Fanfic

This is my fanfic. let me know how it is. Just the prediction on Monday for me would be.

Suman: MMS toh mera he paas hai par maine mms nahi beji.

Rajiv: tere paas haI!!!. Yeh kaise ho sakta hai. Tere paas mobile kaise aaya.

Suman: jab maine dekha ki kul ne mms banaya hai. Toh main chori ki.

Rajiv: tune toh mujhe bolna chahiye.

Suman: main socha …..

Rajiv: mujhe tere se koi safai nahi chahiye. Tu toh Tanu se kitna pyaar karti thi toh phir mms kyun beja.

Suman: please mere baat toh suniye maine nahi kiya… she starts crying bitterly.

Rajiv: par mobile toh tere he paas tha na bolo haan ya na

Suman: main manti ki mobile mere paas hai par main mms nahi beja.

Ketki: Suman yeh kya kiya tune, at least mujhe toh batana chahey tha. Main soch bhi nahi sakti tu aise kaam karogi. Tune kaha tha tu Tanu ki kyaal rakhogi jaise Chaitali teri behen hai . waisi Tanu bhi teri choti behen jaisi thi. Yeh khayaal raka…tune. She too starts crying…

Suman: nahin mama, please mera yakeen kijeye. She starts crying…

Shalakha: hain sab he keh rahe the ki Suman is the bestest wife in the world. Mujhe lagta hain ki Suman is the worstest wife in the world. Hain na Rajiv bhaiya.!!!

Rajiv leaves from there and goes upstairs after sometime he comes down with a suitcase and he holds Suman elbow and drags her out.

Suman: Rajiv…. Rajiv kya kar rahe ho.. meri baat toh suno

Rajiv: Main toh bahut sehen kar liya. Tune toh humari maan aur maryaada ka maan nahi rakha. Mitti main mila di tune.

Yeh nahi socha ki tanu pe kya asar ho sakti hai. Tu is ghar pe nahi reh sakhti. Tuje jaana hi hoga. And keep dragging her till the door. Suman crying bitterly and looks behind and all helplessly looks at her. He throws her out of the door.

Rajiv: chali ja yaahan se and closes the door on her face.

One side they say the Suman is outside banging the door.

Suman: Rajiv khol darwaza please.. meri baat toh suno.. and she starts sobbing and she falls down on her knees. Other side Rajiv is sad and then leaves from here. Everybody leaves while Shalakha smiles to herself.

Suman goes to her mother. She is standing at the doorstep. Neela opens the door and looks at her shocked and angrily.

Neela: yaha pe kyun ayee ho. Apne ghar chali jao.

Suman: mujhe ghar se nikal diya hai.

Neela: yeh hi bakhi raha. Kyun nikal diya?

Suman: mama woh main and she tells Neela everything between tanu kul in a mute tone. Neela is shocked.

Neela: chee….chee… tune toh unke ghar izzat nilam kar diya hai. Kya yeh he sanskar maine tujhe diya hai dusre pey keechad dalne.

Suman: nahi mama, please meri baat toh suno please(Chaitali comes in the hall and sees Sumans standing at the doorstep)

Chaitali: kya hua suman didi.

Suman: mama mujhe andar allow nahi kar rahi hai.

Chaitali : Mama, Suman aap ki beti hai na toh phir woh kaha jayegee.

Neela: meri sirf ek hi beti hai aur dusri woh toh meri liye mar chuki hai. Chaitali usko kaho woh chali jaye. Uske shakal main nahi dekhne chahat thi hoon.

Chaitali: kaha suman jayegi mama.

Neela to suman : Abhi toh tum puri terha azaad ho. Jo bhi tuje karna ne karo. Jao apne Prem ke paas. Tune toh kisko muuh dikhane ki layak nahi choda hai. Chali ja and closes the door on her face.

Suman is walking sadly while Rajiv is in his room and thinks all the flashback .he goes to the terrace. The songs from salaam e ishq starts Ye Rabba

Pyaar hai ya saja, aai mere dil batatootata kyon nahi dard ka silsilais pyaar mein hon kaise kaise imntihaanye pyaar likhe kaisi kaisi dastaanya rabba de de koi jaan bhi agardilbar pe ho na, dilbar pe ho na koi asarho ya rabba de de koi jaan bhi agardilbar pe ho na, dilbar pe ho na koi asarpyaar hai ya saja, aai mere dil batatootata kyon nahi dard ka silsila And suddenly rain falls and Rajiv remembers the good time with Suman and he has tears in eyes and tells himself why did you do this Suman? And cries bitterly. And rain keeps falling on him. He looks up and remembers the rain and tells oh god and puts his hands on his head and falls on his knees and cries bitterlykaisa hai safar wafa ki manjil kana hai koi hal dilon ki mushkil kadhadkan dhadkan bikhri ranjisheinsaansein saansein tooti bandisheinkahi to har lamha honton pe fariyaad haikisi ki duniya chaahat mein barbaad haiya rabba de de koi jaan bhi agardilbar pe ho na, dilbar pe ho na koi asarho ya rabba de de koi jaan bhi agardilbar pe ho na, dilbar pe ho na koi asar Suman is walking down in trance with her suitcase. She remembers the good times in Rajiv house and then the Tanu case and how did Rajiv throw her out? The rain falls on her and remembers the rain with Rajiv and she too falls on her knees and cries bitterly. koi na sune sisakati aanhon kokoi na dhare tadapati baahon koaadhi aadhi puri khwaisheintooti footi sab farmaaisheinkahin shak hain kahin nafrat ki deewaar haikahin jeet mein bhi shamil palpal haar hainya rabba de de koi jaan bhi agardilbar pe ho na, dilbar pe ho na koi asarho ya rabba de de koi jaan bhi agardilbar pe ho na, dilbar pe ho na koi asarho o o pyaar hai ya saja, aai mere dil batatootata kyon nahi dard ka silsilaho o o o ho o o o

The screen divides into two where Suman is shown crying and Rajiv is crying on the other side. Ketki sees Rajiv crying and cannot bear him crying. She goes to Danesh and tells why don't you go and take Rajiv from the terrace. Danesh and Durgesh see Rajiv crying go to him. Rajiv hugs his dad and keeps crying. Danesh and Durgesh bring Rajiv bring back to his room and make him sleep. Rajiv sleeps

Chaitali starts searching for Suman. She brings along Adesh and starts searching.

Chaitali: Adesh pata nahi Suman did kaha hogi aur kaise hogi.

Adesh: tu phikar mat kar. Suman kahi duur nahi hogi.

Chaitali: mama use ghar se aana mana kar dya. Hey Bhagwaan. Suman didi kaha ho tum.

Suman is walking down in the middle of he road and is in trance. Suddenly a car comes in front of her. Suman sees the flashlight and closes her hands but it is too late. The car knocks her down and Suman is fallen down. Everybody start to gather near the accident. The owner face is not shown and shown lifting Suman and puts her in the car. The cars leaves at the same time, Chaitali see a crowd disperse and she asks some person:

Chaitali: bhai saab yaha pe bheed kyun hi.

The stranger: yeah pe accident hua tha.

Chaitali shocked: accident

The stranger: yeha pe ek aurat ki accident hoon thi. Usne yellow color kay sari penhi thi. Uska bag bhi waha pe pada hua hai.

Chaitali remembers Suman wearing yellow color sari and she goes forward to see the bag and is shocked.

Chaitali : oh god yeh to Suman ka bag hai. Adesh comes at that time and is shocked.

Adesh asks the stranger: did you know which hospital has the lady admitted too?

Stranger: Pata nahi.

Chaitali: Adesh ab hum kaha dhoonde Suman ko.

Chaitali and Adesh leave and go to different hospitals but they did not find Suman.

Chaitali: Adesh if Suman had an accident where was she?

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its so lovely. how can you imagine such a wonderful storywriting with dialouges? just love it poo. hope to have more fantic from your side.......

you should continue with this and write the Tuesday's, Wednesday's and thursday's episodes too. Untilo Rajeev and Suman are united.