SwaSan SS: Amaranthine - A/N pg. 70 10/12

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Nynaeve

@Nynaeve

Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#401

Dear Viji,

I am at a loss for words, I was busy with the PS (just posted on your thread - Sanskaar's monologues, hope it is passable😳😳😳) and I now read this.

I just love you.

Nyna

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showrav

@showrav24

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Posted: 8 years ago

#402

nice update dear
but I don't like swara here like in the show she don't trust sanskar & his love infact her love also.first she flew cuz he lost his memory she flew just becuz he not remember her I don't like this atlest u can try once & if u around him may be his memory return long back.
But update is good continue soon.
Bye.

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

@Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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+ 3

Posted: 8 years ago

#403

Originally posted by: Nynaeve
Dear Viji,
I am at a loss for words, I was busy with the PS (just posted on your thread - Sanskaar's monologues, hope it is passable😳😳😳) and I now read this.

I just love you.

Nyna

I just adored this chapter. 😳🤗

You left me rather speechless with the PS creations you posted on Sanskaar's Monologues as well. 😳

Have a nice day 🤗

Viji

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Sharon

@Sparkler8

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 8 years ago

#404

Hi Nyna,

I started reading this story when I received your pm. I only read the first page till now. Didn't get to the footnotes yet.

When I read your back story for writing this, I thought this is going to be deep. The explanation you gave for the difference between forever, infinity and eternity is very logical and philosophical. I vaguely remember this topic being discussed in my philosophy lecture. I liked the representations of these three words and I can assure you, this will be etched in my mind for ever.

When I browsed through the purplish introduction images, I thought they were nice and even funny. But as I read through the parts, I realised their importance. They were absolutely necessary.

I edit images. In fact all my stories have a banner too. But I am too lazy to upload them as the process is tedious. So when I saw the whole post covered in images, I was like "How did she get so much patience". Also I shouldn't ask that question. Anyone who can write such "Novella", has to have that kind offer patience.

Till now, Act 1 Part 1 is my favourite. The scene somehow reminds me of Jacqueline in "Hangover " song. Swara and her glasses, the books, highly qualified.. all somehow place Jacqueline's avatar with Swara's face in my mind.

Act 2 Part 2 reminds me of Jab We Met song Aaoge jab. You may think I am comparing your scenes with movies. What to do, I am a classic romantic and these scenes are some of my references whenever I think fiction. Also, when I read, I like to imagine the activities happening before me. So, hindi movies are what I turn to.

Act 2 Part 1 no doubt takes me to SwaSan helicopter proposal. There is no movie scene that takes dominance for this. Their first date together is simple yet extravagant, all that she asked for and all that she expects and then some. It started off with a rosy picture but ended grim.

Act 2 Part 2, I felt bad for both couples. Each lost something and the suffering you have portrayed is amazing. To cheer myself up, I thought of "Kick" sequence where Salman acts as memory loss patient.

Act 3 Part 1, I am glad that Ragini's instinct are playing cupid to SwaSan. Their trials to bring Sanskaar and Swara together were entertaining and heartwarming.

Act 3 Part 2, I love the depth of the quote you have used. The office dynamics, romance and jealousy all are very well captured. Love can be hidden but never forgotten. The constant presence of someone forgotten still triggers the mind to remember. Also, I felt the most need of the introduction disclaimers during this.

Just a Suggestion, please create an Index for each part as scrolling through such a long page is difficult for lazy people like me.

Looking forward to more updates from you.

Cheers
Sharon

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Aheli

@iam_aheli_98

Voyager

Posted: 8 years ago

#405

Res for ch-6 Nyna, will try to unres soon. 😳
Unresed dear. 😃
Superb update! Brilliant! 👏 👏
The pain, anguish, loneliness, jealousy, romance, etc., everything of SwaSan was beautifully penned by u dear!! 😃 Loved SwaSan moments. 😳 So Swara misunderstood Sanskar and Tanushri, thinking them to be a couple, right?? 😕 Good that Tanushri cleared the MU for Swara. 😳 And although Sanskar can't remember his past with Swara, he fell in love with her, again. 😉 Waiting to know more. 😛 Update soon. Thanks for the pm. 😃
With love,
Aheli.

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kamila.

@Seriously.

Inactive

+ 2

Posted: 8 years ago

#406

Hey my cappuccino. Sorry for late.. I k ow you'll forgive me.. okay..

Okay.. I'm must accept I'm flushed with that kiss.. wow.. uhhh Sss.. soo hot.. soo our hero heart proved his love for her.. yayyyeee.. I'm partying..

I loved the whole thing.. I can't say specifically.. from the start where he is feeling uneasy with her cold behavior.. then their deal.. then spending more times together.. then that kiss.. ekkksss.. soo romantic.. then Tanushree.. I know she must be his friend.. and swara.. the jealous Swara.. and tanu Swara talks in washroom..

Then comes the highlight... Wow love confession in drunken state.. ohh mardala mujhe.. just loved it baby...

Just want to ask you.. did I did anything wrong. I can feel that you're distancing from me... I don't know.. when.. your replies and your comments on my threads were soo formal... Not casual as we do before... Just wanted to ask you... I'm sorry again.. I'm a cashew nut..

Update soon...

Love you a loads..

Kam...

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Nynaeve

@Nynaeve

Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#407

Originally posted by: Vaiyambar...

Just want to ask you.. did I did anything wrong. I can feel that you're distancing from me... I don't know.. when.. your replies and your comments on my threads were soo formal... Not casual as we do before... Just wanted to ask you... I'm sorry again.. I'm a cashew nut..

Update soon...

Love you a loads..

Kam...

Dear Mocha,

I am sorry (Know this is not allowed but this situation demands it), I am actually having a little too much on my plate, and time is a constraint. 😭😭

I have too many ideas, I want to complete my FM to a passable draft, have almost two dozen unread PMs and more that that many number of unres and have to still get back to all the replies for three of my stories / updates. I do not want to use that word, so I just write a short comment instead of that three letter word. I just did not think that it could be a little cold. There is no way I would be upset with you (I love and need my coffee😊)

love you loads

Nyna

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kamila.

@Seriously.

Inactive

+ 2

Posted: 8 years ago

#408

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

Dear Mocha,

I am sorry (Know this is not allowed but this situation demands it), I am actually having a little too much on my plate, and time is a constraint. 😭😭

I have too many ideas, I want to complete my FM to a passable draft, have almost two dozen unread PMs and more that that many number of unres and have to still get back to all the replies for three of my stories / updates. I do not want to use that word, so I just write a short comment instead of that three letter word. I just did not think that it could be a little cold. There is no way I would be upset with you (I love and need my coffee😊)

love you loads
Nyna

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kamila.

@Seriously.

Inactive

+ 2

Posted: 8 years ago

#409

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

Dear Mocha,

I am sorry (Know this is not allowed but this situation demands it), I am actually having a little too much on my plate, and time is a constraint. 😭😭

I have too many ideas, I want to complete my FM to a passable draft, have almost two dozen unread PMs and more that that many number of unres and have to still get back to all the replies for three of my stories / updates. I do not want to use that word, so I just write a short comment instead of that three letter word. I just did not think that it could be a little cold. There is no way I would be upset with you (I love and need my coffee😊)

love you loads
Nyna

Ohh!!! So I'm not only one in the list.. 😳thank God I omit res. I have to yet to read your os. Then Nita's all os till now.. I didn't read one. Then Harshita Sharma shaab then Sharon's new story and one os.. I book marked fitoor for now I will read it later.. list goes on.. That's why I soo hesitant to commit to new stories.😭. i won't get time to read in future.😲

Soo I understand you.. I know I troubled you by asking such a silly thing.. Since sooorry is not allowed.. one big hug... 🤗

Love you a loads..

Kam..

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 8 years ago

#410

Nyna dearest 🤗

Amidst juggling multiple phone calls and trying to write some advice to a client and also working on an office business plan, I gave in to temptation and caught up with Chapter 6 😆. Those things still wait but I had to pen this admittedly brief comment as I don't want to otherwise omit telling you what I felt. I am blown away by Chapter 6- I literally mean it.

Till now, as you know from my views on all other chapters, I have been enjoying Amaranthine, and feeling the depth of what you need to bring out as I told you. However, to me, you surpassed yourself with 6- here I felt transported into a whole different dimension of the story, which I hope you won't mind me saying so, did not "hit" me in the previous chapters, no matter how effective they were in their own right.

Up till now, the story was realistic despite some of the more "filmy" elements of it which were nicely built into your script so it didn't ever descend into that category of fiction, I just cannot take seriously. The heartbreak that started with Sanskaar forgetting Swara and then Swara leaving but both in their own ways stuck in their aching voids and not being able to really live, only existing as such, was portrayed with your usual crisp and fluid style. And then comes along a chapter like 6- this totally changes the dynamics to me. I hope you don't misunderstand my appreciation for 6 as meaning I didn't like the previous- far from it but what I felt from reading 6, was so superior, it has totally changed the tenor of this whole tale for me 😳.

The whole thing came across with such force, it was breathtaking. I loved all of it- the way the office interactions were detailed, showing how both felt for each other respectively, Swara's heartbreakingly valiant efforts to guard herself against Sanskaar this time, Sanskaar's magnetic attraction for her, and their mutual inability to deny what is there- a love so powerful, conscious memory becomes irrelevant after a point. This is the sort of couple whom epics are written about with a love that would endure lifetimes and ages. And so they fall in love all over again. Wanting has nothing to do with it- it is inevitable and the way that was brought about layered the scenes themselves so beautifully. I don't have time to discuss the individual scenes and in some respect I don't really need to as I felt each one was pitched right to bring out the fundamentals very effectively.

I will be totally frank- sometimes when scenes from the show are re-told, it can get a bit too much. Most good writers of course do it excellently and imbue some nuances that still make it worth reading but mostly you still recall the original scene especially the famous ones that VaHe so made their own, that there is a risk the "new" written scene might be diluted by memories of the original. Here you managed that so well- the epic confession for instance that you so thunderously end your marvellous chapter with- that still felt fresh and new- a credit to your overall chapter and the writing I think. This goes for all of it. I couldn't stop reading till the end, almost holding my breath and was swept away with the romance and the underlying notes of sweet pathos which lent it that air of a special story throughout. I particularly adore the way you showed SwaSan falling in love all over again, despite the way both in perhaps different ways fought it and for different reasons. There is something so achingly lovely about this man who has lost all his memory of his powerful love still gravitating to the same woman and the woman not being able to stop herself responding this time, just as she couldn't the first time- the whole it is meant to be and it will be, no matter what feeling was so potent. It made me FEEL it all- the fear, the anticipation, the trepidation, the joy, the romance, the tinge of sadness for what was past- all things a reader needs to feel to be invested in a story:)

Absolutely sterling work 👏👏⭐️. As I said, I would have loved to discuss in far greater detail but at the moment, I will either say what I did or won't have time to say anything so I hope you won't mind. I read that this is the penultimate? You have a lot to live up to by your own standard set I am afraid 😆 but I am confident you will do more than a good job in the last chapter too 😃. I will await the next and be back soon hopefully!

Lots of love as ever,

Shru xoxo

Edited by tootiefrootie11 - 8 years ago

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