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Ayesha ...Well done! 😊
You have used the existing moments to make Ahem realise why he is developing these feelings, eg his conversation with Jigar.You are built up his pent up feelings and emotions appropriately showing his double edged dilemma he is facing, ie his love for Gopi and putting himself in Jigar's shoes on seeing Jigar's past fiancee for may be one day he or Gopi sees Anita. Good job on this!You brought out his character beautifully when he took her by the hand, dragged her downstairs and took her to an isolated park. You have selected a great venue where he tells her about his past and reveals his feelings to her. He seemed be he really afraid when he risked telling her he loved her - loved that moment. ⭐️You brought out the preditcable nature of Gopi and her natural acceptance of him. That hug summed up just how both felt for each other with him tearing, nice touch Ayesha.Your masala mix was well timed too - where the whole family were watching them enjoying their private moment, so much so the family sends them for their honeymoon.
Thank You Swasthi... if u didn't give me this difficult question then i would never dared to lend my hand on these type... But it turned out well i suppose.
The existing moments to make aham realize had to be brought up so he could have a think back..
His feelings had to be put step by step so that we all can know the dilemma he was facing,
his character by draggin him dowstairs taking her to an place and told her about his past... was an absolute brilliant idea i had so that the cvs could have some sense of how the show could be if they are reading this...
Gopi's nature is a bit of childish but her think back made her convince he was saying the truth..
That hug was always in my nightmare... So i used it in this oneshot not a problem for that for me...
The timing i thought was not so bad, i thought i should have expand another 300 words on it.. and loved the idea of the family watching them and sending them to LA..
Thanks again for giving me this tough job otherwise i would never have dared to write a mixed feeling of Mr Modi.. which u made me accomplish this today. A big thanks to you for making me write this .
x 🤗
