SwaSan SS: Amaranthine - A/N pg. 70 10/12 - Page 35

Originally posted by: StarySKY

Dear Nynu ..🤗

Thank you for PM .. ❤️

I wouldn't Res .. this 3 letters will freaks me out .. I am not hoping to increase the number of my Res .. 😕

So I am commenting as now I have time ..

I hate that word too - RES - bane of my existance ******bwaaahaah****

Reading this chapter give me a pain in my heart .. ( actually it a compliment .. as it so beautifully written I could feel the emotions of all of them )

I take as a compliment too, dear, after all, that chapter was meant to bring out the pain and loss of all concerned.

Sanskar and Swara ..

I feel pity for them .. as they don't desarve that .. they were separated by fate .. with no fault of them ..

Yes - very much like the quote I used for Chapter 4 - "It was through fate that they got to know each other, Yet it is destiny that keeps them apart."

Though the thing that doesn't go well with me .. is Swara giving up on her love without trying .. I mean just waiting for him to remember her .. I know she was hurt and too there is the fear for his reaction to her .. but at least she must try .. then decide .. ( I think I said this somewhere in my coment on the chapter 4 )

Well, Swara acted in the heat of the moment and did what she considered was right, though somewhere, deep down, even she feels that maybe she should not have given up so soon. But the self realisation and understanding will come later, it is very much drafted out😊 She would need someone to show her that mirror.😉

Sanskar is the one I feel pain the most .. his inability to recall what he missed ..

I am happy that he still have that connection with swara and he can recognize her ..

Sanskaar is certainly the biggest loser, though now that Swara is back, it is an entirely new beginning for him. He misses her, recognises her or...???? well read in the next chapter

Ragini and Laksh

I love the two of them .. I like that they are going to bring Swara and Sanskar together again ..

Ragini the mastermind and Laksh is following her every step ..

Ragini and Laksh are truly adorable here, loving siblings who are courageous enough to do something for their siblings and themselves. Ragini is always the brainy one and Laksh is very devout follower - deadly combination😊

I am confused by Sanskar reaction to Swara when they met ..

I will wait and see ..

Sanskaar recognises her (as his heart responds to her) but cannot recall her (his mind has forgotten) so when they meet, it is only on professional grounds which is why he lets Laksh take the lead. Swara' s mind agrees but her heart is angry.

Nynu I love the way you are handling this story ..

I am already in love with it ..

And I love that you love it.

Love

Khushi

Originally posted by: iam_aheli_98

Res for ch-5 Nyna. 😳
I'm so sorry dear, I was out of town during Durga Puja vacation, so couldn't read it. 😭
Unresed Nyna dearest. 😃
Awesome update. 👏 👏 RagLak planning, specially Ragini's part was really nice. 😃 They r really trying to reunite SwaSan. 😃 Loved it. 😃 Now waiting for SwaSan faceoff. 😉 Hope Sanskar remembers Swara and their moments soon. 😳 This was a short reply 😔, but hope to type a detailed reply for the next part. 😳 Update soon. 😉 Thanks for the pm. 😃
With love,
Aheli.

Originally posted by: krishuuu

Res sweetheart

Unres

Nyna baby...😊

First plzzz accept 100situps from my side...imsuper late inreply..still got soo many posts to comment...😭specially vijis...😭..i took to long to find my reserve post on this thread...you are doing great job with this story...😉

First, no apologies - in words or in deeds (partly in pure selfishness, if one had do to situps for delays, I would be doing them till the end of time)

Coming to chapter 5 ...for me it was quite amazing as well as hopefull..that swasan will meet oneday..😊when i read 3 years n sanky did not get his memory back...my heart broke sooo badly..🥺.3 years..i m scared with this word..YEARS😕...you could write months why year?? ...1095 days of swasan seperation..😕.it is pure cruelty nyna...but you have to shows swara completed her phd n fulfilling sanky dreams..so im forgiving you for this.😉..plzz like serial6 month seperation...write something like that..3 years...But i didnot like 6 month seperation either..heck i dont like seperation😭..specially of swasan...😳

That is what I was telling Nita, we were talking about it in a couple of posts, I hate SwaSan separation too (I threw a massive ugly tantrum for Shru's DK - when it was more of an MU than a separation) and here I am, merrily making it a three year one (do not worry, even Swara will wail like that - 1000 days ...) It is cruel of me, but I had to have her complete her PhD and fulfil their dream of her becoming Dr Swara. I had no choice (I usually murder any writer who says this😈)

Soo further i enjoyed raglak alot inthis.😃.they did something for swasan ..😉as they were reason both of them are together n soo much in love..i liked mature n thoughtfull raglak...planning n stratigizing to reunite swasan..acting all manipulative in front of dadi...convincing fanily to give swara chance for sanky project indirectly...involving in deeper levels of corporate dealings...they literally cornered swara..closed all door of escape for her which eventually leads to her return...enjoyed loads👏

I have always felt Ragini was all brains and Swara was all heart (now both are caricatures of their possiblities😡) and I just could not resist using her brains. She is suberb, is she not, did not leave much to chance, and expertly manipulated Swara to come home.

Both Ragini and Laksh are very positive and loving siblings, they still hope to reunite Swara and Sanskaar before they get married, in fact the only ones who are actually doing something, rather that wait and hope that everything would set right on its own.

Well high lights of updates were...ragini showing sanky photo album of engagement n her slip of jeeju word...😳she was soo desperate that sanky notice swara n his pic...😳

Ragini was truly desperate and hopeful, but then the photograph did not trigger the memories she wanted to be triggered. Her slip and cover up were good, right, Sanskaar did not even dwell much on it😆

Secondly lucky taking sanky to swara's conference😃...n he slept like baby hearing her voice..same like he did first time with swara...loved it...

Sanskaar sleeping like a baby - that is my favourite too - I like to think that somewhere his heart knew how comforting her voice was, he could just let everything go and relax. You can do that only in the company of someone whom you love and trust over everyone else.

Soo nyna as you have given us heartbreak with nearly 3 years of seperation😭.i want intense powerfull reunion.😳.nothing less..i know you already done this story but still...want super hot...reunion...much bigger n better than confession n proposal...plzzz..waiting😳

Well, as you said, the rough draft is done, so now I am confused what do you mean by super hot...that is difficult for me, but maybe I can heat up things in other ways😉. Powerful reunion??? Well, I shall let you be the judge of it.

Love u...🤗

Talia

Originally posted by: elsanna

Finally nyna di...I completed all the chapters...though it was a tough task for me as no one allow me to use phone for long periods...🤔

Well I must say...ragini was extremely clever here also...loved how you portrayed their feeling before the operations...😭 I cried reading her misery...hope everything sort out soon...

Tani

Originally posted by: Vaiyambar...

Nyna..🤗..

First sorry for late comment. It's becoming more hectic.

Okay coming to update.. it was fabulous as usual.. soo raglak are trying their best to bring swasan close that too for their own benefit.. I would say no.. they love their siblings. They can easily get married, because shomi and dadi are forcing Ragini. Right..

I can't type more babyy mobile is hanging.. All i wanted to say is.. I loved reading it rereading it and enjoyed thoroughly..

Love you a loads..

Kam...

Originally posted by: Cogito_Ergo_Sum

Nynu 🤗🤗🤗

First off, I hope the cute and chubby cuddle master is doing very well indeed. Give him a squeeze and a tickle from me. 😊 😉

He is fine, though it is an adjustment mode for all of us, now that his mother had rejoined office, his demands for being cuddled have increased😊

In keeping with my promise, I am going to make 2 Un res's on this marvelous chapter. 😊

Where do I start-----the banner. 😊 It was so beautiful, the black and white tint adding that shade pf pathos and melancholy which pervaded the setting. And the title as well as the quote further added to the effect---both were superb, and so very apt. My Life without Me. 😭 😭 Sigh...Such feels...😭 And that quote about Darkness being the Absence of the Loved One...so very profound. To Swara, Sanskaar was her sunny, effervescent, ever smiling and cheerful source of light, after all.

So you liked the banner, black and white did suit the chapter. And for Swara, the actual darkness was indeed Sanskaar's absence, not realising that somehow, Sanskaar was also missing her, which is why he was no longer the sunny Sanskaar she knew and loved.

Like I have said before, I love the deft little touches you imbue so much of your writing with. There is a nice tonal consistency, and here and there, you sprinkle lovely little nuggets that enliven and deepen the experience.

Two instances leaped to mind here, which brought a smile to my lips amidst the pangs of heartache that Swara was going through, and the curious sense of absence, which heightened Sanskaar's irritability and change in his heretofore sunny, easygoing disposition.

One was the way you made Dr Chowdhary state the obvious (obvious to us, but perhaps intended as a sly broadside to the way the serial managed the ML track? 😛😉): about how memory and personality were controlled by two completely different areas of the brain. Amnesia would not change Sanskaar's basic nature---so the fact that he could not remember 2 years of his life, did not mean that he would immediately become colder, more curt and withdrawn. Sigh...if only the serial had realized this, instead of making an amnesiac Swara forget pretty much 2/3rds of what had made her Swara in the first place. 😕

That reference to mind numbing flashes and screams of agony was indeed a broadside to the CVs - I hated that "Khoooni" wail of Swara's (I would prefer the SwaRagini song to that wail, so you can imagine the agony it caused). And I recall we had discussed as to whose fault it was Swara's or CVs and most of them felt the Swara is innocent because the amnesia caused her to forget (memories yes, emotions😡😡- Swara is basically a good human being, she morphed into a I-do-not-give-a-damn female🤢) That ML track, such a destruction of what could have been a beautiful track😭😭

I loved the fact that you had made Ragini so intuitive and concerned for Swara here. She grasped that Sanskaar's frustration was possibly owing to the fact that he could not, as hard as he tried, scratch the surface and recollect something which he unconsciously perhaps, felt was of crucial importance to him? The way his family was walking on eggshells around him, treating him like a fragile porcelain doll, must have also irritated a man of such immense energy and self possession as Sanskaar.

I have been quite fascinated by Ragini (and I have completely ignored her characterisation in the serial), and felt that her upbringing should make her perspective, people who live in the shadows either shut themselves up or become very perspective. So though Laksh did notice the changed behaviour, she was able to pinpoint the possible cause.

Sanskaar was quite frustrated with his family's treatment of him, alas if only they had taken a leaf out of Laksh's admission of the truth regarding Kavita and had gently told him about Swara, but then it would not have had much benefit, so I guess they preferred to keep quiet.

Ragini and Lakshya's plan to somehow nudge the chain of events along, was commendable. 😊 I like the fact that they are positive here, people who want and wish the best for their siblings. Ragini's innocent lamb act, getting dragon dadi on the warpath, was another deft little touch---I keep coming back to that, your gift of imparting a light touch amidst very emotional circumstances. (And conversely, also imparting a deeper layer of emotional meaning to an otherwise light hearted circumstance). 😊

Ragini was always the brainy one and Laksh is an admirable follower - it is a deadly combination, is it not. And they were right, how long would they wait for things to improve? They wanted to get married but then they also wanted Swara and Sanskaar to be together. Which is why they planned and executed the whole thing, how successful they will be, next chapter should reveal.

Ragini would have learnt to manipulate (I know that this word is usually used in a negative connotation, but then it could be positive too) and she really did know her Dadi quite well. That was brilliantly done by her, none could object to what Dadi said and Laksh could convince Sanskaar too.

Loved the way Ragini made that small slip and addressed Sanskaar as "Jeeju", before correcting herself and claiming she had called him "Jeth Ji". Both her and Lakshya's reactions, and of course Sanskaar's too; when he pored over the engagement album but failed to really recognize Swara, were top notch. Amazing.

Ragini did slip up but then she did have the presence of mind to cover up too. It was a moment of hope for them, especially, during the second time when Sanskaar deliberates over each photograph and paused at the one of him and Swara. But then, it could not be so easy, so he only remembers meeting her after the surgery. Ragini had to almost break down, it is difficult to hope so much and face the disappointment.

The best part of the update for me, was when Lakshya took Sanskaar along for the mathematics lecture, and as soon as Swara started speaking, Sanskaar felt such an immeasurable sense of calm wash through him. I had a few tears in my eyes then, Nynu---silly, emotional me! Somehow, the way that Lakshya said that Sanksaar had never slept so peacefully, so serenely after his surgery---the fact that Sanskaar felt Swara's voice reminded him of clear blue skies and warm sunlight; as well as moonshine and star studded climes---it was so immensely profound. A soothing lullaby to his heart and mind indeed----one which made him slip into such a deep slumber, even an hour after the lecture had ended.

I loved writing this too, there was a sort of symmetry for me, he did fall asleep the first time he attended a lecture with her. And he could only do that because of how comfortable he felt, which in a way, is a very practical demonstration of how much you love someone, so much that you can completely let yourself go and surrender. He could not help but respond to that call of his soulmate, the tug to his heartstrings.

There was a lovely little light moment there, when Lakshya told Ragini he was not sure if he should just shake Sanskaar awake, and kick him all the way home. 😆 I would normally have been quite furious at Lakshya for daring to think that 😉 😆---but the Lucky here is a completely warm sibling. 😉

Lucky, is indeed a very adorable sibling, he admits that though he would like to kick his bhai, he would not do so because he knew that his brother had never slept so peacefully since the surgery. In fact the only one who truly noticed that something was amiss. Swara and Sanskaar, in this tale, are blessed with the siblings they have.

Rest of the chapter, I shall Un res in my second comment. 😆

Love you Loads, Nynu...

🤗🤗

BTW, Sunny looked very dashing indeed, in your banner. Nice choice of picture. 😆

----Viji

Originally posted by: Cogito_Ergo_Sum

Nynu...🤗🤗🤗

Here I come, merrily skipping in for my second Un Res, for the last third or so of this delectable Chapter 5. 😊 I actually wanted to do this yesterday, but I got caught in typing up final proof of DbC #6, I am 2/3rds the way through, I reckon. Should be able to post (all going well, touch wood!) tomorrow.

And I finally get around to reply, though the fault for my tardiness is yours. Your comment is so lovely to read, that each time I want to reply I simply keep reading it and then think, is it necessary to spoil such a beautiful comment and I postpone replying😳 And I still have to unres for DbC.

What I loved in this latter part of the chapter was the well connected weave of various threads you had drawn before. Swara's doctorate, her field of expertise and study...it was wonderful, the way you linked that to RagLak's plan of ensuring her appointment as the consultant/ expert who would be working with the Maheshwaris for the restructuring/ re engineering of their Diversified corporate entity. And expectedly, Swara put up a fight, she would not be able to bear the fact of working with Sanskaar in close proximity, with him being unable to recognize her, and being rather indifferent to her. Sigh... 😭

That is such a relief, I was a bit apprehensive, because most got upset that there was a three year separation and I kept replying that it is needed because she had to complete her doctrate, which was towards the end, more of what Sanskaar wanted than she, once she had fallen in love she did put that dream on the back burner. Swara and Ragini, as normal sisters do, did discuss their dreams and also the conversations they must have had with Sanskaar and Laksh, respectively. So Ragini would also be in the know as to why Sanskaar did want Swara to specialise in that specific field.

Ragini was aware that Swara would refuse and the precise reason for the same, but she also knew that it was the only way both of them could be healed, it would be painful but she prayed that the love they had for each other, would pull them through.

But the Dean was very obviously in favor of the proposal, RagLak had certainly done their homework very well indeed, to ensure that Swara would have no wiggle room to escape from this.

And given her brains and desperation, Ragini did have a great plan(s) - either way, Swara would have to come back and work with Sanskaar. She had Swara trapped, no way could Swara refuse.

I loved the way you described the reactions of various family members once Swara got back. That moment with Ragini in her room, the reactions of Durga Prasad and Ram Prasad...it was so well done. I love stories where these supporting/ parallel characters also are explored, their reactions and motives delved into. And the way you do that in your fics is really special.

This stamp of approval makes my day, whenever I include reactions / explanations about the parallel / supporting characters, there is a part of me that worries, am I dumping unnecessary drama on my readers? Then I think, but if I were reading, I would not mind, so go ahead. Now I am at peace😊

One conversation I absolutely adored, was the SanLak one where Lakshya somehow persuaded his Bhai to appoint Swara, though Sanskaar was not initially so inclined. I get the official reasons for his reluctance---all very well reasoned, no doubt. Her practical experience in this field was limited, and he might have wanted someone with more industry experience in corporate restructuring. Plus, the fact that she was Ragini's sister (the only relationship that Sanskaar was now conscious of) might make it seem that her appointment, sans all the requisite experience, was something along the lines of nepotism. Something which Sanskaar, conscientious and fastidious as he is, would obviously have balked at.

What I am a bit unsure of, was if there was another subconscious/ unconscious reason for his reluctance as well. Is he somehow wary, of the effect an apparently unknown person has on him? He felt so soothed by her voice, it filled him with such a sense of warmth and familiarity---might Sanskaar be wary as to what implications that has? But then, Sanskaar is always one to take the bull by the horns...so I am not very sure, frankly. Just that this thought struck me.

The way Lakshya persuaded him, the words he used. 👏 👏 That was a subtle, lovely touch there, Nynu. Sanskaar recollecting ---not the conversation itself, nor the person to whom he said this, nor the situation. But he just felt a satisfying sense of warmth somehow, an echo of him having used the same words once. 👏

Laksh really had a tough job, he adores his brother and is in a little awe of him and here, though it is for the best reasons, he has to convince Sanskaar to appoint Swara which considering all the valid reasons that Sanskaar mentioned was slowing becoming an uphill task.

But I am sure Sanskaar never really connected that the Dr Bose whose lecture had lulled him into such a soothing sleep could be the very Dr Swara Bose (Laksh had never mentioned the full name and Sanskaar had never seen her then, but his heart could realise)

Laksh was indeed desperate but was brave and 'Fortune indeed favours the brave' the use of that specific phrase and Sanskaar simply gave in. His heart does know her.

So the much anticipated meeting happens...and poor Swara is filled with a helpless rage, when Sanskaar not only failed to recognize her (which she expected, but it still hurt like crazy), but also the fact that he seemed so distant and cold with her. That easy and warm friendliness had now been replaced by a slightly cold, overtly professional demeanor; and that cut Swara very deeply. Especially when Sanskaar left the discussion for her and Lucky to carry on, and moved away. That really raised her hackles!

Swara was prepared, sort of, to meeting Sanskaar and not have him recognise her but somewhere, I think, she hoped he would remember her. When he simply met her as he would have met any other professional, her heart could not handle it. Her mind kept warning her that Sanskaar was not being rude to her or ignoring her but then the heart does not listen, does it?

So now in her anger, I wonder what Swara would do? 😉 A few tart remarks, some clash of personalities? I rather like to think Sanskaar would be more than a little intrigued by this petite little firebrand! 😆

What do you think Swara will do? I know, it is going to be my favourite - a fire and ice confrontation, sort of. 😉😉

Waiting eagerly for chappie 6!

Will update by weekend - there are a few lines which I desperately need to set to keep the flow and I am absolutely distracted by the tempting - you know what and a few other ideas (you will be the first to know). But Chapter 6 - definitely by weekend and I hope it does not ruin your Diwali.

Loads of Love,

-----Viji