OS: Perilous Pursuit - Page 2

Originally posted by: Nupur_5

Well the OS was good & I loved everything except Ragjni------Sanskaar part! Bcoz Ragini is the most undeserving person, not only for Sanskaar Bt any other person! Even though you stated at last that Sanskaar never loved Ragini nor started family with her Bt still the mere fact that they married & she added his name pierced my heart!

I think I would not have mind if you used any other girl bcoz I agree Swara did a huge mistake & she should bear punishment!

Bt Ragini did far more heinous crimes & she don't deserve a person like Sanskaar!

At the end both Sanskaar & Ragini realized that they destroyed themselves again by separating from their Soulmates & true love!

P.S: Hey Sharon, this was my 2 cents! And I hope, I didn't hurt or offend you!

Originally posted by: Sanya17

This os is good but sanskar ragini

I understand sanskar and ragini were angry and hurt but getting married with each other that was never a solution they loves swara and laksh they can't be happy together they pushed themselves towards a lifetime of pain

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

Dear Sharon,

Their lives were indeed a perilous pursuit, each sticking to their own true selves. Both Sanskaar and Ragini mete out judgements and Swara and Laksh quietly accepting them as their due.

They could never express what they wanted while the other two could never realised what was needed.

All that Sanskaar and Ragini wanted was that their respective spouses realise where they went wrong and take a chance at forgiveness. Instead they passed a judgement.

Swara and Laksh accepted the easy way, rather than work towards their forgiveness, they simply surrendered claiming it to be just punishment.

In then end, all of them lost, alive or dead.

I liked the tale, despite the fact that Sanskaar and Ragini got married (from a story perspective) but it hurt not because I am allowing the serial hangover to cloud my mind but because of the lost opportunities.

I cannot help but wonder, if only,Ragini and Sanskaar, who gave them so many chances, gave a last chance, clearly stating what they wanted and what they expected, things might have improved and the four could have actually started fully living and completely loving the one they did.

But frail is the human heart, and hard is the mind

A perilous pursuit, leaving happiness behind.

Best,

Nyna

Originally posted by: BookWormV

Dear Sharon,

This has got to be one of the most bold and, no doubt, brilliant takes of the aftermath scenario. Weirdly taking SwaRagini as a whole I don't want Sanskaar to forgive Swara easily and I want Ragini to, for once, be mad at Lakshya. This story had both.

I really liked how you have shown that both Swara and Lakshya take the easy way. Not once did the two try to ask for forgiveness repeatedly when they were alive, it was their last moments in life that they said what they should have from the start. They would rather take the 'easy' way as stated.

What I like was you pointing out that Swara knows Sanskaar loves her but she took it for granted yet again. Instead of asking for forgiveness she asked for her punishment instead. This story has so much depth.

I loved that last line. It showed how both parties were not allowed to live with peace in their quest - one for the need to hurt as much as they were hurt, and the other, for not trusting enough in the love and for not fighting for it because of the belief that this love is undeserved/unwanted.

It was beautiful. I really like RagSan because of their friendship in the start. I had no issues with this take at all.

Please continue writing such brilliance.

Love,
V

Originally posted by: sarathy321

Good one

Originally posted by: Purvi97

It was nice no doubt... But ragini sanskar maheshwari sounds really creepy... That was the least thing i expected😕

Originally posted by: Lifez_Beautiful

Sharon that just hit the right spot in my heart! Seriously in trying to ruin their soulmate, one doesn't realize that they are called 'SOULMATE' for a reason which is much beyond petty egos and silly spats...

People fight for silly things... One needs to learn to let go and move past such stuff or life would be suffocating with unsaid words and unshed emotions...

Hmm, anyways will be waiting to read more of such works from you. Been long time I actually got some time to read peacefully and I'm very glad that I could read your work today... 👍🏼

- Luv Niki🤗

Originally posted by: ria2794

Everything was good in the story but here also I coudnt understand the hypocrisy of Ragini. She blamed lakshya for swara and sanskar broken relation then she herself went on and married sanskar brilliant. What worst she could do to swara other than snatching only person who has ever been true to her. And one more thing does swara really deserves kind of treatment? She forgave every crime if these two people who had also killed her literally and figuratively Ragini by pushing her and sanskar by making her soul bleed by proving her characterless. She forgave them without them even asking so do you think it was crime not to listen to your husband in order to save him family. Was it crime that she was not able to see his husband being the reason for her sisters misery or thought so. What will you do in that condition will you not want your soulmate to probe himself correct so that no one could blame him. Will you enjoy your marital bless when you know your sister is dying bachae og your own husband

Originally posted by: srividhya87

its awesome but painful OS..

If at all Ragini and Sanskaar gave the last chance, all the 4 would hv been happy.. (But still couldn't accept the fact Mrs. Ragini Sanskaar Maheswari)

Originally posted by: kritz4ever

loved it