ITS BACK. pyar dosti hai! NEWPART#9 pg.13 - Page 8

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Posted: 19 years ago
#71
really nice namita 😃 pls continue 👏 and natasha appears 2 be very sweet unlike wo-ohhhhh shyla in remix 🤢
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Posted: 19 years ago
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Namz ...excellent work as usual 👏 👏 👏
luved it and waitin 4 the next parts 😃
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Posted: 19 years ago
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Wow uno ur fanfic is just............rockin.pls continue .alrite. 👏
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Posted: 19 years ago
#74
superb namita. the idea of pics is not just creative but also so accurate with the story. its fun reading & luking at the pics.
btw most importantly u'r fic ROCKS!!!


happy remixing!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Posted: 19 years ago
#75
hey tooooo good👏. plz do continue writing coz you are one of the few people who is concentrating on ranveer and tia. also your fanfic is awesome👍🏼!!!!
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Posted: 19 years ago
#76
hey where is the 8th part????????????
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Posted: 19 years ago
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page 11.. dear...and guys i had no clue there wer more comments added in the past few days.. co-incidently i am working on the 9th part now.. iwll be posting it in some time.. pls comment guys!!!
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Posted: 19 years ago
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Wow!!!! YOUR FANFIC TOTALLY ROCKSSS!!! I love it especially the pics that you keep on including b/w the lines. It makes it sooo real and almost as if watching remix! You must have put in a lot of hard work with the pics. Keep it up! Natasha is a good original character.

Loved it esp. the ashi-yuvi parts!!!

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Posted: 19 years ago
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PART #9


Ashi and Yuvi come out of the gym all exhausted
A; Hey bhaggu! lagta hai yeh gym ko 10 saalon se saaf nahin kiya hai.. it was so ditry ! eeks!
Y; ya anyways kya farak padta hai time kaise beet gaya pata bhi nahi chala .. kyunki hum saat mein the
ashi smiles..
Ranveer comes to them:
R:banna aap yahan par hai.. humara class tha isiliye hum nahi aa paye. sir ne aapko punish kiya tha na ?
Y; chil ranveer (looks at ashi and back at ranveer) humne sab kuch handle kar diya hai.
A; i think i need to get myself cleaned now.. bye guys got to go.


Ranveer n yuvi are just chit chating and are on their way to the canteen.. when dhruv the new dude comes into their vision...
Y: oh good yeh macho man yahan bhi aa gaya !
R: banna yeh kaun hai?


Y; yeh ..? yeh mere room ka naya problem hai..
R: matlab ?
Y: aree dude he's my roommate
R: acha ..lekin problem kyun
Y: kyun? shakal dek uski .. ashi to uspe drool kar rahi thi..
R: (tries to control his laughter but just cant )


Y; kya?.... tum has kyun rahe ho? mera to man karta hai uske bags mere room se nikal kar kahin dur fek kar aa jau


R: hume to abhi bhi samaj nahin aa raha .. is mein problem kya hai..(he jokes n smiles sarcastically )





Tia is so fed up of her old clothes(old as in worn once already ..lolz) she has made a complete mess of the room when she sees the yellow dress she has worn on the day she and ranveer spent time together...

background.. na jane kaise lagta .....



Meher comes to the room and asks tia .."tia yeh sab kya hai? tum pagal to nahin ho gayi ho?? what is all this mess for..??
T: (still lost in her thoguhts ..smiling) haan.. woh main bas park mein..yellow dess...
M: kya? park? yellow dress?kaisa park? kahan park ?? (she takes the dress from tia's hand n) tia .. hello? wake up.. tum kabse park mein jane lagi???


T: (realises that she is not making any sense) ah... ku-kuch nahi meher tia in clothes ko sale mein rakhna chahti hai. they ve bcomz old..(but she keeps the yellow dress back into the cupboard..
M: are par tum us dress ko cupbpoard mein kyun rakh rahi ho..
T: Forget th babes ..acha pri kahan hai??
M: tia main tumse kuch puch rahi hun.. woh yellow dress to bahut purana hai...phir bhi
T; babes woh kya hai na yeh dress papa ne mujhe gift kiya tha ..so its special u knw...(she lies)
M: ohh.. k tia.. anyways main in clothes ko arrange karti hun ok?
T; ah.. haan ok.. meher, tia ko kisi se baat karna hai.. main canteen ja rahi hun ok bye...



ranveer is having coffee.. and natasha joins him..
R;hi
N:hi, ranveer tum yahan maurya mein pehle se the?
R; humne last yr join kiya tha.. kyun?

N: nahin tum yahan quite popular ho to i was just wondering
R: popular ? aise kyun?
N: aree kuch nahi.. woh jhodo..mujhe tumhare bare mein kuch batao.. abt ur hometown n family...do u have any siblings?
R:(smiles)haan ek choti behen hai
N: oh thts nice.. i really wish i had siblings..
R: natasha, agar aap vrinda se milegi na to unse kehna ki masi ne use milne ko kahan hai..kyunki thodi der mein hume bahar jana hai is liye hum unhe msg nahi de payenge..
N: no probs .. ill tell her.. waise tum ja kahan rahe ho ?
R; actually hum mr.sumeet ahuja ke liye part time kaam karte hai.. so uske liye unse milna padta hai..
N: ohhk..
R: natasha, aap thodi upset lag rahi hai, koi problem hai?

N: ah-- nah-nahin to .. i mean no probs its ok


R: nahi zarur kuch to baat hai.. aap hume bata sakti hai




Tia walks in and sees ranveer and natasha and is very upset but still goes ahead

T: Camel, Tia ko tumse kuch imp baat kehni hai..
R: ek minute tia hum aapse baad mein milte hai..
T: Oh puhlease ranveer tia ke paas itna time nahi hai..
R: lekin tia..
T: pulls him by his arm and looks at natasha (wit anger) n says"sorry natasha ranveer tumse baad mein milega"

usually natasha wud not bother abt such things but somehow this time she was really jealous of tia.. she really felt like ranveer truly tried to understand her at that moment.. but.. why did she feel this way ????


R; tia, yeh sab kya hai .. woh upset thi hum unse baat kar rahe the
T: tumhe uske probs ki fikar hai .. lekin mere probs ko nahin samaj te ho tum


R: iska kya matlab hua ?


T: kuch nahi.. (she turns and is almost in tears)

R: (is a lil bugged n confused) tia aap kya kehti hai hume kuch samaj mein nahi aata .. aap ko kuch kehna tha na ab boliye..
T: woh...(very hurt)

R: (wonders why she is talking long and has turned away faces her and sees that she is crying)

Tia.. aap ro rahi hai??
(is very guilty abt how he spoke to her)....
Tia im sorry.. humne aapko hurt nahi karna chate the..






T; (just goes away from there)

Edited by aasma_remix - 19 years ago
veonal thumbnail
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Posted: 19 years ago
#80
hey awesome work namita really the pics make the story all the more intersting luved all the tia ranvee pics u have used in the story 😃


and btw awesomeeeeeee siggy can u make one 4 me 2
😃

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