OS: Aham declares his love for Gopi in Switzerland

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-Nafisa-

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Posted: 14 years ago

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Originally posted by: avivakirk
Oh Nafisa! What a beautiful ending to a road full of thorns? I'm crying with joy! You are a writer who took a lot of time putting in small touches which straightened out things with a swish of a magical wand..Kudos!!!!👏👏 the little things like Gopi resting on Ahem ,taking Gopi shopping softening of his hard heart etc were amazing.

Thanks a lot @avivakirk...I was waiting for your response, then I could go off-line to get some dinner, after our conversation last night (well it was night for me, but afternoon for your guys) I just decided to write this one shot when I started chatting to @ayesha her remit was make him declare his love for her...it wasn't easy, for the story to be somehow believable to my audience (you guys...lol) I needed to make mother and son understand what needed to be done (as the only person he truly listens to is his Mom), and Aham needed desperately to become softer realise what his Naani was telling him (be a support to his wife), as I know even the Saathiya Aham knows now Gopi loves him truly and has a soft heart (no mean spirit), but it's the illiteracy that is the barrier. So even in the serial if the mother would say to him, you take ownership and spend time with her, find the tutor you want for her and get on with it, we will get them together.

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avivakirk

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Posted: 14 years ago

#22

Originally posted by: Nafisa_blossoms

Thanks a lot @avivakirk...I was waiting for your response, then I could go off-line to get some dinner, after our conversation last night (well it was night for me, but afternoon for your guys) I just decided to write this one shot when I started chatting to @ayesha her remit was make him declare his love for her...it wasn't easy, for the story to be somehow believable to my audience (you guys...lol) I needed to make mother and son understand what needed to be done (as the only person he truly listens to is his Mom), and Aham needed desperately to become softer realise what his Naani was telling him (be a support to his wife), as I know even the Saathiya Aham knows now Gopi loves him truly and has a soft heart (no mean spirit), but it's the illiteracy that is the barrier. So even in the serial if the mother would say to him, you take ownership and spend time with her, find the tutor you want for her and get on with it, we will get them together.

It's a difficult task for any writer to take on writing about Ahem's character. It's difficult to analyse his character. But we romantics always yearn for the love story of the lovers to go straight.Good job!

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-GayabCat-

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Posted: 14 years ago

#23

Nafisa u know how I get annoyed by writing ff due to aehem character lol

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Bhumika

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Posted: 14 years ago

#24

this was so good Nafisa...Loved the the whole plane sequence. :)

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evad

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Posted: 14 years ago

#25

Wow Nafisa tha's marvelous I'm 😍

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madhu_sridhar

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Posted: 14 years ago

#26

Originally posted by: Nafisa_blossoms
Kokila says further I have seen the way you look at Gopi when she had her hair and make up done at the beauty palour you don't find her as repulsive you say, I was not spying son, but when you arrived from work and Gopi was coming down the stairs and arrived at the landing as you were about to go up the stairs you spent a long time looking at her, and not only her face you were appreciating the whole package weren't you? 😉 ah...kokila was being brutally honest here...wat a power packed punch...

Aham I don't want the first grandson to be born to Mota bhabhi, what I want is for the first grand son to be born from you and Gopi's alliance.honestly, rashi n jigar can wait...no hurry

Eventually Kokila opened her eyes and looked to her right and saw them and smiled, she thought perhaps Aham had fallen asleep too and by accident Gopi was laying on him, she was thinking to herself, yes they make such a nice couple and will give me really good looking grand children soon.🤣 this line was super fab...and i hope her wish comes true...but i want a junior ahem first...

time and again u prove that u are a wonderful writer nafisa😊...and wow what an os full of light-hearted lovable moments...some of ahem's actions just took my breath away...

@ red: kokila...wow...no matter how rude and dominating she is,i dont care...she is got this style n attitude that is unmatchable and u just gave her some awesome lines in this os...

and last but not the least...the goham moments...mmm...as yummy as the swiss chocolate...

you know i'm just hoping they show one more makeover track in the show, like the one u have mentioned here...gopi in western clothes wil b gud...and i want ahem 2 take her 2 a candle light dinner...and i guess they can complete it wid a nice ball dance...

all in all...a brilliant os👍🏼...i wish u keep writing more...its a real treat 2 read ur works...

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-Nafisa-

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Posted: 14 years ago

#27

@madhu, thanks a lot I was going for a heavy punch into Aham some realisation of the situation faced by the whole family...not only him, as he likes the package Gopi presents why doesn't he make small tweaks and upgrades to complete the package. Hence Kokila telling him to spend time with her, talk to her and for him to pick the tutor to give her the education he wants. I think this conversation in the Serial would go a long way in reconciling GoHam.

The romantic bits on the plane I added because I wanted Aham, as calculating as he is, to realise what Kokila says was truth, and act immediately to fix the situation.

Thanks for the compliments Madhu 👍🏼

Edited by Nafisa_blossoms - 14 years ago