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Razia Ajmal

@raaz19

Dazzler

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Posted: 9 years ago

#11

Lovely a mysterious past to our hero... I like this streak of his indeed...

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angelpureness

@angelpureness

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 9 years ago

#12

Originally posted by: sarra0
Nice stiry, loved the ending...but im sad its a OS...wud have loved to have read more on this

Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it. Hopefully I shall be adding on to the story.

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angelpureness

@angelpureness

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 9 years ago

#13

Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11
Hey! Very nicely written indeed and you unfolded both the tale and the eventual suspense so beautifully! Really like this style of narrative and I loved how you explored individual feelings of the characters! Nicely done and I hope to read more!

Best wishes

S

Thank you. I am glad you enjoyed it. I shall try to continue it with another OS. Need to make sure it will be as interesting a read.

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zeenucharm

@zeenucharm

Explorer

Posted: 9 years ago

#14

Wow intresting...sooo its all sanskar plans...eagerly waiting for next update

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angelpureness

@angelpureness

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 9 years ago

#15

Originally posted by: -Ros-
Very very interesting!
Liked how you set the story up by simply describing each character's psyche...

Sanskaar being the chess master had already made his moves.. that subtle & smooth reveal at the end was really nice!
Wish this was a 4S or sth.. would've loved to dig more deeply into his game plan.

Awesome start! 👍🏼

Thank you. I am glad you enjoyed the story.

I agree, the end was awesome... Gosh I sound like I am preening 😳

This OS is beyond my expectations and now I shall have to work very hard to match this OS.

Hopefully I shall be able to write the next part soon... Just need to make sure it will be as good.

Fingers crossed.

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angelpureness

@angelpureness

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 9 years ago

#16

Originally posted by: raaz19
Lovely a mysterious past to our hero... I like this streak of his indeed...

There is something very tempting about a grey hero.

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angelpureness

@angelpureness

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 9 years ago

#17

Originally posted by: zeenucharm
Wow intresting...sooo its all sanskar plans...eagerly waiting for next update

Yup... He is a devil disguised as an angel 😆

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iykyk

@iykyk_3

Rocker

+ 6

Posted: 9 years ago

#18

Hey!

Beautiful piece of work! Loved the way you explored the emotions of each character. Sanskar manipulated the situation well to his benefit. And he got the desired result too. I wonder what would be Swara's reaction once she comes to know about his reality. Continue soon dear. Will be looking forward to read more.

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Preeti

@-Prithi-

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#19

very well written
loved the ending
would like to read more of ur work

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angelpureness

@angelpureness

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 9 years ago

#20

Originally posted by: Cinderella3
Hey!
Beautiful piece of work! Loved the way you explored the emotions of each character. Sanskar manipulated the situation well to his benefit. And he got the desired result too. I wonder what would be Swara's reaction once she comes to know about his reality. Continue soon dear. Will be looking forward to read more.

Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it. I too am curious over swara's reaction. :)

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