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Posted: 14 years ago
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I didn't watch y'day's episode... just read the written update.. So I don't know what exactly provoked Naina to make a slap on Abhi's face. Anyways here is what I want to see...
Abhi speaks rudely to Naina and Naina gives a strong slap on his face... then asks him..
Naina: To tumhe bolna aata hain..?? Hunh... Tumhari himmat kaisi huyi mujse is tarah batem karane ke liye?? Abi abi bahut kuch bol diya na? To tum yeh batao... meine kabhi tumse muje shaadi karne ke liye poochatha?? tum mere peeche shaadi ka offer karke aya tha.. hain na??
[Abhi becomes silent and looks down...]
Naina continues.. Aur tum yeh bhi bata do... mein kabhi tum se yeh kah diya tha ki mein tumse pyar karti hum??? tell me damid.. [angrily]...
Naina: Shaadi ka vaada tumne kiya tha.. sirf shaadi ka vaada...? bahut ssare choote ehsas... Tum ek bahut bada choote ho... tumhari maa ko bhi tum choot bol diya aur batem chup rahe the.. Phir tumhare vajah se.. sirf tumhare choot ki vajah se muje itna bajti huyi... usi samay tum apane aapko bajakar chup chaap khade rahe the... Tumhe pata hai... I feel pity on you Mr Abhimanyu Kulkarni.. kyo... tumhe pata hain?? tum jaise ek cheat, liar and shameless (dhoka denewala, choota aur besharam) insaan se mein baj gayi... Tumne kya socha? ek shaadi todne mei mein zindgi bhar roti rahegi?? Agar tum aisa soche to galat socha... Naina Bharadwaj aisi maamooli si ladki nahi hai. Mein aaj tumse sirf itna kehne ke liye yehi ayi hoom... varna tum sochoge mein ek bewakoof hoon.. dubara kisi aur ladki se choot bolne ke pehle zara socho... chalthi hoon...
[Turns towards Daksh] - Daksh, agar tum fn khatam hone ke baad ana chahte ho.. you can carry on.. mein chalthi hoon..
Daksh: Nahi.. tumhe mein yeha lekar aya hoon.. mein tumhe vaapas bhi le loonga.. chalo...

Naina and Daksh boldly and straightly walks away (slow motion). Naina stops and turns towards Abhi and tells strongly "Mr Abhimanyu.. best wishes for your future.. "

[i would like to see our bold Naina like this]
Reaching outside tears rolls down on Naina's cheaks.. she is in a pain of insult, being cheated etc... Daksh lets her be for a while.. and starts the car and drives. its getting dark... when they reached an empty place he stops the car and looks at Naina. Naina was about to cry... Daksh asks her to get out from the car.. naina obeys... he looks at her eyes and holds her shoulder slowly. Naina's pain completely broken up...she starts to cry loudly... Daksh holds her and then hugs tightly... Naina also hugs and weeps on him and Daksh allows her to do so. After sometimes, Naina feels better... and both come out from the hug.. daksh gives the bottle of water.. also can understand that Naina's sorrow is getting washed out and she is better now..
Daksh: Hum ghar chale...?
naina shakes her head...
You know my hindi is not that much good enough...
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Posted: 14 years ago
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@ntsindia

Really I would be happy to see naina, like u mentioned bold and daring.No probs with your hindi yaar.I am sure ur FF is going to happen though with slight changes.After this I think joshi and sona will put some conditions before daksh and force him.Daksh gets pissed off and breaks marriage.In between aku issue will crop up...i think
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Continuing...

@ home.. ayi is restless... she is concerned about Dakshna. She hears the sound of car outside. Both come in. Everybody anxiously look at them. Naina tells ayi I feel tired... I am going to my room. After she left Daksh tells "yah.. don't worry she is fine."
Ayi: Chintu... sab kuch teek to hai na?? kya hua tha?
Daksh: hah.. ayi.. Sab kuch ab teek hai.. as we expected she got insulted again there. Use insult karne ka moka Moushi chod nahin diya. Jab Abhi bhi uske saath rahe to Naina ne chillaya... yah.. she outbursted.. ab use sone do.. kal subah hone tak sab kuch teek ho jayega... hame hamare purani Naina ko vaapas mil jayenge..
Ayi sighs: Kitna sah liya voh bechari...
Daksh: ayi.. ab sab teek ho jayega na... abhi uske liye teek nahin hai.. voh naina ko sach me pyar nahi karatha tha muje lagta hai. itna hone ke baad bhi voh apna galathi maan nahi liya... voh khud ko bachakar khade hai...
Ayi: jo ho gaya to ho gaya... sab bhool jaavo beta...
Daksh: Anh ayi... tum bhi bhool javo..
Ayi feels better and about to go.. Daksh calls her [naina comes down from the stairs]
Daksh: Anh, aayi... Naina ko yeh mat batana mein jaan poochkar unhe vaha le jata tha. Use bura lagega... aaj bhi voh bahut insult sah liya vaham...
Ayi and others leave... then Daksh about to go to his room... he wonders Naina is on the steps...
naina: Tho sab tum jaan poochkar kiya tha yeh jaante huye bhi muje vaha insult ho jayega... ? daksh, tum bhi???!!!
Daksh tries to tell something but she goes angrily to the room. Daksh despires..
Reaching room, Naina cries and then cools down... she slowly remembers what happened today... almost all time daksh stood for her. Consoled her... at that day he asked her to burt out her pain. she feels Daksh was right.. now she feels better after outbursting to abhi... She starts to smile on her foolishness... then remembers all the moments he stood for her. How much he understands her... she feels good and starts to admire him by recollecting the past all cute moments... and starts to smile. She remembers the "I love you" at terrace and when he was drunken etc...
Naina thinks..: Daksh ko bura laga hoga... use lagta hai mei uspar naaraz hoom... abi jakar sorry bolte hai aur thanks bhi..
and stands up and opens the door... then she remembers the scene of Sonakshi-Daksh engagemnt - then she said about her rights.. She stops herself from going to Daksh's room..

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Posted: 14 years ago
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@ntsindia...again i liked it yaar.👏...but i dont think the misunderstandings wud be solved soo easily...kaash aisa hota but this is ssbn...which now has become famous for dragging and showing pathetic tracks...

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Continuing..

Naina feels bad that he is not hers... there is someone else who has more rights on Daksh.. she feels bad. Then she starts to think...now he gives importance to her more than Sonakshi.. Sonakshi will make more problem she thinks... and it is not right too.. so decides to pretend as angry. Here in Daksh's room he feels bad... he recollects all the things together... Night ends...

As usual Ayi is in kitchen. Naina happily tells "Good morning ayi...". Daksh also comes and sits in the dinning table. Ayi happily... "Good morning beta...". Daksh also says "Good morning ayi.." Naina looks at Daksh and Daksh aslo. She hides her eyes... Daksh feels bad.. She starts to tell...
Naina: Ayi, aaj mei aur akruthi thoda late ho jayenge... hame ek client se milna hai.
Ayi: aaj akruthi ko chutti de do Naina... use dekhne ke liye ek lagka aa raha hai..
naina: Sach...?? to woh call kiya tha? (happily)
Daksh looks at Naina doubtfully..
Ayi: Kal sonakshi aur uski maa aye the.. unhone sonakshi ke liye yeh rishat doondthi thi.. lekin.. to unhone socha voh ladka hamari Akruthi ke liye acha hoga..
Naina gets shocked... and confused.. daksh also wonders in naina's expression... Naina lost in thoughts and tells ayi...
Naina: accha ayi, main abhi Akruthi se milkar aathi hoom... [she leaves]
Daksh doubts on Naina's behavior and plans to ask her.. he has also a doubt whether she thinks abt Ayush or not...
Ayi: Chintu tum ab coffee pee lo.. nashta abhi banathi hoom... Daksh takes the cup of coffee and put the paper on the table and leaves...
Here in Akus room...
Naina: Akruthi, mein yeh kya sun rahi hai?? suna hai tumhe dekhne ke liye ek ladka aa rahi hai.. ? yeh ayush abhi tak kyon nahi aye tumhare haath maangne ke liye? Muje lagta hai ham ab sach batana hai..
Then Akruthi confesses all the things in front of Naina ... and she told she was lying to her... Daksh who stood at the door hears everything.
Naina: Kya.. tum choot bol rahi thi??? kyo.. Akrithi... yeh tumhari zindgi ka sawal hai.. koi masak nahi hai... voh aisa kaise kar sakte hai? yah.. kaisa insan hain? unhe pata hain na tum uska bache ki ma bannewali hai??
hearing this Daksh gets shocked and drops the coffe cup from his hand...
Both Naina and Aku turn to the door and tensed. Naina does not know how to console, whom to console and what to do...
Daksh angrily and painfully enters to the room and asks... : kya yeh sach hain??? meri bahan mujse itne bade baat chupa rahi hai...? [turns to Naina] tum bhi yeh bat mujse nahi keh diya?
Naina does not speak and looks at him painfully...
Aku: Nahi dada... Naina ka koyi galti nahin hai.. voh aapse batane ke liye kayi baar keh diya.. meine mana kiya use.. aur mein use choot boli thi voh muje propose karne ke liye eha aa raha hai.. isliye...
Daksh: Ab kya... kare... painfully he goes to his room...
Naina tries to call him.. Daksh... then turns to Aku and says... we will find a solution... don't worry... and then leave s to speak with Daksh..

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: niksidfan

@ntsindia...again i liked it yaar.👏...but i dont think the misunderstandings wud be solved soo easily...kaash aisa hota but this is ssbn...which now has become famous for dragging and showing pathetic tracks...


none of the above will be happened in real SSBN.. it is just a fan fiction yaar.. here we write as per per our likes... right??
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Wow..superb..loved it..waiting for next part👏
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Posted: 14 years ago
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@ neeta i'm loving the FF

who was it who wrote the scene ages ago about daksh trying to cheer naina up by teaching her to smile the way she did i think it wud be appropriate in the serial nowadays
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Posted: 14 years ago
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ur FF is seriously gud... i loved all the scenes... do continue...
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: storytellerSSBN

@ neeta i'm loving the FF

who was it who wrote the scene ages ago about daksh trying to cheer naina up by teaching her to smile the way she did i think it wud be appropriate in the serial nowadays

Yah.. it was myself who wrote that scene Daksh teaches her to smile in Naina's coin itself... yah... nowadays I also feel that it will approprate for us also... ;)

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