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Posted: 9 years ago

#81

Originally posted by: bones123
That was such a lovely read...👏
Absolutely brilliant... how you used 'air' to depict his fickle mind and impulsive nature, but comes into his own and becomes that calm and collected support that his brother needs.

Loved how you've depicted the kite incident and what Sanskaar might have felt in a more grave scenario. The emotions all so well fleshed out, from the pain, the terror and despair to finally relief and joy.

Back to Lakshya...If you ever think of exploring how the gale force will launch itself on Ragini, I'd love to read how he gives her a lot to worry about :)

-Priya

Hey Priya...🤗 🤗

A pleasure to "meet" you, and hope we have several interactions going forward. Thanks so much for your insightful comment on this OS.

Lakshya does seem like an Air sign, doesn't he? He has certainly displayed quite a bit of erratic and impulsive choices in the past, but I would like to think with the wisdom of some contemplation and introspection, he could come to harness his innate goodness and strength. He does seem to be moving in that direction in the serial, becoming more mature and balanced.

I am so very happy you loved the portrayal of SwaSan, and how Sanskaar would react, seeing Swara injured and in pain. He loves her just so potently, so deeply, that he would feel utterly terrified and desperate at the very thought of losing her. As for Swara herself, it was her link to Sanskaar that keeps her moored to consciousness, to life; for she loves him too intensely to leave him like this.

I haven't yet fleshed out a sequel to this, to be frank. But will definitely PM you for my further work.

Cheers

---Viji

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Posted: 9 years ago

#82

Originally posted by: soapbubble
Viji writes about Lakshya!!! *faints*
Heheheh

But seriously, this was so well done! Loved the elemental descriptions - how a little balance in his natal chart would have helped Lakshya...

And of course, his slow but sure way to acceptance and even celebration of Sanskaar and Swara's relationship!

This made for lovely reading this morning :)
Bubble

Hey Bubble Sweetheart...🤗 🤗

Thanks a ton yaar. Yup, the idea of me writing a piece showing Lakshya in a favorable light must be like snowfall in the Sahara, na? 😆 😆

But seriously, the way he has been behaving in the serial of late, has certainly made me think he has become more mature, more balanced. He seems to have spent some time in long overdue contemplation and introspection on his own missteps, which brought them to such a pass. I dare say the serial Lucky is coming close to your version, though still a considerable way off in perspective and sheer "coolness" quotient. 😉

I would like to think that Lakshya has sincerely decided to move on, and is genuinely happy now for Swara and Sanskaar. He can see what they mean to each other, and has also realized that what Swara and he himself had, was a flickering, temporary infatuation, nothing more.

Thanks again Bubble! 🤗

Loads of Love,

---Viji

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

#83

Originally posted by: ssroomani

Great Viji! Thank you so much for this one...a fitting finale to the 5 elements! 🤗 "Air" suits Lakshya well...

I loved it...and am glad you used the Makar Sankranti incident in it! The context suits the present Lakshya and it filled the gap I felt on the show when they didn't show much concern for Swara's accident.

Have yet to read your other stories...time is a problem right now. I have kept all the PMs...hope to get to them soon!

Hey Shobhs...🤗 🤗

Thanks so very much yaar. I am so very happy that you loved this one, you were one of my pals who were motivating me to write "Air", back when I was too bugged with Lakshya to attempt it. 😊

Air does suit Lakshya quite a bit na? It certainly does seem this is the element in his zodiac sign.

I so wanted to show the makar sankranti incident with the gravity it deserved. Sanskaar would definitely have felt so anguished and desperate, seeing Swara in pain. I wanted to focus on that intense aspect of their relationship, as well as how Lakshya is sincerely moving on, and being able to be genuinely happy for SwaSan, finally.

Lots of Love,

---Viji

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Posted: 9 years ago

#84

Originally posted by: anushapinky
one more superb os..likd laksh here..aftr watchng monday episode so much disappointment frm sanskar's side bt da way you showd sanskar scare for swara's life loved it amazing..brilliant writting skillz do write more stories..

Hey Anusha...🤗 🤗

Thanks so very much. I wanted to show Sanskaar's sheer terror and anguish when he sees his Swara in pain, and struggling for her life. He would feel literally as if his very heart and breath had stopped, seeing her like this. And Swara herself, would me moored to life and consciousness because of her intense love for Sanskaar.

Am so very glad you liked this portrayal.

Regarding Lakshya, I do feel he has become more mature, after introspecting on how his own missteps brought them all to this situation. His contemplation has made him more understanding, he has realized what SwaSan mean to each other. I would like to believe, that he would henceforth be a true brother to Sanskaar, and a true friend to Swara.

Cheers

---Viji

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Posted: 9 years ago

#85

Originally posted by: RUQAIYA10
Vijiii!!!!🤗🤗

How are you? Thank you so much for the pm . I have really been missing you and your wonderful stories. So when I saw your Pm my heart just skipped a beat. Will comment as soon as I am free.😃

Hey Ruqu sweetheart 🤗 🤗

Aww, that really made my day, to hear that you were looking forward to more of my stories. 😳 Thanks a ton, darling!

Sure, do read when convenient, and let me know what you felt.

Lots of Love,

---Viji

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Posted: 9 years ago

#86

Originally posted by: luvakanksha
Hey viji
Brilliant os I loved it
Especially sanskar's concern for swara was so touching
Lakshay's realisation and redemption was handled fantastically
Ragini as usual was irritating and evil
The serial itself is going good now because of all the Swasan moments cvs are giving us and this os was cherry on the cake
Thanks a lot for the pm
Love your work pls continue this

Hey Akanksha...🤗 🤗

Thanks so very much, dear, for your warm words. I am just overjoyed that you loved this piece so much.

I wanted to show Sanskaar's mortal terror at the thought of losing Swara, his desperation at the sight of her in pain, fighting for her life. Their connection, their love for each other is so intense, that Swara herself, even in an unconscious state, felt and responded to Sanskaar's heartfelt call for her to return to him.

Lakshya, I do feel, has realized how his own missteps contributed to the mess their family is now in. He has introspected enough to feel genuine remorse, and now wants to rediscover his own innate goodness. I would like to think that from now, he would be a true brother to Sanskaar, and a true friend to Swara.

Lots of Love,

---Viji

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Posted: 9 years ago

#87

Originally posted by: simsen23
Thank you viji for liking my DP.its anna from frozen.i like both princess elsa(ice queen) and Anna.but Anna is my favorite,the naughty one like me 😆 ...Oh You have a daughter thats so cute.Forward my love to her 😊
ya viji the air sign characteristic suits lakshay's personality so much ...coz i m also a geminine(i guess its an air sign too)..
Lovely chapter that depicts the true meaning of every relationship..and thanx for liking the quote
love
simi 😊

Hey Simi...🤗 🤗

You're a Gemini...that's so wonderful! My daughter is a Gemini too. 😊 Yup, you're right, its an Air sign. You are supposed to be highly creative, and an excellent communicator. Capable of putting yourself in the other person's shoes, having a warm optimism and positivity. And the other traits as well: curious, versatile, a tad mutable and impulsive sometimes. 😆 My daughter fits the traits to a T. 😉

I'm a Cancerian--the Zodiac sign immediately after yours! 😊

Thanks again for your lovely words yaar. It really made my day!

Love,

---Viji

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Posted: 9 years ago

#88

Originally posted by: rayab_rajpoot
hi viji😛
nice work buddy👍🏼
smooth and beautifully written.👏
and yeah i have read all your element series loved them all❤️
thanks for the pm buddy😊🤗

Hey Rayab...🤗 🤗

Thanks a ton dear. Am so very happy that you loved this OS, and I am just overjoyed that you loved the previous OS's in the Elements series as well. 🤗

Lots of Love,

---Viji

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Posted: 9 years ago

#89

Originally posted by: TRPS
Hey Viji! 🤗
you back, :)) I thought someone took a break from writing!!!!!!!
well! now good for us!
Wow! you mingled the element air with Lakshya's personality very neatly. when you described how punditji was feeling while making Lakshya's kundli and then his thoughts on destiny was so right on spot! it was good if he could clearly tell them later and others listening to his advice.( but besides seeing their happiness, punditji loved that mava kachoris so much!! ;) so, thought to secure a chance of next time by not telling them . 😆 😛 Isn't it, Viji!!! )

by the way! Lakshya doing something right was a nice change to see! the way he showed his care and love for his brother Sanskaar was so appreciative step. nice to see him acknowledging Swara as a friend and pleasant memory! quite mature step it is! Phoenix reference was so apt! :))
about Swasan scene, thank goodness! you did the due justice with it! CVS made a mockery of this painful situation and Swasan's reactions and getting eyelock between Swara Raagini!!! *ewww*
heart wrenching to see Sanskaar in this situation and then Swara's unconscious mind's thoughts. I so love how you connected whole scenario, from woods to woodsy perfume of Sanskaar! and finally Swara coming back to her Sanskaar. :)) It was indeed a beautiful sequence Viji! me so loved it! :)) (now I got it , your ever present love for woodsy fragrance! :D )
Again a Wonderful writing Viji! Keep writing! :))

Toshi my dear...🤗 🤗 🤗

Hahaha each time I think I would take a short break, SwaSan obsession takes over again, and I feel compelled to write another piece. 😊 They are just such a magical couple, I can't stop myself! 😉

Lakshya's characteristics really match the Element of Air na? I do feel he has this element in his zodiac sign.

😆 😆 Your guess of the pandit loving the mawa kachoris too much to risk not being invited again was rib ticklingly funny. You might have a valid theory there yaar! 😆 But seriously, I do believe that thought about Fate---that it is not an absolute, but rather based on the choices and decisions each person makes. A blend of free will and destiny. 😊

I seriously wanted to show a very intense SwaSan scene. Sanskaar adores her so much, that the sight of her in pain, struggling for her life with such an injury, would be sure to make him feel completely anguished and terrified. Sanskaar would literally feel that his breath was choking, that his heartbeats were stopping. And Swara herself, was moored to her life and consciousness, was prevented from slipping into a coma because of the intense connection, the deep adoration she has for Sanskaar. I am so very glad you loved that portrayal.

As for Lakshya, I do feel he has spent a lot of time introspecting on his own failings and weaknesses, and has thereby become a more mature, more balanced person. He has realized what SwaSan mean to each other, how true and pure their love is. And he is, I would like to think, determined now to be a true brother to Sanskaar, and a friend to Swara.

And bingo!! You correctly understood why I love woodsy perfumes so much! 😆 😆 I have been buying Hugo Boss Man and Marks and Spencer Blue Energy for my Hubby for quite some time now. 😉

Thanks so much for your lovely comment Toshi! Am posting an OS Drabble series later today evening or tomorrow.

Lots of Love,

---Viji

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Posted: 9 years ago

#90

Originally posted by: pearl.16
PERFEZIONARE !! Don't get me wrong please... It is Italian word for PERFECT which suits perfectly to your OS !!
The OS was beautiful !!
SwaSan was shown perfectly !!
Laksh... Omg !! I just fell in love with him in your OS !! What a character !!
Loved it !!