Vajra : An elven tale SwaSan chapter 13 page 52 Updated 21/5/16 - Page 13

Originally posted by: CarpedeimRose

Amazing prologue ,loved it a lot👏👏

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

Dear Sakura,

That was simply amazing 👏👏- I would really like to write more, (but I am stealing time between work - the March madness descends).

If time permits I shall surely update this. Till then, looking forward to reading it (and will try to be prompt and detailed with my comments)

Love,

Nyna

Originally posted by: geetkumar

Hi Sakura,

The starting is amazing and intriguing as all your stories are. But Fantasy is one of my favorite genre, therefore thoroughly hooked and quite eagerly waiting for the story to unfold.

Originally posted by: 7APK

Super - Duper Amazing
Fabulous Introduction
Loved it
Continue Soon
Thanks for the PM

Fantastic start Saku 👏 👏, as I knew it would be of course so not a surprise there, just an ovation for attempting such a brave mission and so splendidly weaving the magic with the very first chapter. I regret that my comment can't do full justice to the chapter as I'm at work and typing from the dreaded phone but I don't want to not comment and need to write some of DK 19 tonight so won't have time again! Hope my appreciation will still come through!

I love the sketching of the difference planes and I had a suspicion that Vajra might be a person or race! So Sanskaar is their chosen Prince- I knew the title would have a connection to him, but I like the hybrid angle there. Dare I hope Kavita will stay positive here? She's clearly his unattainable love, although their relation had echoes for me of Legolas- Tauriel, rather than Kili- Tauriel which could lead to a true breakout rebellion. In short, affection and mutual respect more than overwhelming passion. Ofc we know where that will come from and for whom! 😉

Really liked the angle of Shona, with her brother trying to kill her and her mother as her protector, especially overlain with Mohan's deflection to keep the girl safe and possibly secreted away?!

Overall all the ingredients seem to be there for a fab fantasy world mixed with all the "sliding doors" moments when those worlds collide with the mundane human one. Have you read the Mortal Instruments books? I got that sort of overall feel here.

It also made me feel brave again to relook at my presently abandoned plot outline for an outright fantasy I was planning to write- nothing on SwaSan or swaragini but for a novel. It's got different worlds and otherworldly creatures and seeing how nicely it can flow, gives me hope that I may be able to revisit that at some point:).

Cannot wait for this to infold dearest Saku and sorry about the paucity of the comment for now. Will try to say more when I can!

Lots of love,
Shru xoxo

I never thought I will say this but sanskar kavita scene was really very nice😊 like many other I don't know anything about the mytholological historical and some religious facts which are parts of this story so its hard for me to understand this story but still the way u explained all the scenes even without knowing all these I can understand what is happening and guess which way the story is moving and the whole credit goes to you 👏 by the way in this story I am not going to guess the suspense I can't guess the suspense of ur normal present time stories how will I guess here 😆 so I will not try what say😉 there is a advantage of writing historical and mythological stories with the characters of swaragini show the names of the characters of this show really suits as historical and mythological characters isn't it

Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11

Fantastic start Saku 👏 👏, as I knew it would be of course so not a surprise there, just an ovation for attempting such a brave mission and so splendidly weaving the magic with the very first chapter. I regret that my comment can't do full justice to the chapter as I'm at work and typing from the dreaded phone but I don't want to not comment and need to write some of DK 19 tonight so won't have time again! Hope my appreciation will still come through!

I love the sketching of the difference planes and I had a suspicion that Vajra might be a person or race! So Sanskaar is their chosen Prince- I knew the title would have a connection to him, but I like the hybrid angle there. Dare I hope Kavita will stay positive here? She's clearly his unattainable love, although their relation had echoes for me of Legolas- Tauriel, rather than Kili- Tauriel which could lead to a true breakout rebellion. In short, affection and mutual respect more than overwhelming passion. Ofc we know where that will come from and for whom! 😉

Really liked the angle of Shona, with her brother trying to kill her and her mother as her protector, especially overlain with Mohan's deflection to keep the girl safe and possibly secreted away?!

Overall all the ingredients seem to be there for a fab fantasy world mixed with all the "sliding doors" moments when those worlds collide with the mundane human one. Have you read the Mortal Instruments books? I got that sort of overall feel here.

It also made me feel brave again to relook at my presently abandoned plot outline for an outright fantasy I was planning to write- nothing on SwaSan or swaragini but for a novel. It's got different worlds and otherworldly creatures and seeing how nicely it can flow, gives me hope that I may be able to revisit that at some point:).

Cannot wait for this to infold dearest Saku and sorry about the paucity of the comment for now. Will try to say more when I can!

Lots of love,
Shru xoxo

Originally posted by: Sanya17

I never thought I will say this but sanskar kavita scene was really very nice😊 like many other I don't know anything about the mytholological historical and some religious facts which are parts of this story so its hard for me to understand this story but still the way u explained all the scenes even without knowing all these I can understand what is happening and guess which way the story is moving and the whole credit goes to you 👏 by the way in this story I am not going to guess the suspense I can't guess the suspense of ur normal present time stories how will I guess here 😆 so I will not try what say😉 there is a advantage of writing historical and mythological stories with the characters of swaragini show the names of the characters of this show really suits as historical and mythological characters isn't it

Thanks for the pm waiting for the next part

Saku- sorry! Moron me had for that it was Arya who was being guarded! Urgh! Trying to do too much at once! So used Shona in my rush:), basically uncle who is out to get the niece is what I was meant to type:)! Xoxo