distant. And at that moment it all came back to her- each and every pain came rushing back to her in the form of a throbbing headache. She leaned back on the comfy leather seats and closed her eyes, reaching her fingers up to her temples and massaging in soothing circles. The thought of the leather seats had her abruptly opening her eyes and sitting up. She looked at the front seat cautiously and realized that it was not a dream, and that at that very moment she was sitting in the back of a car belonging to an unknown man that she had never met before. She breathed in deeply, the sound loud enough to reach his ears.

'Good morning,' he said, deciding it was best to break the silence. A small smile crept on his face as he looked at her through the rear-view mirror.

She gave an awkward smile and said the same to him, staring out of the window at the rice fields that they drove past. The light sound of the car and the cozy seats tempted her to drift back to sleep. But she willed her eyes to stay open.

The man spoke again.

'So what were you doing in the middle of the night hitchhiking? In this weather as well? Don't you have family to be with?' he asked.

She continued to look out of the window. 'I don't think it would be right for me to talk to a stranger,' she murmured hesitantly, playing with her fingers apprehensively.

He looked at her for a moment before letting out a small chuckle. What a beautiful sound it was, she thought to herself, frowning and rebuking herself as soon as the thought passed through her head.

'Oh?' he started sarcastically, 'So it is okay to get a lift from a stranger, but not okay to talk to them?' he asked, releasing another small laugh.

She bit her lip and swallowed nervously. Yet she remained quite, swathed in her dirty jacket, as she impassively stared at the speeding landscape. Though she wore no expression on her face, he could tell that she had gone through something somewhat...heartbreaking.

'You know...there's still over four hours before we get to Mumbai, we've only just passed Pune. You can't just stay silent all the way!' he said, smirking.

But she remained silent.

For some reason, he was fascinated by this mannerism of hers. But, sooner or later she would talk to him. He smiled at himself and ran his fingers through his hair.

'Okay, whatever you wish,' he said simply, the smile refusing to leave his face.

After a drive of an hour spent in awkwardness and quietness, he spotted a service station and decided to stop the car there to rest, eat and top up the gas in his car. He broke the silence between them.

'There's a gas station over there. I'm going to stop and refuel my car...and myself,' he said, as he slowly pulled over into the station.

Getting out of the car, he began filling his car with gas. After topping up his car, he went and opened the back door and extended his hand to her.

She looked at him and at his hand with wide eyes. He rolled his eyes.

'I'm going to get something to eat. Did you want to come for a bite? I am guessing you must be quite hungry?' he asked kindly. The smile that he flashed at her was just so alluring.

She thought for a moment before answering. 'Ummm...no thanks, I'm okay. I'll just wait here thank you,' she said without looking at him.

He shrugged his shoulders, defeated. She was too stubborn. 'Fine, whatever- but I'm hungry so I'm going to get something to eat,' he said, closing the door.

She sighed and watched as he turned away, walking towards the fast food restaurant built in the gas station. She sat alone in the car, whilst placing a hand over her grumbling belly. She sat looking around, the silence piercing through her. Everything seemed so different, how would she be able to cope in a completely new city? She did not even know anyone in Mumbai nor would she have anywhere to stay. 'I'll have to find a job as soon as possible,' she thought. But, never would she go back there. No matter how hard things would get, she would not give in and go back home. A tear caressed her cheek as she recollected the horrifying memories of life back home.

*Flashback*

'Taani...Taani!! Where are you beta?? The guy's family has come. Come down now!!' her mother called from downstairs.

Taani placed the artificial tikka on her head, as she prepared to meet her future husband. She had not met him before, but her family had reassured her that he would provide them with everything that they would ever need. Her family had lived in poverty and had little in their pockets to feed the family. Being the only child, it was now her time to get married and relieve her parents the duty of providing for her.

Although she was poor, she was the prettiest girl in the village, and the apple of her parent's eyes. Everybody in the village knew of Taani's beauty, yet no one was keen enough to make a poor girl their daughter-in-law. It seemed everyone had their head in the clouds, dreaming of bigger and better things. Thus, it had surprised her when her mother had come rushing home happily one day to tell the family the news of finding a suitable husband for Taani. Taani had full faith in her parents and their choice- she knew they had found her the perfect man.

She smiled at her reflection in the mirror, and then simply covered her head with the dupatta. She turned and made her way down the stairs in her plain red salwar kameez, the best her father could afford. Her heart raced with every step she took. When she sat down on the small sofa beside her father, her eyes probed every corner of the room. She caught her mother's eye and quickly looked down at the floor. As soon as her mother looked away, her eyes scanned the room once more. But she did not see any boy around. Where was her future husband? She asked herself nervously. She could not wait to see the man who she was to spend the rest of her life with. She wanted to experience the closeness and affection that she saw in her parents, she wanted to feel love, to be loved.

The only people in the room, in front of her, were an old woman and an elderly man who looked just a few years younger than her father. He looked like the old woman's son. 'Maybe that's his Papa? And that must be his Dadi,' she thought, musing how her future husband would look like based on how his father looked like. Her mother came to sit next to her, and placed a hand on top of Taani's, bringing her out of her thoughts. She smiled at her mother.

Taani leaned towards her mother. 'Maa...where is he?' she whispered to her mother.

'What are you talking about Taani?' replied Laboni.

'Maa...who I am going to marry...where is he? I don't see him anywhere!' she exclaimed in a whisper, her eyes searching around the room.

Laboni began shifting in her seat uncomfortably, which began to worry Taani. Taani frowned. 'What's wrong Maa?'

'I think we should exchange the rings now,' said Laboni, plastering a wide smile on her face, ignoring Taani's question. All of a sudden, the elderly man smiled and got up, taking a seat beside Taani. Taani's jaw dropped open, and in desperation she looked from her mother to her father, and then at the man beside her, unable to stop the tears that fell from her eyes. Her words choked on her tears, as she struggled to comprehend what was happening.

'You don't understand anything Taani. It's for the best, you have to realize that,' her mother had explained to her afterwards. Taani stared with no emotion at the ring on her left hand as her mother spoke. The ring stirred up only anger in her, it meant nothing to her.

'He's a good man, and he'll solve all our troubles. Neither will he ever refuse you for anything. He will give you everything you need,' her father also argued, failing to see her point of view or happiness in the matter.

She admitted that their family was poor, but she never imagined that they would pawn off their own daughter to solve their problems. Her parents were selling her off to a man just a few years younger than her own father. She felt even worse than a piece of meat. She had to get away, had to save herself, because she knew she could never be happy with this man, could never see herself as his wife, nor could she ever accept him as her husband. No matter how big their problems were, this marriage was not the way to solve them. She couldn't go through with this marriage. She just couldn't.

*End of Flashback*

Tears overflowed from Taani's eyes as she recalled the incidents of the previous week. Suddenly a knock sounding on the window made her jump. Her pulse began to race. She quickly wiped her tears away with the back of her hand to look outside the window. She breathed out a sigh of relief as she saw that it was the man who was giving her the lift. When he had gone, out of fear she had locked the door from the inside. She unlocked the door and rolled down the window to her side. Without saying anything he placed a bag on her lap, before going to sit back in the driver's seat.

'What's this?' she asked hesitantly.

'Well, you didn't come inside, so I decided to bring you food outside. You can't starve yourself you know, looking at the state of you it seems like you haven't eaten in days!'

Taani turned a bright shade of red and looked at the bag and then back at the man.

'Don't worry...I didn't poison it,' he joked, laughing.

'Thank you,' she said quietly, almost welling up with tears at his gesture. No one had cared about her this much before, and this small gesture of his touched her heart. She gave him a small smile.

And her smile made him smile. For him, it was the most beautiful sight he had ever seen, and simultaneously the most unusual feeling he had ever felt in his life.

'Her smile could light up a city,' he thought, mesmerized by her simplicity, as he watched her open the bag with shaking fingers.

'What is this? I've never had this before,' Taani innocently confessed, whilst turning the burger around in her hand and staring at it as if it were a baby alien from another planet. Living in poverty meant that her family ate very little; occasionally they even had to miss meals. Never had she eaten anything other than her mother's curries. She sighed, as the thought of her mother stirred up a stabbing feeling in her heart, but she chose to ignore the feeling.

Taani was brought back to reality by the sound of a stifled laugh. Her mouth fell open as she realized that he was laughing at her.

He continued to laugh. 'I'm sorry. I just can't believe you've never eaten a burger before!'

'Bur...gur?' she pronounced with difficulty, frowning and scanning the burger once more.

'Just eat it...you'd love it!' he said simply.

Taani cautiously began eating the burger and fries that he had brought for her, reveling in this new discovery. It was actually very tasty, she thought to herself, and made her realize just how hungry she was.

He smiled to himself at the sight of her eating and shook his head to himself. Never had he met anyone like her. Yes, she was definitely unique. Starting the car, he began to continue their journey to Mumbai. And that moment he knew that this was going to be a journey he would forever cherish in his memories.

Looking forward to reading comments 😳

Love Zahra x

Edited by Pyari_Zahra - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
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i have read this story line before in kis desh forum......do continue soon........pm me when u do..........looking forword for ur updates since i have already read this part...........as u said u r going to make changes also.........so i am eager........
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very cute chapter.....enjoyed this!
looking for ward to more....
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hi zahra,
really nice ff dear!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! plsssssssss pm me when u update it!!!!!!
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Omg! I am a new reader to your FF, Zahra. And can't tell you that your FF swooped me off my feet.. Such a lovely chapter! You must continue this, and please do it fast, I am dying to read the second chapter. Please please!! :) So I can tell Anurag already likes Taani.. but poor Taani she had to runaway.. poor Laboni and funny that she never ate a burger before! Great great concept!! 😊 šŸ˜›

A Five star chapter! ā­ļø ā­ļø ā­ļø ā­ļø ā­ļø
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outstanding work dear
it was a awesome part
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Originally posted by: sweetanu2314

i have read this story line before in kis desh forum......do continue soon........pm me when u do..........looking forword for ur updates since i have already read this part...........as u said u r going to make changes also.........so i am eager........

Hiya 😃 Glad you liked it the first time too šŸ˜† Thank you 😳 Will update very soon 😳 x

Originally posted by: ...Nikhita...

very cute chapter.....enjoyed this!

looking for ward to more....

Thank you Nikhita! 😃 I'm happy you liked it 😳 Will be updating shortly 😊 x

Originally posted by: NaDzGirl

hi zahra,
really nice ff dear!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! plsssssssss pm me when u update it!!!!!!
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Hello there 😃 Thank you so much- I'm glad you liked the chapter 😳 I'll PM you when I update šŸ˜› x

Originally posted by: purple_rose

Omg! I am a new reader to your FF, Zahra. And can't tell you that your FF swooped me off my feet.. Such a lovely chapter! You must continue this, and please do it fast, I am dying to read the second chapter. Please please!! :) So I can tell Anurag already likes Taani.. but poor Taani she had to runaway.. poor Laboni and funny that she never ate a burger before! Great great concept!! 😊 Tongue

A Five star chapter! ā­ļø ā­ļø ā­ļø ā­ļø ā­ļø

Awww, thank you so much for the lovely comment šŸ¤— It means a lot 😳 I'm pleased you like the concept, and I shall be updating very soon 😳 Love Zahra x

Originally posted by: sana_sajan

outstanding work dear
it was a awesome part

Thanks a lot 😃 Glad you enjoyed it! Next update will be up soon 😳 x
Thanks to all who pressed the 'like' button! šŸ¤—
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All I can say is I'm sorry it took so long šŸ˜†:
~ Chapter Two ~
They drove for three hours in an uncomfortable silence. Because of traffic, the journey was ending up taking longer than previously conceived. On top of that, the awkwardness was becoming extremely overwhelming, as Taani sat either fiddling with her fingers or staring out the window and the guy rhythmically tapped his fingers on the steering wheel as he listened to the music that played on the radio.

She raised her eyes to look at him through the rear-view mirror, simultaneously he looked at her through the mirror, and for a brief moment their glances met. Taani's heart began to beat a little faster and she promptly turned her head back to the window to stare at the blossoming trees that the car sped past. It took a few moments for her pulse to slow down to its normal rate. She closed her eyes and sighed, shaking her head as she wondered what was coming over her.

~

To see her innocent big eyes staring back at him aroused a feeling of pure affection in his heart. Even after this momentary flash of rapport between the two, he continued to exhibit correct behavior towards her, speaking to her kindly yet formally and never daring to raise any personal issues about her life.

It had been an hour and they were still stuck waiting for a way out of the traffic. Fed up of the congestion, he decided to take a short-cut along a narrow, desolate road. There were no other cars travelling on the road. As the car drove through it, the light slowly began to vanish. Trees that looked eerie in appearance blocked the majority of light with their branches, adding a sinister feel to route that he had chosen.

Without warning, the two of them were jolted forward in their seats by the sudden jerking forward of the car. Taani gasped, closing her eyes tightly and grabbing on to the seat in front of her. The car came to a sudden halt, and he hit the steering wheel with his hand out of sheer frustration. 'Damn it!! Bloody car had to break down now!! Shit!' he said shaking his head. He bit his lip and turned to look at her sheepishly. 'Sorry,' he said quietly for his use of language.

She laughed quietly. 'It's okay,' she said.

He made his way out of the car and began studying the wheels. Taani followed. 'What happened?' she asked him simply.

'One of the tyres is punctured. I don't know how I will fix it!! I just used my spare tyre last week!! This is the bloody second time this week!!' he yelled, whilst venting out his anger by letting his foot loose on the tyre, causing Taani to suppress a giggle. Meanwhile, he tried his best to hide the pain that was now spreading through his foot.

He looked at her and grimaced. 'I will have to go and see if there's any place nearby where I can get a spare tyre or if not, then we will have to find somewhere to stay here until my mechanic comes,' he said, awkwardly running his fingers through his hair.

'You stay here in the car, I'll try and be back as quick as possible,' he said, and Taani gently nodded, and went to sit back in the car, trying not to show the fear that spread through her completely.

After a few paces along the road, he stopped in his tracks and looked back at the car. 'I can't leave her alone like that in the car...it's going to get dark soon and if I'm not back by then and something happens to her, then I'll never forgive myself,' he thought to himself, and turned back around to take her with him. To be honest, the darkness was beginning to scare him too and he would feel much more comfortable having some company.

Opening the back door of the car he held his hand out towards her. 'Ummm...You shouldn't stay alone in the car like this, it's not right. You're coming with me,' he said, grabbing her arm before she could say anything or respond in any way.

Taani breathed a sigh of relief. She did not want to be waiting in in the car, that dark abandoned street all by herself.

They walked silently along the long narrow road, constantly jerking their heads up at the sound of anything unusual or unfamiliar. All of a sudden, they felt the cold rain hit their faces, the sharp hiss of the torrent echoing through the air. He grabbed her arm, pulling her closer to him, whilst they both quickly ran to stand underneath a tree, shielding them against the downpour of rain.

'ACHCHOO,' he sneezed on her. Taani covered her mouth trying to hold back her laugh. But her attempts failed as she saw him frowning down at her and she let out her giggle.

He looked at her, fascination creeping over him as he studied her face, properly seeing it so close for the first time. She was beautiful, like an angel in his dream and staring at her openly was all he was capable of doing at that moment.

She was still giggling, covering her mouth with her hand. As the coldness swept through her, she trembled and intuitively wrapped her arms around herself. Soon after, Taani's own nose began to twitch.

'ACHCHOOOO,' she couldn't control the sneeze that escaped her own nose.

He looked at her for a moment before erupting into laughter. Taani sniffed and seeing his face, began giggling herself. He tapped her nose with his index finger, overjoyed to see this side of her. For the next couple of minutes they stood engrossed in one another, joking and laughing at each other as the rain poured down from above them. Oddly, the rain did not seem to bother them anymore as they stood revelling in it.

He was destined to meet her, he stopped his car for her because he knew their paths were meant to cross. There was something about her that pulled him to her, from the moment he had seen her.

And suddenly, as if out of impulse, he brought his hand up along her cheek and gently worked his fingers through her hair, mesmerized by how her hair cascaded over her glowing skin. Her head snapped up to see his deep, intense eyes gazing at her lips and she found herself drowning in them. Her heart felt as if it was slamming against her ribs as she fell into a feeling of complete bliss. She trembled, not because of the coldness, but in anticipation.

He had no idea what this feeling was that itched at his heart, but he knew for a fact that he was unable to control it. He felt himself being drawn towards her, he had a fascination with her, a fascination which he could not understand or contend with. Maybe it was her luminous black eyes that glittered like stars, even in the dark of the trees that they stood under. Or maybe it was the way her lips quivered under the chill that seeped through both of their bodies.

His hand tenderly moved her wet hair behind her ear, as he leaned in closer, almost closing the distance that existed between them. As she watched his lips inching closer to hers, realization dawned on her and she gasped, hastily turning her head away from him. She secretly wiped the lone tear that escaped from her eye which she could not prevent from falling. She turned around, unable to look at him.

What was she thinking? She had run away from home to save herself, not to give in to some short-lived desire that was bubbling inside of her- A desire that would soon end, leaving her heartbroken. Taani didn't even know this man- God knows who he was and what he did for a living.

'I'm sorry,' she whispered, with her back still towards him.

He shook his head. 'No...no...I'm sorry...that was stupid of me...I'm sorry,' he spluttered, mentally kicking himself for losing control of his senses. How could he be so stupid? He had promised himself just last month that he wasn't going to let anyone come close to him again. He wouldn't be able to bear the trauma of losing someone dear to him again. He ran his fingers through his hair and brought his finger up to the corner of his eye to wipe the tear that emerged there.

Taani turned to face him, having composed herself. 'It's almost dark...We've probably got quite a bit of walking to do...We should keep walking...,' she muttered. In embarrassment, she stared intently at the puddles that formed in the uneven ground, not having the nerve to look into those deep chocolate eyes that were fixed on her. He nodded.

They continued walking, side-by-side in silence. The only sound that pierced the air was the gentle roar of the rain tapping against the hard ground. The sun was beginning to lower in the distance. Red and purple rays of light filtered through the spaces between the trees, with incandescent shadows of different shapes being casted on the road. They were both soaked and were beginning to lose all feeling in their bodies. Taani narrowed her eyes at the sight of a small bright light in the distance.

She brought her hand up to grab his arm, in effect causing him to look down at her hand on his arm. Her touch was sending electric current like sensations through his body. Realizing what she had just done, Taani quickly moved her arm back to her side. She pointed to the light, 'I think there's a house or something there. We may be able to get some help there,' she said hesitantly, trying so hard not to look into his eyes.

They made their way to the house. He rubbed his arm gently, where the touch of her hand still strangely lingered. Taani looked down at her own hand, unable to understand why it suddenly felt warm and safe. 'You wait here...I'll go talk to the person who lives here,' he told Taani, and took apprehensive steps to the front door of the house. Knocking gently, he waited for a reply. After a few moments, the door creaked open and a man in his early fifties appeared, looking clearly upset at having been disturbed. 'Who are you and what do you want?' the man asked impatiently.

Momentarily surprised, he was unable to speak. He cleared his throat. 'Hello...ummm...I'm really, very sorry to bother you but my car's tyre got punctured about a mile from here and I don't have a spare one. It's going dark and the weather is really bad, so I was wondering if we could please stay the night...just until the person I call comes to replace the tyre for me?' he asked politely, yet it was of no use. The man refused and shut the door on his face.

He walked over to Taani, shoulders slumped. 'Well, that went well,' he said miserably.

'Let me try asking!! I'm sure he will listen to me,' said Taani.

He looked at her incredulously. He leaned his head back and let out a chuckle.

Taani frowned. 'What's so funny? You don't think I can do it??' she said, raising an eyebrow.

'If I...I',' he pointed to his chest, '...couldn't get us a room to stay for the night...how in the world are you going to??' he uttered, whilst trying to suppress his laugh.

'Are you challenging me??' Taani said, placing her hands on her hips.

'Ummm...let me think...YES!!' he said, smirking.

Taani frowned and extended her hand out. 'Fine...it's a challenge...and when I win, you have to give me whatever I ask for!!' she said, smiling broadly. He looked at her hand and reached forwards, placing his hand in hers and accepting the terms of the challenge.

'And when I win, I get whatever I ask for,' he said.

'Agreed,' she said.

Breaking free of their handshake, she made her way to the door and knocked.

Can't wait to see what you thought of the chapter 😳
Love Zahra x
Edited by Pyari_Zahra - 15 years ago
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great update!
loved the rain scene.....wonder how taani will succeed in getting them a place to stay!
btw you've written 'heer' instead of taani at one place...šŸ˜†
continue soon!
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Loved it! Please add me to your pm list if you have one...

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