FANFIC(please read it once)

this is my first fanfic.tell me if i should continue it or not.post ur comments please

tia is a fashion designer and she comes from Canada, after doing her studies. she is looking very pretty. she is totally changed. she use to wear suit now and sumeet ahuja come to airport to recieve her. he is really shocked to see her in suit. tia is very happy 😊😃to meet his papa.

but become sad 😭😭when she thinks about ranveer, love of her life. she wanted him to come to the airport to recieve her.

should i cintinue😳😳😳

Cicilia, you have started very ubruptly....maybe you should first give an introduction and then take story forward.
Presently what you have written seems a little disjointed. So I'm not able to understand much from what you have written.
You've made a good effort.

I definitely dont mean to criticize, just giving my opinion. I always try reading as many fanfics as possible but these days its become a bit difficult to cope with all of them.
Hope you take my opinion in the right spirit! 😉

eveni do agree with apple14....but neways wen u have started off ....plz do continue
ok
PLZ DONT MIND.
i jus said wat i felt

kittuu

Originally posted by: apple14

Cicilia, you have started very ubruptly....maybe you should first give an introduction and then take story forward.
Presently what you have written seems a little disjointed. So I'm not able to understand much from what you have written.
You've made a good effort.

I definitely dont mean to criticize, just giving my opinion. I always try reading as many fanfics as possible but these days its become a bit difficult to cope with all of them.
Hope you take my opinion in the right spirit! 😉

i garee with apple14...

no offence plz... i know u may not know me tht well but even i think tht an inro to all shud be really very imp so we get the main basics as to how everyhing takes place.....


since u started.. plz cont.. i would love to read it... but make it a lot bigger 😃

nice 1
bt i agre to every1 who hav commented
anyways dont feel low 😊 😊 😊
n continue fast

its nice but yaa
u did start it a bit abruptly

its a very very good start..it sure is but i agree with aparna,almi,komal and all the others..just give a short description of what happened b4 tia went abroad and of all the charachters in ur fic..it may make ur fic more rocking and attractive..though it already is!
😊
p.s-NO OFFENCES MEANT!

arrey plz dont take such big fonts ok....its awkward.....anyway its rather nice......continue asap

it good... try and continue...

its gud.continue.[i agree wit apple 14..uh....]