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Posted: 13 years ago
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Wow nice one 👏 waiting for nxt part
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Hi SSSPians Aaj am posting not 1 but 2 parts to celebrate our Republic day and plan on completing the FF tomorrow with a bang on the occasion of SSSP's 150th epi. So here we go...

Part - 5

Re-cap : Amongst the overwhelming presence of their love Preeto's surprise celebration of Rajbeer's birthday brings back painful memories of his childhood... Unable to retain his angst he breaks down. She fights her own emotions as his pain agreives her, but she is determined to bring back joy and happiness to the evening and Rajbeer. Can Rajbeer go beyond his past and emerse in the joy of the present. What else does the evening have in store for Rajbeer?

RB : {in a sore whisper} Maine…kisi ne…aaj ka din kabhi celebrate nahi kara hai….

{His pain shakes her insides, if she could she would just hide him somewhere inside her chest where no pain could ever reach him, any angst would have to first pass through her to reach him…but she was not going to let her emotions get the better of her..He needs to forget those wounds and enjoy today…she cannot change his past, but she can make his present full of light}

Preeto : Main karungi… Kyun na karun…? Aaj woh din hai jab who insaan is duniya mein aaya tha, jo khud pata nahi kab, kaise meri duniya ban gaya….aaj us insaan ka janam-din hai jisne mujhe pyar karna sikhaya…jo mujhse itna pyar karta hai ki mujhe khud se pyaar ho gaya…main karungi is din ko celebrate…mere liye bahut special hai yeh din…{she uses a soothing tone, the traces of the disappearing pain still visible in the frown on his forehead}

{But, when could words do justice to the emotions ones heart feels? Eyes are not only the window through which we see the world, they are also the window to our hearts and soul for the ones who care enough to look and love enough to understand. Their eyes had always talked to each other…he knew what she wanted to say and she knew what he was going through…in the end nothing mattered…no pain, no hurt…only Love mattered…}

RB : …..Thank you Preeto… {He didn't know what was it that he was thanking her for? For planning the evening, for celebrating his birthday? for understanding him? For loving him? For liberating him?...but he knew, that she knew…}

Preeto : Jab main aapko thank you bolti hoon toh aap kya bolte hain…ki mujh mein thank u bolne ka virus hai!? Toh ab aap kyun thank you bol rahe ho…?

RB : Kyunki tum mujhe us sab ke liye thank you bolti rehti ho jo main apni khushi ke liye karta hoon…main tumhe uske liye thank you bol raha hoon jo tumne meri khushi ke liye kiya hai…

Preeto : Maine bhi apni hi khushi ke liye kiya hai Rajbeer…aap hi toh hain meri khushi…. {Though the more extrovert of the two, the one with a more bubbling personality and one to freely feel and express her emotions, in their relationship it was Rajbeer who had been the more expressive one…Preeto had never never used her words to express to Rajbeer how she truly felt for him…she had always felt shy around him…he had that affect on her…the way he looks at her, she used to become tongue tied… for any on-looker it was easy to assume that the balance in their love was a bit tilted…in reality that was far from being true…Preeto's love for Rajbeer was just as deep…she had just never expressed it… today, however she felt the urge to tell him… shyly she lowered her gaze and softly rested her head on his forearm….}

"…main aapko bata nahi sakti Rajbeer, ki meri zindagi mein aapke kya mayne hain… main kaise bataun ki main aapke liye kya kya karna chahti hoon….Aapne humesha mujhe itna pyar diya hai …humesha mera saath diya hai … Aapne bahut dard dekha hai apni zindagi mein…aur who sab jaante hue, maine bhi aapko bas dard hi diya…baar baar aapke pyar ko thukra ke…apni zindagi se apko alag kara ke….Iska mujhe kitna dukh hai, main kaise batauun…."{she swallows a sob that was beginning to rise in the pit of her chest….she gathers control and lifts her head from his forearm and looked up at him…with determination in her eyes…} "Par ab nahi…ab main chahti hoon aapki zindagi mein sirf khushi ho, dher sara pyar ho…koi dard ya aansu nahi…"

{Rajbeer is touched by this rare expression of her love for him; She …Her eyes get misty besieged by the love she felt for him… …she wants only smiles and laughter for today's evening….

She weaves her fingers through his hair….Her tone changes from the soft tenderness to one with a loving resolve…and she mixes with it a bit of her bubbling effervescence}

Preeto : Yeh line usually ladke bolte hain, lekin aaj main ladki hoke bol rahi hoon - agar mere bas mein hota toh main chand, tare, suraj, bahaar….{her tone goes back to being soft and tender}…. khushboo, mausam, hawayein, roshniyan…. sab kaid karke aapki hatheli mein chupa deti… {she holds one of his palms in her hand and brings the fingers of her other hand to rest in his upturned palm. He closes his fingers to cover hers}

"…Magar yeh sab toh main kar nahi sakti hoon…isliye jo kar sakti hoon woh karne dijiye…"{back to her sparkling, chirpy self, changing the mood immediately}….."aap bas enjoy kariye…! Agar mujhse pyar karte hain toh no more rona, and no purani baton ko yaad karna….Arre! …mujhe aur cake khana hai…itne zara se mera kya hoga….?!"

{She could always bring a smile to his face with her typical sense of humor! The moment becomes light as both of them dig into the cake…Preeto starts to talk nonstop as she always does…and Rajbeer without paying attention to the details of her talk, starts to enjoy the calming effect of her animated voice…she wipes off the icing from the side of Rajbeer's mouth with the side of her thumb, as they continue to eat and talk. Gradually, the mood returns to a pulsating liveliness of romance as Rajbeer gathers control of his emotions, to enjoy the present which Preeto had painted in vibrant tones….He continues to feast on the cake and her beauty and the warmth of their love….}

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Part - 6 (This FF was written before the balcony epi of tuesday so pls this is not a copy. On the other hand it seems that our thinking is going on the same lines as the CVs. We love the terrace of the Dhillon house for our RB and Preeto and so do the Cvs it seems)

She lookd lovely in the Green Sari'he had always wanted to see her wear one, that is why he had gifted it to her'not really expecting her to wear it'he knew she wouldn't be comfortable carrying a sari, she was always in such a hurry'often so clumsy'He knew a Sari didn't really go with her personality!...but it was his desire'to see her dressed up for him'.and today just for him she had done that'she had worn the Sari he had gifted her'and she had planned the whole evening'it must have been a task to get everyone out of the house, then arrange the cake'.}

RB : Waise'Tumne yeh sab manage kaise kiya?

Preeto : Sab Dhruv jiju ki planning hai'unhone hi sabke saath movie aur dinner ka program banaya'Beeji Papaji ko late night show ke liye pataya'

RB : Aur tum? Tumhe chod ke jane ko kaise tayyar ho gaye sab?

Preeto : Maine kaha ki mujhe boutique mein urgent kaam hai, nahi aa sakti.

RB : Beeji se jhoot bola'? {teasing her, and she returns his smile with a smile.}

Again his eyes rest at her face'.he had always found her breath-takingly beautiful : did his love made him see beauty in her face or did her beauty made him love her just that much more? He had often wondered! For him she was the most beautiful woman he had ever laid eyes on'but he had never really complimented her on that with the way he felt it'He was sort of embarresed to do it and he never had found the right words to do justice to her beauty'so he alwaysjust joked about it'the thought brought a smile to his face' today evening he couldn't stop himself from admiring her beauty and how lovely she looked in that color'.}

RB : Yeh sari'yeh kisne pehanayi tumhe? Khud se toh nahi pehani sakti 'I am sure'

Preeto : Ishu di ne'Pata hai kitna mushkil hai sari sambhalna' itne sare pins lagane pade hain'.mujhe toh dar lag raha tha ki aapke aane se pehle hi khul jayegi' ya main chalte chalte gir jaungi'.pata nahi kya sochke aap mere liye yeh le aaye the'aapko kya laga tha ki meri jaise hadbadiya, jhalli sari sambhal sakti hai'?

RB : yeh sab maine nahi socha'bas tumhe dekhna chahta tha aise'.Achchi lag rahi ho'. jaisa maine socha tha usse bhi bahut zyada sundar {And just for a moment she thought his gaze would burn a hole through her! Preeto lowers her eyes and smiles shyly }

Suno'.shaadi ke baad tum sari hi pehanna! {She jerks her head to look up at him with a shocked expression!Ands shakes her head to disagree with his proposal!}

RB : Just kidding'mujhe tum har haal mein achchi lagti ho'

{That settled, She hands over the plate to him and gets up to go down stairs}

RB : ab kahan chali? Mujhe akela chod ke'

Preeto : Kuch lane'ek surprise aur hai'

RB : Aur ek surprise? {he rests the plate on the table and gets up to follow her}

{As she is leaving to go get the surprise, Preeto trips over her saree and falls down, Rajbeer catches her and their eyes lock in passion'

"Bahon ke darmiyan do pyar mil rahe hain'" Song plays in the background'.Rajbeer slowly helps her up and twirls her around as they dance to the music'Their love leading their heart and their hearts leading their feet'.they waltz through the expanse of the terrace as the world spun around them'she tries to break away from his hold as she could not handle the passion in his eyes'.but he wouldn't let her get away'he was never letting her go away from him'he had waited far too long for her'.longer than a lifetime'.he pulls her back into his embrace and they continue to dance slowly to the music in the background'.

He lifts her in his arms and walks slowly to the parapet and seats her there on the ledge of the wall. Preeto has her arms around his neck and he is holding her at the waist'. their eyes are locked and the world and time seems to have stopped for them'.

Rajbeer tilts towards her, approaching her soft cheek for a kiss, there eyes locked in a passionate gaze'.Preeto leans backwards, teasing him'.increasing the distance between his lips and her cheek as he keeps closing in'inch by inch'.the passion in his eyes makes her lose her bearings'.She could feel his breath on her face'.Rajbeer's world had closed into a small space'.all the worlds seemed to have shrunk into her eyes'her soft cheeks were beckoning him'.his eyes focus on that one spot on her cheek'she kept leaning away'and he kept drawing closer'And, while lost in the moment, they didn't realise that the tilt and the passion made Preeto losen her grip on Rajbeer's neck and her balance on the parapet wall, just a bit'she sort off tipped back as if she was going to fall over'but she quickly gains back her balance as she tightens her grip on his neck'. and he also cathces her with his arms around her waist}

RB : "Kya kar rahi ho? Gir jati toh'?"

{He tightens his grip around her waist and immediately pulls her towards himself to hug her tightly. His voice has concern and anger both woven together into a deeply loving tone'

Rajbeer has a deeply worried look; suddenly, in that moment he faces the fear of losing his woman. Preeto is completely unaffected by the almost fall; she just smiles as she pulls away from his embrace to look him in the eyes, he still has a worried expression}

Preeto : "Um-huh'.fauji ke bazuyein itni kamzor thode hi hain'aise kaise gir jati'"

{And she hugs him again, bringing her chin to rest on his shoulder, supporting his head against one of her palms, the hair on his neck had stood up with the anxiety of the moment'.she wove her fingers through them'.his scalp was damp with perspiration'..she knew, he just needed a moment of re-assurance that the perfection of his world was still unaffected. As relief dawns, he whispers her name in the loving tenderness that no one else ever uses with her name'and she softly squeezed her arm around him and snuggled her face into the arch of his neck as he delicately caressed his cheek against her hair; He closed his eyes to shut out the fear he had just experienced.

They stood like that for just a few moments'but it seemed like eternity'a sweet eternity'.}

Preeto : "Achcha chaliye chodiye mujhe'aapka dusra surprise lekar aana hai'"

RB :"Ummm'nahi'mujhe koi aur surprise nahi chahiye'aaj ke liye kafi hai'"

{Preeto struggles out of his embrace and goes off to fetch the surprise she has for him. On the way she again almost trips'she mumbles and turns back to look at him, he has a smile of amusement'

Rajbeer's eyes follow her as she leaves the terrace'he looks up at the sky and gives out a sigh that conveys satisfaction, gratification and unparalleled joy... Today has been an extra-ordinary evening for him. His joy knows no bound. He is living the dream he had not even dared to dream. Preeto's love had enveloped his entire being, encapsulating him a bliss, there wasn't a cipher of any pain of the past.}

Pre-cap : The evening has returned to its initial flavour of romance and good humor'.What is Preeto's second surprise? 'Is it going to match the un-expected magic of the evening? Or the second surprise might just end up being a disaster; Preeto is after all a clumsy girl, 'jhalli' at times!

Edited by adianasr - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#34
Lovely...super ...👏 but ye stupied Cv's... sunta kyun nahi... 😭
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Posted: 13 years ago
#35
Bhalle bhalle , Double bonus aaj ...2 parts in one day..Thank you

Dawn - Atleast you heard out 1 hour request and gave us 2 parts ..

This is like Maha episode...loved it a lot and you are a damn good writer 👏..Where were you all these days 😒?


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Posted: 13 years ago
#36
its so lovely , your words are perfect to define all the feelings inside preeto and rajbeer, u should be a writer !👏
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Posted: 13 years ago
#37
Wowww Dawn tooo awsomeee dear thanku for 2 parts yaar...😃
Mindblowing writing jus loved each and every line every dialogue...very well written..👏👏👏
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Posted: 13 years ago
#38
OMG...its so perfect...u express each of their feeling sooo nicely.
bonus...dhamaka...
2morrow RB gonna met his dad????
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Posted: 13 years ago
#39

It is really an awesome FF. You just get transported into it and living it. Wow full credit to you.

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Posted: 13 years ago
#40
Oh Wow...double bouns and Great FF..

CV's never heard my request but Thank Q for making Preeto wearing a Saree..Been dreaming for quite a while now...

Great post ...keep them coming 👍🏼

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