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Posted: 9 years ago
#71

Originally posted by: amlavs

Nice...cherry yuvi and kunj are roomates...plz use Hus famous dialogue " good for nothing "...

Its interesting to see how kunj gonna fall for twinkle...


Yup your average college lads 😆
I will try to incorporate it in the next update, its hard because it doesnt sound right with English dialogues, but I'll try my best.

Thank you for your response and keep reading to find out 😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
#72

Originally posted by: Sdea

Lovely update . Omg how I wish we had scenes like these in the show also m. Cherry is so cherry we don't do morning after, literally cracked me up.And is my sensing yuvraj as trouble right?? Or maybe Yuvi just has a negative aura with them. Even when he is not wrong I find something fishy.

I am loving this story of yours. And let me mention what an amazing writer you are. Do continue soon


Haha I've always wondered what TEI wouldve been like as a college based show. It wouldve been a riot 😆

Honestly because I only intend to write up to 5 parts for this, I dont have the space to explore Yuvi's insecurities and the tensions between KuVi that deeply. So you can relax, there wont be any major issues and he will warm up to Twinkle soon enough.

Awh thank you so much, you are too kind! 😳


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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: teddyyy


Omg omg omg Nemo!!! This was freaking amazing. I honestly thought my favorite types of stories were angsty, emotional ones but I think you have proved me wrong. This whole college feels, budding romance thing is KILLING ME. I am so in awe right now of how you can write such brilliance at 5am because this was spectacular. You're a beautiful writer, have I ever mentioned that? Oh and I love you, so so much! I literally died from laughter when I read that the sleazy one at the door was Chery like that was so unexpected but so expected from his character lmao I couldn't breathe. Twinkle's annoyance and her being flabbergasted was so on point, I just loved that scene sooo much! So like they obviously are the sleeping around jock guys, BUT I CANT HELP ADORE THEM. Like omg. Kunj wanting to smack Cherry (in my head at least LOL) for potentially ruining his tutoring sessions was hilarious but the scene where Twinkle comes downstairs was pricelesss! Like bahahahah Cherry saying she was too hot of a tutor and Yuvraj saying that he doesn't think things will end well. I was like omg Kya hone wala hai. BUT KUNJ BEING REJECTED AND CHERRY's sympathy 🤣 HAYE Allah I need to stop laughing omg.

Bro, I loved it a lot and it was totally worth the wait! Thank you so much for listening to my pestering and giving us such a great great great update, you're the best!



Its alright dude, ward activity ke naam pe maaf kiya 😆

Honestly Teds, I sometimes read your comments and then I have to re-read my writing just to see if we read the same thing 🤣 You seriously give me way too much credit but thank you so much for your awesome response, you spoil me ☺️

I love Cherry and I love KuVi so they were fundamental characters in this shot before I even wrote the first part 🤣 My mind comes alive at ridiculous o'clocks in the morning I guess but the Cherry scene at the door was the best part to write 😆

Yup they're male s**ts but I love them already too. They'll only grow on you in the coming parts, especially when they start warming up to to Twinkle 😎

Thank you so much again dude, seriously if it wasnt for your pestering, it would never have gotten done, especially when I'm reading it myself and thinking 'meh dont really like it' so your comments are my main source of motivation right now! 🤗
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Posted: 9 years ago
#74

Originally posted by: 17.sonal

Unres
Wat a Superb Shot...
Dunno y but my Heart is Doing this happy happy dance..
This is so much realistic...as if i am watching Friends all over again...
The Bachelor pad Of Kunj , cherry and Yuvi...wow.. So cool ..
I mean bachlor pads r exactly the same... I remember my bro and his friends...
Twinkle all tomboyish... Double sized Hoodiee...
I am Actually loving the pace... Too.good.
Yuvi is a good observer.. I mean he read between the lines... Something is sparking btw the two..
Your Title is so damn apt...
I mean i am so looking forward to this...
Pls PM pls...😉


Thank you so much Sonal! I'm glad that your heart is happy 😆
I have a thing for these types of story lines, I know theyre kind of cliche but I love friends-turned-lovers stories. And I'm glad to know you're liking it too!

Someone has defo sparked unintentionally but hopefully the next few updates should explore the chemistry a little more. Thank you so much again! 😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
#75
Amazing amazing amazing..😊👏
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Don't fall for the tutor, was Yuvi worried for himself or Kunj, wondered if Yuvi harbouring a secret crush on the tutor.
X-box! really Nemo, you reminded me of fifty-shades, you need to get those guys a PS4.😆
This was really good, enjoying the college scene, Nemoyou know I love all your stories. Great Job

ps: Thank you Teddy for convincing her to update.
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Posted: 9 years ago
#77

Originally posted by: Tranquility123



Its alright dude, ward activity ke naam pe maaf kiya 😆

Honestly Teds, I sometimes read your comments and then I have to re-read my writing just to see if we read the same thing 🤣 You seriously give me way too much credit but thank you so much for your awesome response, you spoil me ☺️

I love Cherry and I love KuVi so they were fundamental characters in this shot before I even wrote the first part 🤣 My mind comes alive at ridiculous o'clocks in the morning I guess but the Cherry scene at the door was the best part to write 😆

Yup they're male s**ts but I love them already too. They'll only grow on you in the coming parts, especially when they start warming up to to Twinkle 😎

Thank you so much again dude, seriously if it wasnt for your pestering, it would never have gotten done, especially when I'm reading it myself and thinking 'meh dont really like it' so your comments are my main source of motivation right now! 🤗

Lmao awww Nemo, I'm so so happy I can be your source of motivation right now because I truly love this (and you) :P Omg DID I MENTION HOW MUCH I LOOOVED THAT THE LAST LINE WAS THE TITLE LMAO.

Okay so I love you for Kuvi friendship, it's beyond adorable! And omg yesss I cannot wait for when Twinkle becomes bro buddy with them! Also seeing how Kunj will fall for her shall be interesting :P I'me excited! <3
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Komal1298

Amazing amazing amazing..😊👏


Thank you Komal 😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: kardooks

Don't fall for the tutor, was Yuvi worried for himself or Kunj, wondered if Yuvi harbouring a secret crush on the tutor.

X-box! really Nemo, you reminded me of fifty-shades, you need to get those guys a PS4.😆
This was really good, enjoying the college scene, Nemoyou know I love all your stories. Great Job

ps: Thank you Teddy for convincing her to update.


You guys are giving me ideas 😆
But honestly, I probably wont play with that angle considering its only a 5 shot. If this was a short story then I might've explored Yuvi and Twinkle's rapport further but like I said it's only a 5 shot so I dont have much room for drama 😆

Karen seriously, Xbox reminds you of 50 shades? I dont even know what to do with you anymore 🤣 My brothers have an Xbox so I just used it from personal experience 😆

Thank you so much dude, it really is motivating! 😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Tranquility123


You guys are giving me ideas 😆
But honestly, I probably wont play with that angle considering its only a 5 shot. If this was a short story then I might've explored Yuvi and Twinkle's rapport further but like I said it's only a 5 shot so I dont have much room for drama 😆

Karen seriously, Xbox reminds you of 50 shades? I dont even know what to do with you anymore 🤣 My brothers have an Xbox so I just used it from personal experience 😆

Thank you so much dude, it really is motivating! 😳

okay so I'm going to go out on a limb here and assume that you've read the books or see the movie, it's where he was about to show her his playroom and she thought it was his gaming room with his xbox and stuff. Let's just agree I have a dirty mind☺️
I believe Ps4 is more popular than Xbox. My son have both and the Xbox is gathering cobwebs, also I heard Sid in an interview once said he likes to play on his ps4.

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