Against All Odds- A SwaSan Four Shot - Page 20

Originally posted by: SONAL30

Hey shru🤗

first of all

sorry for the delay in replying

Now the TS or Four Shot

Part 1

Ragya r so cheap n manipulative🤢just hate them

they lied to swara n took her with them...gande couple...jhoothey duniya bhar ke😡

n their swa lak reunion jaap was so🥱swara was feeling uncomfortable but but but nitbto worry ji swara tera dhyaan kidhar hai ki tera hero idhar hai😉finally sansku reached there n tgey spent some quality time n some extremely romantic moments awww

she wanted a soft toy n he bribed the shopkeeper😆n that ugly animal wala remark🤣sansku is too funny😆

ragya were jealous areh waah😃

I know I M A sadistic😆

Part 2

laksh is such a drama queen🤢he slit his wrist to gain sympathy n to blackmail swara

bewkoof swara she ran to help that jerk n poor sanku felt bad😭

why swara why just look at his cute n innocent face...I dont think he deserves all this ignorance

AP played her part so smartly n she did very wrong with sanskaar

sanskaar n swara's convo was well needed👏

the way she was behaving with him n treating him like a shit wasn't right so a reality check was much needed😉

n sanskaar's words definitely workedout in their favour

Part 3

swara went to temple n didn't even meet the bhaijaan

chalo koi nhi...this time ragini stooped so low🤢

sanskaar's heroic entry was but our hero got injured😭n after seeing his condition swara too fainted

a complete breath taking update👏

loved the way u have written the saving n sanskaar getting injured sequence👏tussi tey vadda changa likh lende ho ji😳the emotion the concern which sanskaar was feeling was so apt n beautifully written

Part 4

the much awaited part

swara's confession😳

she confessed her feelings in front of the whole family...wow swara u r too bold babes

but sanskaar ne swara ki ummedon par jug bharkar paani daal diya😆

but swara ne mana liya sansku ko❤️

Loved DP n SwaSan's convo

ragini is a genius yaar she again fooled everyone n her psycho act was scary

she is a psychopath agar ladka hoti toh main ussey psycho rapist or psycho murderer bulati

Laksh again crossed his limits...he pushed my sansku...aww poor guy was already injured n that devarji😡

DP slapped him...wow DP uncle tussi chaa gyee n he thrown him out too

sanskaar said he n swara will shift somewher else but DP said not this time because of laksh they have already faced the injustice that too so many time now its devar ji's turn😆dhakke maar ke nikalo issey DP uncle

n then swasan scene was so romantic

sanskaar is so naughty n swara is too naive to understand his double meaning talk😆

loved it shru

thanks for the pm dear🤗

Originally posted by: Smilelicious

Shruti first of all i'm really very very sorry that i'm commenting only now 😔 Exams are killing me and i don't have enough time to come on IF.
Coming to your Four shot. How splendidly you have written this, ohmygod 👏 Take a bow girl !
I can't tell you how much i love your works, and this literally made my day after my exams 😳
The first part was beautiful, the SwaSan's moments were a delight to read I was literally imagining those scenes in my mind 😳 I found this line particulary beautiful ❤️
'They couldn't however tear their gazes away from each other entirely, and she didn't protest that his hand stayed lightly holding her wrist, her other hand clutching the precious prize he had won her. They slowly started walking away from the stalls to his car, sneaking lingering glances at each other, enveloped in a magic of their own making. It was a magical moment
The second part was so emotional Shru 😭 I had tears in my eyes while reading it, i felt connected with it, so kudos to you. You have written it amazingly 👏 Can i avoid talking about Laksh & Ragini? I felt so annoyed by their behaviour and his attempt to suicide 😕
AP was trying to convince Sanskar to leave Swara because she believes both are in still in love. Ugh can't she see Sanskar's pain? I so feel that she might turn into an anti-SwaSan in the serial as well 😕 She might try to persuade Sanskar to leave her because her happiness is with Laksh. No no please i hope this doesn't happen.
"Swara Lucky se pyaar nahi karti Maa" he tried to keep his voice emotionless but she knew him too well, and the raw agony emenating from him jarred her too. But she was a warrior Queen, made of sterner stuff.
"Yeh tum jaante ho yah phir maanna chahte ho Beta?"They both looked at each other, so similar and yet so different.
Those dialogues were extremely touching. You left me speechless.
In the next part Sanskar tried to make Swara understand. I do believe as you said that he was bot trying to being mahaan. He wants Swara to take a decision, she has the right to decide not Laksh, Ragini or AP.
Swara felt like she had walked in to a nightmare. The only problem was the person who usually could be relied on to wake her from it, was the one pushing her towards the monsters. 👏 This line described so so well her situation in that moment. Sanskar would never let her go away from him, but he is at the same time aware of the fact the relationship can't go on just from one side.
He is completely right. He is not forcing her to give a second chance to Laksh, he wants to know what she wants.
I was very glad to see not a bholi bhali Swara that is easily trapped by Ragini and her sweet words. Way to go Swara!
This line scared me a bit 😲 Ragini smirked to herself, suddenly knowing what she needed to do. She can do anything and this scares me.
The entire atmosphere in the mandir was perfectly described, the sense of peace and magic there is something amazing.
I loved Swara's realization in the mandir. She felt that he was more then a friend for her. The whole scene where she says that just the thought of leaving the MM and then not be able to to laugh with Sanskar and watch his smile, scared her, was outstanding 👏
I truly loved this part ❤️ Finally she was able to realize the immense importance of Sanskar in her life.
Sanskar is so intelligent, he hired a detective and thankfully was able to reach the mandir in time to save her, but he got hurt 😳
I can't imagine Swara's condition at that time seeing her husband lying down hurt She clutched his head on to her lap, sobbing hysterically, her throat raw with her earlier screams. Sanskaar was looking at her with pain-glazed eyes, but trying valiantly to croak out that he was going to be ok. Swara would not be so consoled.
And the love confession. Wow 👏 Well maybe the hospital is not the best place in the world to confess her feelings 😆 but it was needed. This line Their eyes were locked to each other's ❤️
The final part was AMAZING Loved the way Sanskar was trying to convince Swara at the beginning, poor him. Kahan phas geya bechara 😆
This cuties ❤️ How concerned she was about him the whole night <3
Ragini's fake memory loss and all her evil plans were exposed 🥳 How low can she fall? And that tight slap on Laksh's face by DP made my day 😆 Woho much needed!
Aww the SwaSan's romance in bedroom ❤️ And naughty Sanskar, oh i absolutely loved it 😉☺️
The last line, cherry on the top i would say Victory in love is always sweet, but when achieved in the face of the odds Sanskaar and Swara had overcome together, it becomes akin to attaining Paradise not just any kingdom.
What a way to end the whole story. Once again, marvellous work 👏
Only if i was able to write as beautifully as you 😳
You deserves lots of jhappis Shruts 🤗🤗🤗
And Happy Diwali to you and all your family 😳

Originally posted by: ros_aavir

I've read all the parts together, loooved it!

The way you write is truly exceptional. 👏 The amount of detail you put in while describing each moment is just brill, I can imagine it while I'm reading and that is one of the greatest pleasures!

That candy floss scene was just ☺️ Why can't the CVs be as imaginative as you? 😆

Swara also had a KKHH moment, omd. 😲

You have penned down Sanskaar's love for Swara so beautifully, be it in the way he thinks, through his actions or the way he speaks.

Stupid girl. She gets a text and runs to her obsessive lover's room? Reminds me of show-wali Swara. 🤢 Still, Sanskaar helped her out, even though he didn't have to because she landed herself in it this time. His selflessness when it comes to Swara is simultaneously painful and wonderful to read about.

The show is turning out much like your story- Swara turning even dumber (I'm wondering how long CVs are going to play this card. 😊) and AP suspecting 😕. Such a powerful scene between Annapurna and Sanskaar, it really broke my heart. 🥺 The dialogues were really touching. ❤️ That jhooti kasam and photos are such a threat, I can see AP using both to get Sanskaar dancing to her tunes. If the woman can get up to make milk with almonds for her precious baby then she can do anything.

It was so refreshing to see Swara seeing through Ragini's natak and just plainly stating out options for her. ⭐️ I really enjoyed Swara's reflection in the temple. There was nothing there except her thoughts and her. It felt peaceful to me, just reading it! Swara seeing the sindoor scene and that helping her to seal the realisation that her life is meant to be lived with Sanskaar. ❤️

My heart was doing a mini happy dance when Sanskaar was going towards Swara, thinking we will get that much awaited confession. Then BAM! My heart jumped to my mouth whilst reading the events that unfolded next. I wasn't expecting that at all. I would've probably reacted exactly like Swara if I had been there, omd. The way you penned down Swara's tormenting angst, Sanskaar's agony and most of all their glorious love for each other, which can so easily be depicted from their actions. I can't imagine what Swara must've felt then, seeing him like that.

Swara's behaviour in the hospital is excellent! Her not letting him out of her sight and not giving up her place for anyone, not even Sujata. 😆 Loved seeing her taking full custody of care for her treasure. 😳 Her confession. omhgdfhgjdf. 🥳🥳🥳 Just fully celebrating it here, since we'll all probs be dead by the time she confesses on the show. 🤪 It was the simplest and sweetest, with her repeating parts of his (how can she forget it, since it's her hobby to run it through her mind? 😉).

Finally, Ragini's truth out! Totally enjoyed the way you described Ragini throughout Shruti, spine-chillingly evil. 😈 Her admission to her doings and the way she reacted to it was fab. Made me feel like the evil-Ragini chapter can finally be closed.

Laksh, omd 🤣 🤣 🤣 🤣 This guy.. Maybe they can get a "Buy 1, get 1 free!" offer at the mental asylum? I thought the slap was from Swara, but so glad it turned out to be from DP. Otherwise, Laksh probably would've gotten other ideas.. "Swara wanted to touch me.." 🤪

DP He's an angel in your stories (and in the show too 😆)! I adore his relationship with his soul son and daughter. ❤️

And finally Swasan can peacefully romance! 😳 I always love it when Sanskaar goes unsanskaari mode and make Swara's face deep crimson. ☺️

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this Shruti, especially since the current track and spoilers are making my head fume with fury! I'm sorry I'm taking aaages to read and reply to your pieces and thank you so much for PMing!

Originally posted by: inlieu

Fabulous work Shruti! My favorite bit was DP slapping Lakshya! If only he had done so when the troubles were at their infancy, they wouldn't all be in this situation. But then again the show must go on, hey? I love that Sanskaar never fails to see reason, never puts his personal feelings before Swara's happiness and safety, and so we come to expect exactly that from him every time. We forget that he is human and is bound to explode or crack under pressure one day, and I'm eagerly wating for that to happen. If the CVs want to keep his character realistic, they need to show that he can't be a saint all the time and that he has to act in his self-interest when things get out of control. Shall we start a Send Sanskaar to Bali fund? 😆

Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11

Hey! You are Jean right? Apologies if I have got that wrong!

Thanks so much for reading and leaving me such nice comments. Writing that slap was so satisfying I tell you 😆. Yes, Sanskaar is so amazing, you are right - it is easy to forget the strain must make him crack too. I am thinking of a new piece structured around that- as when he has his breakdown it will be terrible 😭. I like the idea of a fund- shall we send him to my birthplace Kenya? VK says he wants to go on Safari so we can send Sanskaar instead- he can see real animals as he seems enough of those in his MM?! 😆