My Very First One Shot : Ranveer Tia..

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Posted: 18 years ago
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"I M Not Afraid OF Dyieng But Afraid Of Loosin U"

It was a dark night…..full of the black shadowed clouds….thundering……lightning……nature seemed to be crying for a dear one…… who was also…… amidst a sense of confusion…… a sense of unknown feeling tht she was feeling tht night…she wanted to expresss it all … everything….she had been feeling… but no one was arnd for tht angel… she decided to talk to her diary…

"EVER SINCE I can remember I had wanted to fall in love. And, not only fall in love, but fall in love with the right person. I wanted someone who would accept my faults and love me for who I am. I hopped from one relationship to another, each time being bitterly disappointed when my knight in shining amour turned out to be the opposite of what I expected and wanted. Finally, I decided that the elusive emotion of love wasn't meant for me and I reconciled myself to the fact that I might never find my Mr. Right. I should have known that God's sense of humour is wicked, at the very least!


I always had in my mind….when we were kids, we were eager to grow up and fall in love. Now that we are grown up we have realized that wounded knees were much better than broken hearts. But I would say, give me a broken heart any day, for even if I have to go through the agony of losing him, it will be worth it. For at least I had a chance to love him and be loved unconditionally by him. It's not important to know if I will be with him 30 years from now, what's important is that he makes me feel alive even for the 30 minutes that I spend with him. That is the biggest blessing I could ask for. The rest, as they say, is a bonus.


This person is the joy of my life –the only person I can think of…..ven I want someone close to me…my heart…. he makes me laugh, he reduces me to tears, he still advises me and there are times when he even irritates me. But when I close my eyes at night, the one emotion that stays with me is the feeling of security that he gives me.


We are not officially committed to each other, but some bonds don't require a piece of paper. I feel the union is already there, between our hearts and souls. And that I feel is above all rituals.


Each day I wake up wondering whether this will be the day when I will lose him and each night I thank God for letting me share another day with him.


I still don't know when this friendship blossomed into love - was it when I heard him talking about his girlfriend and felt the first arrow of jealousy prick me, or was it when I found myself waiting for jst a glimpse of him...


I don't know. And after three years of knowing him and two of loving him, it is still a mystery to me. When I look back now I wonder, was there actually a time when we didn't know each other? I'm sure God must be having a good laugh for He brought me to the edge of despair before filling my life with sunshine.


Slowly from mutual dislike emerged a bond of empathy, which led to a lot of advice giving and taking and we started spending a lot of time together…… also discussing the tumult of emotions our respective partners were putting us through……slowly…god played tactics…nd now wat I know is…I hv this person in my life…without whom I cannot imagine my life ne further…


Is this feeling tht I feel…..shared by him also…..or am I being once again been played upon….by god…..wat will come next….will I have him in my life….or will I be heart broken all over again…"


It started raining….


Someone knocked her door….
surprised she asked….whos it….
the person answered : Tia….hum hain….Ranveer….

her eyes shined….like a new star was born….she was filled wid ecstasy…a beautiful smile appeared on her face…nd her heart started pounding faster…..
he was here…..her man was here…..the person whom she wanted to be wid in that moment….was there…

she rushed towards the door….opened it….nd there he was standing…..wid a beautiful bouquet of red roses…jst as she opened the door….he knelt down….nd offered her the bouquet nd said… "I LOVE YOU…"

As he said those words….she entered into a world of dreams nd aspirations…she wanted to tell him…she also loved him frm the core of her heart…
but she cud onli smile smile nd smile……he could make out easily…he cud see the love for himself in her eyes shining bright……he stood up…..nd took her in his arms
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She rested in his arms…so peacefully….soo lovingly…she could feel the magic of feeling love….she wanted to thank god at the least….to fill her life wid the love of the person she always wanted to be with…..

"Love is a beautiful feeling, even when it involves the fear of losing the person you love."

alll...that's my forst attempt of writing a one shot....plsss doo comment...nd doo tell how did u find itt...
i really dunno how gud or howw baaaadd it iss...ur comments mean a lott..


P.S. This is a contribution towards the rt month being celebrated...!!

Edited by palo rani - 18 years ago

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Posted: 18 years ago
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"I always had in my mind….when we were kids, we were eager to grow up and fall in love. Now that we are grown up we have realized that wounded knees were much better than broken hearts. But I would say, give me a broken heart any day, for even if I have to go through the agony of losing him, it will be worth it. For at least I had a chance to love him and be loved unconditionally by him"

dis is sooooooo true 😳 😳 ...u know payu..dis is my fav part of tr shot 😳 ...its so touching 😳 ..esp d thing abt wounded knees were much better than broken hearts 😭 👏 ...lolz..i always believed in it 😉 ..but ya..its much better to love and lost than not to love ever 😳 ..though it hurts like hell 🥺 😭

amazingly written..payal 👏 ...i always felt tia was very unsure abt ranveer's feelings for her 😳 ...and u have brought it out so beautifully 😍 😳 ....d words r simple but have so much depth 👏 ... and d ending part is kya kahoon😍..a fitting end😍😳..i loved ranny's gesture at the end😳....just like a prince charming dat he is😳..damn romantic😳

superb sweetie 😳 ..keep it up 😳 ...waiting to read more of ur work 😳 ...and do update ur fic 2..ur writing will def be the highlight of tr month 😳 ..

hey did u particpate in tia's diary contest..u could have been a serious competition if dis had been ur entry 😳 👏 ..


Edited by maxliz - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Payal its really gr8 .its really touching .i litteraly start cryin dear....its really gr88....tc care mwaaah dear
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Posted: 18 years ago
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today i m so proud of u that..i cant express...
all i can say is.."I M Not Afraid OF Dyieng But Afraid Of Loosin U"... 🤗
u really rock grl 👏 ...
the way u expressed tia ranveers luv...tia 's dairy..wow..its so true...u just covered every emotion of luv..ppl say no one can describe or define luv in words...but u proved them wrong...i never ever read this soulfull feeling of luv so baeutifull described in words....but u described Tia Ranver luv with so much of deepth nd sensiblity..the way u expressed her fear..the way she felt about ranveer nd shes nt sure about ranveers feeling for her..still her strenght is her luv for ranveer..
i luv the way u expressed luv..so simple very speical nd precious......"This person is the joy of my life –the only person I can think of…..ven I want someone close to me…my heart…. he makes me laugh, he reduces me to tears, he still advises me and there are times when he even irritates me. But when I close my eyes at night, the one emotion that stays with me is the feeling of security that he gives me."
nd u expressed tia strenght ofcourse her luv for ranveer "Each day I wake up wondering whether this will be the day when I will lose him and each night I thank God for letting me share another day with him. "this feeling of satisfaction nd peace onli true luv can generate..

nd the way prince charmings proposed his angelic princess..😍perfect..nd tia reaction...i can visualize the whole thng...ur shot is like adream cum true..😍

but u knw i m very u upset also...u knw why...itna acha likhti rahegi..to tia ranvveer ki magical story ko phir se dekhne ka maan nahin karega kya....Shristi arya producers directors..plsss listen to me...here's presenting the best script writer in this whole world...appointments le lena..but conditions applied...scripts onli for Tia ranveer magical couple..coz no other couple can match upto payals standards of luv nd chemistry.. 😉 rite

Edited by simran22$ - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
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the fic is too too nycc.boht lovey dovey hai..bt payal..even u agreed ki mera version zyada ...zyada...

ab khud hi dekh loo....


on spl request...a smll prt of pyal nd my cht....bt m rytin in a more organized way...

my ver strtz frm her....whtch out kekta...

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Is this feeling tht I feel…..shared by him also…..or am I being once again been played upon….by god…..wat will come next….will I have him in my life….or will I be heart broken all over again…"


It started raining….


Someone knocked her door….

nooo...he ws abt to knck...
ranveer darwaaze ki taraf bad hi rha hota hai kiii

kiii

kii

tabhii

tabhiii


awaaz aati hai

"ruko ranveer"

ranveer k chehre pe 5 min tak zoom in zoom out kiya jaata hai...[tada tada tada tada..(bckgrnd muzik..lol)]


woh peeche mudta hai/...

uske chehre pe fir se zoom in zoom out kiya jaata hai..bt this tym fr 10 minz...

TIA..SIRF.. MERI HAI...


MERI HAI...

MERI HAI...


MERI HAI...



MERI HAI...

MERI HAI...

MERI HAI...

MERI HAI...

MERI HAI...
MERI HAI...

MERI HAI...

MERI HAI...

MERI HAI...
MERI HAI...

.........fade in fade ou fade in fade out
MERI HAI...
MERI HAI...
MERI HAI.....(lol)

fir aakhir kaar jab sab bore hokar channel change karne waale hote hai to dikhaya jaat hai nxt scene



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aage...

*state of shok*

ranveer says....kutte {doggie...lolzz }....use bhagwaan ke liye chhod de....bhala usne tera kya bigada hai....

..tada da da da.....

ajnabee : RANVEER...tum keh rahe ho ye...tum ?? tumhe pata hai main kabse tia se pyar karta hu...tumne mera bana banaya khel bigaad diya...aur aaj jab main apni manzil ke itne kareeb hu....!!!

ranveer gusse me kuch bolne waala hota hai ki tabhi

ajnabeee:ranveer...mujhe majboor mat karo ki main sabko bata du...ki...tum sanganer me...

ranveer...now vry angry:sanganer me kya...huhh....boliye baannaa boliyee...sanganer me kyaaa ...boliyeee.....

ajnabee:"tum mujhe bolne ka mauka to do...

yaad hai na tumhe



aravali...."

[ranveer >>colour fades<< viewd frm ol d angles]....tada da da da.....


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kya hoga ab??? kya is ajnabee ki saazish kaamiyaab ho paaegi?


kya ranveer apne pyar ko insaaf dilaa paaegi?


aakhir wo konsa raaz hai ranveer k ateet se juda jisnein uski zindagi ki neev hi hila di (i m nt sure if this makes sense)


kya ranveer ajnabee ko maat de paaega?


aur sabse badi baat kya hume agle 50 epiz me pata chal payega ki ye ajnabe aakhir hai kaun.............


ye sab jaan ne ke liye dekhiye hamare dharavahik tiara ki amar prem kahani ka agla karyakram

*ting tong*

>>>MAAALAJI TELEFILMZ<<<



ab pleej koi bura na manna.... 😆
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Posted: 18 years ago
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wow!!!! payal its hard to believe tht youve written such a story..(considerng your age).i am in a state of shock.. let me come out of this daze.. and i will post my coments

ps....pinky.. loved your take on ekta😆hope you write more nd more

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Posted: 18 years ago
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It's not important to know if I will be with him 30 years from now, what's important is that he makes me feel alive even for the 30 minutes that I spend with him. That is the biggest blessing I could ask for. The rest, as they say, is a bonus. 👏👏

he makes me laugh, he reduces me to tears, he still advises me and there are times when he even irritates


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Posted: 18 years ago
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Oh Gosh!!!!!!!!!!!Payal (aiiiii maaaaaaa)

You've got all the talents gal 👏

Wish to read more of them

You have left me speechless


Divya 😳 😳
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Posted: 18 years ago
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mind-blowing it was very very nice....
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Posted: 18 years ago
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mind-blowing it was very very nice....

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