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Razia Ajmal

@raaz19

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Posted: 9 years ago

#21

Originally posted by: raaz19
Res...buddy wow another story...I am all ready behind with the review on vajra and you spoil me with this...
All I can say it's awesome and so emotional lol...It totally had me ...even feeling a bit...😭...

Saku how do you make it so magical yet so mysterious at the same time...The balance was amazing and the tittle...guardian is just perfect ...😉😉

Okay I promise to write more...at the end of this week...

Thanks for pm...

Raz...

Okay sorry for the delay and here it is...😉

Let me say thank u so much for writing this mystical T's and tittle was just perfect...While reading I could feel both the concern and longing that swara felt for her lose of her friend and her protector...I sensed she wanted to go back in time but like you said what is done cannot be reversed no matter how much we wish for...but we can still work on fixing our mistake even if a magical spell binging potion it required...whom creates that know that is the big question. ..😒

This message was just so lovingly expressed in your writing and for which I just want to give you a big 👏

The moment of her looking at the moon clearly showed what sh ewes missing in her life and was a perfect was of showing that she was missing her would mate her aging start...I know that the moon is there to protect and indicate the starting of a new day a new dawn but when you said that swara was just stanine there looking at it longingly trying to get back what she had lost...One just felt her grief of losing love and hope...yes its true sanskaar is not just her soul mate but he is also her symbol of faith that shows her that everything will be okay...

This is were I loved the flashback of there sweet memory of watching the stars which not only showed us that they made for each other but they truly understand each other without speaking a word...😆 it was so romantic and intense if you know what I mean 😉

Back to the present I see that sanskaar also wanted to get his swara back and just like her he was looking for a excuse to see her...If only he had closed the gap between them...the tension could be felt and I also seemed to understand why he was hurt after all he is human and can take only so much...

The shawl was a really nice touch of his care and truly was apt to the tittle of protector because even in his anger he still wishes her well and wishes for her to be safe...This gesture made truly spell binding and emotional...

A perfect start to a intense update...seriously please update soon..🤗

For me the real question is whom will close this distance and remove this feeling of loss first...swara or sankaar..?truly a big cliffhanger indeed 😆

Waiting already raz 😛

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ZAINAB

@Miss-swasan

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Posted: 9 years ago

#22

after reading the title ... I had to say

god I love you haiii this is perfect

two of my favorite things

ok let me read first

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

@Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

#23

Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum
Res 😊 Shall un res as soon as I can. Loved the parallel to the Patronus Charm.

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Wow Saku...🤗

I was just so impressed by this piece. A work which combines references to the Harry Potter novels, astronomy (another of our shared interests it seems! 😊) and of course, that achingly lovely interlude of SwaSan's life, when both of them loved the other with such palpable yearning. 😳

We've had hilarious exchanges about the Patronus charm---you know, I fancy mine as a Kangaroo. 😆 😉 And I couldn't resist but imagine Swara's patronus as a mischievously smiling Sanskaar, a teasing glint in his eye. And Sanskaar's, of course, would be a determined Swara, slaying all the monsters of darkness which had clouded his formidable mind. 😳

You wove a lovely tale there, set around the time when Swara had realized her feelings and confessed to Sanskaar; but he was just burnt too badly to believe her. That description was awesome---about how her doubts, her suspicion on him had sucked all the vivaciousness, all the hope from him. Leaving his marvelous eyes an empty, benumbed shell of their former shining, glittering glory. Yet reflecting an agonizing, cursed pain.

That sentence, about how he had got so tired of fighting her demons that he was now held frozen and silent against his own, his trust in her affection for him and his own steely determination to keep hoping, now shattered---that was just so powerful. Very emotional and very hard hitting.

And that memory, that blazingly happy memory which Swara reached back in her memory for---that was such a warm, cozy moment. Sanskaar's mere presence, and sidelong glance filled with reassurance and affection--that would have filled Swara with so much comfort, even at a time when she was reeling from the "forced marriage" they had had to undergo, still trying to process the impact of the vows they had taken together.

Sirius is a lovely metaphor for SwaSan indeed---binary stars that shine almost as one. The brighter, shiner one glowing all the more on account of its warm companion. Shining all the brighter because it was not alone, it had a companion traveling alongside it, in the vast, cold emptiness of space. Wow...that imagery was very profound, so apt for Swara and Sanskaar. Really powerful.

And just when Swara is wondering if there is any hope left for them at all, she gets an answer to her unasked questions, her unvoiced plea for benediction. Sanskaar, however he may try to keep aloof from Swara, has her comfort paramount in her mind. How could he not, when he loves her as deeply as he does?

So the fact that the weather is cold, impels him to bring a shawl for Swara---but his uncertainty about the reason for her return to Maheshwari house, his pained feeling that she has returned for her mission and not for him, prevents him from cozily wrapping it around her like he would no doubt have wanted to.

And what a Sanskaar-ish excuse that was. 😃 😛 Searching for a "missing file", and leaving without it. 😉 Leaving the shawl for Swara...and telling her apparently in a casual tone, but with a depth of care and real concern, to close the windows so she would not catch a cold from the chilly, billowing breeze.

Left me with a warm, cozy feeling---hope rising like a phoenix from the ashes, indeed. 😊 Now waiting to see what unfolds in Part 2. I think it would be Swara that has to make the next move---Sanskaar has added a shawl to his customary hanky overtures. 😳 😉 Waiting to see how Mrs Maheshwari convinces her hubby that she indeed puts his interests up front and centre.

Lots of Love,

---Viji

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Krishnabhisarik

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Posted: 9 years ago

#24

Sakura🤗 Unres on 1st😃

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Sakura24

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Posted: 9 years ago

#25

Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum
Res 😈

😆😆 What a swoop!😳

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Krishnabhisarik

@Krishnabhisarik

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Posted: 9 years ago

#26

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Ohhh!! It was super awesome!! 🤗The sunrise, sanskar enthralled by Swara.. Loved how his treacherous heart was putting affirmative words in his mouth, even when he 'thought' he wanted to refuse.. The best part was that he realised her plan soon enough and still played along.. Mr. Maheshwari, The heart always wins the battle with the mind..😆😉 How cute is Swara!! Going through all those elaborate 'schemes', to spend time with him n give him a bday surprise And what a chocolatey treat!! The tiny spine-tingling frosting tasting was☺️ Swara's resolute stance when she says she will never give up on them, even if he does literally melted my heart😳 No wonder Sanskar melts too😃 Itni shiddat se chaaha hai toh kaaynaat ko toh jhukna padega hi na.. Oh so romantic piece this was!! Loved it

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Nynaeve

@Nynaeve

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Posted: 9 years ago

#27

Dear Saku,

Loved the story - Unres for full one on Page 3🤗

Love,

Nyna

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Prerana

@prerulalli

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Posted: 9 years ago

#28

This is so beautiful saku 👏👏

The way u dealt with both the parts is absolutely amazing

In the first part we had a tiny winy glimpse of actually what happened in the serial

(Glad that u mentioned before only that there would be no RAGINI MALKIN drama 😉😉😉)

The second part was so adoroble

Swara in full action to manofy her PATI PARMESHWAR 😳

The way she looked at him...😉😉😉

The way she made him drop at baadi

The cake making procedure...

Sanskaar was already losing himself in the meantime...😆

When the final twist arrived "Happy Birthday Sanskaar"

I myself was stunned ...

How beautifully u have managed to clear everything in between them rather than messing up things how they have done in the serial👏

The final kiss😳

I better not talk about it...else😳

Thanks for this TS from your side saku

It was beautifully penned down

Lots of love,

Prerana😊

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#29

Unres for both parts on Page 1 Saku 🤗

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

@Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

#30

Originally posted by: Sakura24

😆😆 What a swoop!😳

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Ahh...such a sweet, delectable, chocolatey, scrumptious treat that 2nd shot was. 😉 Had so many lovely, intriguing ingredients going into the batter mix---all of which I thoroughly loved. 😉

To start off, that lovely description of the sunrise. And seeing Swara through Sanskaar's eyes, standing all glowing and ethereally innocent and pure, beautiful both on the inside and outside, as she always will be for him. She is his own personal angel, isn't she? 😳

And Mrs Swara Sanskaar Maheshwari certainly had planned this lovely birthday treat for her beloved hubby in a most Sanskaar--like manner! At last, all that obsession with planning and missions resulted in a sound approach and execution!

Of course, Swara couldn't exactly pull the wool over her hubby's eyes (his molten brown ones certainly are far seeing, aren't they? 😳). Sanskaar was certainly quite flustered initially about exactly what his beautifully crazy wife was upto. He wanted so much (not!) to stay away from her, but found the allure impossible to resist, no? By the time they reached the baadi, and Swara pretended oh so realistically (not!) to remember that her parents had gone for the day elsewhere, Sanskaar knew very well she wanted to spend time with him, just together time for the both of them. No loony sister or obsessive cousin! 😉 And he certainly wanted to go along with it---though poor dude, he'd completely forgotten it was his birthday! Errmm..just curious, but which month do you envision Sanskaar's birthday as? 😆 Same as VK's? 😉 Or are you altering it to your birth month?

What followed was so utterly romantic, tender, affectionate---the works. Swara making Sanskaar taste the frosting, making him give her a taste...and leaving him with tingling fingers and slightly gasping for breath huh? You rock, Mrs Maheshwari! 😉

Her reiteration of what she felt for him, how she wanted to cling on the hope that he would understand her love for him, how she never wanted to move on, would never be able to move on from the intense feelings she had for Sanskaar---these were all so wonderfully articulated. Just pure love and adoration dripping from each word. Sigh. 😊

The chocolate certainly tasted excellent on that sampling huh? I guess on future birthdays for both of them, they might prefer this method of tasting the cake, rather than using a plate and spoon. You've given a new definition to the term "Having the cake and eating it too!!" 😆 ☺️

Loads of Love,

---Viji

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