OS: Yesterday and Tomorrow--Repentance-Completed. - Page 12

Originally posted by: chotidesi

Res!

Unresed:

Oh my god. I had to read that two or three times to fully understand it. I didn't realize until the third time (and I'm still not sure) that it was a dream- or rather, a nightmare. Napster, my heart almost stopped beating with the pain that you've managed to embody in this single chapter. The brokenness of Rudra, and how desperately he's trying to retain his control is so poignantly portrayed. You've spun a masterpiece, and it's almost painful for us to read his pain because it's so intense, so deep and cutting.

This line: If she did not, and he forced...No. He did not force. He was a monster. He took. He rested his hard chest, his parched torso against the coolness of her back.

That line for me, was what you were trying to convey in this oneshot. His desire for her to want what he's forcing upon her, to enjoy it, so that he can rid himself of this overwhelming guilt is so vivid in that sentence. He's trying to convince himself that he hasn't hurt her, that he hasn't done anything wrong- but he has, and he has to accept that.

You outdo yourself every, single time- from Jallad, which is a lighthearted, almost whimsical piece to this dark anger- the transformations you create are just spell binding.