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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: mayabegum



Thank you! 😊
I try avoiding writing too much because I feel as though it would bore some readers and I like to keep it simple with not too much going as I feel that makes the story more intense. I originally planned to have it as an OS, but I got a good response so I decided to write up a few more parts, I am considering writing another 2 or more parts so I will be changing that to 'SS'

Once again thank you for appreciating my writing and also for the advice 😃


Most welcome!! i just voiced my thoughts and you are right in a way. if you pull it too much intense then people may not like!!
Thinking of this i remembered that there is one FF which i got to update in my blog!!
Hmm anyways waiting for your next update!!!
2 or 3 more updates would be really good :) All the best for that!
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Posted: 11 years ago
#22
Loved the update!!
Thanks for the pm.
Hope you'll continue soon.😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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You brought in jalebis 🤗
Loved the update!!
Thanks for the PM.. I wanna read their drive back home 😉
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Posted: 11 years ago
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this is such a sweet ss.
pregnant paro and major saab are so cute.
pls update soon, can't wait to read more
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Posted: 11 years ago
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nice and very sweet story.👏
Edited by Javeria3991 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#26

Originally posted by: rupao21

awww so sweet. I've been craving jalebi for weeks now.. I totally understand paro's craving .. I'm sure it's hard thu being pregnant nd all. Nonetheless, thank you for continuing this. It's sweet to read a light hearted OS on Parud's baby preparations. Getting to read about Rudra's sweet side as well as how these passages have conveyed his patience.. Which is completely opposite to what he was or still kind of is when it comes to paro's demand. Guess the baby is a different level all by itself. Yet again.. Lovely night read for me. Thank you for PM'ing me and keep it up.


Thank you for your lovely comment, I was fasting when I wrote this and I was craving jalebi so bad hence I included it in my writing lol.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: IAmMayFlower

You brought in jalebis🤗

Loved the update!!
Thanks for the PM.. I wanna read their drive back home😉


I was going to avoid writing that part because I wanted to keep this SS short, but I shall include it in the next part to make my readers happy, thanks for your comment 😊
Edited by mayabegum - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Part 3~

"Seems as though what you ate for dinner has made you ten times heavier Paro" Rudra grunted as it took a lot of effort lifting Paro into the jeep

"Haaw not my fault your jeep has its seat so up high, besides you don't even let me get up on my own"

"I don't think you physically could, not with that stomach" Rudra laughed while patting Paro's bump

Rudra got into the jeep and began to drive home. After driving for a short while Rudra came to a stop.

"Wait here a minute Paro, I will be back"

Before Paro could reply Rudra was out the car, they had passed a bangle stall a few metres away from where Rudra pulled up.

"Can I have a set of pink bangles please"

"yes sir, which shade of pink would you like?"

"shade? Theres different shades of bangles too?"

The owner of the stall had let out a chuckle

"woh, can I get those light pink ones. The ones with the silver diamantes"

The owner wrapped up the bangles and gave it to Rudra, who rushed back into the car.

"For you"

He handed over the bangles, Paro's eye beamed with happiness

"I've been getting spoilt too much these days" Paro smiled while taking off the clear wrapping

"Let's make more babies, you'll get lots of presents again" Rudra smirked while pushing the bangles through Paro's wrists

Paro blushed, "let's have this one out first"

The light in the car reflected off the bangles causing them to sparkle

"they're beautiful, I can wear them with the saree Maasa gifted me" she smiled

Just as Rudra began to turn the engine on Paro asked

"Major saab, can we stay outside for a little while? Look at the stars, the sky is looking beautiful today"

"But its so late Paro, aren't you tired?"

"No, are you?"

"Ive gotten use to staying up late with you paro" he chuckled

"lets find a better place" he said

Paro nodded and they began to drive off. Rudra pulled up on a hill and helped Paro out.

"wow we are up so high" paro said

"Come lets go over there"

They both laid down on the green neatly cut grass, both cuddled together as one looking up at the clear dark sky and the twinkling stars

"what a sight, so many stars out tonight" paro said stretching her arms across rudras stomach, Rudra pulled her closer, so close there was no room between the two, keeping one of his hands on the bump and using the free hand to move Paro's hair from her face.

The laid down in silent for a few minutes, it was just peaceful when suddenly

"Ouch!" Paro squealed

"That was a powerful kick" Rudra said shocked at the power the little baby had

He rubbed his hands around the bump to feel the kick again

"wow, again! I think the baby is enjoying being out here too" Rudra smiled

"keep your hands here, always kicking this same spot" she moved his hands to the far right keeping her hands on top of his, he kept his hands there till the baby stopped kicking

"Major saab, I was thinking if we have a girl then we should call her Jalebi, and if it's a boy then we should call him Rajkumar"

"what?!" Rudra said shocked at what Paro had just said

Paro playfully hit Rudra's chests a few times laughing to her hearts content

"Areh, I was joking!" she giggled

"oh phew paro I got scared for a minute" Rudra said with a relief

"your facial expression was classic"

"I do have names in mind though"

"which ones, I have some too" Rudra said

"Well if it's a girl then Mahiya which means joy, and if it's a boy then Saras which means the moon. What have you thought of?"

"for a boy - Rishab which means superior and if a girl then Pari which means beauty"

"I love the name Rishab!"

"And I love the name Mahiya"

"great, that's sorted. If it's a girl its Mahiya and if it's a boy we will call him Rishab" Rudra said

"I didn't know you were thinking of names" Paro smiled while moulding her hands into Rudra's

"I had much more in mind but I short listed them to those two"

"I love the names" Paro said

"Of course, when we have a lot more babies we can think of more beautiful names" Rudra smirked while placing a soft kiss on Paro's hands

"you're too much major saab, always wanting a gazillion kids. We'll see about that, youll get tired eventually" paro chuckled

"I will never get tired making the babies paro, of course looking after them will be a challenge. But I will live up to the job even if it means I have to do a lot of work

"I want a huge family, all the kids will grow up with a great childhood. I will make sure of it Paro, I promise"

"I know you will" Paro smiled

She bought her face up and placed a feather light kiss on both of Rudras cheeks and laid the top half of her body on him, again they laid in silence. Breathing in the fresh air, letting their heartbeats do all the talking, little do they know that their eldest child was going to be out very soon...

Well if you're reading this I'm assuming you've read this update so thank you🤗 I've left a short note below so please have a look at that... Oh! And I've also replied to some of your comments/questions above so please have a look😊

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Posted: 11 years ago
#29
NOTE:

There's a family wedding coming up so I won't be able to update this SS for the next few weeks so I have two options and I wanted you guys to tell me what to do as I'm stuck between the two:

Either,

1) End the story with this part here and sort of make a sequel to this where Paro has just had her baby (This will be as soon as everything is over)

Or

2) Write another short chapter after this update (probably in the next 2-4 days) with the baby here and then end the story completely and write other type of short stories in the near future

This was originally a one shot story but you guys had left such sweet comments telling me to continue so I thought it'd be only fair for you guys to tell me what you want,

Thanks a bunch😃

Edited by mayabegum - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#30
First off, just wanna thank you for actually turning this OS into three parts so far. It's so light hearted and jolly. Loved this with te baby kicks, cuddling under the stars and *cough-cough* discussing making babies xD it's so well written.. You're constantly bringing out a joyful theme. I honestly would want you to always write anything parud related to be honest. Although regarding this matter, I think I'd go with the second option. But please please don't stop writing anything parud related. I always have this mini internal happy dance when I see PM's in my inbox cause it's so difficult to find fan fictions on this forum.. Nonetheless.. have fun with your wedding function and come back soon :p haha

Cheers :)

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