Dakshna FF(Fan fiction) - Page 29

Originally posted by: lucky.m

@sweetaish

Yaar, mein kya kahu? awesome dear..lved ecah and every dialogue and expression.🤗..U ff's make me jjump with joy..😃.wadde wadde ideas dhoondo aur lage raho...good luck

BTW I read naina's surprise part 2 nad daksh's coming up late and u are concentrating on post marriage...I know y..😉😉

halo my peopl🤗...i'm puttin up dat emo wala FF as a separate post, sensitiv souls beware [neethu di bad me mat kehna ki mene rula diya😊]...no yelling around mind u, but it is intens, its heavy, there is rain, then there are tears, tight hugs nd i'v thrown in a few kisses too 4 gud measure😆😆

wat comment did you comment about him, i really want to know. Did u do it on purpose so you detention with him alone. I wonder if anyone has told him he loooks similar to Daksh.

Originally posted by: lucky.m

Dilwale dulhe😆 le jayenge (New version of DDLJ on dakshna)- fiction-

Hey guys

I am so pissed off with current track, like u, thought of coming with something new.Romance and cute FF;s part is being taken care of very well,so I thought of lil more intense fiction..😉

Here we go😛

Background of the story

Ayi came to know about dakshna's love, but dakshna are not aware of this.Ayi takes a promise from naina asking her to go way from dakshs life, as its too late(KYUNKI SHAADI KA DATE KARREB AA RAHA HAIN),but tells daksh shouldn't know this as he will never agree for this (ayi is under sohini effect and all this drama happens after psycho leaves from PH after doing enough damage, no ekta mata's track)

.Naina first resists but gives up and agrees to it( sacrifice bhoot), but she says she needs some time as she can't end relation just like that and ayi agrees, and asks her to do this ASAP.Naina tries to do this by avoiding daksh intially

As per vachan naina starts avoiding daksh.Daksh gets mad ( common)

.A lil confrontation

Daksh keeps waiting on terrace but naina doesn't turn up.He calls her lot of times, but no responsejust then he sees naina's office light is on.so he goes there

He opens the door and finds naina doing her work

Daksh; acha to tum yaha ho..mein tumhara terrace par wait kar rahatha.Kamse kam call tho lift karti.Itna bhi busy mat ho javo ki tumhare paas mere liye waqt nahi hai

Naina doesn't respond

Daksh' naina mein tumse baat kar raha hoo.

.still no response and naina continues with her work.Daksh gets angry and he closes the file naina is working on

Naina; daksh, kya kar rahe ho?

Daksh; mein kya kar raha hoo? tumhe pata bhi tum kya kar rahi ho.Mein kabse tumse do pal baat karne ke liye taras raha hoo aur ek ho tum ki tumhe tho meri parwa hi nahi

Naina; aisi baat nahi hain daksh..bas kuch kaam tha

Daksh comes closer takes naina hands into his and says naina..mera bhi kaam hai lekin tum mere liye sabse pehli aati ho.sabse pehle.❤️.Tum jaante hona ki ye paagal tumse kitna pyar karta hai..😛

Aww

Naina gets lost but remembers ayi vachan and releases her hands from daksh and says bahut raat ho chuki hain..hume sona cahaiye

Daksh; haan tho phir maine kab manakiya..chalo sote hain😆😆

Naina; daksh...

Daksh; okay sorry baba,mazzaq tha..kya naina pehle kaam, phir neend...do min bhi teek tarah baat nahi karpaya,, nahi.pele tum mere saath thoda waqt bitavo..phir jayenge..do din se dekh raha hoo, tum tho mujhe avoid karne par lagi ho

Naina is lil surprised thinking if daksh got an hint of her thoughts

Daksh' arey, itna seriously mat dekho. mujhe pata hain tum mujhe avoid nahi karoge and he comes closer and with intense look and says " mein karne nahi doonga..kabhi bhi nahi", agar aisa koi plan hain tho drop kardo..samjhi..

Naina keeps looking at daksh and daksh says " agar tum mujhe aisa hi dekhte rahoge tho tumhara neend udd jayenge waise tum mere neend baut pehle cheen chuki ho...he looks at her with all that pyar in his eyes and says" I love u naina" and he hugs her. Naina starts saying love u too lekin phir rukh jaati hain

bechari..confusion mein pad gayee ki bete ka baat maanu ya uski ayi ka..kya karu??😲😲

Daksh waits for response and is disappointed on unresponsiveness of naina.

Naina; chale daksh

Daksh nods and both starts moving towards PH

Daksh; lagta hain aaj maam ka mood theek nahi hain love u nhai bola..😕

Naina walks lil ahead and says

Naina; roz bolna zaroori hain kya?ek din nahi bataya th kya hojayega

Daksh holds her hand , she turns back and daksh says; "jaan chala jayega"

Double aww

Naina puts an hand on his mouth and says aisa mat kaho daksh..pls

Daksh pulls her lil closer and says, agar meri itna chinta hai tho..jaan bacha sakthi ho..tumhara haath mein hain..

Naina is completely lost, both looking into each other eyes and naina says love u daksh and hugs him with tears rolling down...daksh too hugs her

Aur ayi ussi waqt kidki mein se inn dono ko dekhthi hain

Contd...

I luvd all the dialogues and i don't have 2 wait for the next part

Originally posted by: lucky.m

😆Guys,

I am sorry to say this will be my last fiction😭 on cute moments between dakshna bcos after watching todays episode I cant imagine daksh saying and doing romance with naina..not any more.I wrote this part before watching todays's episode😡

Honeymoon scene continution

Daksh and naina return from their sight seeing to their room..Its almost night

Dakshna return their home and naina goes to wash room and gets changed in night gown and she comes out and sees daksh changing his shirt.He notices some marks on daksh's back, she goes near daksh and says

Naina; daksh, ye tumhare peeth ke peech nishan??😲

Daksh;nishan?? woh ye nisahan? woh kya haina aaj kal raat ko ek jungli billi mujhe pe attack kar rahi hey tho...😆

Naina; kya jungli billi?😲

Daksh; haan, uske bade bade naakun hey..bahut badey, bilkul tumhari naakun ti tarah..saying this he smiles naughtily😉

ROFL

Naina; looks at her nails and she understand what daksh meant to say and feels emabarssed😳( I think u ppl understood woh kiske naakun ke nishan hain)

Is it because she's afraid or something else.

Daksh aur bhi romantic ho jaata hain aur naina ke paas aata hain.Naina keeps going backwards, daksh keeps coming forward and finally naina reaches the wall and daksh puts his hands on wall o either side of naina😳( I think u can imagine the scenario)..He comes really closer to naina..ek dum superclose and we focus on their faces.daksh looks into naina's eyes and says❤️

Daksh; Ab ye tho nahi poochoge ki ye nishan kab ,kaha, kaise aur kyu lage hain aur kisne lagaye hein..agar tum chahti ho tho mein bata saktha hoo ...batavu?( as usaul cute sa smile naughtywala)😉😆

Naina feels shy.☺️.very shy and says...sorry

Daksh; decides to pull naina's leg for sometime 'Sorry?? Acha iska matlab hein tumne jaan bhucke kiya..mujhe par apna gussa nikalrahi ho?

haha

Naina; nahi nahi..jaanbhucke nahi woh...

.

Daksh keeps hand on naina's lips and stops her from completing the sentence and is about to kiss her.she pushes him and runs away😳

Daksh ;naina... runs for her .both get tired and fall on bed..besides eachother

Different

Daksh; Ek baat kahu naina..tum apna nakun nikaldo warna jab tak honeymon khatam hojayega mera kaam tamam ho jayega..😆😉

Naina takes a pillow and beats him and says daksh...daksh continues teasing her.

Daksh; Woh kya hain na tum kabhi kabhi itna wild ho jaati ho ki😆...acha hua ki nisahn peet par lage hain..agar chehre aur kahi aur lagjaate tho mein kya kahunga logon se?? saying this he laughs😆

I think I got the answer to my question already, naughty

Naina gets lil angry😡..gets up and sits.daksh is in same sleeping still

Naina; haso haso..aur haso..bahut mazaa aa raha haina ..aise bol rahe ho ki jaise sab kuch maine akele hi kiya aur tum kuch nahi kar rahe ho...

Daksh catches naina hand and pulls her toward him and says "maine aisa tho nahi kaha" agar bhura laga sorry

Naina smiles and sleeps on his chest and says' bhura? bilkul nahi...Daksh spread his arms around naina and hugs her tightly.After few minutes naina lifts up her head and looking into dakshs face she says

Naina; daksh; kya mujhe sachmuch nakoon nikalne padenge, phir mein nailpolish kaha lagavungi?😲😆

Daksh; smiles and says; .. Acha..tumhe apne pati se jyada nail polish ki lagi hui hain...aaj kal ki patni yan bhi na.He slowly takes naina hair falling on his face slowly with his hand and puts at back of her ear and says

Daksh;Tumhe pata hain mujhe tumhare nakuun bhi bahut pasand hain.he takes her hand and kisses her nails aur jo darda inn ki wajah se hota hain woh bahut meetha hain..samjhi..tumhe naakun nikalne ki koi zaroorat nahi...khush

Naina gives a big smile and hugs him🤗

Daksh; naina ek kaam karo..ache se dekhlo ki peet ke peeche kaha kaha nishan nahi hai.ttaki tum waha...😉

Naina; bas bhi karona daksh warna mein mrs kp banjavungi

Daksh;(scared expression) nahi..mujhe bahut darr lag raha hai..

.Both smile looking at ecah other and daksh pulls up blanket ,slowly we see daksh's hand coming out of balnket and switching off lights besides bed...

Bas baaki tum imagine karo...😉

I am not quitting writing fiction but no more cute, I want to make an SSBN where all characters are natural and I am coming up some serious fiction. So I would be making a different post for that as I dnt want to spoil the essence of this cute fictions

too funny and naughty, lucky

My last chapter.

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/sapnon-se-bhare-naina/1790433/naina-bhardwaj-a-fan-fiction-12


An excerpt:

"Now Rohini came to the City, from a small town in Maharashtra, where the boys did not mix with girls easily. The girls eyed the boys, and passed remarks about who was handsome and who was not. Rohini was from a conservative family, and felt tied down by restrictions, which she resented. She had a younger sister, who was very docile, besides being pretty. She always obeyed her mother, who was a devoted human being, who fulfilled all the wishes of her aggressive husband, and the needs of her girls. She had to do tight rope walk, between the father and his daughters. The younger girl, Madhura was no problem, as she obeyed her. But Rohini was very independent and assertive, and wanted her own way, and by watching other girls, came to know, how to go around her mother, and make her agree to her demands. The cunning trait, she inherited from her father, and Madhura was more like her mother.

This type of girl that Rohini was, she soon adapted to the City life, and bullied her co-workers, and got the peons do her bidding, with her charms. Sanket fell for her bait, and one day, on her pressure, took her home to introduce her..."

Originally posted by: storytellerSSBN

wat comment did you comment about him, i really want to know. Did u do it on purpose so you detention with him alone. I wonder if anyone has told him he loooks similar to Daksh.

My standard setting for sml scenes [yes, yes, bedroom nd bedtim😆]

Naina signals him to take the shirt off [ killer heat wave hai guys, misunderstand mat karo😛😛], and KP the mahan gestures back, asking her what it is. She just shakes her head smiling, and goes out with the clothes..

She is back; he has changed into his PJs but is still uncomfortable. He's rooting through the cupboard drawers for something.

N : Daksh.

D : Ha.

N : [very matter-of-fact-ly] Shirt uthar do.

Daksh stops his search midway and turns to look at her, thoda sa confused.

She's making the bed and has her back to him still.

D : Kya?

N : Shirt uthar do.

There's laughter in her tone now, and he's even more confused, but since she isnt even looking his way he decides its not what he thinks it is [gues mat karo peopl😆😆]

D : Salman ki fan ho kya [goes back to searching for whatever-it-is in the draw]

N : [laughs] Nahi, tumhari.

D : [slightly annoyed] Tumhe mazak sujh raha he? Ek to itni garmi he ki-

N : [she cant help laughing again] Isiliye to kaha mene...

She sits down on the bed, all smiles.

He realises what she was trying to tell him; smiles to himself but continues the search.

N : Kya dhoondh rahe ho tum...

He gives up, closes the drawer and shuts the cupboard.

D : Kuch nahi, subhe ko dekh lunga.

N : Daksh, tumhe itni garmi lag rahi he to naha ke ao na...better lagega.

D : [naughty smile😛] Tum chalogi?

Naina is in the midst of propping up a pillow behind her. "Nahi me to bas abhi.." then she realizes, and looks up. "KP...!" Now he's laughing, and she throws a pillow at him.

He catches it. "Acha theek he, mere liye wait karogi?"

N : Nahi. Muje bahot neend aa rahi he, me sone ja rahi hu. [makes a show of fluffing her pillow]

D : [smiling some more] Mujhe nahi aa rahi...

N : To me kya karu. [She lies down and turns the other way, feigning indifference] Good night.

He doesnt say anything else, and she continues the pretence of sleeping, manages the act for half a minute before deciding to take a peek. He's not there so she starts to sit up.

D : [softly in her ear] Sach me neend aa rahi he kya...

Naina jumps; she'd expected him to have gone by now, but he's right behind her. "Kp..." she hits him with the pillow. "Tum meri jaan lekar hi rahoge kya"

D : [laughs] wo to pehle se meri he...

N : [unrelenting] Ja ke aao daksh.

D : [all husky] wait nahi karogi.

She frowns, and he tries again, puppy face this time. "Bilkul nahi karogi?"

She starts laughing now. "Ha baba theek he, ab jao..." gives him a little shove.😆

And he bestows the cutsie smile [heaven if u ask me😍] on her and goes off...

smiles,

aish

Dear friends,

We have some excellent dialog writers here. So far, you have only concentrated on Daksh and Naina, and written dialogs, which make you happy.

Everyone wants Daksh and Naina to marry. At the moment, Rohini and Sonakshi are the stumbling blocks. Ayee has been bought by Sonakshi, through her devious ways.

Now you have to think of a counter plot, to defeat Rohini and Sonakshi. Get Kaka to support Naina, because her being in the house is to his advantage.

Naina has watched Rohini and Sonakshi plot. Now make Kaka reach there, and ask Naina what she is doing. He sees the two rats, and then the idea comes. Kaka asks Naina, if there is a way to record their conversation. He thinks of putting a bug in Rohini's room with the excuse of repairing her bell. Naina buys a Cam Corder, and they record their conversations, and Naina and Kaka join hands in getting a video footage of their games. When they have sufficient evidence, Kaka starts blackmailing Rohini, so that she backs out from supporting Sonakshi. Then Sonakshi is alone. They blackmail Sonakshi, and then threaten to expose her to Ayee and Baba, and her parents. Sonakshi backs out. Now the way is open for Daksh and Naina. Kaka, shows the recordings to his brother, and he tells his wife, and that sets the ball rolling for Daksh and Naina's marriage.

Now it is up to you, to agree among yourselves who is going to write which dialog. Create a script so that it will keep you thinking, and we can have a complete new story. Let us see, whose story is bewtter, whether the CVs come with it or you girls. Come on. The ball is in your court.

Originally posted by: walquest2000

Dear friends,

We have some excellent dialog writers here. So far, you have only concentrated on Daksh and Naina, and written dialogs, which make you happy.

Everyone wants Daksh and Naina to marry. At the moment, Rohini and Sonakshi are the stumbling blocks. Ayee has been bought by Sonakshi, through her devious ways.

Now you have to think of a counter plot, to defeat Rohini and Sonakshi. Get Kaka to support Naina, because her being in the house is to his advantage.

Naina has watched Rohini and Sonakshi plot. Now make Kaka reach there, and ask Naina what she is doing. He sees the two rats, and then the idea comes. Kaka asks Naina, if there is a way to record their conversation. He thinks of putting a bug in Rohini's room with the excuse of repairing her bell. Naina buys a Cam Corder, and they record their conversations, and Naina and Kaka join hands in getting a video footage of their games. When they have sufficient evidence, Kaka starts blackmailing Rohini, so that she backs out from supporting Sonakshi. Then Sonakshi is alone. They blackmail Sonakshi, and then threaten to expose her to Ayee and Baba, and her parents. Sonakshi backs out. Now the way is open for Daksh and Naina. Kaka, shows the recordings to his brother, and he tells his wife, and that sets the ball rolling for Daksh and Naina's marriage.

Now it is up to you, to agree among yourselves who is going to write which dialog. Create a script so that it will keep you thinking, and we can have a complete new story. Let us see, whose story is bewtter, whether the CVs come with it or you girls. Come on. The ball is in your court.