Four Shot: SAY GOOD-BYE--Part 3, Pg 26 (updated--June 17th)

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Sona

@sparikh

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#51

That was so beautiful - could feel Paro's pain in the whole story.

-Sona

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Payali09

@Payali09

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#52

I finished reading this a few hours ago with the biggest smile on my face.

Some might think that a strange reaction but I hope by now you know what it means. Epic comment coming your way within the next 10 hours. For now, I'm going to make like a cow and chew on this for the rest of the day 😆

PS - I'd like to recommend that one should be sitting inside a warm cafe nursing an extra sweet mocha on a rainy day whilst reading your stories. Really heightens the reader experience. *sigh* Suffice to say I had a very good start to the morning so thank you for that!

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ICanDoThis

@ICanDoThis

Explorer

Posted: 11 years ago

#53

Dear Napster

Im Bewitched by you.

Mein Tere Sadeqey Jawan

Much has already been said abt this story and how its deeply affected the readers.

The Same goes for me, yaar.

In addition to all of it,
I wud like to add that u are an Artist
Each story u write is a Masterpiece drawn with ur Pen on a blank canvas of paper.

All Superlatives are inadequate.

As the Lovely Shilpa Shetty wud say ( iv seen her on bits of nach baliye in uk)

SUPERRR
SE BHI
UPARRR!!!!!!!!!!!

I Heart that.

Paro the Pari built a genuine Rishta with each family member with her sincerity and love
And hard work.

She was preparing for Judai from each person.
A physical and emotional ripping away and tearing apart from them which hurt he and them leaving them bleeding on the ground.

Even at this this gut wrenchingly painful time for her, paro is still thinking of them
Trying to protect them from the pain they wud suffer if she shared her intention to Go with them.

She is selflessly and silently preparing as one does for the impending inevitable death of a Loved One.

All of it building up to the most precious and Beloved Risha of All.
Her husband, Major Saab.
Not as yet mentioned but his presence palpable to me.

I await part 2 with bated breath

Thank you for an Absolute Treat.

Love
Samina

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kdsubs

@kdsubs

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#54

Navin - this was brilliant. I am not sure the writers of this show have understood the supporting characters as well as you did in this portrayal through Paro 👏.

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shagun-rocks

@shagun-rocks

Inactive

Posted: 11 years ago

#55

i loved the premise..in fact i'm so looking forward to how paro manages to wrench herself out of these bonds that she has formed...you have beautifully portrayed her dynamics with each of those who 've played a pivotal role in her life...i'm eager to know how she manages to say goodbye to that one man who matters the most...so kudos to you for yet another fabulous piece...👍🏼

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Mallika

@malkasub

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#56

So beautiful and so sad. I wish they show all of Paro's inner feelings like you have when this happens.

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shhaina

@shhaina

Beginner

Posted: 11 years ago

#57

Originally posted by: napstermonster

You have been really sweet, I've seen you commenting on my other writings, and every comment is so well thought out and so kind--thank you!

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the_breeze

@the_breeze

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#58

SPEECHLESS 👏 👏 👏

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mklam

@mklam

Explorer

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#59

Very well written. She's forged a relationship with every member in this family, so there had to be a one-to-one for every goodbye. Re Rudra...saving the best for the last?

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shhaina

@shhaina

Beginner

Posted: 11 years ago

#60

Originally posted by: shhaina

Dear Navi,

First of all thank you for responding to my post a comment from u is the High of my day. I was not expecting a OS from you in fact I was hoping to read a part 1 of Tomorrow in Repentance. But this OS was so heart wrenching, touching that from yesterday till now it has stayed more fixed in my mind then the actual serial. You are truly a gifted writer. I keep taking about your style and the stories you web to my friends and my husband ( as he watches Rangrasiya too).As my husband likes it too I see his perspective to the story .We both felt Paros pain.

I have loved all your writing from IPKKND and now RR, but I feel you have improved a lot with RR as I can see that maturity of expression more and more now, though you were good before too but now you are polished. You should consider writing a book.

I have a fantasy to see naughty Rudra, though it is not his character but we got a glimpse last week in Jaipur when he played the prank on Paro. You have written emotionally deep and moving pieces , a naughty one too can be emotionally moving as it will be one of Paros treasures in her jhola.

Well its a fantasy but you are the creator, if you feel it is appropriate to bring a light moment somewhere then make something naughty.

Keep writing Baisa, as I love to read and re read your work.Till then Chao.

Waiting for your part 2 of this OS. Please update soon.