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Posted: 11 years ago
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awesome update and big wala thanks for continuing the story 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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awesome! very interesting angle and take on the relationship. viewpoint of a no holds barred Major!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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I am extremely happy that u continued this amazing angle in ur story .. So much eager to read the next part ..
Pls dear do update soon !!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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YES!! Chapter 1 is finally up. Good God, I cannot wait for the upcoming chapters. Thank you so much for continuing this. Wouldn't mind being PM'ed! :D
Now, chapter 1 was short but denoted Paro's fear and Rudra's intense attraction. The fact that he felt a tug... WAH! This means so many things, only to be revealed in your upcoming posts.
This was a bit confusing, as the setting was unclear or maybe the picture above is it. I couldn't tell where she was on floor or why she was there etc. Nevertheless, their emotions have been conveyed comprehensibly.

Hope you don't mind my mini critiquing, I don't intend to offend you any way though, it's nothing personal!

Looking forward to more chapters.. lambe wala :p
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: rupao21

YES!! Chapter 1 is finally up. Good God, I cannot wait for the upcoming chapters. Thank you so much for continuing this. Wouldn't mind being PM'ed! :D

Now, chapter 1 was short but denoted Paro's fear and Rudra's intense attraction. The fact that he felt a tug... WAH! This means so many things, only to be revealed in your upcoming posts.
This was a bit confusing, as the setting was unclear or maybe the picture above is it. I couldn't tell where she was on floor or why she was there etc. Nevertheless, their emotions have been conveyed comprehensibly.

Hope you don't mind my mini critiquing, I don't intend to offend you any way though, it's nothing personal!

Looking forward to more chapters.. lambe wala :p



Hey not at all, I like getting feedback. The chapter was short cause I am in an extremely busy stage right now for the past months Writing is therapeutic for me so I try to relaxx through it . If the pic is confusing should i remove it? I just add it to sort of set the mood of the chapter not really to show the placement of the characters.

Other chapters are coming up soon! Also do let me know what you want to see or prefer okay? =)
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Posted: 11 years ago
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OMG! Superb. so does justice to RR. brilliant!
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Posted: 11 years ago
#17
the link for the prologue doesnt work! so want to read it. Pls continue...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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uhu uhu ! do i sound excited ..😕ofc am excited .this chappi is so good ..bring the next update soon pls 😳
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Posted: 11 years ago
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What a pleasure it is to return to our PaRud, to read what the story could have been at one key juncture in the tale. And you write so beautifully and deliver their emotions so true to the tale that I can see it playing out in front of my eyes. Thanks. 😊

Waiting for you to update the next chapter.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: tvbug2011

What a pleasure it is to return to our PaRud, to read what the story could have been at one key juncture in the tale. And you write so beautifully and deliver their emotions so true to the tale that I can see it playing out in front of my eyes. Thanks.😊


Waiting for you to update the next chapter.



I just badly miss ur superb takes :((
What were those days :(

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