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saira

@sezo

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#41

Hi.

Just read both updates. So intense and gripping

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ipkknd-fan

@ipkknd-fan

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#42

Love both the OS's!
Can't wait to read more :)

Edited by ipkknd-fan - 11 years ago

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javeria

@Javeria3991

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Posted: 11 years ago

#43

I don't mind the order. Update as you like it

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Meena

@chotidesi

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+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#44

Thank you for the absolutely lovely comments- I love all of them! I've updated the third oneshot, Glutonny, here- I hope you enjoy it!

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AngelTeen

@AngelTeen

Stunner

+ 8

Posted: 11 years ago

#45

That was really well written! The way you described the food and more importantly Aman's experience (which was a rather well woven surprise!) of eating the food was great and made one salivate! And then Rudra also giving in...so sweet! Good job! :)

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gangaprakash38

@gangaprakash38

Navigator

Posted: 11 years ago

#46

very nice read..thanks for updating

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javeria

@Javeria3991

Rocker

+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#47

What a mouth watering update !!!!!

I had a wonderful time enjoying the war between famished stomach and stubborn mid and Aman's prospective.

Parvati struggle at last bear fruits and she finally made her way to Rudra's heart through his stomach.

Indeed Aman is an obedient collegue, best friend of Rudra and best brother Parvati could pray for from Bholeynath.

He always tried his best to lessen Parvati grief and helping indirectly to bridge the gap between Rudra and Parvati.

LOL the shiny tiffin box was mocking him and making him restless and the sweet comments of his colleagues on his wife delicious food was acting as a fuel.

The scene was very touching when Rudra made Aman rushed to his home to check on his sick wife every two hours. No matter how much he denied, he cares for him.

Love the end. Rudra doesn't have any choice except to surrender himself in front of his strong, lovely and innocent wife. Though it would be his defeat but other way he wins too.

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SherryGS

@SherryGS

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+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#48

really enjoyed this one. LOL. You took Gluttony literally 😊

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DDC1

@DDC1

Navigator

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#49

ChotiDesi Baisa,

I am a glutton now for your series. Gluttony was so so cute. At first I thought it was Rudra then it turned out to be Aman. I guess we all love to feed our loved ones, you will touch a chord with all the Baisas here.

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antiquegold

@antiquegold

Voyager

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Posted: 11 years ago

#50

Originally posted by: DDC1
ChotiDesi Baisa,

I am a glutton now for your series. Gluttony was so so cute. At first I thought it was Rudra then it turned out to be Aman. I guess we all love to feed our loved ones, you will touch a chord with all the Baisas here.

Ddc1, you said it! Dont they say, athe way to a mans heart is thru his stomach?!

Lovely story! Made me hungry! And Aman is such a sweetie pie!